Congratulations to Scott Metz, the winner of our Kigo section, and to Kathy Lippard Cobb, the winner of our Free Format section!
May 2006 Results
Kigo Theme:
Long Day
First Place -- 26 pts
long day—
she washes tomorrow's rice
in the dark
Scott Metz
(2,6,8) = 26 pts
Second Place -- 19 pts
long day
the dog's chain wrapped
around the tree
Earl Keener
(0,4,11) = 19 pts
Third Place -- 16 pts
long day—
grandma takes
a second nap
Zhanna P. Rader
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
Fourth Place -- 15 pts
long day—
the snake curled
in a rooster's shadow
dustin neal
(1,3,6) = 15 pts
a long day
the spider's web
begins to sag
doris kasson
(0,2,11) = 15 pts
Fifth Place -- 14 pts
his last shingle covers
a spot of moonlight...
the long day
ed markowski
(1,3,5) = 14 pts
Comment: wish I had more points to give to this one. It is totally excellent! Perfect ah-ha moment
Sixth Place -- 12 pts
the long day
in the widow's eyes
longer still
Darrell Lindsey
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
Seventh Place -- 11 pts
long day
the lover's share a pull
of saltwater taffy
Tom Painting
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
Eighth Place -- 10 pts
long day—
the night cricket
on all channels
Lorin
(1,3,1) = 10 pts
another long day
only the coolness of
a snail track
angelee deodhar
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
Ninth Place -- 9 pts
long day
the edge of the road
blurred by rain
Laryalee Fraser
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
long day . . .
my neighbor's off-key song
crystal clear
Kala Ramesh
(1,0,6) = 9 pts
a long day—
still I dream
of more light
Linda Marucci
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
long day...
dragging the lawn chair
to the last bit of sun
Paul R
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
Tenth Place -- 8 pts
long day
counting pearls
on her string
Denise Lizarraga
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
after a long day
coming out of the subway
the scent of lilacs
Kate Creighton
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
long day
cabbage butterflies
in pairs
susan delphine delaney
(1,0,5) = 8 pts
after the long day
crumpled wedding dress
lies on the floor
Maria Kowal
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
long day
the milk bottle
sweats
Allan Burns
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
long day
summer flowers all over
her dress
max verhart
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
Eleventh Place -- 7 pts
long day
grape tendrils reach
and curl
Mark Hollingsworth
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
long day
the road goes on
and on
Grzegorz Sionkowski
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
long day
shadows fade
into twilight
Bill Kenney
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
long day
the first lawnmower
at dawn
-- ushi
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
long day
swallows inspect
their old nest
lucindab
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
long day ...
shadows stretch
to touch the dusk
shanna
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
broken mower
a long day
gets shorter
Dave Bacharach
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
the long day
two gardeners chatting
over the fence
Ruth Franke
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
long day—
a melted popsicle
on the sidewalk
Israel López Balan
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
Twelfth Place -- 6 pts
longest day—
the faded blinds
of the old people's home
Paul Hodder
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
one hatched egg
a long day
begins
smzang
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
long day—
the sun goes to bed
after I do
Vaughn Seward
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
Thirteenth Place -- 5 pts
long day—
happy to see my old friends,
the earthworms
--Irene Golas
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
long day
the first kick
of the evening drink
RaV
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
stick by stick
the house sparrows knit
the minutes of the long day
Suzume Shi
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
long day . . .
the sun dips
into the sea
Kathy Lippard Cobb
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
a long day —
from eaves to the ground
spider's thread
---Derwisz
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
long day —
the snail finally reaches
an iris bloom
Warren Gossett
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
the long day
our house finch
sings an encore
Barbara Campitelli
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
long day—
the night air smells
of skunk
Paul Hunter
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
long day
her lilac skirt falls
over hot stone
j blain
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
long day
poplar seeds drift past
the office window
polona o.
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
Fourteenth Place -- 4 pts
long day . . .
frustration wrinkles
across his forehead
Marie Summers
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
a long day...
in the rubbish heap
her ginger braid
---baldhead
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
a long rainy day—
petals of our cherry
blossom in the grass
D.V.Rozic
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
a long day
two small morels
sizzle in butter
Edward
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
long rainy day —
a snail reaches the tip
of the iris leaf
Origa
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
Fifteenth Place -- 3 pts
spring wedding
a cold, gray drizzle
makes for a long day
soji
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
above the road
a raven plays the thermal
end to a long day
Chandra Bales
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
waiting...
my friend will die
...the longest day
Rose Marie Stutts, EdD
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
long day
the ball a bit bigger
than the sun
Petar Tchouhov
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
long day
the Narwhal swims
belly up
martin
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
long day
flashes of sunlight
on a cyclist's shorts
Mary Stevens
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
long day —
a bee lingers near
the apple blossoms
Bruce Feingold
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
Comments:
"Just thought I'd say that this was the best bunch of kigo haiku I've seen from the list in a long time. Hard to vote!"
"It was really difficult this month, lots of wonderful haikus (and at times, a decidedly western take on the kigo "long day"). It took some time to pare my choices down ..."
"Thanks guys, a very interesting mixture of ideas..."
"Thanks. This kigo produced a lot of good poems."
"tough choices as always"
"All of these are great ..."
Free Format Theme:
Bucket or Pail
First Place -- 29 pts
sand pail . . .
the toddler scoops the sea
with a teaspoon
Kathy Lippard Cobb
(3,4,12) = 29 pts
Second Place -- 25 pts
day's end
a bunch of daisies
in his bait pail
Tom Painting
(0,7,11) = 25 pts
Third Place -- 23 pts
temple gate —
a blind beggar’s pail fills
with blossoms
Kala Ramesh
(1,6,8) = 23 pts
Fourth Place -- 21 pts
old pea field —
the rusted bucket full
of grandpa's shadow
dustin neal
(0,7,7) = 21 pts
Fifth Place -- 18 pts
sheet lightning
the upside down bucket
starts drumming
RaV
(1,4,7) = 18 pts
"Very best of the bucket turned musical instrument ku, show don't tell"
Sixth Place -- 17 pts
an empty pail
I too
am lonely
smzang
(0,4,9) = 17 pts
old bucket
new
mosquitoes
William M. Gottlieb
(0,4,9) = 17 pts
"Wonderful... gets the point across! Awesome!"
Seventh Place -- 16 pts
carwash —
a butterfly circles
the yellow pail
Israel López Balan
(0,3,10) = 16 pts
"Good example of show, don't tell. Butterfly looking for water."
Eighth Place -- 13 pts
Hong Kong market —
the scraping of crab claws
in the pail
Beverley George
(1,3,4) = 13 pts
adobe bucket
mosquitoes rise
out of the sun
martin
(1,1,8) = 13 pts
Ninth Place -- 12 pts
new moon
the old pail
empty
Petar Tchouhov
(1,1,7) = 12 pts
Tenth Place -- 10 pts
after the vet's
squeaky toys silent
in the red pail
roberta beary
(2,0,4) = 10 pts
"...sad, but well written"
hard rain
tadpoles in the pail
grow legs
Melanie Alberts
(1,0,7) = 10 pts
night rain
the waning moon slips
into the bucket
polona o.
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
window cleaning
the bucket lands
before I do
-- lucindab
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
"cute and funny"
Eleventh Place -- 9 pts
corner florist —
last lily in his pail
sold for a kiss
~Devika
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
murky day —
the garden bucket
upside down
Origa
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
Twelfth Place -- 8 pts
home from vacation
the ocean's smell clings
to the toy pail
Agnes Eva Savich
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
two earthworms
in the compost bucket —
moving day
--Irene Golas
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
"Delightful! Reader gets put into the composter's position of seeing the earthworm's as having a forced moving day."
late afternoon —
a hungry cat circles
my fishing pail
Tristan Coleridge
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
Thirteenth Place -- 6 pts
end of day
pink sand pail
floating in the tide pool
Denise Lizarraga
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
enchanting
the moon tonight quietly rests
in my pail
john tiong chunghoo
(0,3,0) = 6 pts
dinner in a bucket . . .
preferring breasts
over legs and thighs
Marie Summers
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
stopping to rest —
clouds settle
in the water pail
Paul Hodder
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
old wishing well —
an echo as the wooden pail
strikes deep water
Nancy Smith
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
Fourteenth Place -- 5 pts
cat tails following
the milk bucket
trail of anticipation
shanna
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
grandpa's farm
the first pail of milk
filled before sunrise
soji
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
fresh paint
a bucket of daisies
by the hearth
-Deborah P Kolodji
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
patchy grass
under the rain gutter
a dusty bucket
doris kasson
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
family picnic —
a pailful of melons
cools in the stream
angelee deodhar
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
Fifteenth Place -- 4 pts
bathing with a bucket
and a cup —
leader of the coup
citygirl
(1,0.1) = 4 pts
"Absolutely fantastic. Definitely a "show don't tell", and concise! How the mighty have fallen! I can't say enough good things about this one."
first light
a loaf of snow
in the garden trug
susan delphine delaney
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
the bucket hits
against the well wall —
scattered stars
Tom
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
dented pail
still causing ripples
in the well
max verhart
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
Sixteenth Place -- 3 pts
little sand pail shako
pretend trumpet... marching
I watch her not the band
Rose Marie Stutts, EdD
(1,0,0,) = 3 pts
fishing boats climb waves
deck hands bend over tin buckets
clouds wear black robes
Carole A. Borges
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
the gardener holds
a pail of tadpoles
April clouds
Bruce Ross
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
beside his shoes
a bucket of green frogs
seeking shade
Chandra Bales
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
vernal equinox
the rust-eaten bucket
half full of water
-- Derwisz
((0,1,1) = 3 pts
phone call —
my grandson finds
the paint bucket
Laryalee Fraser
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
roadside fruit stand —
buckets of peaches stop
passing motorists
Zhanna P. Rader
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
home from the picnic
with empty pails
and blueberry smiles
Paul R
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
"Says it all. Best of the berry picking haiku."
a frog inhabits
the waterspout bucket —
spring rain
Warren Gossett
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
summer night
the Moon hiding the stars
in a bucket of water
Zeljka Vucinic-Jambresic
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
three day rain
the ash bucket
overflowing
Rap
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
grandpa’s house —
standing on a pail
to reach a water glass
aom (tim)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
Comments:
"...a lot of smiles in the free format section.... I think we'll have chicken and beer for dinner tonight!"
"...this excellent batch of poems!"
"Another good subject."