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August 2010 Kukai

Congratulations to Ignatius Fay and Michael Dylan Welch, winners of our Kigo section and to Israel López Balan, winner of our Free Format section!


August 2010 Results
Kigo Theme: 
August Moon
Free Format Theme: 
Moving

First Place — 19 Points
August moon
somewhere in the dark
a blues harp

Ignatius Fay
(3,3,4) = 19 pts

and

August moon — 
this heat
between our sheets

Michael Dylan Welch
(2,2,9) = 19 pts

I know this feeling but lately it's my side of the bed that is the hottest! (darn mid-life!)


Second Place — 17 Points
August moon
the enormous belly
of the garden Buddha

Michael McClintock
(0,5,7) = 17 pts


Third Place — 16 Points
August moon . . .
from imperfect people
perfect shadows

Warren Gossett
(1,3,7) = 16 pts

Lovely.


Fourth Place — 15 Points
august moon
the neighbors willow
dipped in silver

Bill Hudson
(0,2,11) = 15 pts


Fifth Place — 13 Points
August moon
caught in the brambles — 
my thoughts

Alegria
(0,2,9) = 13 pts

I love the physical imagery, the sense of contemplation and the possibility that the thoughts are as tangled as the bush. Beautiful.

August moon
not a single rest
in the cricket song

Rafal Zabratynski
(0,2,9) = 13 pts


Sixth Place — 12 Points
fuller still
than my memory of it —
August moon

Shelley Krause
(2,1,4) = 12 pts

My vote of 1 (one) for this haiku (hay-kyoo as I learned recently) for me is equivalent to 3 (three), the max of what I should give, but like the biblical widow one is all I have.

I like the ambiguous link between the two parts of this haiku . . . wondering if the summer, a relationship, an entire life, perhaps, was also fuller than the poet's memory of it.

August moon
the feral cat
cries for love

Lynne Steel
(1,3,3) = 12 pts

So simple and yet so striking.

August moon
my mother signs
her living will

Tom Painting
(0,3,6) = 12 pts

Wow! This one is just fantastic. So personal.


Seventh Place — 11 Points
in the palm
of his hand
august moon

Roberta Beary
(1,2,4) = 11 pts

the end of downpour
every puddle catches
the August moon

Jacek M.
(1,1,6) = 11 pts

August moon
how silently
the owl flies

Cara Holman
(0,3,5) = 11 pts

It's difficult to capture my attention with an owl and the moon, since many haiku have been written about these subjects. However, such an understated description allows me to dream and write my own story.


Eighth Place — 10 Points
August moon
the dead dog's bowl
bone dry

Collin Barber
(2,0,4) = 10 pts

This is just haunting. I had to hug my pup.

august moon —
the schoolyard stinks
of roofing tar

aom (tim)
(1,1,5) = 10 pts

among
the green apples
August moon

Ann K. Schwader
(0,1,8) = 10 pts


Ninth Place — 9 Points
august moon ::
a great log in the river
rolls over

timothy russell
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

separation . . .
we watch the same
autumn moon

Susan Constable
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

Sigh. I feel like watching An American Tale!


Tenth Place — 8 Points
august moon
the smell of fish and chips
from the dumpster

martin
(1,1,3) = 8 pts

Oh the memories of seaside evenings and that unmistakable smell of fish and chips! Happy days.

August moon
the soft touch
of a worn sweater

Marleen Hulst
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

I feel a touch of autumn in the air as I read this haiku and a sense of nostalgia, as well. Perhaps the sweater belongs, not to the owner, but to someone loved and missed.

August moon
painting a snail path
silver

Zhanna P. Rader
(0,1,6) = 8 pts


Eleventh Place — 7 Points
far from home
a soldier keeping watch on
August moon

Juhani Tikkanen
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

I prefer reading Line2 without the last word "on".

august moon —
the giraffe bends to
caress her calf

ARW
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

in the desert
flooding the cotton fields —
August Moon

John Daleiden
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

at the gate . . .
an airborne spider
in the autumn moon

Carol Raisfeld
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

a coin falls
into the beggar's hand
August moon

Rita Odeh
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

swallow after swallow
settling on a wire
august moon

Polona
(0,0,7) = 7 pts


Twelfth Place — 6 Points
Autumn moon
tawny salted skin and
sun bleached straw

andrea
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

moving day —
the august moon
at my bay window

Israel Lopez Balan
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

August Moon
out of the night
out of itself

Elinor Pihl Huggett
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

Lighting
the crickets' chorus —
August moon

Vasile Moldovan
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

Ramadan —
she washes her feet under
August moonlight

Bamboocha
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

august moon
the colours of my hydrangeas
fading away

Gryta Wansdronk
(0,1,4) = 6 pts


Thirteenth Place — 5 Points
August moon
the trial run
of a school bus

Michele L. Harvey
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

august moon
the harvest table
bare this year

Stevie Strang
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

turning cool
the August moon
silvers the pines

Bill Kenney
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

August moon
he rewrites chapter ten
after her call

Edward
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

gathering the eggs
we almost forgot
August moon

Barbara Snow
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

autumn moon
a hawk glides
along the mountain ridge

Raffael de Gruttola
(0,1,3) = 5 pts


Fourteenth Place — 4 Points
In the shadows
hidden from the August moon . . .
A whippoorwill calls

Tom Conally
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

august moon
lighting up the Milky Way —
time to return home

Natalia Kuznetsova
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

dark room —

spots of August moon

fall on the floor

Winslause Yamame

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

August moon —
only the blackbird and I
are still awake

Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

august moon
infused insects
at the teahouse

ernest j berry
(0,1,2) = 4 pts


Fifteenth Place — 3 Points
clothed in night
she dives for a midnight swim
twin August moons

Jennifer Stefanow
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

August moon
through the airplane window
so close

maxianne
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

katydids . . .
giving voice
to August moon

jeff hoagland
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

Dear friend
why do you hide?
August Moon

Ashi
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

above tall stalks
of swaying sweet corn
August moon

Amicus
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

August moon —
between crickets and frogs
what should I listen first?

Petru-Ioan Garda
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

sleepless night —
I gaze beyond
the August moon

James Dobson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


Sixteenth Place — 2 Points
total eclipse
the August Moon
hides its face

Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

midnight
skinny dipping
August moon

R. C.
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

aggravating pain
in the legs and sleeplessness:
august moon

R. K. Singh
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

sailing clouds —
the August half moon
shines brighter

Isaac Ndirangu.
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

young August moon —
the Ramadan timetable
in the dailies

Patrick Wafula
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

lovers strolling
upon glistening sand . . .
August moon

Keith A. Simmonds
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

jet lag
on the horizon
a red moon

Klemens
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

August moonlight
the distant howls
of drunks

Melissa Spurr
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

a constellation
of silver starfish
 —autumn moon

Paul Hodder
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

fishing rod
in hand at dawn
. . . august moon

Diane Mayr
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

August moon
on her first journal entry
a tear drop

Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

august moon
the fresh crisp air
of shortening days

Frances McCarthy
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

lantern snuffed —
finding my yin
in this August moon

Terri L. French
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

August moon —
stray cat's tail
swaying sunflowers

Kurt R. Westley
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

a lazy roll
over dogs and plums and thunder
august moon

jon espen vassbotn
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

a blue haze
on the August moon . . .
summer goodbyes

Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

August moon
shadow boxing
I spar with myself

Meredith Cavalieri
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

white,
under a full August moon,
antler

og_a
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

nude swim —
a fish scatters
the august moon

Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts


Seventeenth Place — 1 Point
clothes tumbling
beside our bedroom window
August Moon

Pris Campbell

autumn moon
on the wallpaper
her head turns up

s.a doggfall

picnic
litter
August moon

Anonymous

August moon . . .
leaping from
a jasmine porch

Heike Gewi

August moon . . .
she knows what
she's looking for

Francine Banwarth

through cloudy prisms
fringing the August moon
twin rainbows

Liz Rule

August moon . . .
remembering
our first kiss

Barbara A Taylor

August moon
my newly opening eyes
birthing the glow

Donna Bauerly

August moon
obscured
by the cicadas' song

April Serock

seven years ago
we shared a final . . .
august moon

Judi Honiker

August moon —
her birthday wish
a day late

Garry Gay

tall corn
in the field of dreams —
August moon

DeVar

August moon
on the water disappears with a cloud -
the lake, too

MoT

august moon —
on the parking meter
a butterfly

kaiser


No points this time, sorry.
An august full moon
up in high humidity,
ventilator breeze.

Horst Ludwig

Bathed in silken light
a prey to anxiety . . .
August moon frenzy

Gabriele

August moon
now I see it
the old woman

Carolyn Coit Dancy

a hundred yellow figs
to choose from: no need to hurry
August moon

Sheila K. Barksdale

full august moon
rippling over the waves . . .
a light fandango

eric

You promised the moon
on the first of June.
Too soon it's August — no moon!

Robert C. Howard

holiday in France
each chateau is a backdrop
for the August moon

Harvey Jenkins

even fireflies
bow
to this August moon

Marili Deandrea

a slice of moon
before the bird songs
early August dawn

gillena cox

cicadas singing
August moon smiling
summer takes its final bow

Jenn McSweeney

August moon —
chinese children
flying a kite

John McDonald

in the flower bed
overturned pail
spilling August moon

Ben Gieske

same crescent as June
just a little bit lower
almost time for school

Nick Petrone

playing hide and seek
with the clouds all August-
the moon !

manoj saranathan

faint memories
of the day's cool hours —
August moon

Catherine Njeri Maina

Bright white light
through tall dark green trees —
August moon.

Trevor Camp

from the thermal pool
steam rises through palm fronds
August moon

Elaine Riddell

August moon
An owl hoots
She turns in her sleep

Mary E. Gray

August moon
clouding over . . .
fear of the flooding again

Bill Pauly

bladder bursting
pissing from the pier bursting
the August moon

Robert Ertman

sliver of moon
I walk our dogs through the dusk
nostalgic for the dawn

John Thompson

waxing August moon
tonight's dreams more full of him
than the night before

Kate Creighton

pleasant rainy clouds
smell of soil scents fragrance
august moon in a happy mood

Purush

peaceful night —
two stars twinkling around
the August moon

Antony Mwangi

No wood on the hearth —
I wake to the whole house chilled
by the August moon.

R. Joyce Heon

corn stubble dawn —
three gulls across
a white moon

Offa

August moon
one, two, three . . . yellow leaves fall
from the cherry-tree

Miorita

sun ripe tomatoes
cooked to sauce under the cool
August moon

gourdman

Lips burn with cinnamon
Peach juice crosses my chin
August moon laughs

Christine Howard


General Comments:

Very difficult to narrow down this month. So many wonderful possibilities.

I enjoyed this kigo. Thank you!

I had 9 good haiku in my list. My heart got broken when I couldn't vote all of those!



First Place — 26 Points
moving day —
in the empty room
my mother's smell

Israel López Balan
(1,6,11) = 26 pts


Second Place — 25 Points
change of address . . .
the constant shift
of stars

Melissa Spurr
(1,7,8) = 25 pts

This makes me think of the saying, 'the more things change, the more they stay the same." No matter where we move to, we'll see the same stars, even though their position may be different.

How true and very beautifully symbolic of the constant changes.


Third Place — 20 Points
moving day —
a drift of dandelion seeds
leads the way

aom (tim)
(2,4,6) = 20 pts

Beautiful I can see those little umbrella seeds floating in the breeze.

High hopes and best wishes!

Although this was the Free Form Section of the kukai, this one which carries a kigo of dandelion proves to be my favourite.


Fourth Place — 19 Points
foster care
he packs a shoebox
of pretend

Roberta Beary
(4,1,5) = 19 pts

Sad and beautiful.

Heart touching; a move we rarely consider, sadly.

A poignant haiku. I can't help but wonder how many times this child has packed another shoebox, hoping that 'next time', things will be different.


Fifth Place — 16 Points
moving out —
we leave
a full bird feeder

Barbara Snow
(0,4,8) = 16 pts

A thoughtful moving day gesture.


Sixth Place — 15 Points
creature of habit
she tries the old key
in the new door

Meredith Cavalieri
(0,4,7) = 15 pts


Seventh Place — 14 Points
locking the house
..one
....last
.....time

Chitra Rajappa
(2,1,6) = 14 pts

moving day —
wrapping grandma's china
in today's paper

Terri L. French
(0,4,6) = 14 pts

Beautiful juxtaposition of the old and the new as everything is moved from here to there.


Eighth Place — 13 Points
moving —
even our shadows
leave in the van

John McDonald
(1,2,6) = 13 pts

moving out . . .
I pass a snail
going the other way

Liz Rule
(0,4,5) = 13 pts

moving back
to my old hometown
ghosts everywhere

Pris Campbell
(0,3,7) = 13 pts

moving day —
her last glimpse
of the boy next door

James Dobson
(0,2,9) = 13 pts


Ninth Place — 11 Points
moving day
memories in boxes
cats in hiding

Diane Mayr
(1,2,4) = 11 pts

Nice juxtaposition between the poignancy of memories and the humor of cat behavior.

moving out —
willows entangle
the wind

Heike Gewi
(0,2,7) = 11 pts

mom's old house
. . . even the memories
have moved out

Warren Gossett
(0,2,7) = 11 pts

moving . . .
different truck
same stuff

Elinor Pihl Huggett
(0,2,7) = 11 pts

moving day
my father stares
into the glass

Tom Painting
(0,0,11) = 11 pts


Tenth Place — 10 Points
moving out
the clock-shaped mark
on the wall

Rafal Zabratynski
(1,1,5) = 10 pts


Eleventh Place — 8 Points
shadows moving
in the midnight breeze —
a coyote howls

John Daleiden
(1,2,1) = 8 pts

moving on . . .
the bus is filled
with dreams

Carol Raisfeld
(1,1,3) = 8 pts

moving out —
staring at the spaces
where your books once stood

jon
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

moving
leaving Buddha
in the garden

Ben Gieske
(0,2,4) = 8 pts


Twelfth Place — 7 Points
first day of school —
a moving finger reads
word to word

Ellen Compton
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

moving
our tortoise explores
the new lawn

carmel lively westerman
(0,1,5) = 7 pts


Thirteenth Place — 6 Points
winter move . . .
surprised by how little
she needs

Susan Constable
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

that local accent
too soon my own

Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

house hunting —
remembering each place
by its smell

Paul Hodder
(0,1,4) = 6 pts


Fourteenth Place — 5 Points
moving day —
a change
of key

Cara Holman
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

moving day
the toddler scolds
the goldfish

Bill Kenney
(0,0,5) = 5 pts


Fifteenth Place — 4 Points
Jehovah's witness
as soon as I open the door
a fly moves in

Collin Barber
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

this change
of address card —
who are they?

miriam chaikin
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

his new neighbour's cat
another excuse
to drop by

maxianne
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

hospital visit
moving the flowers closer
once more

Michele L. Harvey
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

sweet reunion
the baby finds
his teddy bear

R. C.
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

moving day
one last look
our life in boxes

Frances McCarthy
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Unpacking
every opened box
explored by our cat

Garry Gay
(0,0,4) = 4 pts


Sixteenth Place — 3 Points
moving van rumbles by
homeless man reciting Santoka
to his shadow

Kurt R. Westley
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

clouds moving
across the murky sky . . .
lofty raindrops

Keith A. Simmonds
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

moving day
the husband's back
suddenly bad again

Bill Hudson
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

drained marsh lands
a red-winged black bird sings
on the last bullrush

Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

hammering the old sign
into the new door —
she hears her own heartbeat

Alegria
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

closing the summer house —
a chevron of wild geese
heads southward

Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

nursing home
moving in
closer to the end

Stevie Strang
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

moving out . . .
under the porch
a rotting pear

Marili Deandrea
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

I like this because it makes me think of what little we leave behind. This feels as though the owner took everything of value and left only a few unwanted memories.

Dorm room —
the pupa spins
its chrysalis.

R. Joyce Heon
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


Seventeenth Place — 2 Points
moving day
all boxed up
a break from dusting

Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

having no chair
having no table
the sand toad's new digs

Michael McClintock
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

all the rooms empty —
dusk everywhere

C.P. Harrison
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

New home beckons
She removes the plaque
From the cat's grave

Mary E. Gray
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

packing up
my convent trunk
all I have inside

Donna Bauerly
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

moving on
my pick up's packed full
of memories

Amicus
(0,0,2) = 2 pts


Eighteenth Place — 1 Point
moving . . .
our last view
of the family homestead

Michael Dylan Welch

Moving her body
strategy along the beech,
a hawk gliding by.

Horst Ludwig

leash in the grass
overgrown dog dish
 —house up for sale

if

Ireland's emerald hills
fade and fall into the sea.
All my world is blue.

Robert Charles Howard

mountain view
my son's new apartment
down the hallway

andrea

Moving a horse,
then the bishop of white . . .
checkmate!

Vasile Moldovan

moving day
the dog's ears twitching behind
closed car window

gillena cox

single dust bunny
marks the spot of her first steps. . .
we must go now, babe

Nick Petrone

moving day;
in the wall where the photo hung-
a broken cobweb swaying.

manoj saranathan

Even though I think the middle line is too long, there's something about the swaying cobweb that says 'home' and, to me, illustrates the nostalgia of moving.

moving in
the smell of
memories

Rita Odeh

still in that box
her old love letters
after fifty years

Barbara A Taylor

moving in
the heat of the
lava lamp

Anonymous

moving between
the fingers of a toddler
the monsoon rain

R.K. Singh

heat wave —
even the grasshoppers
aren't moving

Shelley Krause

moving day —
wondering what memory
we left behind

Mike Montreuil

the drunken coachman
let his horse
take him home

MoT


No points this time, sorry.
her late mother’s train
still stopping traffic
breathtaking speed

Anonymous

rental truck floor
in the attic mirror
the august moon

martin

baby robins
moving out of mama's nest
blue shells left behind

Tom Conally

noise of frogs —
only lilies stop me
to move

Alex Serban

rain
the road so narrow-gauge
earthworms

svein lie

shabby furniture
hoisted high, caressed
by a row of sunflowers

Sheila K. Barksdale

Summer afternoon —
moth flying
wake up the cat

Petru Ioan Garda

locks changed . . .
stuff inappropriately
strewn on porch

eric

dancer moving
just ahead of the music
her eyes focus on us

Miriam Borne

approaching rain —
the haycocks colonized
an old barn

Juhani Tikkanen

Swiftly moving
the plastic bag rises
to greet a new journey

Jenn McSweeney

moving . . .
river, the same
way

og_a

moving —
his neighbors' eyes
dripping with tears

Old Grayhouse

moving day
my memories
in the carton boxes

Jacek M.

after U-Haul trip —
one dead moth
and spilt paint

Marshall Bood

moving . . .
a third of my possessions
go into the dumpster

Anonymous

a moving van
at another neighbor's gate —
credit crunch saga

natalia Kuznetsova

House for sale,
flowers in the windows —
moving van.

Trevor Camp

yard sale to sell
his things that won't fit in her
new singles town house

gourdman

moving in —
hunting mothes
through memories

kaiser

first grandchild expected
at their new house I unpack
his tiny clothes

Elaine Riddell

bright sunday morning
a snail starts moving along
the scaffolding pole

Boris Nazansky

corporate troubleshooter
he explains to his young son
he too is the "new kid"

Edward

out of body
in slow motion
was it only a moment?

Judi Honiker

moving van . . .
so many monarchs
lost on the long way home

Bill Pauly

in the cardboard smell —
songs of them there
pines

Jon Espen Vassbotn

star gazing . . .
maybe they
will come to us

Francine Banwarth

new paint
new bedroom
the same bed

DeVar

from one city to the other
moving luggage is a hard task
quite an unhappy experience

Purush

titmouse cavorting
from a branch to another branch —
summer supper

Miorita

A callused hand
moving strokes a cheek
Awake from the solace of dreams

Christine Howard


General Comments:

There are so many wonderful submissions, I wanted to vote for more than the above!

Again, so many lovely haiku and deeply “moving” in all ways.

I am always attracted to those haiku which leave something unresolved, and so let the reader create her/his own story.

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