The Shiki Monthly Kukai
September 2015 Kukai
Dear Friends,
Here are the results for the September 2015 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was WINDSTORM, and our Free Format subject was SCAR. If you find any errors, please let me know so I can correct them online.
Congratulations to ****Kashinath Karmakar****, winner of our Kigo section and to ****Tom Painting****, winner of our Free Format section!
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The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.
Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.
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In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.
(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.
VOTERS' comments are indicated by "**"
POETS' comments are indicated by "^^"
September 2015 Results
Kigo Theme:
WINDSTORM
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First Place - 21 Points
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windstorm-
all the dandelions
leave me behind
--Kashinath Karmakar
India
(1,2,14) = 21 pts
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Second Place - 18 Points
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windstorm -
no way back
to youth
Ana Drobot
(Romania)
(1,5,5) = 18 pts
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Third Place - 16 Points
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sudden wind
the koi pond turns
silver
Paul Hodder
(1,4,5) = 16 pts
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15 Points
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windstorm -
one leaf at a time
the sky larger
Angèle Lux
(3,0,6) = 15 pts
**Has anyone ever tested whether position affects outcome? Is #1 a strong position, a weak one, or no difference? Anyway, this might be rearranged, I think, switching line 2 and line 3, and, perhaps, "the sky growing larger".
windstorm
even the scarecrow
loses his head
Kaiser Kahn
(3,0,6) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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windstorm walk
no matter which way
last night's lie
Roberta Beary
(1,4,3) = 14 pts
**Ah, yes, those pesky lies we get caught in. Strong haiku.
autumn raga --
from deep within the flute
this storm
Gautam Nadkarni
(1,3,5) = 14 pts
**A powerful fusion of art and nature
windstorm...
a dragonfly's struggle
to hold its perch
Anitha Varma,
Kerala, India.
(1,1,9) = 14 pts
**Love the small against the large in this ku and the feeling it evokes. Very applicable to ourselves.
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12 Points
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under the eave
the hush of doves
windstorm
Bernard Gieske
(1,1,7) = 12 pts
** Lovely!
**Beautiful image captured! Can picture those doves huddled together just waiting for the storm to pass.
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11 Points
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windstorm
moon hangs on to branches
barely
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai
India
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
** I think it would worked better with "barely" on line2 before "hangs", something like:
moon barely hangs - line 2
on the branches - line 3
But I understood your idea, it's a beautiful haiku!]
stormy night...
the loose strands of my hair
on his shirt
Vandana Parashar
Sri-Ganganagar
Rajasthan
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
windstorm
all socks
mismatched
Dorota Ocińska
Karin Polska
(0,1,9) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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swirling leaves—
suddenly it all falls
into place
Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy
Birmingham UK
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
zendo
the windswept
flagstone
Tom Painting
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
** Love the eloquent simplicity.
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9 Points
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typhoon...
an empty catamaran
bobs ashore
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh, India
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
windstorm --
forty clothes pegs
on the line
James Dobson
Prudhoe, UK.
(1,0,6) = 9 pts
October morning
on the ship's deck
leaves from Japan
Michael McClintock
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
**Wonderful images; almost nostalgic, and at the same time engendering wanderlust. I wish I had more votes to give.
a spiderweb
without spider -
windstorm
Israel López Balan
Mexico City, Mexico
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
windstorm
I remember the sound
of his voice
Alegria Imperial
Canada
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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through the fence
the old dog barks
windstorm
-Priscilla Cook
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
some windstorm
for all its howling
I'm still in Kansas
maxianne
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
**Nice reference to The Wizard of Oz! And that feeling of being stuck.
windstorm
every leaf falls in it's own
place
Andrius Luneckas,
Vilnius, Lithuania
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
windstorm
the honey locust’s
brief gold
Ann K. Schwader
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
**"brief" is brilliant; a glimpse of the beautiful within a destructive force
wind storm-
sand conquers
the sun
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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wind storm -
his pants on the clothes line
lose their mind
Zhanna P. Rader
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
windstorm--
practising knots
by the fire
oga
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
after the windstorm -
near the angel with one wing
a little boy sleeping
Steliana Cristina Voicu
(Ploiesti, Romania)
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
windy day
the old orchard
creaks
Sondra J. Byrnes
Santa Fe New Mexico
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
gusting wind ...
a feather finds refuge
in a still corner
Tony Nasuta
Timonium, MD
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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wind gust
the golfer chases
his bucket hat
RD McManes
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
windstorm
blowing dreams
away
Barbara Campitelli
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
crosses row on row
the roar of wind
thru leafless trees
Gerry Bravi
(Canada)
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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blue morning-glories
turning away
from the wind
Jill
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
complicating
this evening darkness -
a windstorm
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
autumn winds...
leaves scurry down the walk
taking me with them
D W Skrivseth
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**Enjoyed the fun nature of this one.
summer storm –
hung only on a single peg
a flowered dress
Radka Mindova
Bulgaria
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**Beautiful image and feeling captured in this ku!
dawn windstorm…
among dishes and crumbs
the past due bills
Cyndi Lloyd
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**This captures nicely the scene of an everyday life caught in a moment of devastation.
windstorm -
the horse retreats
to the loafing shed
carmel lively westerman
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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September tempest
wind so strong it can be seen
seagulls fly sideways
Deirdre Godwin
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
dad's tin shed
few more screws loosen
in the wind storm
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
autumn sun
on wet leaf-pasted windows . . .
shades of gold
Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
on a pine branch
facing the windstorm
a young scarecrow
Svend A. doggfall
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
windstorm
a whirlwind of thoughts
among the leaves
Beth Powell
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
white pines
stirring the clouds
rafters creak
Ignatius Fay
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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the scream of a wind storm severing limbs
S.E. Buffington
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
skyward tree roots
in the windstorm -
immigrants passing by
Lavana kray
Romania
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**Recalls what is going in the world right now. So many people uprooted from their homes and lives. Great haiku!
in the afternoon heat
her attire suddenly wanton --
windstorm
Miriam Borne
NYC
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Nor'easter
a good strong anchor
calms the fears
Edward
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**Solid
67. (1)
dawn windstorm…
among dishes and crumbs
the past due bills
(This captures nicely the scene of an everyday life caught in a moment of devastation.)
dog’s nose
sniffing the air
windstorm
Aalix Roake
Hamilton, New Zealand
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
windstorm
geese in a flap
out of formation
Harvey Jenkins
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
**Beautiful haiku! It makes me think of so many things that become “out of formation” during a windstorm.
wind batters windows
doors inside
slam themselves shut
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
windstorm
the brittleness
of his words
Yesha Shah
Surat, India
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
winds shift
geese give way
to gulls
Ruthanne Price
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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How a sudden storm
can grasp you brutally cold
early September
Horst Ludwig
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
wind storm -
a tug at her coat tighter
around her shoulders
Gillena Cox
St James, Trinidad and Tobago
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
wind storm;
the lone chirping cicada
suddenly stops !
manoj saranathan
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
autumn gold whirls to earth the good enough mother
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
wind storm
still no rain clouds cross
the dry valley
Darrell
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
his temper...
raging outside
windstorm
Natalia Kuznetsova
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
autumn storm --
still the roadside oaks
offer refuge
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(Ireland)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
windstorm in the night -
the father of five children
became widower
Cristina Oprea
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
windstorm's end
changed its place
the scarecrow
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
mighty hurricane
like a blackhearted pirate
ruler of the sea
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
after the wind
salvaging buoys
along the beach
Ruth Powell
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
derecho
our voices
play peek-a-boo
Doris
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
autumn wind –
anemones in the garden
sway differently
Tomislav
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
windstorm
bougainvillea buds
e v e r y w h e r e
Stevie Strang
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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a napkin
slaps the rosebush --
windstorm picnic
mechaieh
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
tip of Baja
clinging to the tent
in hurricane winds
Bruce H. Feingold
Berkeley, CA
USA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**I like the way this inverts action, making 'the tip of Baja' the actor. I wish I had more votes to give.
rough sea
windstorm tearing up
the waves
Juhani Tikkanen
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
midnight storm
clouds dashing over moon
wolves and wind howling
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Indian summer
corn chaff twists
on the wind
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
windstorm stroking
the sumac's
silver belly
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
fallen leaf
a breath ahead
of the windstorm
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**"a breath ahead" What a wonderful way to measure.
wind storm
dead leaves brought to life
on the hospital helipad
Alan S. Bridges
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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zephyr, all grown up
creates havoc
Tanja Cilia
scarlet stormclouds
Great Red Spot on Jupiter
whirling forever
F.J. Bergmann
oaks bow creaking
in a hail of brown leaves
taps on the window
assu
violent downdraft
this wind they call haboob...
dust storm overhead
Pat
leaf colours -
stronger than a wild windstorm
the walls of the house
Daniela Bullas
Green leaves spiralling
in the summer sunlight…
sudden windstorm
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
the windstorm died
as she opened
her mouth
Oddbjørn Aardalen
**Very interesting haiku. Feels somewhat sacred.
Leaves stream sailing
Driven wind relentlessly driving
Racing time
James Thoune
Bowling Green KY USA
flags snapping
pine trees cracking
the windstorm brings the rain
rose marie Stutts
atop frozen lake
windblown snowdrifts
shaped like waves
Jane DeJonghe
cyclone warning
onlookers rush
to tweet landfall
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
September gale
scents of summer uncertain
what to hold on to
Sheila K. Barksdale
**I like the way this gives life force to the 'scents of summer'. I wish I had more votes to give.
stormy weather –
hide myself in the warmth
of a flummery
(Ramona)
in the windstorm
a nest tucked on a limb
its dried bits falling . . .
Tim Happel
I clutched my collar
to brace against the squall.
A cup of tea awaits me.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
autumn windstorm passes
losing my way
to go
Yukiko Yamada
drought conditions
a sudden windstorm
adds its sting
Diane Mayr
dressed in grey
windstorm blanketing with sand
the forgotten camera
Anonymous
tensely clutching torn shingles sentinel crow caws storm watch news…
krw
tornado --
my dreams lie scattered
after the shipwreck
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderaba India
camouflaged nest-
a windstorm tears
the hushed calls
Sreelatha Nair
India
Wind storm, black skies, pelting rain,
fallen branches,
new light reaches park grounds
Philip Mizener
windswept lake
lucky if a stone skips twice
between the waves
DeVar
wind storm
hold on to
your hat
Meredith Stern Cavalieri
after the storm
the singing birds is louder
than the drones
Ken Sawitri
(Jakarta, Indonesia)
windstorm
reoccurring dream
disappointment
Anonymous
darkened skies
deer scurry, trees listing
against heavy rains
Hazel A. Witherspoon
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General Comments:
**Thanks again for this chance to read and vote on some good haiku.
**Many entries blew me away!
And now…
Free Format Theme:
SCAR
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First Place - Points
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bathing my father
a scar I never knew
he had
Tom Painting
(3,14,16) = 53 pts
**Poignant and loving.
**The combination of intimacy and pathos is almost overwhelming.
**So many things we don’t necessarily know about our parents. Of course, after reading lines 2-3, then one must wonder what else isn’t known and why. Love the connection between speaker and father in the “bathing” juxtaposed with something unknown which then breaks the connection between the two, but then allows the possibility for reconnection if the speaker asks about the scar.
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Second Place - 17 Points
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faded scar
the memory
still hurts
Bill Kenney
(0,5,7) = 17 pts
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Third Place - 15 Points
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old maple
with a lightning scar
we're almost home
maxianne
(0,2,11) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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childhood scar
my brother asks
forgiveness
Roberta Beary
(1,2,7) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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mountain bikers...
they have a story
for each scar
Edward
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
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11 Points
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low tide-
hidden
scars
-Priscilla Cook
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
scarred tree -
the lover that i have
long forgotten
Angèle Lux
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
**That line break is delicious.
shut window—
the cracked glass pane
scars the rainbow
Gautam Nadkarni
(1,0,8) = 11 pts
**Never thought of a rainbow having a scar. Love the new perspective offered in this haiku, especially our times of scarred ways of thinking or seeing things. Very interesting. What a great image!
crescent moon----
the curve of a smile
in my C-section scar
Vidya S Venkatramani, Chennai,INDIA
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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scar on the landscape my neighbour's new shed
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
**I laughed out loud when I read this, simply because I can relate. So interesting to think of an object as a “scar,” but how true it can be.
burn marks...
all the leftovers
of a dream
Yesha Shah
Surat, India
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
in the burn scar
young aspens -
turning gold
Jane DeJonghe
(1,0,7) = 10 pts
**I would drop "in the" and place the break at the end of line 1: "burn scar – / young aspens / turning gold"
scarred earth
a coffee pot amid
the rubble
Stella Pierides
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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scar-
therefore
I am
--Kashinath Karmakar
India
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
**It doesn't walk, talk, or squawk like haiku, but it's haiku, the art of juxtaposition and the single moment – even if, in this case, a moment of reflection.
**Nice play on “I think.” However, this haiku elevates what it means to be human and shows our fragility. Love it!
beauty contest --
a girl with a scar
wins the prize
~ ANGELA MUTANU
(Kenya)
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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the scar
of a love misplaced
moonless night
Barbara Campitelli
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
autumn rain --
the tree has
a thousand scars
James Dobson
Prudhoe, UK.
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
scars of his past
traced in white hairs
the rescue horse
rose marie Stutts
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
border--
scars in the eyes of
the refugees
oga
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
butterfly wings
she turns her scar
to a tattoo
Sreelatha Nair
India
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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written in sand -
the scars
of my soul
Gabriel Sawicki
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
Milky Way's glow
my fingertip wanders along
her caesarean scar
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
Red Cross tent
the scars that no one
can see
Paul Hodder
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
**So true! Thank you for the reminder.
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6 Points
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old mother
still waiting for her son...
war scars
Natalia Kuznetsova
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
war scars...
lost in the sand
their footsteps
Ana Drobot
(Romania)
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
forest path -
an aspen tree scarred
with someone's heart
Zhanna P. Rader
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
a scar of mud
where the village stood
. . . dragonflies
Michael McClintock
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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blood moon...
the ugly scars
of that abortion
Kaiser Kahn
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
**I appreciate that “scars” is plural – not just the physical scars but the emotional ones too. And the juxtaposition with blood moon, adds depth to the physical scars, all that red – blood.
jigsaw puzzle
seniors scarred hands
put the pieces together
Harvey Jenkins
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
rock strata…
on the bottlenose dolphin
a propeller scar
Cyndi Lloyd
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
crescent moon -
the scars that throb
unseen
Anitha Varma,
Kerala, India
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
c-section
the scar makes me
smile
Vandana Parashar
Sri-Ganganagar
Rajasthan
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
sea foam
smoothening my scars
end of summer
Alegria Imperial
Canada
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
the scarred tree in lovers' lane-
all those promises
of forever
Anonymous
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
first fight...
my kid shows off
his band-aid
Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy
Birmingham UK
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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scars--
should she or shouldn't she
marry again
DeVar
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
dotted line of sutures
ensuring
memories do not unravel
Tanja Cilia
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
**I really like what this haiku is trying to convey. However, I feel like lines 2 and 3 need to be reworked in order to make this an even stronger haiku. Great image of “dotted line of sutures,” and I love the idea of memories not unraveling. Very emotional.
my finger
traces the scars
old and new
RD McManes
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
Still hearing the bell
of the little hometown church
war destroyed long ago
Horst Ludwig
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
mothers grave
a scar
of love
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
childhood sweetheart
first letter of her name
on old tree trunk
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai
India
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
prisoners of war -
the same pull
in every scar
Arvinder kaur
Chandigarh , india
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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blocks of driveways
end in a green field
tornado scar
David C. Kopaska-Merkel
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
refugee child-
wave after wave wash
the hidden scar
Rita Odeh
Haifa , Israel
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
autumn sunset
blood-red streams across the field
scars of war
Bernard Gieske
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
old beech...
the scars of my youth
visible to all
Diane Mayr
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
where you came
into the world now
a white line
Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
cosmetic sutures
the depth of my
hollowness
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**Appreciate the raw honesty presented in this haiku.
oak bark grows
over the scar—ten years
since the accident
F.J. Bergmann
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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sunlit scar…
a reminder of
hopes gone dark
D W Skrivseth
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
raindrops on rose leaves -
already forgotten scars
of a drought just passed
Gillena Cox
St James, Trinidad and Tobago
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
medals in a box
midst the joy of living
scars for having lived
Gerry Bravi
(Canada)
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
A fearful boy of seven,
I asked if we could share a dance
She turned away in fear.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
marriage at a crossroad scars of forgiveness
Bruce H. Feingold
Berkeley, CA
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the rites of passage
knives physical and verbal
I have earned my scars
Deirdre Godwin
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
yesterday's storm,
scars on the rocks –
a calm sea
Tomislav
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
touching an old scar
the soldier flashes back --
ejected from his Humvee
Miriam Borne
NYC
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
clearcut
a scar through the valley
felt by all
Beth Powell
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
little cat
trembles by the door
no visible scars
jill
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
new scar on his leg -
the mountain changed its color
from green to orange
Cristina Oprea
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
my smooth left arm --
smallpox vaccination
the only scar
~ Patrick Wafula
(Kenya)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
past accident --
a hairless spot
on my head
~ Samuel Kilonzo
(Kenya)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
moonlight floods the room
the ridge on a broken leg
a weed chocked garden
Hazel A. Witherspoon
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Points
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last straw
trembles in the wind...
scarred crow
Pat
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**Like the play on “scarecrow.” Absolutely love “last straw / trembles in the wind” – something so beautiful about it and fragile, which is then captured in the crow’s scar. A very haunting haiku.
opium poppy scars
juices flowing
veins
hawktalk
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
an old facial scar
on the gospel singer
in the storefront church
Tim Happel
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
election violence --
this town still bears the scars
of the war
~ JACKSON MULANDI
(Kenya)
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
slowly rubbing
my lower belly --
beautiful scar
~ Catherine Njeri Maina
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
a nun is caring
for the sick white rose -
the scar reopens
Steliana Cristina Voicu
(Ploiesti, Romania)
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
my childhood scars
affirm recalled
reality
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
my grandfather
telling a war story --
scars on his head
~ Anne Njeri
(Kenya)
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the scars
my children leave behind
shining
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
first time we met
I recognize him
from his scar
Ken Sawitri
(Jakarta, Indonesia)
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
face painting...
the fifth grade boys want
Potter scars
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**Nice reference to Harry Potter and what boys want – how a scar comes to symbolize something special.
Forgetting which
is which-- the scars
from the grill and the thorn
Alan S. Bridges
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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facial keloids
the color of raw liver
good will to men
Ignatius Fay
*‘keloid’ - an area of irregular fibrous tissue formed at the site of a scar or injury
walking windy streets
of a city named
by the scar of an ancestor
Anonymous
German duels
I manage to survive
without a scar
--Kirsty Karkow
sunburnt on Friday
and typhooned on a Sun-day -
all are scars of time
Daniela Bullas
Three times jilted
childless old woman
scarred for life
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
a scar
on a scar
on the scars . . .
the strife-ridden city
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
flare
and a gigantic mushroom
a vivid scar
Dorota Ocińska
Karin Polska
instead of tattoos
on his neck and arms
forest fire scars
Barbara Snow
a red Milky Way
etched across my arm
mosquito constellations
mechaieh
**Love “mosquito constellations!”
a heart shaped scar
and our initials
marred the tree
Anonymous
this cold rain
has stiffened five fingers
and one scar
Sheila K. Barksdale
skerry garden –
speaking about dad's long winter
(Ramona)
almost faded
memory of childhood fall
scar
Frances O'Keeffe
scars on the knee
the future are gone
autumn evening
Yukiko Yamada
healing wound --
a painless scar
on my arm
~ AUGUSTUS MUTETI
(Kenya)
all sewn up
with strong blue thread --
a lovely scar!
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
the scar in my palm
a painful reminder
a saint bernard
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
scars from your childhood –
even
stones are marked by winds
Anonymous
stuttering
ex-lover turns away
two scars remain
Anonymous
lightening scar
on the cottonwood--
his leaving
Ruth Powell
name withheld...
the taut margin
of a scar
Michele L. Harvey
USA
sands of time --
tiny Aylan leaves
deep scar
Kumarendra Mallick Hyderabad India
^^Little Aylan Kurdi was drowned while crossing fom Turkey to Greece. This is a disgrace to remain mute to watch this tragedy.
elephant grass -
the old soldier
relives his scars.
dsnake1
an arrested poacher --
scars on his face legs
and hands
~ Michael Cosmas
(Kenya)
scarred inside
still she finds perfect days
and reasons to live
Carol Raisfeld
bridal night
he caresses her
abortion scars
quamrul hassan (dhaka, bangladesh)
wildest love
licked by mother lion
her child's scar!
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
White with age
events recorded on the skin
Life’s footprints
James Thoune
Bowling Green KY
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General Comments:
**Quite a number of standouts in this batch.
**Scarred for life!
**The haiku under this category are excellent and pose a great challenge to assess.
**So many interesting haiku dealing with “scar,” and I loved all the different takes. I had a difficult time awarding points.
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