The Shiki Monthly Kukai
November 2015 Kukai
Dear Friends,
Here are the results for the November 2015 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was BIRD (In memory of Gene Murtha), and our Free Format subject was EVENING WINDOW.
Congratulations to ***Archana Kapoor Nagpal***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Hansha Teki & Israel López Balan***, winners of our Free Format section!
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The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.
Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.
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In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.
(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.
VOTERS' comments are indicated by "**"
POETS' comments are indicated by "^^"
Kigo Theme:
BIRD
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First Place - 26 Points
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rain ends...
sipping the rainbow
a sparrow
(Archana Kapoor Nagpal
Bangalore, India)
(1,7,9) = 26 pts
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Second Place - 23 Points
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a shot somewhere
the twilight breaks up
into crows
Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy
Birmingham UK
(2,4,9) = 23 pts
**…a great concept. Wish I had more points to give it.
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Third Place - 22 Points
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as if
he's lost something
egret in the reeds
Paul Hodder
(2,3,10) = 22 pts
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21 Points
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before
and after the gong
birdsong
Mary Stevens
(1,7,4) = 21 pts
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20 Points
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gull crying the length of sadness
Marion Clarke
Warrenpoint, Northern Ireland
(1,2,13) = 20 pts
^^I very much admired Gene's work.
**Nice, but I would have preferred having an 'a' at the start
**The ending manages to be both surprising and, somehow, inevitable.
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18 Points
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his parrot
still says
i love you stella
quamrul hassan (dhaka, bangladesh)
(0,5,8) = 18 pts
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16 Points
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day of the dead -
a tree without leaves
full of birds
Israel López Balan
Mexico City, Mexico
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
crimson sunset
pelican silhouettes
drift into the night
Simon Hanson
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
windswept
the jumbled notes
of snow buntings
Tom Painting
(0,4,8) = 16 pts
**"jumbled" in the wind and (implied) snow sounds just right.
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15 Points
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after the elm tree
was cut down
...silence
Sondra J. Byrnes
(0,5,5) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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migrating swallows
the pull of home
from both directions
Terri L. French, US
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
a mallard paddles
into it
autumn mist
Scott Mason
(0,2,10) = 14 pts
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12 Points
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afternoon tea
the crow dodges
a croquet ball
Kirsty Karkow
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
**Truly the observation of a moment -- I can see the scene so clearly!
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11 Points
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finally seeing
how it’s done...
swallows’ nest
Jo McInerney
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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abandoned house
a swallow building
a nest
Diana Petkova
Bulgaria
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
**Beautifully understated, this covers a wide range of experience and feelings.
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9 Points
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morning rainbow
a peacock
struts his stuff
Edward
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
who can say
what is true love —
thornbird
Vinay Leo R.
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
an eastern bluebird
on the rusted fence…
autumn deepens
--Tzetzka Ilieva
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
equinox
the robin tugs
an earthworm
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
**I love the equinoctial (?) struggle. I'm rooting for the worm.
a koel's song
fills the crib--
stillbirth
Yesha Shah
Surat, India
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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a thousand cranes
sway above the heating vent
her hospital room
David C. Kopaska-Merkel
Tuscaloosa, AL
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
now birds
are changing the colors
of the trees
Andrei C. Szava
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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returning robins
all the dreams carried
in their feathers
Jane Reichhold
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
^^(In November and December robins arrive in California, leaving the colder places)
^^I sent this in honor of Gene.
He always dreamed of making a bird book.
morning in the garden...
playing my flute --
a mocking bird returns the song
rose marie Stutts
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
snowflake lilies...
a black swan
takes off
Leanne Mumford
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
last flutter . . .
the fledgling still
in my palm
Kala Ramesh
Pune, India
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
^^In memory of the child Gene lost
almost dusk —
a redbird’s song wraps
around itself
Paresh
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
glassy lake surface
a swan's wake
halves the mountain
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
little shore birds
chasing the waves out
waves chasing them in
Bill Hudson
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
**Lovely observation and a beautiful scene.
autumn shadows
a cloud of crows bursts out
of the old elm
Tore Sverredal
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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time does fly
lawn flamingos already
in Santa coats
maxianne
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
**A little early but very seasonal ;)
hush now, little bird —
we two are in no hurry
for this night to end
Shelley Krause
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
light flurries …
snow buntings settle
on the spruce
Ruth Powell
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
the trail he left
unfolds with every branch…
a robin’s song
Mary Davila
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
saving daylight
the rooster
over sleeps
Nancy Smith
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
flying cranes -
the months I wait
for their return
Ana Drobot
(Bucharest, Romania)
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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season change waiting for a junco
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
^^Note: the junco is a dark gray bird with a white underbelly--very distinctive movements and the first bird of winter's arrival in our part of the USA. Sometimes call the "Dominican" bird because those monks wear a habit of gray/black and white.
mid-November
the urgency in her voice
in the geese
--Diane Mayr
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
that strange awareness
of the first day
without swallows
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
languid lagoon-
a streak of kingfisher blue
in my daydreams
Vidya S Venkatramani, Chennai, Tamil Nadu, INDIA
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
smearing the sunset a deluge of muttonbirds
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
morning Mass -
from the cloister
a pigeon's responses
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
autumn chores
a crow watching
our every move
Beth Powell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
letter home -
a winter goldfinch
at the feeder
Laurene
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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bird
I ask you who could make
that up
Garry Eaton
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
synchronized
headstanding on the lake
two wild ducks
Yukiko Yamada
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
filling the bowl
for the red-breasted nuthatch
her constant chatter
Chandra Bales
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
crow
alone now
birch
oga
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
a line of geese
white ribbon
I tie letters with
Dorota Ocińska
( Polska)
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
turning leaves
under the beech a chaffinch
turning leaves
polona
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
november magpies
make no sound--
cattails in the ice
DeVar
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
into the sunset a red cardinal sings
Bernard Gieske
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
bare tree against morning sky
all the birds
are black
deanna tiefenthal
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
taking a bough
on the evergreen...
cardinals
S.E. Buffington
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
a desert wren
in a spot of shade . . .
the enormous sky
Michael McClintock
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
snow on roof—
a seagull slithers
into flight
Gael Bage
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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autumn love...
a thrushsong lipping
the moon
Anonymous
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
Malava Forest --
a red-headed woodpecker
balances on a twig
~ Antony Waswa
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
the carrion
of my darkest dream
picked at by a crow
Alan S. Bridges
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
spring cleaning
twisted spider legs dangle
from sparrow's beak
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
** maybe if there was an article before "sparrow's"
below the half moon, a baby bird
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
eyes meeting
a cardinal tips his head
to the poet
Carol Raisfeld
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
new housing
wild pigeons self-allot
the tenements
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first day of autumn
the bird feeder
missing the robin
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**Here is my kigo entry in memory of Gene.
flags at half mast -
the starlings scribble
a farewell
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh, India.
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
they have gone,
to bring back the spring-
migratory birds
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg, Mongolia
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
cloudless dawn –
the blackbird waiting
at a tree's top
Miorita
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
piled leaves
a sparrow-shaped vacancy
at the bird feeder
Ignatius Fay
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
almost dark
from somewhere in the thicket
a few simple notes
Gerry B.
(Canada)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
cemetery quiet
a robin
stops to listen
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
All Souls’ Day
up above father’s grave
the cries of wild geese
Eleonore Nickolay
(France)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
first frost—
where is the songbird
of yesterday?
Carole MacRury
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
a forest walk -
woodpecker's drum now
from other place
Tomislav
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
two doves balance
on an electric wire --
cold morning
~ Antony Joseph
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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Winter...
again the curlew
with it's lonesome cry
John Byrne
Ireland
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
silent noon
the cuckoo's song echoes
from my daughter's room
Shalini Sunkuru
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
oh nightingale!
hidden in the darkness whom
do you sing?
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad India
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
jagged sunlight
between high rise units
cry of a currawong
Dawn Bruce
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
ferment
in the Concords
tipsy robins
Barbara Snow
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
an early frost...
the red ribbon of a cardinal
into the horizon
Rebecca Drouilhet
Picayune, Mississippi
USA
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
an owl hooting -
above the smooth sea
the fleece of stars
(Ramona)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
soft feathers
cannot make
a cruel bird kind
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
audacious starling
lands on the hood of my car
demanding French fries
Deirdre Godwin
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
hollyhock skeleton trembles:
ghost of a hummingbird visits
ghost of a flower
F.J. Bergmann
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
November bird walk --
the guessing complexities
of who would be me
Ernesto P. Santiago
Athens, Greece
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
late fall
crisp echo
of robin song
Paul Rainville
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
birdbath
a sparrow pecking
a bit of corn moon
Kaiser K.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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waterless birdbath
on his usual visit
a robin
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
bird call
in melodious tune
morning sickness
purush-nolensvilleTN
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
larger than his host
the Storm Bird chick
demands more food
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
^^Refers to Koel or Channel-Billed Cuckoo.
sunlight on new snow
crows shoulder their way
through winter’s chill
Harvey Jenkins
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
lost
while pilfering
such blue feathers
jill
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
canada geese
over the parking lot
drilling in formation
- ru, canada
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
flight of crows --
an Advent landscape
in black-and-white
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
A sack of black oil seed
and a brick of suet
time to feed my dinosaurs
Robert C.Howard
Belleville IL
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
red-winged blackbird
atop metal sculpture --
art in the park
Jane DeJonghe
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
two white egrets
pick ticks from a grazing cow --
Maasai herd
~ Arnold Echenje
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**i love the first two lines and with a minor tweak this would be a winner. if only L3 contained a juxtaposed image rather than an explanation of the previous lines (at least as i read it)!
in the tree
in the air
37 turkey vultures
David Watson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
rooster’s approaching –
hens in the yard
stopped scratching
Krzysztof Kokot
Poland
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
death notice . . .
a fantail flitting
between worlds
Hansha
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, But Thank
You So Much For Participating.
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autumn's end
among the birds at the feeder
a single nuthatch
sakyu
Blue rock thrush - merill
Nesting in the Maltese cliffs
Tweeting for a mate
Tanja Cilia
trodden path
scattered all along
my(na's) wings
Vandana Parashar
India
shimmering river -
two grebes in winter plumage
in the full moonlight
Daniela Bullas
Sunday in the park
the sparrow snatches a crumb
from a cardinal
Bill Kenney
A yellow bird
shimmers in the sunlight…
summer synergy
Keith SIMMONDS
Rodez, France
no tailgate in sight
yet trills of "Rocky Top" --
Tennessee mockingbird
mechaieh
garden sparrows
peck on frozen ice cream ...
morning delight
Anonymous
summer morning
my fickleness mixes
with the robin's song
Oddbjørn Aardalen
traveling on--
buzzard rumps 'round
a roadside carcass
Anonymous
^^Was schooled once by Gene about the difference between vultures and buzzards.
yawning owl perched on barn roof sinking into rising flood waters…
kw
dazed
in zipped air…
hummingbird and I
Alegria Imperial
November
The last hummingbird
gone.
John Hubbard
our chicken
attacks the injured raven—
wilting jonquil
Myron Lysenko
millet farm --
a quail path leads us
to its nest
~ Patrick Wafula (Kenya)
pair of crows
taunt the red-tailed hawk
neighborhood watch
Doris
Along the highway
fiery red the sumach,
shrill the birds above.
Horst Ludwig
first bird
the mangy one awaiting
last night's rice
Miriam Borne
NYC
crows pepper Fall skies
teals swim lines through Puget Sound
waters that won't ice
Sandy Friedlander
zen garden
getting closer to
golden-crowned sparrows
Bruce H. Feingold
Berkeley, CA
USA
calling flip
the lovebird flips ...
light rain
Ramesh Anand
snowbird
heading sunwards -
melting wings
Juhani Tikkanen
no bird
but in wings
carlos
Anonymous
morning chill
the rash of phone calls
about an eagle flown
Samar Ghose
Australia
^^My verse in honour of Gene:
birds crouch in nests
along the snow clad path--
wheezing silence
--R.K.Singh
a red cardinal
sparkling new snow
counterpoint
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
picnic with family -
a crow is smashing nut
on the mother in-law's head
Petru-Ioan Garda
beyond her song
the mockingbird
resembles me
Bill Pauly
sad hoots
from the bullfinch in our rowan
where have all the berries gone?
Anne Zooey Lind
the robin swells --
embers in the
winter fire
James Dobson
Prudhoe, UK.
thrush lullaby
zhweee, zhweee
spirals
Jone Rush MacCulloch
Portland, OR
Now leafless tree
A dozen silent nests
Hazel A. Witherspoon
choughs
thicken the blackbutt
approaching winter
Marietta Jane McGregor
Australia
is the cat
in love with the pigeon
this long gazing
Giselle Maya
France
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General Comments:
**Oh, so many good ones. Hard to narrow to 6 with only 1 point each.
**So many deserve to be cited!
**It was hard to choose 1–6 poems. I found 27 of them to be worthy of points!
**There were several more entries that would easily find a home in a haiku journal but finally my selection came down to these:
**Thanks again for this chance to read and vote on some excellent haiku.
** I enjoyed reading so many wonderful bird poems.
**So many wonderful verses here - people have really dug deep! In my choices, I have tried to keep both haiku aesthetics and sentiment in mind but hope to be forgiven for letting the latter rule my head a little in honour of Gene.
**This brought in many fine haiku -- and many birds I had never heard of! This kukai is very educational.
**Best ever entries! It was hard to leave so many good ones out, but I had no more points.
**The Kigo this time brought in some real good ones ! Enjoyed reading !
**This was an absolutely spectacular group of poems and a great joy to read! It was very hard to winnow down to a few winners. Congratulations to all the entrants!
** With so many fine poems, it was very hard to choose three.
**Thank you for… the opportunity. I enjoyed reading about all the birds.
**Wish I had thanked Gene for his kind words as well as his harsh criticisms...
**I'm sorry to learn of the death of Gene Murtha. A few years ago we collaborated on tan renga which were later published. He was only 60 years old.
** So sorry to learn of Gene's passing. He was an inspiration.
Free Format Theme:
EVENING WINDOW
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First Place - 33 Points
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the coolness of glass touching darkness
Hansha Teki
(5,6,6) = 33 pts
**A brilliant pivot on "touching," and a real sense of darkness.
**I didn’t give this one any points because I thought it needed a little more, but I liked where it was going.
And
art gallery -
the evening window
between two paintings
Israel López Balan
Mexico City, Mexico
(3,7,10) = 33 pts
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Second Place - 27 Points
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nightfall
the wind in the curtain
the curtain in the wind
Simon Hanson
(2,4,13) = 27 pts
**I like the fact this one succeeds without the word window.
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Third Place - 22 Points
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evening window
a slice of moon in
my bowl
Nana Fredua-Agyeman
(1,5,9) = 22 pts
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18 Points
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financial district
each sunset window
glittering gold
Michele L. Harvey
New York, USA
(1,3,9) = 18 pts
**Amusing, and very well spotted!
**excellent haiku!
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16 Points
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cold pane looking at me looking at me
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(2,1,8) = 16 pts
**The repetition captures the essence of the theme, and I love "cold."
end of autumn
evening gathers
at the window
Bill Kenney
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
vespers
a light
in one window
Mary Stevens
(0,4,8) = 16 pts
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14 Points
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hopscotch ...
the evening window
frames memories
Vinay Leo R.
(2,2,4) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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alone -
in the neighbours’ window
their sneering pumpkin
Eleonore Nickolay
(France)
(0,4,5) = 13 pts
**What a strong last line! And a great reference back to the first line. Very impressive.
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12 Points
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evening window
she watches his tractor
head for the barnyard
Barbara Snow
(2,1,4) = 12 pts
childhood home
the windows full
of twilight sky
polona
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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evening window -
grandpa swallows
the red pill
Petru-Ioan Garda
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
**Understanding this all too well...
moon
in my window
all the difference
jill
(1,1,6) = 11 pts
evening window -
the moon
caught in a web
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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evening window
Venus rising
out of the sea
Garry Eaton
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
evening window
trying on
the chemo wig
Kaiser K.
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
**Trying it on at the window, perhaps, which is then an "evening window" in more than one sense. It may interest the author to know that, as one who lost a wife to cancer, I find this convincing and moving.
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9 Points
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evening window
the widower's reflection
looks back in
Paul Hodder
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
through the hospice window a waning moon
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
looking out
at the early dark
i see only myself
- ru, canada
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
through my window
just the warmth I need...
half-a-cup of moon
Alegria Imperial
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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in failing light a red snowsuit wanders home ~ frost on a window
Gerry B.
(Canada)
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
evening window-
his silhouette surrenders
to her shadow
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
evening window
mother of my mother
in the reflection
Sondra J. Byrnes
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
Evening window…
the full moon settles
upon my pillow
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, France
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
evening walk—
imagining what lies behind
the unlit windows
Carole MacRury
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
the dark
in kitchen windows
soup steam
Ann K. Schwader
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
ceasefire -
her glance at the window
every now and then
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh, India
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
rain at my
evening window -
silence becomes dialogue
Andrei C. Szava
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
**lovely image
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7 Points
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sundown migraine
frantic buzz of a bee
between panes
Ignatius Fay
(2,0,1) = 7 pts
crimson and gold!
autumn's evening selfie
on our wall
Anne Zooey Lind
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
evening window -
father's gaunt face
behind the fog
(Ramona)
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
evening window
the scent of my neighbor's incense.
dsnake1
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
evening window
a conversation lights up
constellations
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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throwing pebbles
at the darkened window...
nobody appears
Tomislav
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
last light
a drop from the window
into darkness
Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
evening window--
the neighbor
keeps her clothes on
Tim Singleton
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
evening...
again we begin
to reflect
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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evening window...
staring at the black hole
he drinks his fifth beer
Edward
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
evening window
streaked with rain -
popcorn
Laurene
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
lace curtains
and fluttering moonbeams
their wedding night
maxianne
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
drawn curtains -
a stray dog wanders by
evening windows
Ruth Powell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
watching
the full moon ...
a snowman
Archana Kapoor Nagpal, Bangalore, India
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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walking the night . . .
in a window a family
seated for dinner
Michael McClintock
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
evening window -
in her black eyes
a few sparkles
Ana Drobot
Bucharest, Romania
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
too dark to see out,
we listen to the raindrops
sliding down the glass
Bridget Cougar
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
evening window -
a slightly darker secret
takes wing…
kw
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
golden sunset --
an old couple gazing
out their window
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
moonless night
a luna moth lights
on the window pane
Terri L. French
US
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
evening window -
reflecting on
another tv dinner
-Priscilla Cook
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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the heavens
in my evening window
I fall up into the stars
Carol Raisfeld
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
evening window
among white collar men
a pair of familiar eyes
Shalini Sunkuru
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
new snow falling
open evening window
childhood again
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
evening window -
her glowing face
as she draws the curtains
Jo McInerney
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
reflections
in the western window
the fleet returns
Nancy Smith
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
rouge sunset
through the window
the scent of solitude
Paresh
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
evening window
she draws the shade
before my eyes
Tom Painting
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
winter sunset
keeping the drapes open
until the sky goes black
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
evening fog
leaf after leaf brushes
the windowsill
Tore Sverredal
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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evening window
widow opening
her eyes
hawktalk
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
evening window
the male fireflies blink
to get a date?
Ernesto P. Santiago
Athens, Greece
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
dusk
her quilt work coloured by
a patchwork sky
Beth Powell
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
evening light ...
everything else escapes
this window
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
alone, at the window ...
colours twilit leaves lend
to airy nothing
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
falling on the floor
through evening window-
coins of sunlight
Vandana Parashar
India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
evening window
her silhouettes on the blinds
she said she wasn't home
Bill Hudson
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
late evening windows --
from the bus, watch them floating
rectangles of light
Sandy Friedlander
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
evening window—
what gets in,
what goes out
Bill Pauly
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
street lights,
the children have gone
evening window
Samar Ghose
Australia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
evening prayer --
her tender voice sets ripples
in every heart
Kumarendra Mallick Hyderabad, India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
evening window
a moon-shaped lamp
reflected
Giselle Maya
France
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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evening window
the moon sends
a greeting
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
lake sunset unexpected arrival of familiar silhouettes
Marion Clarke
Warrenpoint, Northern Ireland
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
a woman' s face
behind the dark window
pale moon above
Natalia Kuznetsova
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
orange hues
rinsed by raindrops ...
cruise window
Ramesh Anand
Bengaluru, India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
an old window frame -
in the glow of candlelight
two fragrant quinces
Daniela Bullas
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the evening lights through the forest, an express train
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
evening window
in apartments across the way
all the people watching screens
Miriam Borne
NYC
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Fall back.
Outside my window,
dusk settles early.
John Hubbard
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
fogged window
mother and child in silhouette
winter evening
Yukiko Yamada
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
ever-changing art --
sunset colours
framed by the window
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
through the window
evening shadows
in wind
Chandra Bales
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
from her bed
a wish
first evening star
Jone Rush MacCulloch
Portland, OR
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
a latticed sky
seeps into the sick room
fallen leaves
Anitha Varma,
Kerala, India.
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, But Thank
You So Much For Participating.
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evening window
all stars twinkle
in Suleyman's harem
Dorota Ocińska
( Polska)
by the old canal
fornicating shadows
in the window
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
^^Above is a memory from Amsterdam 1970.
Between roiling clouds
A glimpse
Of tomorrow's storm
Tanja Cilia
fall evening
man looking out
two women in
oga
rising moon
tarries awhile to peep
darkness of evening window
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
party or not -
a hesitant mosquito hovers near the widow
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
evening window
deer graze on edge
of the rose bush
Harvey Jenkins
smears of pigeon breath
blurring penthouse lights --
view from our room
mechaieh
my patient points
to a dusk pink rose ...
her dinner tray empty
Anonymous
her head held higher
woman in the hospice bed
watches stars appear
Deirdre Godwin
evening window
the november moon, longing for
a yellow ring
Oddbjørn Aardalen
jasmines in her braid
start to smell sweet
evening tickles
purush-nolensville
Tn[usa]
fresh ironed sheets--
hot chocolate mist
on the window pane
DeVar
daylight savings
my wrinkles reflected
in every pane
--Diane Mayr
window on the dark
kitchen reflection glowing
my shadow filled with stars
F.J. Bergmann
evening window
children playing hide & seek
I close the blind
Bernard Gieske
Through the storm windows
no more the Angelus bells
through early darkness
Horst Ludwig
warmly lighted
evening window -
cooling street
Juhani Tikkanen
Big Bend’s magic window
pastel strata
hold off the night.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
wintry wind
bangs the evening window
my thoughts agitate
--R.K.Singh
a moth and its cocoon
from my kitchen--
evening window
Alan S. Bridges
pink sun
sets
on distant peak
Jane DeJonghe
a flashing pink neon flamingo
mirrored
in the mortuary window
Jon Espen Vassbotn
sunset colors tint
the window panes--
crickets sing the evensong
rose marie Stutts
at window –
looking the colours
of the quince tree
Miorita
evening window --
reflections cover
the garden
James Dobson
Prudhoe, UK.
Shift break
Rabbit scoping my salad
During chat with friend
Hazel A. Witherspoon
every night
the periscopic sight
looks in on
1jungman
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General Comments:
**Reflections, all!
**Quite a number of interesting takes in this batch.
**I liked best the haiku that did not contain the words "evening window" as such, but which showed the reader both ideas, in their own words.
**I thought many of the haiku were forced in order to use this phrase. It's not an easy phrase to use in a haiku, and the image is not so easy to imply. This was a challenge.
**Hard to choose only 6. I even chuckled at a number of them (in both the Kigo and the Free Format sections)
**It was nice to read so many wonderful haiku. Thanks for a lovely topic.
**I felt this prompt was quite tough and felt it did not lend itself easily to write a haiku. The quality of submissions, IMHO, is not as fine as it generally is
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