The Shiki Monthly Kukai
June 2012 Kukai
Dear Friends,
Here are the results for the June 2012 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was ICE CREAM, and our Free Format subject was DAY MOON
Congratulations to ***Paul Hodder***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Paul Hodder & John Soules***, winners of our Free Format section!
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The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.
Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.
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In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.
(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.
VOTER'S comments are indicated by "**" below the respective poems.
Kigo Theme:
ICE CREAM
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First Place - 24pts
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first taste
of ice cream
- her eyes
Paul Hodder
(1,5,11) = 24 pts
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Second Place - 21pts
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ice cream
on the patio-
strawberry moon
sanuktaa asopa
(1,3,12) = 21 pts
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Third Place - 19pts
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ice cream
again, we debate
our choices
Michele L. Harvey
(2,2,9) = 19 pts
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16 Points
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summer evening—
a clean t-shirt shares
my ice cream
if
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
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15 Points
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ice cream
remembering the time
she licked his ear
André Surridge
(0,1,13) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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storm warning
a generous scoop
from the ice cream vendor
Tom Painting
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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lazy afternoon
the distant jingle
of the ice cream truck
Cara Holman
(1,2,6) = 13 pts
old mountains —
a melted ice cream
on a stone bench
Israel López Balan
(1,1,8) = 13 pts
** I like the contrasts in this haiku, and the picture it creates is very vivid.
summer holiday—
describing the sunset
in shades of ice cream
~Devika
(1,0,10) = 13 pts
crowded beach
the ice cream vendor
runs out of cones
Stevie Strang
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
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12 Points
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spilled ice cream
two warring wasps
collide in chocolate
Kurt W.
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
I stir ice cream
into the root beer soda...
sinking sun
Gregory Longenecker
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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grocery shopping--
her failing memory
holds on to ice cream
jill
(0,4,3) = 11 pts
ice cream remnants—
the baby's face disappears
into the bowl
Rita Odeh
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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rain in the garden...
peony buds
melt like ice cream cones
dragonfly
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
**I LOVE this one!
ten spoons!
the toddler's fingers
on ice cream night
Michael McClintock
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
double chocolate
double dip with sprinkles
double chin
Merrill Ann Gonzales
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
** I like the repetition of the word "double".
thunderstorm --
the ice cream van has
silenced its tune
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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summer's end
a large plastic ice cream
dripping with the rain
Dorota Pyra
(1,0,6) = 9 pts
the nurse's bell
grannie whispers she'd like
some pistachio
Maxianne
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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Easter mastectomy
she fills her ice cream cone
with a cup cake
Allison Millcock
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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winter storm —
her sudden desire
for ice cream
Mike Montreuil
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
sweltering heat
a long queue waits at
the gelato stand
Barbara A Taylor
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
ice cream--
the rosy cheeks
of a bearded man
Ami
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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shady willow —
the pleasure of licking
an ice-cream cone
Zhanna P. Rader
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
sultry day —
a pregnant woman rubs her belly
with ice cream
Cezar F. Ciobica
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
when summer was all about
blackberry ice cream...
yesterday
Angela Terry
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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ice cream
the prescription
she misplaced
Alegria
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
God is surely good
and would not make a heaven
without ice cream cones
Robert C. Howard
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
ice cream I can't decide
John Soules
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
nursing mother
ice cream
dripping down her chin
Bill Pauly
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
growing queue
the ice cream seller
blows his nose
Tore Sverredal
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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the flump!
between her sandals
double-dip fudge
Barbara Snow
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
best friends
sharing a Boston cooler
after school
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
in my favorite photo
he’s wearing
an ice cream mask
Katie Conway
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
the best man
weaves his humorous tale—
wedding ice cream melts
John Daleiden
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
ice cream?
her white teeth
but two
gogatsu
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
awakening —
the ice cream seller's
deep voice
Stella Pierides
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
rum raisin ice cream...
Papa's favorite excuse
for whiskey breath
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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aroma of hot dogs
sticky ice cream fingers
on the ghost train
Ron C. Moss
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
Akureyri June —
that girl in her lamb fur coat
licking her ice-cream!
Horst Ludwig
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
doves' cooing calls
in front of the ice cream shop —
children bowled over
STOPS
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
sweet was my
ice cream dream . . .
wet and sticky
eric
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
bloomy cherry . . .
my daughters very first
ice cream
Peter O. Silvani
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first kiss —
chocolate versus vanilla
in a sunny dream
Narayanan Raghunathan
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
melting ice cream
through a hole in the cone--
nieces and nephews
DeVar
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
burning sunshine. . .
the wallah tongues an ice cream
above the school children
Ramesh Anand
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
a line of kids...
we take turns hand-cranking
the peach ice cream
--Kirsty Karkow
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
voices in the wind ...
children licking ice cream
in silky sunlight
Keith A. Simmonds
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
dog days –
a drowned fly
in a melted ice-cream
Virginia Popescu
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
50's diner—
on both sides of me pie
à la mode
Roberta Beary
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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students queueing
at the ice-cream vendor's —
hot lunchtime
~ Teresia Wanjiru
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
that old ice cream song
my grown-up feet getting
ready to run
Donna Bauerly
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
ice cream vendor's bell—
kid's eyes light up
also grandpa's
Vishnu P Kapoor
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
summer child
an ice cream kiss drips from
grandma’s moustache
Karin Anderson
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
all the temptations
i had to resist and now...
vanilla ice-cream
natalia kuznetsova
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
tinkling tune . . .
drawn to the ice cream van
the neighbourhood kids
Liz Rule
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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sunny Sunday noon—
a child eats an ice-cream cube
at the church gate
~ Patrick Wafula
summersweating snowman
a little red-haired girl
offers him an ice cream
Oddbjørn Aardalen
chilly morning —
ice cream seller
caught a flu
Juhani Tikkanen
petty argument
the honking
of the ice cream van
Anonymous
she sleeps --
melting ice cream
cross her toes
Peter Pache
vanilla ice cream...
those summer holidays with
my sweetheart
Jayashree Maniyil
faint pen mark
written on the carton --
the ice cream's price
~ James Bundi
the sign says
thirty wonderful flavors --
ten kinds of chocolate
Brenda Roberts
you say ice cream
I see strawberries—
my grandfather’s smile
Marylouise Knight
I open the freezer —
the ice cream bought today
has vanished
Elaine Riddell
Ice cream sundaes
He dribbles caramel sauce
On me...I scream
Mary E. Gray
studying Pavlov for the exams
her ice cream drips
her dog drools
jon espen vassbotn
ice cream sundae
after the orthodontist
appointment
Ruth Powell
a kid's grin –
ice cream going lopsided
atop the sugar cone
BILL KENNEY
at the circus
her eyes the size
of an ice cream cone
Barbara Campitelli
sunny day--
ice cream drips
on my shoes
James Dobson
ice cream parlor
before we knew how
to be healthy
--Peter Newton
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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The ice cream melts quietly
On a girl’s bare foot
Dog sits alongside
Bernhard Kopf
sweet vanilla
and strawberry scent—
ice-cream dessert
~ Stephen Macharia
ice cream
how many included
one for our dog
eiko Yachimoto
tinkle of a bell
in the street —
ice cream seller
--gillena cox
atIIIsHOO!
... the flavour of
bourbon vanilla
Ralf Bröker
melting barriers
gelato, green tea, full cream
ah! ice cream
Anonymous
after a hot day
toss in bed and remember
ice cream
Harvey Jenkins
hot lunch—
a coloured ice-cream drops
on our tablecloth
~ Victor Obutho
the little girl looks to the ground,
crying,
she dropped her ice cream
Rita
red ice-cream makes
my tongue look carnivorous—
strawberry taste
~ Isaac Ndirangu
summer treat
baby’s bowl of ice cream
finger lickin’ good
Ben Gieske
after a sunday nap
pie and ice cream
Anonymous
Ice cream
dripping slowly on hot sand.
child cries
j Campbell
Five year-old child
stares at the puddle
of ice cream at her feet
Christine Howard
dripping down
onto dirty little hand -
ice cream in a cone
DW Skrivseth
Jell-o to firm it
ice cream makes it smooth and sweet
Christmas night dessert
Deirdre Godwin
ice cream post lunch --
student nurses queue for
the rare dessert
~ Catherine Njeri Maina
Two close friends
in ice cream parlour —
summer joy
Trevor Camp
chilled ice cream
warm
comfort
Frances O'Keeffe
a taste
of the pistachio ice cream
my childhood
Irena Szewczyk
sunny noon—
a pupil licking ice-cream
from her fingers
~ Consolata Okoth
the ice-cream place
on a hot summer day —
what an oasis!
Tomislav
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General Comments:
**Comment: I continue to be attracted to those haiku which show the juxtaposition of two images, and leave something unsaid.
**Some very nice senryu but I had to choose. My votes are for lines that take me elsewhere beyond ice cream delights.
** This kigo gave us a lot of happy summery haiku, so pleasant to read. And yet, there seemed to be fewer haiku of high quality among them
Free Format Theme:
DAY MOON
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First Place - 23pts
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and you
so far away
day moon
Paul Hodder
(1,1,18) = 23 pts
AND
day moon the dreams that linger
John Soules
(0,3,17) = 23 pts
**lovely monostich
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Second Place - 21pts
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day moon
the tethered weight
of father's watch
Roberta Beary
(0,5,11) = 21 pts
AND
undecided
whether to leave or linger—
day moon
sanjuktaa
(0,3,15) = 21 pts
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Third Place - 16pts
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day moon...
i continue last night's
conversation
Jayashree Maniyil
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
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14 Points
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asylum window –
fingerprints against
the day moon
César F. Ciobica
(0,0,14) = 14 pts
**The ambiguity of thought makes me rueful.
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12 Points
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day moon
questioning everything
I thought I knew
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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sun and moon
wobble together in
the lotus pond
Narayanan Raghunathan
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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your face...
i see it everywhere
day moon
natalia kuznetsova
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
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8 Points
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planting
winter squash --
ashen moon
Peter Pache
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
daymoon
wandering into
someone else's dream
Merrill Ann Gonzales
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
day moon --
she wonders if it will be
a girl or boy ...
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
day moon
when the veil
slips
Stella Pierides
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
a lone seagull
hovering above the waves
day moon
Liz Rule
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
day-moon...
looking up at
the white camellia
Gregory Longenecker
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
day moon
hovering on her window
a Luna moth
Alegria
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
day moon --
last night’s
hangover
Ben Gieske
(0,0,8) = 8 pts
** true, the moon has lost its way...
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7 Points
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my backstroke swim —
a day moon half emerges
from the clear sky
Tomislav Maretić
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
morning moon
a woman wonders whether
she is pregnant
Ralf Bröker
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
morning moon
the breath
of fading stars
Angela Terry
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
full-bellied
village goats filing home --
rising scarlet moon
~ Patrick Wafula
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
**I like the alliteration in the last line; it enhances the longing for something not expressed but deeply felt.
through a knot hole
in Grandpa’s hay loft . . .
the day moon
Kirsty Karkow
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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your face
through the night train's window
day moon
Irena Szewczyk
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
**I think this is a very lovely image.
day moon
his promise appears
well-intentioned
Tom Painting
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
sun bath. . .
an eagle circles
the day moon
Ramesh Anand
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
hollyhocks still grow
by the abandoned barn--
a faint day moon
DeVar
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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little mummies
in a window web
the day moon
Michael McClintock
(1,1,0) = 5 pts
day moon —
a pale welcome
to the sunrise
Virginia Popescu
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
day moon
over my shoulder--
I face the day
James Dobson
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
day moon
chemo treatment’s IV drip
near her right shoulder
Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
day moon --
a passing eagle blocks
my observation
~ Caxton Okoth
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
day moon . . .
with so much poetry
could you ever fade away?
Ron C. Moss
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
not the date
i was expecting
day moon
Polona
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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a long trip —
sunrise on one side
moon on the other
Israel López Balan
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
leaves fall now and then—
on the branch motionless
perches the day moon
Vishnu P kapoor
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
circling
day moon
hawk
gogatsu
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
she pays
for her date —
day moon
Michele L. Harvey
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
desert dusk-
the rearview mirror
filled with day-moon
~Devika
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
day moon---
she reaches for what is
and isn’t
Dica
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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first June sun --
a wispy cloud glides
past a noon moon
~ Catherine Njeri Maina
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
Moon sky in the west
lingers on to greet the dawn’s
new rose corona
Robert C. Howard
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Day moon
She feeds the chickens
Unaware
Mary E. Gray
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
on the meadow trail
a break in the fog--
day moon and daisies
jill
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
day moon and owl
each showing its horns...
ice-crusted snow
if
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
day moon
over unbroken snow . . .
how long how long
BILL KENNEY
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
graveyard shift —
day moon
Mike Montreuil
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
she pockets
a piece of pumice
day moon
André Surridge
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
a day moon
hangs over the field ...
butterflies adrift
Keith A. Simmonds
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
lunchtime stroll
between two meetings
day moon
David Grayson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
dementia...
Grandfather drifts off
with the day moon
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
**a poignant image.
early morning
above the traffic lights
a day moon
Brenda Roberts
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
day moon
the young lovers
keep on
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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sunny daybreak —
I strain to see a fading moon
in the sky
~ John Gachugu
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
racing to the bus --
the rabbit in the day moon
smirks at my watch
mechaieh
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
a round white cloud or
a skydiver's parachute —
moon day's illusions
STOPS
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
day moon—
a remnant of the night
a ghostly presence
Marylouise Knight
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
during the day
the dark side of the half moon
so blue
Stevie Strang
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
I recall I asked,
Are you certain that's the moon?
In day-time? Mother!
Horst Ludwig
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
day dream
floating on the white
full moon
Ritah Odeh
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
meditation
day moon and my breath
in weightlessness
Dorota Pyra
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
sleeping in
on the first day of summer
day moon
Cara Holman
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the day moon creeps up
through the foliage
a feather floats down
Tore Sverredal
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
oh, it`s nothing
the day moon beams to the sun
you should have seen me at night
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
day moon
bored by sleepers
it watches the street
miriam chaikin
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
he traces the shape
of the day moon on his toast—
job hunting
John Daleiden
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the detective
looks at the sky
a transparent fingerprint
helge t.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
beneath the day moon
sun’s warmth on my shoulder...
morning stroll
Barbara A Taylor
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
day moon;
a gravestone's one word--
infants
Ami
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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clear daybreak —
the moon peeping like
a face in the sky
~ Kevin Kamindo
spring
day moon
grandpa's cupping hand
behind the ear
Peter O. Silvani
peeping
in and out of the barbecue smoke-
the day moon !
-manoj saranathan
day moon at first light —
the street lamps
hesitate to switch off
dsnake1
99% sun
occupying the same sky
with a day moon
Juhani Tikkanen
under the tight sail
of the crescent day moon
a regatta waits for wind
jon espen vassbotn
Ascension Sunday
the walk back from Holy Mass —
day moon
--gillena cox
above the city
high in a blue expanse —
sliver of day moon
Elaine Riddell
contemplate the moon
mirrored in the morning lake
reflective moment
Deirdre Godwin
nature walk —
through the branches
a day moon
Anonymous
printless shore . . .
a day moon leaches
all regrets
Anonymous
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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winter day moon —
its transparent look
against the blue sky
Anonymous
day moon —
insomnia dogs
ragged red fox
Kurt W.
Twelve midday
moon behind tall pines
time to dream.
Trevor Camp
I see the day moon as a vague shadow in the sky,
pale and small,
fading away in the day.
Rita B Fox
day moon...
remembering
shivering branches
Ruth Powell
two lovers kissing
before a huge rising moon—
orange dusk
~ Gloria Kerubo
day moon
from a cornucopia
of clouds
--Peter Newton
day moon
dull morning sky...
red wing sings
dragonfly
setting moon—
noisy bird whistles
wake me up
~ Douglas Nugi
awakening
on her wedding day
a children's moon
Maxianne
late sunset sky --
the Idd crescent moon
floating on gold
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
day moon surprise
reminds me
we must compromise
Katie Conway
noon!
cuckoo!
again the moon!
--Kameshwar Rao
no warmth
from this pale shadow.
negative sun
j campbell
argent morning
bright moonglow
uplifts us
Frances O'Keeffe
those eyes
in the back of her head
day moon
Barbara Snow
her day moons beckoned
her crater drew me in . . .
soft lunar landing
eric
tatters of cloud pass
the fading day moon
shadows deepen
Donna Bauerly
real or illusory
decades of devotion —
day moon
DW Skrivseth
dew lies on the grass
the moon is at half-mast
a rooster crows
Christine Howard
day moon
she dreams of meeting
a mystery man
Bill Pauly
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General Comments:
**I had never before heard the expression "day moon" but understood the theme when announced. Reading this month's haiku collection, it seems that almost everyone was familiar with the term. Interesting!
**As always, I wish I had a few more votes
**There were others that I liked too.
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