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November 2015 Kukai

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November 2015 Kukai 

Dear Friends,

Here are the results for the November 2015 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was BIRD (In memory of Gene Murtha), and our Free Format subject was EVENING WINDOW
 
Congratulations to ***Archana Kapoor Nagpal***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Hansha Teki  &  Israel López Balan***, winners of our Free Format section!
 
 
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The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.
Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.
 
 
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In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.
(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.
 
VOTERS' comments are indicated by "**"
POETS' comments are indicated by "^^"
Kigo Theme: 
BIRD
 
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First Place -  26 Points
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rain ends...
sipping the rainbow 
a sparrow
 
(Archana Kapoor Nagpal
Bangalore, India)
(1,7,9) = 26 pts
 
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Second Place -  23 Points
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a shot somewhere
the twilight breaks up
into crows
 
Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy 
Birmingham UK
(2,4,9) = 23 pts
**…a great concept. Wish I had more points to give it.
 
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Third Place -  22 Points
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as if
he's lost something
egret in the reeds
 
Paul Hodder
(2,3,10) = 22 pts
 
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 21 Points 
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before
and after the gong
birdsong
 
Mary Stevens
(1,7,4) = 21 pts
  
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 20 Points 
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gull crying the length of sadness
 
Marion Clarke
Warrenpoint, Northern Ireland
(1,2,13) = 20 pts
^^I very much admired Gene's work.
**Nice, but I would have preferred having an 'a' at the start
**The ending manages to be both surprising and, somehow, inevitable.
 
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18  Points 
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his parrot
still says
i love you stella
 
quamrul hassan (dhaka, bangladesh)
(0,5,8) = 18 pts
 
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 16 Points 
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day of the dead -
a tree without leaves
full of birds
 
Israel López Balan
Mexico City, Mexico
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
 
 
crimson sunset
pelican silhouettes
drift into the night
 
Simon Hanson
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
 
 
windswept
the jumbled notes 
of snow buntings
 
Tom Painting
(0,4,8) = 16 pts
**"jumbled" in the wind and (implied) snow sounds just right.
 
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 15 Points 
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after the elm tree
was cut down
...silence
 
Sondra J. Byrnes
(0,5,5) = 15 pts
 
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 14 Points 
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migrating swallows
the pull of home
from both directions
 
Terri L. French, US
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
 
 
a mallard paddles
into it
autumn mist
 
Scott Mason
(0,2,10) = 14 pts
 
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12 Points 
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afternoon tea
the crow dodges 
a croquet ball
 
Kirsty Karkow
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
**Truly the observation of a moment -- I can see the scene so clearly!
 
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 11 Points 
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finally seeing
how it’s done...
swallows’ nest
 
Jo McInerney
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
 
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 10 Points 
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abandoned house
a swallow building
a nest
 
Diana Petkova
Bulgaria
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
**Beautifully understated, this covers a wide range of experience and feelings.
 
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 9 Points 
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morning rainbow
a peacock
struts his stuff
 
Edward
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
 
 
who can say
what is true love —
thornbird
 
Vinay Leo R.
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
 
 
an eastern bluebird
on the rusted fence…
autumn deepens
 
--Tzetzka Ilieva
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
 
 
equinox
the robin tugs 
an earthworm
 
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
**I love the equinoctial (?) struggle. I'm rooting for the worm.
 
a koel's song
fills the crib--
stillbirth
 
Yesha Shah
Surat, India
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
 
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 8 Points 
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a thousand cranes
sway above the heating vent
her hospital room
 
David C. Kopaska-Merkel
Tuscaloosa, AL
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
 
 
now birds
are changing the colors
of the trees
 
Andrei C. Szava
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
 
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7  Points 
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returning robins
all the dreams carried
in their feathers
 
Jane Reichhold
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
^^(In November and December robins arrive in California, leaving the colder places)
^^I sent this in honor of Gene.
He always dreamed of making a bird book.
 
morning in the garden...
playing my flute --
a mocking bird returns the song
 
rose marie Stutts
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
 
 
snowflake lilies...
a black swan
takes off
 
Leanne Mumford
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
 
 
last flutter . . . 
the fledgling still
in my palm
 
Kala Ramesh ​
Pune, India
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
^^In memory of the child Gene lost
 
almost dusk —
a redbird’s song wraps
around itself
 
Paresh
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
 
 
glassy lake surface
a swan's wake
halves the mountain
 
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
 
 
little shore birds
chasing the waves out
waves chasing them in
 
Bill Hudson
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
**Lovely observation and a beautiful scene.
 
autumn shadows
a cloud of crows bursts out
of the old elm
 
Tore Sverredal
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
 
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 6 Points 
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time does fly
lawn flamingos already
in Santa coats
 
maxianne
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
**A little early but very seasonal ;)
 
hush now, little bird —
we two are in no hurry
for this night to end
 
Shelley Krause
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
 
 
light flurries …
snow buntings settle
on the spruce
 
Ruth Powell
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
 
 
the trail he left
unfolds with every branch…
a robin’s song
 
Mary Davila
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
 
 
saving daylight
the rooster
over sleeps
 
Nancy Smith
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
 
 
flying cranes -
the months I wait
for their return
 
Ana Drobot
(Bucharest, Romania)
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
 
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5 Points 
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season change waiting for a junco
 
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
^^Note: the junco is a dark gray bird with a white underbelly--very distinctive movements and the first bird of winter's arrival in our part of the USA. Sometimes call the "Dominican" bird because those monks wear a habit of gray/black and white.
  
 
mid-November
the urgency in her voice
in the geese
 
--Diane Mayr
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
 
 
that strange awareness
of the first day
without swallows
 
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
 
 
languid lagoon-
a streak of kingfisher blue
in my daydreams
 
Vidya S Venkatramani, Chennai, Tamil Nadu, INDIA
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
 
 
smearing the sunset a deluge of muttonbirds
 
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
 
 
morning Mass -
from the cloister
a pigeon's responses
 
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
 
 
autumn chores
a crow watching
our every move
 
Beth Powell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
 
 
letter home -
a winter goldfinch
at the feeder
 
Laurene
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
 
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 4 Points 
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bird
I ask you who could make
that up
 
Garry Eaton
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
 
 
synchronized
headstanding on the lake
two wild ducks
 
Yukiko Yamada
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
 
 
filling the bowl
for the red-breasted nuthatch
her constant chatter
 
Chandra Bales
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
 
 
crow
alone now
birch
 
oga
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
a line of geese
white ribbon
I tie letters with
 
Dorota Ocińska
( Polska)
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
turning leaves
under the beech a chaffinch
turning leaves
 
polona
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
november magpies
make no sound--
cattails in the ice
 
DeVar
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
into the sunset a red cardinal sings
 
Bernard Gieske
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
bare tree against morning sky
all the birds
are black
 
deanna tiefenthal
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
taking a bough
on the evergreen...
cardinals
 
S.E. Buffington
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
a desert wren
in a spot of shade . . .
the enormous sky
 
Michael McClintock
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
 
 
snow on roof—
a seagull slithers
into flight
 
Gael Bage
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
 
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 3 Points 
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autumn love...
a thrushsong lipping
the moon
 
Anonymous
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
 
 
Malava Forest --
a red-headed woodpecker
balances on a twig
 
~ Antony Waswa
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
 
 
the carrion
of my darkest dream
picked at by a crow
 
Alan S. Bridges
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
spring cleaning
twisted spider legs dangle
from sparrow's beak
 
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
** maybe if there was an article before "sparrow's"
 
below the half moon, a baby bird
 
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
eyes meeting
a cardinal tips his head
to the poet
 
Carol Raisfeld
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
new housing
wild pigeons self-allot
the tenements
 
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
first day of autumn
the bird feeder
missing the robin
 
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**Here is my kigo entry in memory of Gene.
 
flags at half mast -
the starlings scribble
a farewell
 
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh, India.
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
they have gone,
to bring back the spring-
migratory birds
 
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg, Mongolia
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
cloudless dawn –
the blackbird waiting
at a tree's top
 
Miorita
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
piled leaves
a sparrow-shaped vacancy
at the bird feeder
 
Ignatius Fay
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
 
almost dark
from somewhere in the thicket
a few simple notes
 
Gerry B.
(Canada)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
 
cemetery quiet
a robin
stops to listen
 
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
 
All Souls’ Day
up above father’s grave
the cries of wild geese
 
Eleonore Nickolay 
(France)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
 
first frost—
where is the songbird
of yesterday?
 
Carole MacRury
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
 
a forest walk -
woodpecker's drum now
from other place
 
Tomislav
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
 
two doves balance
on an electric wire --
cold morning
 
~ Antony Joseph
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
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2  Points 
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Winter...
again the curlew
with it's lonesome cry
 
John Byrne
Ireland
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
 
 
silent noon
the cuckoo's song echoes
from my daughter's room
 
Shalini Sunkuru
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
 
 
oh nightingale!
hidden in the darkness whom
do you sing?
 
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad India
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
 
 
jagged sunlight
between high rise units
cry of a currawong
 
Dawn Bruce
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
ferment
in the Concords
tipsy robins
 
Barbara Snow
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
an early frost...
the red ribbon of a cardinal
into the horizon
 
Rebecca Drouilhet
Picayune, Mississippi
USA
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
an owl hooting -
above the smooth sea
the fleece of stars
 
(Ramona)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
soft feathers
cannot make
a cruel bird kind
 
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
audacious starling
lands on the hood of my car
demanding French fries
 
Deirdre Godwin
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
hollyhock skeleton trembles:
ghost of a hummingbird visits
ghost of a flower
 
F.J. Bergmann
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
November bird walk --
the guessing complexities
of who would be me
 
Ernesto P. Santiago
Athens, Greece
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
late fall
crisp echo
of robin song
 
Paul Rainville
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
birdbath
a sparrow pecking 
a bit of corn moon
 
Kaiser K.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
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1 Point 
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waterless birdbath
on his usual visit
a robin
 
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
bird call
in melodious tune
morning sickness
 
purush-nolensvilleTN
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
larger than his host
the Storm Bird chick
demands more food
 
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
^^Refers to Koel or Channel-Billed Cuckoo.
 
sunlight on new snow
crows shoulder their way
through winter’s chill
 
Harvey Jenkins
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
lost
while pilfering
such blue feathers
 
jill
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
canada geese
over the parking lot
drilling in formation
 
- ru, canada
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
flight of crows --
an Advent landscape
in black-and-white
 
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
A sack of black oil seed
and a brick of suet
time to feed my dinosaurs
 
Robert C.Howard
Belleville IL
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
red-winged blackbird
atop metal sculpture --
art in the park
 
Jane DeJonghe
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
two white egrets
pick ticks from a grazing cow --
Maasai herd
 
~ Arnold Echenje
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**i love the first two lines and with a minor tweak this would be a winner. if only L3 contained a juxtaposed image rather than an explanation of the previous lines (at least as i read it)!
 
in the tree
in the air
37 turkey vultures
 
David Watson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
rooster’s approaching –
hens in the yard
stopped scratching
 
Krzysztof Kokot
Poland
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
death notice . . .
a fantail flitting
between worlds
 
Hansha
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
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No Points This Time, But Thank 
You So Much For Participating. 
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autumn's end
among the birds at the feeder
a single nuthatch
 
sakyu
 
 
Blue rock thrush - merill
Nesting in the Maltese cliffs
Tweeting for a mate
 
Tanja Cilia
 
  
trodden path
scattered all along
my(na's) wings
 
Vandana Parashar 
India
  
 
shimmering river -
two grebes in winter plumage
in the full moonlight
 
Daniela Bullas
  
 
Sunday in the park
the sparrow snatches a crumb
from a cardinal
 
Bill Kenney
 
  
A yellow bird
shimmers in the sunlight…
summer synergy
 
Keith SIMMONDS
Rodez, France
 
  
no tailgate in sight
yet trills of "Rocky Top" --
Tennessee mockingbird
 
mechaieh
 
  
garden sparrows
peck on frozen ice cream ...
morning delight
 
Anonymous
 
  
summer morning
my fickleness mixes
with the robin's song
 
Oddbjørn Aardalen
 
  
traveling on--
buzzard rumps 'round
a roadside carcass
 
Anonymous
 
^^Was schooled once by Gene about the difference between vultures and buzzards.
 
yawning owl perched on barn roof sinking into rising flood waters…
 
kw
 
 
 dazed
in zipped air…
hummingbird and I
 
Alegria Imperial
 
  
November
The last hummingbird
gone.
 
John Hubbard
 
  
our chicken
attacks the injured raven—
wilting jonquil
 
Myron Lysenko
 
  
millet farm --
a quail path leads us
to its nest
 
~ Patrick Wafula (Kenya)
 
  
pair of crows
taunt the red-tailed hawk
neighborhood watch
 
Doris
 
  
Along the highway
fiery red the sumach,
shrill the birds above. 
 
Horst Ludwig 
 
  
first bird
the mangy one awaiting
last night's rice
 
Miriam Borne
NYC
 
  
crows pepper Fall skies
teals swim lines through Puget Sound
waters that won't ice
 
Sandy Friedlander
 
  
zen garden
getting closer to
golden-crowned sparrows
 
Bruce H. Feingold
Berkeley, CA
USA
 
  
calling flip 
the lovebird flips ...
light rain
 
Ramesh Anand
 
  
snowbird 
heading sunwards - 
melting wings
 
Juhani Tikkanen
 
  
no bird
but in wings
carlos
 
Anonymous
 
  
morning chill
the rash of phone calls 
about an eagle flown
 
Samar Ghose
Australia
 ^^My verse in honour of Gene:
 
birds crouch in nests
along the snow clad path--
wheezing silence
 
--R.K.Singh
 
  
a red cardinal
sparkling new snow
counterpoint
 
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
 
 
 picnic with family -
a crow is smashing nut
on the mother in-law's head
 
Petru-Ioan Garda
 
  
beyond her song
the mockingbird
resembles me
 
Bill Pauly
 
  
sad hoots
from the bullfinch in our rowan
where have all the berries gone?
 
Anne Zooey Lind
  
 
the robin swells --
embers in the
winter fire
 
James Dobson
Prudhoe, UK.
 
  
thrush lullaby
zhweee, zhweee
spirals
 
Jone Rush MacCulloch
Portland, OR
 
  
Now leafless tree
A dozen silent nests
 
Hazel A. Witherspoon
 
  
choughs
thicken the blackbutt
approaching winter
 
Marietta Jane McGregor
Australia
  
 
is the cat
in love with the pigeon
this long gazing
 
Giselle Maya
France 
 
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General Comments:
 
**Oh, so many good ones. Hard to narrow to 6 with only 1 point each.
  
**So many deserve to be cited!
 
 **It was hard to choose 1–6 poems. I found 27 of them to be worthy of points!
  
**There were several more entries that would easily find a home in a haiku journal but finally my selection came down to these:
  
**Thanks again for this chance to read and vote on some excellent haiku.
 
  ** I enjoyed reading so many wonderful bird poems.
  
**So many wonderful verses here - people have really dug deep! In my choices, I have tried to keep both haiku aesthetics and sentiment in mind but hope to be forgiven for letting the latter rule my head a little in honour of Gene.
  
**This brought in many fine haiku -- and many birds I had never heard of! This kukai is very educational.
 
  **Best ever entries! It was hard to leave so many good ones out, but I had no more points.
  
**The Kigo this time brought in some real good ones ! Enjoyed reading !
 
 **This was an absolutely spectacular group of poems and a great joy to read! It was very hard to winnow down to a few winners. Congratulations to all the entrants!
 
 ** With so many fine poems, it was very hard to choose three. 
  
**Thank you for… the opportunity. I enjoyed reading about all the birds.
  
**Wish I had thanked Gene for his kind words as well as his harsh criticisms...
  
**I'm sorry to learn of the death of Gene Murtha. A few years ago we collaborated on tan renga which were later published. He was only 60 years old.
  
** So sorry to learn of Gene's passing. He was an inspiration.
 
 

Free Format Theme: 
EVENING WINDOW
 
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First Place -   33 Points
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 the coolness of glass touching darkness
 
Hansha Teki
(5,6,6) = 33 pts
**A brilliant pivot on "touching," and a real sense of darkness.
**I didn’t give this one any points because I thought it needed a little more, but I liked where it was going.
 
And

art gallery -
the evening window
between two paintings
 
Israel López Balan
Mexico City, Mexico
(3,7,10) = 33 pts
 
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Second Place - 27  Points
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nightfall
the wind in the curtain
the curtain in the wind
 
Simon Hanson
(2,4,13) = 27 pts
**I like the fact this one succeeds without the word window.
 
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Third Place -  22 Points
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evening window
a slice of moon in
my bowl
 
Nana Fredua-Agyeman
(1,5,9) = 22 pts
 
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18 Points 
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financial district
each sunset window
glittering gold
 
Michele L. Harvey
New York, USA
(1,3,9) = 18 pts
**Amusing, and very well spotted!
**excellent haiku!
 
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16 Points 
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cold pane looking at me looking at me
 
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(2,1,8) = 16 pts
**The repetition captures the essence of the theme, and I love "cold."
 
end of autumn
evening gathers
at the window
 
Bill Kenney
(1,3,7) = 16 pts
 
 
vespers
a light
in one window
 
Mary Stevens
(0,4,8) = 16 pts
 
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14 Points 
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hopscotch ...
the evening window 
frames memories
 
Vinay Leo R.
(2,2,4) = 14 pts
 
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13 Points 
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alone -
in the neighbours’ window
their sneering pumpkin
 
Eleonore Nickolay 
(France)
(0,4,5) = 13 pts
**What a strong last line! And a great reference back to the first line. Very impressive.
 
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12 Points 
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evening window
she watches his tractor
head for the barnyard
 
Barbara Snow
(2,1,4) = 12 pts
 
 
childhood home
the windows full
of twilight sky
 
polona
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
 
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11 Points 
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evening window -
grandpa swallows
the red pill
 
Petru-Ioan Garda
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
**Understanding this all too well...
 
moon
in my window
all the difference
 
jill
(1,1,6) = 11 pts
 
 
evening window -
the moon
caught in a web
 
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
 
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10 Points 
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evening window
Venus rising
out of the sea
 
Garry Eaton
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
 
 
evening window 
trying on 
the chemo wig
 
Kaiser K.
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
**Trying it on at the window, perhaps, which is then an "evening window" in more than one sense. It may interest the author to know that, as one who lost a wife to cancer, I find this convincing and moving.
 
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9 Points 
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evening window
the widower's reflection
looks back in
 
Paul Hodder
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
 
 
through the hospice window a waning moon
 
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
 
 
looking out
at the early dark
i see only myself
 
- ru, canada
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
 
 
through my window
just the warmth I need...
half-a-cup of moon
 
Alegria Imperial
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
 
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8 Points 
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in failing light a red snowsuit wanders home ~ frost on a window
 
Gerry B.
(Canada)
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
 
 
evening window-
his silhouette surrenders
to her shadow
 
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
 
 
evening window
mother of my mother
in the reflection
 
Sondra J. Byrnes
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
 
 
Evening window…
the full moon settles
upon my pillow
 
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, France
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
 
 
evening walk—
imagining what lies behind
the unlit windows
 
Carole MacRury
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
 
 
the dark
in kitchen windows
soup steam 
 
Ann K. Schwader
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
 
 
ceasefire -
her glance at the window
every now and then
 
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh, India
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
 
 
rain at my
evening window - 
silence becomes dialogue
 
Andrei C. Szava
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
**lovely image
 
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7 Points 
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sundown migraine
frantic buzz of a bee
between panes
 
Ignatius Fay
(2,0,1) = 7 pts
 
 
crimson and gold!
autumn's evening selfie
on our wall
 
Anne Zooey Lind
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
 
 
evening window -
father's gaunt face
behind the fog
 
(Ramona)
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
 
 
evening window
the scent of my neighbor's incense.
 
dsnake1
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
 
 
evening window
a conversation lights up
constellations
 
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
 
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6 Points 
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throwing pebbles
at the darkened window...
nobody appears
 
Tomislav
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
 
 
last light
a drop from the window 
into darkness
 
Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
 
 
evening window--
the neighbor
keeps her clothes on
 
Tim Singleton
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
 
 
evening...
again we begin
to reflect
 
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
 
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5 Points 
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evening window...
staring at the black hole
he drinks his fifth beer
 
Edward
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
 
 
evening window
streaked with rain -
popcorn
 
Laurene
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
 
 
lace curtains
and fluttering moonbeams
their wedding night
 
maxianne
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
 
 
drawn curtains -
a stray dog wanders by
evening windows
 
Ruth Powell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
 
 
watching
the full moon ...
a snowman
 
Archana Kapoor Nagpal, Bangalore, India
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
 
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4 Points 
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walking the night . . .
in a window a family
seated for dinner
 
Michael McClintock
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
evening window -
in her black eyes
a few sparkles
 
Ana Drobot
Bucharest, Romania
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
too dark to see out,
we listen to the raindrops
sliding down the glass
 
Bridget Cougar
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
 
 
evening window -
a slightly darker secret
takes wing…
 
kw
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
 
 
golden sunset --
an old couple gazing
out their window
 
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
 
 
moonless night
a luna moth lights
on the window pane
 
Terri L. French
US
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
 
 
evening window - 
reflecting on 
another tv dinner
 
-Priscilla Cook
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
 
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3 Points 
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the heavens
in my evening window
I fall up into the stars
 
Carol Raisfeld
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
 
 
evening window
among white collar men
a pair of familiar eyes
 
Shalini Sunkuru
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
new snow falling
open evening window
childhood again
 
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
evening window -
her glowing face
as she draws the curtains
 
Jo McInerney
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
reflections
in the western window
the fleet returns
 
Nancy Smith
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
rouge sunset
through the window
the scent of solitude
 
Paresh
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
 
 
evening window
she draws the shade
before my eyes
 
Tom Painting
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
  
winter sunset
keeping the drapes open
until the sky goes black
 
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
  
evening fog
leaf after leaf brushes
the windowsill
 
Tore Sverredal
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
 
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2 Points 
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evening window
widow opening
her eyes
 
hawktalk
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
 
 
evening window
the male fireflies blink
to get a date?
 
Ernesto P. Santiago
Athens, Greece
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
 
 
dusk
her quilt work coloured by
a patchwork sky
 
Beth Powell
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
 
 
evening light ...
everything else escapes
this window
 
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
 
 
alone, at the window ...
colours twilit leaves lend
to airy nothing
 
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
 
 
falling on the floor
through evening window-
coins of sunlight
 
Vandana Parashar 
India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
evening window
her silhouettes on the blinds
she said she wasn't home
 
Bill Hudson
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
late evening windows --
from the bus, watch them floating
rectangles of light 
 
Sandy Friedlander
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
evening window—
what gets in,
what goes out
 
Bill Pauly
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
street lights,
the children have gone
evening window
 
Samar Ghose
Australia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
evening prayer --
her tender voice sets ripples
in every heart
 
Kumarendra Mallick Hyderabad, India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
 
evening window
a moon-shaped lamp
reflected
 
Giselle Maya
France
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
 
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1 Point
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evening window
the moon sends
a greeting
 
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
lake sunset unexpected arrival of familiar silhouettes
 
Marion Clarke
Warrenpoint, Northern Ireland
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
a woman' s face
behind the dark window
pale moon above
 
Natalia Kuznetsova
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
orange hues 
rinsed by raindrops ...
cruise window
 
Ramesh Anand
Bengaluru, India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
an old window frame -
in the glow of candlelight
two fragrant quinces
 
Daniela Bullas
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
the evening lights through the forest, an express train
 
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
evening window
in apartments across the way
all the people watching screens
 
Miriam Borne
NYC
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
Fall back.
Outside my window,
dusk settles early.
 
John Hubbard
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
fogged window
mother and child in silhouette
winter evening
 
Yukiko Yamada
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
ever-changing art -- 
sunset colours 
framed by the window
 
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
through the window
evening shadows
in wind
 
Chandra Bales
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
from her bed
a wish
first evening star
 
Jone Rush MacCulloch
Portland, OR
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
 
a latticed sky 
seeps into the sick room
fallen leaves
 
Anitha Varma,
Kerala, India.
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
 
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No Points This Time, But Thank 
You So Much For Participating. 
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evening window
all stars twinkle
in Suleyman's harem
 
Dorota Ocińska
( Polska)
 
by the old canal
fornicating shadows
in the window
 
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
 ^^Above is a memory from Amsterdam 1970.
 
Between roiling clouds
A glimpse
Of tomorrow's storm
 
Tanja Cilia
 
  
fall evening
man looking out
two women in
 
oga
 
  
rising moon
tarries awhile to peep
darkness of evening window
 
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
 
  
party or not -
a hesitant mosquito hovers near the widow
 
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
 
  
evening window
deer graze on edge
of the rose bush
 
Harvey Jenkins
 
  
smears of pigeon breath
blurring penthouse lights --
view from our room
 
mechaieh
 
  
my patient points
to a dusk pink rose ...
her dinner tray empty
 
Anonymous
 
 
 her head held higher
woman in the hospice bed
watches stars appear
 
Deirdre Godwin
 
  
evening window
the november moon, longing for
a yellow ring
 
Oddbjørn Aardalen
 
  
jasmines in her braid
start to smell sweet
evening tickles
 
purush-nolensville
Tn[usa]
 
  
fresh ironed sheets--
hot chocolate mist
on the window pane
 
DeVar
 
  
daylight savings
my wrinkles reflected
in every pane
 
--Diane Mayr
 
  
window on the dark
kitchen reflection glowing
my shadow filled with stars
 
F.J. Bergmann
 
  
evening window
children playing hide & seek
I close the blind
 
Bernard Gieske
 
  
Through the storm windows
no more the Angelus bells
through early darkness
 
Horst Ludwig 
 
  
warmly lighted 
evening window - 
cooling street
 
Juhani Tikkanen
 
  
Big Bend’s magic window
pastel strata
hold off the night.
 
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
 
 
 wintry wind
bangs the evening window
my thoughts agitate
 
--R.K.Singh
 
  
a moth and its cocoon
from my kitchen--
evening window
 
Alan S. Bridges
 
  
pink sun
sets
on distant peak
 
Jane DeJonghe
 
  
a flashing pink neon flamingo
mirrored
in the mortuary window
 
Jon Espen Vassbotn
 
  
sunset colors tint
the window panes--
crickets sing the evensong
 
rose marie Stutts
 
  
at window –
looking the colours
of the quince tree
 
Miorita
 
  
evening window --
reflections cover
the garden
 
James Dobson
Prudhoe, UK.
  
 
Shift break
Rabbit scoping my salad
During chat with friend
 
Hazel A. Witherspoon
  
 
every night
the periscopic sight
looks in on
 
1jungman
 
 
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General Comments:

**Reflections, all!
 
**Quite a number of interesting takes in this batch.
 
 **I liked best the haiku that did not contain the words "evening window" as such, but which showed the reader both ideas, in their own words.
  
**I thought many of the haiku were forced in order to use this phrase. It's not an easy phrase to use in a haiku, and the image is not so easy to imply. This was a challenge.
  
**Hard to choose only 6. I even chuckled at a number of them (in both the Kigo and the Free Format sections)
 
 **It was nice to read so many wonderful haiku. Thanks for a lovely topic.
 
 **I felt this prompt was quite tough and felt it did not lend itself easily to write a haiku. The quality of submissions, IMHO, is not as fine as it generally is
 
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