April 2015 Kukai

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SLEEPING LATE

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First Place -   37 Points

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sleeping late . . .

all the morning glories

curled up

Tomislav Maretic

(3,10,8) = 37 pts

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Second Place -  24 Points

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sleeping late

the crocus drift

in and out of snow

Michele L. Harvey

USA

(1,7,7) = 24 pts

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Third Place -  19 Points

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sleeping late--

holding on

to holding you

aom (tim)

(0,4,11) = 19 pts

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17 Points 

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my leg

under his

sleeping late

Priscilla Cook

(0,4,9) = 17 pts

**I'm not sure how erotic this is, and that seems about right.

**gently erotic in only 8 syllables

**The "connection" here is beautifully made. 

sunday noon . . . 

the curve of her body

nestled in mine

Paresh Tiwari

India

(0,4,9) = 17 pts

**I'm not sure they have been sleeping, and I'm not sure I'm supposed to be. An effective teaser; the effectiveness is due in part to the uncertain relation of the ku to the assigned topic.

**another gently erotic haiku

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16 Points 

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sleeping late

another crack from

the woodstove

oga

(0,2,12) = 16 pts

**That "crack" is perfectly placed both for its sound value and for its range of connotations.

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14 Points 

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sleeping late -

the tulips

this year

John McDonald

Edinburgh Scotland

(0,3,8) = 14 pts

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13 Points 

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waking late

I try on different excuses

for size

Paul Hodder

(1,1,8) = 13 pts

rush hour...

the old bag lady

still on her bench

S.E. Buffington

(0,3,7) = 13 pts

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12 Points 

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sleeping late

. . . the last nightjar

before dawn

Samar Ghose

Australia

(1,3,3) = 12 pts

overslept—

the empty taste

of instant

Roberta Beary

(1,0,9) = 12 pts

new puppy

I pay the price

for sleeping late

Edward

(0,4,4) = 12 pts

sleeping late

the gentle rock

of the boat

Bernard Gieske

(0,2,8) = 12 pts

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11 Points 

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sleeping late...

again I try to conjure up

her face

Gautam Nadkarni

(1,2,4) = 11 pts

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10 Points 

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another dream

about getting up

I roll over

Gabriel Sawicki

(1,1,5) = 10 pts

retirement...

the still moth clings

to the curtain

Earl Keener

(0,3,4) = 10 pts

**Whatever works. Keep modifiers to a minimum, but here it's the adjective "still" that makes this one stand out. (Not sure, though, if this fits under the "sleeping late" rubric.)

midlife crisis

still I dream

of missing

the school bus

Stevie Strang

(0,3,4) = 10 pts

sleeping in--

the shadow of the aspen

is short

James Dobson

Prudhoe, UK.

(0,1,8) = 10 pts

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8 Points 

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she tells me I missed

a beautiful sunset

black no sugar

Bill Kenney

(1,1,3) = 8 pts

sleeping late

our teen makes

a day of it

Tom P{ainting

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

April snow . . .

the mausoleum cat

sleeps in

Michael McClintock

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

Saturday sleep-in

the crows at dawn

have their own agenda

Adelaide B. Shaw

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

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7 Points 

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waking up to the stars at noon.

dsnake1

(1,2,0) = 7 pts

sleeping late

the warmth of the back pew

in a blizzard

Ignatius Fay

(1,0,4) = 7 pts

to stay or to leave…

on the lilac blossoms 

sleepy butterfly

Steliana Cristina Voicu

(Ploiesti, Romania)

(1,0,4) = 7 pts

warmness 

curls under my covers ...

sleeping late

Ramesh Anand

Bangalore, India

(0,3,1) = 7 pts

**This keeps you guessing? Who or what is providing the warmness: lover, child, dog, cat? Each gives a different picture, but all are of comfort.

sleeping late 

the size of a marble

in her left breast

Cezar C.

(0,0,7) = 7 pts

**Line 1 acquires depths as the ku unfolds. I wonder if third person is the best choice for this one.

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6 Points 

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without the spring rains

the sleeping forsythia

refuses to wake

todd eddy

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

sleeping late -

lying at my feet

the sky after rain

Ana Drobot

Bucharest, Romania

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

comfort under down . . .

have I slept through

the coming of the geese?

Bill Pauly

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

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5 Points 

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an old fisherman

sleeps late in his hammock

catch of the day

Garry Eaton

(1,1,0) = 5 pts

Mother's Day -

waking up for the lunch

my sweeties cooked.

Zhanna P. Rader.

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

newlyweds no reason to get up

John Soules

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

sleeping late

who could mind

the spring rain

Beth Powell

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

Spring snow storm

the cat curls deeper

into her pillow

Bill Hudson

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

a rare day off

the cats and I...

go back to sleep

Rose Marie Stutts, EdD

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

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4 Points 

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sleeping late

I urge the old bitch

out the door

--Kirsty Karkow

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

**This one socked me in the eye! 

spring sleeps late ~

everywhere things waiting

to awaken

Gerry Bravi

(Canada)

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

sunrise . . .

how many more dare I

sleep through?

Carole MacRury

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

sleeping late--

bluejay in the hemlock

watching me

jill

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

late afternoon -- 

a young leaf 

turning upright

juhani tikkanen

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

slowly waking up

in geography class

how did I get here?

Anne Zooey Lind

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

my new alarm clock -

on Sunday morning

meowing cat

Marta Chocilowska

Warsaw (Poland)

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

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3 Points 

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sleeping late,

jays wake me—

get to work, get to work, get to work…

Bill Gottlieb

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

the virgin moon wakes

time to share a single kiss

with her sun lover

Nancy Smith

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

sleeping in -

the dream that I am awakened

in a dream

Angèle Lux

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

end of a long dream --

still I hear the sound

of her anklets

Kumarendra Mallick

Hyderabad India

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

sleeping late

the beer's got

stale too

Oddbjørn Aardalen

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

late morning

i awake long enough

to fluff the pillow

RD McManes

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

spring forward…

ignoring the alarm

i fall backwards

D W Skrivseth

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

sleeping in--

the cat sits on my hair

and that's that

Barbara Snow

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

nothing to say -

even the crickets

keep silence

Israel Lopez Balan

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

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2 Points 

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intercepting 

the early cuckoo's call - light 

from my fifth floor flat

Ajaya Mahala 

Pune, India

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

sleeping late

until the aroma

of breakfast cooking

Barbara Campitelli

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

running for the bus

cursing

the snooze fairy

Jon Espen Vassbotn

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

missed! bird chorus

coffee, eggs frying, toast

east window sun

Doris

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

my dog whines

on your pillow 

noon sun

Ralf Bröker

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**The dog makes an effective go-between in formal as well as thematic terms,

my long peaceful nights

yet email and household dust

never need to rest

Anonymous

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

on door hinges

the night floating back…

Saturday morning

Alegria

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

sleepless night--

all those afterthoughts

and the ones before

Arvinder Kaur

Chandigarh, India.

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

the clock's buzz

a part of my dream

late for work

Diane Mayr

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

oversleeping

my alarm clock

spring birdsong

Anonymous

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

late night

the watchman taps away

into my sleep

Jayashree Maniyil

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

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One Point

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dreams

blackbird singing

dreams

Anonymous

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

surrounded by love

cat and dog on either side

I go back to sleep

Deirdre Godwin

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

moanful church bell...

I know that mom just pretends

sleeping late

Lavana kray

Romania

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

heavy showers

in the long winter morn

sleeping late

Keith A. Simmonds

Rodez, France

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

dog's bark

why does he not

sleep late?

Meredith Cavalieri

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

sleeping late-

the breeze blows in the window

to wake up me 

Vasile Moldovan

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

waking up late

full of good intentions -

retirement

Natalia Kuznetsova

Moscow, Russia

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

tough winter

even my plants

are sleeping late

Donna Bauerly

Dubuque, IA

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

sleeping late…

from crescent to new

the cat

Svend A. Doggfall

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

sleeping late

then the cry

of the village loon

Carol Raisfeld

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

everyone slept in

why not corn flakes

and chocolate milk

DeVar

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

one eye open

distant church bells toll

day of rest

Anonymous

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

i win and loose

when i snooze late

in your arms

Eric P

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

full moon rhythm

joining the pulse beat-

spring night

Tuvshinzaya Nergui

Tsetserleg, Mongolia

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

the alarm clock

from my Secret Santa

hitting snooze

--Peter Newton

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

sleeping late-

summer honeymooners

missed the flight

Munia Khan

Dhaka, Bangladesh

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

spring snows

silence - the art

of sleeping in

Jane DeJonghe

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

breakfast in bed--

pancakes and

a full moon

Anonymous

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

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No Points This Time, Sorry. 

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You can make your bed

spread-eagled under covers.

Get up lazy bones!

Robert C. Howard

the most pleasant thing 

observed in one's retirement

is just sleeping late

Tom Conally

Gibsonville, NC

Some like to sleep late.

If you like to rise early,

they sure don't like you.

Horst Ludwig

sleeping late -

baby dove wobbles its wings 

with excitement

Rita Odeh

Haifa / Israel

 sleeping late -

perspiration soaks

my nightgown

Anonymous

tea in a coffee cup

long after roosters songs -

the mail box cleared

gillena cox

St James, Trinidad and Tobago

morning dream

missed dawn etching silhouettes

on the horizon

Binnoo

India

fighting spring sleepiness –

old dog, young cat and myself

have to change seasons

Daniela Bullas

Spring holidays...

after miles on the track

a long lie in

Barbara A. Taylor

sleeping too long -

she's suddenly awake now

in the cold shower

Miriam Borne

edging closer

when the old tomcat sleeps late

sparrows fill the yard

Harvey Jenkins

through the blinds,

Soft light on my opening eyes -

Cuckoo clock rings, its 10:00

Arie Regev

 morning light::

she left the door open

for the dog

Darrell Byrd

no smell of breakfast

the dog complains

tried to sleep in

Mark A. Fisher

curtain tops show day

but warm quilt induces

more snuggling to sleep

Frances O'Keeffe

sleeping late

rap-a-tap my keyboard awaken

the million stars

Ken Sawitri

(Jakarta, Indonesia)

dozens of thoughts

hover about snails –

sleeping late

Miorita

out of bed

the sun has gone up

spring morning

Yukiko Yamada

old bear dreams on—

den warmed by snow blanket

long since gone

Jim Thoune

Bowling Green, KY USA

all night vigil

waiting on the all-clear

the sun wakes me at noon

Brenda Roberts

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General Comments:

**I had a tough time with this category....to be fair, gave each of my favorites one vote.

**There were a lot of good ones this time, so I had to spread my 6 votes amongst them all.

**Slept late this morning. An omen?

**Not much from which to choose this time ...

**I will you all many spring dreams and enough sleeping late! 

**An ironic theme, indeed, for an insomniac. Ah, well . . .

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General Comments:

**The phrase "spring dreams," which many haiku had, seems like a title if used as L1; if used as L3 it was like an explanation. I preferred those haiku which made me think of spring dreams without being told.

**Tough! I wish that I had more votes to play with this time.

**Thanks again for this invitation to participate, read and vote on some very good haiku!

**Haiku - a spring moment!

**my votes... or it was a dream?

**Many "moons" to gaze at! Excellent entries.