June 2011 Kukai
Kigo Theme:
OUTDOOR MARKETS
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First Place - 31 Points
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flea market...
the itch
to buy something
Michele L. Harvey
(1,5,18) = 31 pts
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Second Place - 28 Points
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flea market
two bees circling
the same flower
Cara Holman
(1,5,15) = 28 pts
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Third Place – 25 Points
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flea market
the antique bowl
fills with the sun
Keiko
(2,5,9) = 25 pts
**(would have given more if third line read “fills with sun” instead
of “the sun”)
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20 Points
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flea market
we inspect the holes
in the handmade quilt
Carmel Lively Westerman
(2,2,10) = 20 pts
y rd s le
the typewriter's
missing key
Alan S. Bridges
(0,3,14) = 20 pts
** I don't usually vote for those that aren't 5-7-5, but
I like this one enough to make an exception.
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16 Points
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sidewalk sale
she strokes every book
before wrapping it
Vida
(0,5,6) = 16 pts
**Such a loving gesture. Thank you for showing us.
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15 Points
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produce market
soil in the cracks
of her hands
Christopher Pickslay
(0,3,9) = 15 pts
**So beautifully observed and told. The simplicity
of this haiku is powerful.
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12 Points
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outdoor market --
a tattooed man sells
permanent markers
Israel López Balan
(1,1,7) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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everything
under the sun
outdoor market
shanna
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
looking at myself
in someone else's mirror --
flea market
Bouwe Brouwer
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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flea market rain__
the leaking roof
of the umbrella shop
sanjukta
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
sidewalk sale
a white feather lands
on a porcelain angel
--Jacek M.
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
flea market --
I buy a watch that I sold
fifty years ago
Petru-Ioan Garda
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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farmers' market
the tarot reader peers
over the cabbages
Liz Rule
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
yard sale --
the last of the Mohicans
returns home
Johannes S. H. Bjerg
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
late evening--
a vegetable seller lights
the first candle
~ Winfridah Malesi
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
sidewalk sale
my wife peels the price
from mom's urn
John McManus
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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an old lamp
in a flea market --
looking for Aladdin
Virginia Popescu
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
summer gold
at the road side stand
fresh picked corn
Sandy Vrooman
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
market stall--
a dead butterfly in
a black sandal
~ Brian Etole
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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Second hand market--
the smell of acacia blossoms
is wrapping all
Oprica Padeanu
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
sidewalk sale --
the last mirror
reflects my smile
James Dobson
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
outdoor market
only umbrellas selling
in this downpour
Elaine Riddell
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
flea market
an old boyfriend
stops to say hello
Francine Banwarth
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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flea market
our spaniel contributes
his share
Gautam Nadkarni
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
sidewalk sale--
my son asks why
someone would buy a sidewalk
Michael Dylan Welch
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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flea market --
fleas come home
with the pants
Carol Raisfeld
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
Farmer’s market:
prayed-for rain arrives
opening day.
Lynda L. True
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
sidewalk sale
the cobbler's selling
Dad's unclaimed shoes
Amicus
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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open market
waft of incense on the left
fish on the right
deanna tiefenthal
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
outdoor market --
aging sex workers hawk
their wares
Svetlana Marisova
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
sidewalk sale
haiku at the end
of poetry
Roberta Beary
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
outdoor market --
on an abandoned scales
cloud shadows
Cezar F.
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
market day --
out of sight, the old man
stretches a catapult
John McDonald
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
sidewalk sale . . .
the bargain of the day
an old friend's smile
Michael McClintock
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
his booth
of rusted tools
his missing leg
Garry Eaton
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
roadside market --
four young men dozing
in wheelbarrows
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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city wide market
soaked in rain
only veggies and flowers today
Bill Hudson
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
"fresh strawberries"
the farmer's wife sings
a different song
Ted van Zutphen
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
flea market
the old dog bites his tail
below the sale sign
:^) bre
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**humourous
flea market--
all the humans
half price
Ron C. Moss
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
homeless kittens
allergies make my eyes run
at the flea market
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
garage sale
the flower pots
dirt cheap
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
flea market
searching picture books
I read my name
Ralf Bröker
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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sidewalk sale
an elderly man
hugs her first dress
Geneviève
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
height of summer
at the flea market
a light-up santa
Tom Painting
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
vendor's table --
a once-loved doll,
hair grey with street dust.
mechaieh
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
world-wide flea market
buy/sell your stuff on ebay
without getting dressed
if
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
Fall flea market
smell of a bargain
in the air
Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
in the flea market --
the shadow of a lightning
on dusty asphalt
Patricia Lidia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
at my feet
the scent of creeping thyme
sidewalk sale
Margaret Dornaus
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the sun slowly bends
bananas into shape --
outdoor market
Jon Baldwin
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
dragonfly season
a rainbow of movement
at the market
Allison Millcock
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
night market --
my wife
stretches the bargain
Ramesh Anand
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
market day ends
clockwork pigeons tidy
the cobblestones
anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
flea market...
waits for its client
a carved coffin
Tanya Dikova
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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Can’t find a circus
Nary a collar for sale
No flea market this!
Pat Lammers
peach juice
drips down toddler's chin --
outdoor market
Polly Swafford
world fragrances
and hot veggie wraps
street market
Frances O'Keeffe
She scratched at her ears --
a vexed and most unwilling
canine flea market.
Robert C. Howard
Sunday market --
price of carrots go up, up
this year of Rabbit
Sonam Chhoki
outdoor market
flies rally around
the stinkiest cheese
Terri L. French
market special!
an organic massage
whilst you wait
Barbara A. Taylor
flea market --
the first buyers for lilies
the bees
Manuela Dragomirescu
flea market
a man scratching
his left arm
gogatsu
at flea market
even wooden leg
is sold as toys
Ashi
outdoor market
the widow hawking
her caged finches
Bill Pauly
irresistibly drawn
to the small figurines:
flea market
-- Chitra Rajappa
Muthurwa stall--
a display of brown
cow tails
~ Elijah Juma
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No Points This Time. Sorry.
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an outdoor market
buzzing with activity...
collectors' items
Keith A. SIMMONDS
in the street
a silver mime dances-
lexington avenue fair
Maria Santomauro
fresh in the morning
left overs -- outdoor market
wilted by afternoon
Dorothy K.
long journey
to the flea market...
tapestry trousers
jill campbell
outdoor market, two squatting
women watches a man
clutching a dead swallow
Oddbjørn Aardalen
mall walk sale ~
beneath a rubble of scarves
the perfect boxed brooch
--gillena cox
outdoor market
in the buffalo grass
a dead possum
martin gottlieb cohen
at the flea market
a young boy stops in front of
the green kid's bike
Erik Boye
flea market
bargains go through
two cycles of hot
Diane Mayr
flea market
from their house to mine
rotting junk
Adelaide B. Shaw
Car trunk sale
wallet now empty --
full closet.
Trevor Camp
home from the market
we would sit outside— shelling
peas into a bowl
Marylouise Knight
flea market ...
the mutt plops down
and scratches
kawazu
that chipped lip
of the teapot she once lost--
sidewalk sale
Alegria
my hurry
the sidewalk vendor's
blanket of watches
Maxianne
outdoor market
giddy with the scent of fresh
local strawberries
gourdman
rustic cheese and wine
at Salt Spring’s outdoor market
I count out the bills
Deirdre Godwin
flea market florist--
cut-flower rates shorten
lengthening shadows
vishnu p kapoor
a hawker displays
a pair of black gloves--
June cold
~ Andrew Otinga
a body push
sends a lady to the floor --
avocado chaos
~ Mango Junior
snowy flea market --
captive moths
sweating
Juhani Tikkanen
evening market--
the fat woman pulls me
to buy her fruit
~ Barrack Elungata
summer UE funk
in and outdoors' rumor --
ALL CUCUMBERS NAZIS!
GH.POSTELNICU STOPS
Gikomba market --
he carries people across
a broken sewer
~ yamame
small cobalt bottle
fifty cents--
summer flea market
priceless
jill
busy market--
the echoing of a
peddler's whistle
~ Pauline Wayua
raw pears--
my nail breaks
on pressing
~ SYNAIDAH KALAHI
open market
like he's interested
in your wild violet
Dan Schwerin
market mud --
he pulls and pulls
the heavy cart
~ Esther Obwamu
Mutindwa market--
scorching sun hits the
hawker's face
~ Asava Kevin
flea market
the old man sips his coffee
rolls a cigarette
Edward
fry bread and smoked fish
her stall is the first
to empty
Ruth Powell
Muthurwa market--
they scramble over some
second-hand clothes
~ Boniface Kariuki
outdoor market square
huddled in the corner
a crowd of flowers
Ben Gieske
Muthurwa market--
he sorts out white vests
from t-shirts
~ BRIAN MULANDO
moon viewing
Neil Armstrong's last night
on earth
Beth Powell
green chiles roasting
at the Farmer's Market
we buy triple XXX
Christine Howard
a stray goat eating
sweet potato peelings--
hawkers' din
Patrick
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General Comments:
**Thank you all! I found this to be a very fruitful kukai -- and there
were very hard choices to be made when allocating points (kigo section)
**This one was difficult! (kigo voting)
And now…
Free Format Theme:
SPACE/SPACE TRAVEL
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First Place - 29 Points
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mountain lake...
between two Milky Ways
the creaking boat
Michael McClintock
(2,5,13) = 29 pts
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Second Place - 19 Points
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sparkling eyes
she throws her paper plane
toward the stars
Allison Millcock
(2,4,5) = 19 pts
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Third Place – 14 Points
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summer satellites...
taking the time
to find myself
Michele L. Harvey
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
betrayal ~
this space between us
a black hole
Amicus
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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my five year old daughter
painting space
runs out of colours
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(1,3,4) = 13 pts
untethered spacewalk --
our baby's
first steps
James Dobson
(1,1,8) = 13 pts
**One doesn't generally think of babies walking. Maybe "toddler's" instead?
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12 Points
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butterfly galaxy . . .
her fingers
brush mine
John McManus
(1,2,5) = 12 pts
night flight --
I realign my bearing
on the southern cross
Svetlana Marisova
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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A spider thread
between the rock walls...
beaten path
Vasile Moldovan
(3,1,0) = 11 pts
father's moving day ...
an old telescope
left behind
Marshall Bood
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
space probe --
the depth of unspoken
questions
Ted van Zutphen
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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morning star
trying to recall
my first wish
Terri L. French
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
one small step
I contact an ex
in cyber space
Tom Painting
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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maids' quarrel --
the flying saucer followed
by a cup
Gautam Nadkarni
(0,0,9) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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galaxy --
left behind on the field
a crown of daisies
Bouwe Brouwer
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
Cruise--
at the horizon a ship towed
by the rainbow
Constantin Stroe
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
still unrequited . . .
all the space
between the stars
Michael Dylan Welch
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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space
it comes out at night
and bring us stars
Bill Hudson
(2,0,1) = 7 pts
**how true
Milky Way...
for a moment I
melt into space
Keiko
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
Sahara --
every inch of the sky
studded with stars
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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dusky red star
trembling
her distant heart
Maxianne
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
drifting off--
she visits the stars
again
Christopher Pickslay
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
other galaxies
my son introduces me
to dubstep music
Cara Holman
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
**This free format haiku catches very well the “generation gap” that
arises after some years. Parents see the “cool” stuff of their
children as “out of this galaxy”.
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5 Points
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suspension bridge
my old pickup becomes
a space shuttle
--Jacek M.
(1,1,0) = 5 pts
deep into space
seeing planet earth
with new eyes
Keith A. SIMMONDS
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
traveling
in outer space
earth
Stevie Strang
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
into the unknown
scary space
hospital scanner
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
google earth
a few clicks to view from space
my own home
Elaine Riddell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
toddler tears --
his first balloon disappears
into space
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
end of the universe
keeps shifting
ahead
Alan S. Bridges
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
star trek
the distance between
my world and yours
Margaret Dornaus
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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on the battle way
with broken sandals...
another victory
Adina Enachescu
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
space travel
the moon and the lighthouse
lighten my loneliness
Hilaire
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
nothing to say --
thousands of raindrops
between she and me
Israel López Balan
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**How about "us" instead of "she and me"?
earthrise
on the visor
sweat beads
martin gottlieb cohen
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
Crab Nebula
the cultures
in a petri dish
Polona
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
traffic jam
the astronaut tells about
toilet training
Ralf Bröker
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
space wars:
paper rockets
crisscross the living room
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
all your years in mine
getting used to the pulsar
together again
Jon Espen vassbotn
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
night
after the funeral...
space infinity
natalia kuznetsova
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
space travel --
an afternoon spent
flying paper planes
sanjukta
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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a hawk soaring
into infinite blue space--
where am I going?
Adelaide B. Shaw
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
monsoon's end
the beach chute steering me
into rainfall
Ramesh Anand
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
alone on the beach
with breaking waves
and the Milky Way
.... not alone
jill
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
**Very beautiful and articulate haiku -- it is such a privilege to read
them.
leave this Earth
discover it’s sheer beauty
for the first time
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
shuttle's last flight
--remembering when
Laika flew
Diane Mayr
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**That stirred up memories for me too... My
favourite haiku here -- simple and strong.
another space
beating his hand-held drum
the shaman enters
Sonam Chhoki
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
space; wishing
there was a kind
god, as well
gogatsu
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**…my favorite out of all of them.
travelling...
Grateful Dead space jam
on my walkman
Jon Baldwin
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
last space flight
who's left behind
with the fireflies?
Bill Pauly
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
staying up late
to watch the moon-landing ...
giant step
Ruth Powell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
floating from space
frozen galaxies
snowflakes
Ben Gieske
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
open air market
bumblebees buzzing around
the fresh cut flowers
Beth Powell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
space
star
space, etc
Paul Hodder
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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a man with a sign
boards the last spaceship --
end of the world
Garry Eaton
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
such a long journey
breaking free of gravity
footstep to the stars
Deirdre Godwin
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
bird watching...
Cronkite is speechless
when the Eagle lands
Edward
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
a spinning dance
of two voices in space-
Internet romance
Tanya Dikova
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
cold silent moon
dispassionate witness
to man’s debacle
if=
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
from the mountain peaks
soars into the sky
an eagle
Maria Santomauro
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
Milky Way --
counting calories
in a black hole
Patricia Lidia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
ten light-years too far --
the cure for her cancer
can't reach her in time.
mechaieh
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
**Dramatic. And at the same time, very touching. Moving to tears for
those who lost somebody to cancer.
traveling the stars --
no lines connecting them
into myths
kawazu
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
ghost of Laika --
will there be lampposts
beyond Pluto?
Johannes S. H. Bjerg
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
a lunatic
telling the doctor his travels
to the full moon
Virginia Popescu
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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the rings of Saturn
on the ships camera
a field of rock
:^) bre
Captain of my swing
Naming night’s constellations
Back porch space travel
Pat Lammers
in the paper box
travelling at the speed of light
dinner time!
Erik Boye
House for sale
furniture all moved --
empty space.
Trevor Camp
starlight --
last message of a dead sun
strikes dancing dust motes
Liz Rule
winter galaxy...
Mono Lake microbes
feed on arsenic
Bruce H. Feingold
speechless I watch
the "Challenger" fall apart
and cry — for my life
Marylouise Knight
planet to planet
with a strum of his vina
Narada Muni
gourdman
hibernated crew
humanoid space robot
walking on tiptoe
Boris Nazansky
Space Travel Agency --
I would like to go to Mars
but I'm busy this week
Garda Ioan
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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on spirit wings
astral flight
to Shamballah
Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
returning past ~
Halley's comet visits in
another fifty years
-- gillena cox
Chang'-e
ancient astronaut
pet rabbit
anonymous
Holst's most clever ears
heard Jupiter, Mars et al
etched in noble song.
Robert C. Howard
heading for the stars
Discovery's final trip
takes off
Barbara A. Taylor
one lover leaves
the other does a cat stretch
into infinite space
Sandy Vrooman
discolored towel
on the highway checks the cars
for hitchhikers
Vida
on an even keel
the longboat kept course
space travelers from far away
Ashi
the real name
he hides under an alias--
Sputnik
Alegria
strawberry moon --
promises of shortcake
with real whipped cream
Carolyn Coit Dancy
empty pitcher breaks--
spills all over
space
vishnu p kapoor
space travelers --
through an ozone hole
some jumping rays
Juhani Tikkanen
could see my country
from the hidden face of the Moon --
GOOGLE my friend
GH. POSTELNICU STOPS
its flash and tremble
that sweet release
of space travel
Dan Schwerin
shooting stars
in wonderment merging
with the cosmic void
anonymous
shuttle launch --
"fell in love with an alien"
all day long
Cezar F.
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General Comments:
**not as many I was enamored with in the free format category.
**These were very hard to pick from because there were 8 that I really
liked very much.
**
.there’s something about the sky.
.so infinite are my thoughts
…no ending to space..
**This was really an odd assortment of (free format) entries. It’s
interesting how the assigned topic was interpreted in so many
different ways.
**Comment: Interesting. I found myself avoiding all fantasy and poetic
language, and looking for those (free format) haiku with two simple
images.
**…I wish I could have voted for some of the others too
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