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June 2012 Kukai

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June 2012 Kukai

Dear Friends,

Here are the results for the June 2012 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was  ICE CREAM, and our Free Format subject was DAY MOON

 

Congratulations to ***Paul Hodder***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Paul Hodder  &  John Soules***, winners of our Free Format section!

 

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The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.

Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.

 

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In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.

(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.

 

VOTER'S comments are indicated by  "**" below the respective poems. 

Kigo Theme:

 ICE CREAM

 

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First Place -  24pts

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first taste

of ice cream

- her eyes

 

Paul Hodder

(1,5,11) = 24 pts

 

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Second Place -  21pts

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ice cream

on the patio-

strawberry moon

 

sanuktaa asopa

(1,3,12) = 21 pts

 

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Third Place -  19pts

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ice cream

again, we debate

our choices

 

Michele L. Harvey

(2,2,9) = 19 pts

 

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16 Points

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summer evening—

a clean t-shirt shares

my ice cream

 

if

(1,3,7) = 16 pts

 

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15 Points

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ice cream

remembering the time

she licked his ear

 

André Surridge

(0,1,13) = 15 pts

 

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14 Points

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storm warning

a generous scoop

from the ice cream vendor

 

Tom Painting

(0,3,8) = 14 pts

 

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13 Points

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lazy afternoon

the distant jingle

of the ice cream truck

 

Cara Holman

(1,2,6) = 13 pts

 

old mountains —

a melted ice cream

on a stone bench

 

Israel López Balan

(1,1,8) = 13 pts

** I like the contrasts in this haiku, and the picture it creates is very vivid.

 

summer holiday—

describing the sunset

in shades of ice cream

 

~Devika

(1,0,10) = 13 pts

 

crowded beach

the ice cream vendor

runs out of cones

 

Stevie Strang

(0,3,7) = 13 pts

 

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12 Points

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spilled ice cream

two warring wasps

collide in chocolate

 

Kurt W.

(0,3,6) = 12 pts

 

I stir ice cream

into the root beer soda...

sinking sun

 

Gregory Longenecker

(0,2,8) = 12 pts

 

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11 Points

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grocery shopping--

her failing memory

holds on to ice cream

 

jill

(0,4,3) = 11 pts

 

ice cream remnants—

the baby's face disappears

into the bowl

 

Rita Odeh

(0,3,5) = 11 pts

 

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10 Points

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rain in the garden...

peony buds

melt like ice cream cones

 

dragonfly

(1,2,3) = 10 pts

**I LOVE this one!

 

ten spoons!

the toddler's fingers

on ice cream night

 

Michael McClintock

(1,2,3) = 10 pts

 

double chocolate

double dip with sprinkles

double chin  

  

Merrill Ann Gonzales

(0,3,4) = 10 pts

** I like the repetition of the word "double".

 

thunderstorm --

the ice cream van has

silenced its tune

 

~ Isabelle Prondzynski

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

 

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9 Points

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summer's end

a large plastic ice cream

dripping with the rain

 

Dorota Pyra

(1,0,6) = 9 pts

 

the nurse's bell

grannie whispers she'd like

some pistachio

 

Maxianne

(0,3,3) = 9 pts

 

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8 Points

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 Easter mastectomy

she fills her ice cream cone

with a cup cake

 

Allison Millcock

(1,1,3) = 8 pts

 

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7 Points

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winter storm —

her sudden desire

for ice cream

 

Mike Montreuil

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

sweltering heat

a long queue waits at

the gelato stand

 

Barbara A Taylor

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

ice cream--

the rosy cheeks

of a bearded man

 

Ami

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

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6 Points

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shady willow —

the pleasure of licking

an ice-cream cone

 

Zhanna P. Rader

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

sultry day —

a pregnant woman  rubs her belly

with ice cream

 

Cezar F. Ciobica

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

when summer was all about

blackberry ice cream...

yesterday

 

Angela Terry

(0,0,6) = 6 pts

 

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5 Points

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ice cream

the prescription

she misplaced

 

Alegria

(1,0,2) = 5 pts

 

God is surely good

and would not make a heaven

without ice cream cones

 

Robert C. Howard

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

ice cream I can't decide

 

John Soules

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

nursing mother

ice cream

dripping down her chin

 

Bill Pauly

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

growing queue

the ice cream seller

blows his nose

 

Tore Sverredal

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

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4 Points

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the flump!

between her sandals

double-dip fudge

 

Barbara Snow

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

 

best friends

sharing a Boston cooler

after school

 

Carolyn Coit Dancy

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

in my favorite photo

he’s wearing

an ice cream mask

 

Katie Conway

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

the best man

weaves his humorous tale—

wedding ice cream melts

 

John Daleiden

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

ice cream?

her white teeth

but two

 

gogatsu

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

awakening —

the ice cream seller's

deep voice

 

Stella Pierides

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

rum raisin ice cream...

Papa's favorite excuse 

for whiskey breath

 

S.E. Buffington

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

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3 Points

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aroma of hot dogs

sticky ice cream fingers

on the ghost train

 

Ron C. Moss

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

Akureyri June —

that girl in her lamb fur coat

licking her ice-cream!

 

Horst Ludwig

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

doves' cooing calls

in front of the ice cream shop —

children bowled over

 

STOPS

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

sweet was my

ice cream dream . . .

wet and sticky

 

eric

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

bloomy cherry . . . 

my daughters very first

ice cream

 

Peter O. Silvani

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

first kiss —

chocolate versus vanilla

in a sunny dream

 

Narayanan Raghunathan

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

melting ice cream

through a hole in the cone--

nieces and nephews

 

DeVar

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

burning sunshine. . .

the wallah tongues an ice cream

above the school children

 

Ramesh Anand

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

a line of kids...

we take turns hand-cranking

the peach ice cream

 

--Kirsty Karkow

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

voices in the wind ...

children licking ice cream

in silky sunlight

 

Keith A. Simmonds

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

dog days –

a drowned fly

in a melted ice-cream

 

Virginia Popescu

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

50's diner—

on both sides of me  pie

à la mode

 

Roberta Beary

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

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2 Points

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students queueing

at the ice-cream vendor's —

hot lunchtime

 

~ Teresia Wanjiru

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

that old ice cream song

my grown-up feet getting

ready to run

 

Donna Bauerly

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

ice cream vendor's bell—

kid's eyes light up

also grandpa's

 

Vishnu P Kapoor

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

summer child

an ice cream kiss drips from

grandma’s moustache

 

Karin Anderson

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

all the temptations

i had to resist and now...

vanilla ice-cream

 

natalia kuznetsova

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

tinkling tune . . .

drawn to the ice cream van

the neighbourhood kids

 

Liz Rule

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

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1 Point

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sunny Sunday noon—

a child eats an ice-cream cube

at the church gate

 

~ Patrick Wafula

 

 

summersweating snowman

a little red-haired girl

offers him an ice cream

 

Oddbjørn Aardalen

 

 

chilly morning —

ice cream seller

caught a flu

 

Juhani Tikkanen

 

 

petty argument

the honking

of the ice cream van

 

Anonymous

 

 

she sleeps --

melting ice cream

cross her toes

 

Peter Pache

 

 

vanilla ice cream...

those summer holidays with

my sweetheart

 

Jayashree Maniyil

 

 

faint pen mark

written on the carton --

the ice cream's price

 

~ James Bundi

 

 

the sign says

thirty wonderful flavors --

ten kinds of  chocolate

 

Brenda Roberts

 

 

you say ice cream

I see strawberries—

my grandfather’s smile

 

Marylouise Knight

 

 

I open the freezer —

the ice cream bought today

has vanished

 

Elaine Riddell

 

 

Ice cream sundaes

He dribbles caramel sauce

On me...I scream

 

Mary E. Gray

 

 

studying Pavlov for the exams

her ice cream drips

her dog drools

 

jon espen vassbotn

 

 

ice cream sundae

after the orthodontist

appointment

 

Ruth Powell

 

 

a kid's grin –

ice cream going lopsided

atop the sugar cone

 

BILL KENNEY

 

 

at the circus

her eyes the size

of an ice cream cone

 

Barbara Campitelli

 

 

sunny day--

ice cream drips

on my shoes

 

James Dobson

 

 

ice cream parlor

before we knew how

to be healthy

 

--Peter Newton

 

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No Points This Time, Sorry.

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The ice cream melts quietly

On a girl’s bare foot

Dog sits alongside

 

Bernhard Kopf


 

sweet vanilla

and strawberry scent—

ice-cream dessert

 

~ Stephen Macharia

 

 

ice cream

how many included

one for our dog

 

eiko Yachimoto

 

 

tinkle of a bell

in the street —

ice cream seller

 

--gillena cox

 

 

atIIIsHOO!

... the flavour of

bourbon vanilla

 

Ralf Bröker

 

 

melting barriers

gelato, green tea, full cream

ah! ice cream

 

Anonymous

 

 

after a hot day

toss in bed and remember

ice cream

 

Harvey Jenkins

 

 

hot lunch—

a coloured ice-cream drops

on our tablecloth

 

~ Victor Obutho

 

 

the little girl looks to the ground,

crying,

she dropped her ice cream

 

Rita

 

 

red ice-cream makes

my tongue look carnivorous—

strawberry taste

 

~ Isaac Ndirangu

 

 

summer treat

baby’s bowl of ice cream

finger lickin’ good

 

Ben Gieske

 

 

after a sunday nap

pie and ice cream

 

Anonymous

 

 

Ice cream

dripping slowly on hot sand.

child cries

 

j Campbell

 

 

Five year-old child

stares at the puddle

of ice cream at her feet

 

Christine Howard

 

 

dripping down

onto dirty little hand -

ice cream in a cone

 

DW Skrivseth

 

 

Jell-o to firm it

ice cream makes it smooth and sweet

Christmas night dessert

 

Deirdre Godwin

 

 

ice cream post lunch --

student nurses queue for

the rare dessert

 

~ Catherine Njeri Maina

 

 

Two close friends

in ice cream parlour —

summer joy

 

Trevor Camp

 

 

chilled ice cream

warm

comfort

 

Frances O'Keeffe

 

 

a taste

of the pistachio ice cream

my childhood

 

Irena Szewczyk

 

 

sunny noon—

a pupil licking ice-cream

from her fingers

 

~ Consolata Okoth

 

 

the ice-cream place

on a hot summer day —

what an oasis!

 

Tomislav

 

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General Comments:

**Comment: I continue to be attracted to those haiku which show the juxtaposition of two images, and leave something unsaid.

 

 **Some very nice senryu but I had to choose. My votes are for lines that take me elsewhere beyond ice cream delights.

 

 ** This kigo gave us a lot of happy summery haiku, so pleasant to read. And yet, there seemed to be fewer haiku of high quality among them

 


 


Free Format Theme:

DAY MOON 

 

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First Place -  23pts

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and you

so far away

day moon

 

Paul Hodder

(1,1,18) = 23 pts

 

AND

 

day moon the dreams that linger

 

John Soules

(0,3,17) = 23 pts

**lovely monostich

 

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Second Place -  21pts

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day moon

the tethered weight

of father's watch

 

Roberta Beary

(0,5,11) = 21 pts

 

 AND

 

undecided

whether to leave or linger—

day moon

 

sanjuktaa

(0,3,15) = 21 pts

 

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Third Place -  16pts

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day moon...

i continue last night's

conversation

 

Jayashree Maniyil

(1,3,7) = 16 pts

 

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14 Points

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asylum window –

fingerprints against

the day moon

 

César F. Ciobica

(0,0,14) = 14 pts

**The ambiguity of thought makes me rueful.

 

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12 Points

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day moon

questioning everything

I thought I knew

 

Carolyn Coit Dancy

(0,2,8) = 12 pts

 

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11 Points

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 sun and moon

wobble together in

the lotus pond

 

Narayanan Raghunathan

(0,2,7) = 11 pts

 

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10 Points

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your face...

i see it everywhere

day moon

 

natalia kuznetsova

(0,1,8) = 10 pts

 

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8 Points

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planting

winter squash --

ashen moon

 

Peter Pache

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

 

daymoon

wandering into

someone else's dream

 

Merrill Ann Gonzales

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

 

day moon --

she wonders if it will be

a girl or boy ...

 

-- Chitra Rajappa

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

 

day moon

when the veil

slips

 

Stella Pierides

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

 

a lone seagull

hovering above the waves

day moon

 

Liz Rule

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

 

day-moon...

looking up at

the white camellia

 

Gregory Longenecker

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

 

day moon

hovering on her window

a Luna moth

 

Alegria

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

 

day moon --

last night’s

hangover

 

Ben Gieske

(0,0,8) = 8 pts

** true, the moon has lost its way...

 

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7 Points

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my backstroke swim —

a day moon half emerges

from the clear sky

 

Tomislav Maretić

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

morning moon

a woman wonders whether

she is pregnant

 

Ralf Bröker

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

morning moon

the breath

of fading stars

 

Angela Terry

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

full-bellied

village goats filing home --

rising scarlet moon

 

~ Patrick Wafula

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

**I like the alliteration in the last line; it enhances the longing for something not expressed but deeply felt.

 

through a knot hole

in Grandpa’s hay loft .  .  .

the day moon

 

Kirsty Karkow

(0,0,7) = 7 pts

 

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6 Points

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your face

through the night train's window

day moon

 

Irena Szewczyk

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

**I think this is a very lovely image.

 

day moon

his promise appears

well-intentioned

 

Tom Painting

(0,0,6) = 6 pts

 

sun bath. . .

an eagle circles

the day moon

 

Ramesh Anand

(0,0,6) = 6 pts

 

hollyhocks still grow

by the abandoned barn--

a faint day moon

 

DeVar

(0,0,6) = 6 pts

 

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5 Points

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little mummies

in a window web

the day moon

 

Michael McClintock

(1,1,0) = 5 pts

 

day moon —

a pale welcome

to the sunrise

 

Virginia Popescu

(1,0,2) = 5 pts

 

day moon

over my shoulder--

I face the day

 

James Dobson

(1,0,2) = 5 pts

 

day moon

chemo treatment’s IV drip

near her right shoulder

 

Harvey Jenkins

(1,0,2) = 5 pts

 

day moon --

a passing eagle blocks

my observation

 

~ Caxton Okoth

(1,0,2) = 5 pts

 

day moon . . .

with so much poetry

could you ever fade away?

 

Ron C. Moss

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

not the date

i was expecting

day moon

 

Polona

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

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4 Points

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a long trip —

sunrise on one side

moon on the other

 

Israel López Balan

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

leaves fall now and then—

on the branch motionless

perches the day moon

 

Vishnu P kapoor

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

circling

day moon

hawk

 

gogatsu

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

she pays

for her date —

day moon

 

Michele L. Harvey

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

desert dusk-

the rearview mirror

filled with day-moon

 

~Devika

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

day moon---

she reaches for what is

and isn’t

 

Dica

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

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3 Points

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first June sun --

a wispy cloud glides

past a noon moon

 

~ Catherine Njeri Maina

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

Moon sky in the west

lingers on to greet the dawn’s

new rose corona

 

Robert C. Howard

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

Day moon

She feeds the chickens

Unaware

 

Mary E. Gray

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

on the meadow trail

a break in the fog--

day moon and daisies

 

jill

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

day moon and owl

each showing its horns...

ice-crusted snow

 

if

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

day moon

over unbroken snow . . .

how long how long

 

BILL KENNEY

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

graveyard shift —

day moon

 

Mike Montreuil

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

she pockets

a piece of pumice

day moon

 

André Surridge

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

a day moon

hangs over the field ...

butterflies adrift

 

Keith A. Simmonds

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

lunchtime stroll

between two meetings

day moon

 

David Grayson

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

dementia...

Grandfather drifts off

with the day moon

 

S.E. Buffington

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

**a poignant image.

 

early morning

above the traffic lights

a day moon

 

Brenda Roberts

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

day moon

the young lovers

keep on

 

Barbara Campitelli

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

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2 Points

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sunny daybreak —

I strain to see a fading moon

in the sky

 

~ John Gachugu

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

racing to the bus --

the rabbit in the day moon

smirks at my watch

 

mechaieh

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

a round white cloud or

a skydiver's parachute —

moon day's illusions

 

STOPS

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

day moon—

a remnant of the night

a ghostly presence

 

Marylouise Knight

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

during the day

the dark side of the half moon

so blue

 

Stevie Strang

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

I recall I asked,

Are you certain that's the moon?

In day-time?  Mother!

 

Horst Ludwig

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

day dream

floating on the white

full moon

 

Ritah Odeh

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

meditation

day moon and my breath

in weightlessness

 

Dorota Pyra

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

sleeping in

on the first day of summer

day moon

 

Cara Holman

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

the day moon creeps up

through the foliage

a feather floats down

 

Tore Sverredal

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

oh, it`s nothing

the day moon beams to the sun

you should have seen me at night

 

Oddbjørn Aardalen

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

day moon

bored by sleepers

it watches the street

 

miriam chaikin

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

he traces the shape

of the day moon on his toast—

job hunting

 

John Daleiden

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

the detective

looks at the sky

a transparent fingerprint

 

helge t.

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

beneath the day moon

sun’s warmth on my shoulder...

morning stroll

 

Barbara A Taylor

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

day moon;

a gravestone's one word--

infants

 

Ami

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

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1 Point

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clear daybreak —

the moon peeping like

a face in the sky

 

~ Kevin Kamindo

 

 

spring

day moon

grandpa's cupping hand

behind the ear

 

Peter O. Silvani

 

 

peeping

in and out of the barbecue smoke-

the day moon !

 

-manoj saranathan

 

 

day moon at first light —

the street lamps

hesitate to switch off

 

dsnake1

 

 

99% sun

occupying the same sky

with a day moon

 

Juhani Tikkanen

 

 

under the tight sail

of the crescent  day moon

a regatta waits for wind

 

jon espen vassbotn

 

 

Ascension Sunday

the walk back from Holy Mass —

day moon

 

--gillena cox

 

 

above the city

high in a blue expanse —

sliver of day moon

 

Elaine Riddell

 

 

contemplate the moon

mirrored in the morning lake

reflective moment

 

Deirdre Godwin

 

 

nature walk —

through the branches

a day moon

 

Anonymous

 

 

printless shore . . .

a day moon leaches

all regrets

 

Anonymous

 

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No Points This Time, Sorry.

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winter day moon —

its transparent look

against the blue sky

 

Anonymous

 

 

day moon —

insomnia dogs

ragged red fox

 

Kurt W.

 

 

Twelve midday

moon behind tall pines

time to dream.

 

Trevor Camp

 

 

I see the day moon as a vague shadow in the sky,

pale and small,

fading away in the day.

 

Rita B Fox

 

 

day moon...

remembering

shivering branches

 

Ruth Powell

 

 

two lovers kissing

before a huge rising moon—

orange dusk

 

~ Gloria Kerubo

 

 

day moon

from a cornucopia

of clouds

 

--Peter Newton

 

 

day moon

dull morning sky...

red wing sings

 

dragonfly

 

 

setting moon—

noisy bird whistles

wake me up

 

~ Douglas Nugi

 

 

awakening

on her wedding day

a children's moon

 

Maxianne

 

 

late sunset sky --

the Idd crescent moon

floating on gold

 

~ Isabelle Prondzynski

 

 

day moon surprise

reminds me

we must compromise

 

Katie Conway

 

 

noon!

cuckoo!

again the moon!

 

--Kameshwar Rao

 

 

no warmth

from this pale shadow.

negative sun

 

j campbell

 

 

argent morning

bright moonglow

uplifts us

 

Frances O'Keeffe

 

 

those eyes

in the back of her head

day moon

 

Barbara Snow

 

 

her day moons beckoned

her crater drew me in . . .

soft lunar landing

 

eric

 

 

tatters of cloud pass

 the fading day moon

shadows deepen

 

Donna Bauerly

 

 

real or illusory

decades of  devotion —

day moon

 

DW Skrivseth

 

 

dew lies on the grass

the moon is at half-mast

a rooster crows

 

Christine Howard

 

 

day moon

she dreams of meeting

a mystery man

 

Bill Pauly

 

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General Comments:

 

**I had never before heard the expression "day moon" but understood the theme when announced. Reading this month's haiku collection, it seems that almost everyone was familiar with the term. Interesting!

 

**As always, I wish I had a few more votes

 

**There were others that I liked too.

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