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February 2013 Kukai Results

February 2013 Kukai

Congratulations to ***  S.M. Abeles ***, winner of our Kigo section and to *** Michael McClintock ***, winner of our Free Format section! 

 

VOTERS' comments are indicated by  ** below the respective poems.

POETS' comments are indicated by  ^^  below the respective poems.

 

(If any participating poets are offended by or uncomfortable with a comment, PLEASE let me know, and I will be glad to remove it from the results posted on our website.)

 

Kigo Theme:

WITHERED PLANTS

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First Place -  38 Points

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pressed flower

I remember

being beautiful

 

S.M. Abeles

USA

(3,6,17) = 38 pts

** We will all get to this point someday.

**This month's winner in the pathos competition; genuinely moving, even to this old cynic, who is lucky to remember being a young cynic.

** The longing in this small poem is palpable and far larger than its three small lines. Kudos to the poet for this wonderful haiku! 

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Second Place -  37 Points

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winter grasses -

the space between

your footprints

 

Sandi Pray

Robbinsville, NC

USA

(0,11,15) = 37 pts

 

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Third Place  -  26 Points

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hanging on

to a withered branch ...

a sparrow's song

 

A. Amin

Singapore

(3,3,11) = 26 pts

**As I read this, the bird is gone, but the song lingers for as long as we can hang on to it.

 

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20 Points

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winter night:

the withered tree

festooned with stars

 

Chitra Rajappa

(1,3,11) = 20 pts

 

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19 Points

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withered lilacs–

how did I miss

the change in you?

 

Adelaide B. Shaw

(0,4,11) = 19 pts

 

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18 Points

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withered plants

the shadow of a robin

on the fence

 

Angie Werren

(1,4,7) = 18 pts

 

 

still

he waters the withered plant

widower

 

Paul Hodder

(1,3,9) = 18 pts

** What a picture of love and loyalty

 

withered leaves -

a closer look at

her lifeline

 

Cezar F. Ciobîcă

(0,2,14) = 18 pts

 

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16 Points

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snow melting

at the roadside shrine

withered flowers

 

BILL KENNEY

(0,3,10) = 16 pts

 

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15 Points

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moonrise

a tumbleweed

stirs

 

Jan O'Loughlin

Australia

(2,3,3) = 15 pts

**Perfect - almost missed this one on the first reading but it grew on me more and more.

** Fabulous image! It conjures up the mysteries of night and how under the cover of darkness the dead may indeed come to life. The circular juxtaposition of both moon & tumbleweed can't be missed either. Well drawn and concise.

 

gently pulling

withered leaves

with withered hands

 

Bill Hudson

(2,1,7) = 15 pts

**What I like about this haiku is its vivid imagery. I can see the old, wrinkled hands in motion, "withered' but still alive, still functional. The phrase "the spirit is willing but the flesh is weak" comes to mind. We project ourselves into the poem, imagining how it will be when we are 70 or 80 years old. This haiku is a snapshot of what is to come: gently, with less strength than they used to have, our hands, our bodies, try their best to carry out their tasks, the faithful and aging servants of the mind.

 **what about?

withered hands

gently pulling

withered leaves



the wind

through withered grass

wolf moon

 

Ann K. Schwader

(0,1,13) = 15 pts

 

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14 Points

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after

the divorce

the withered plants

 

John McDonald

Edinburgh Scotland

(1,3,5) = 14 pts

 

 

withered thistle

the way he scolds

his child

 

polona

(1,2,7) = 14 pts

 

 

sunset

lingering

on a withered thistle

 

Virginia Popescu

PHOENIX

(0,2,10) = 14 pts

 

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13 Points

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funeral

a tuft of yellowed grass

tight in his fist

 

Maxianne

(0,4,5) = 13 pts

 

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12 Points

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the desk tidy,

the notebook closed:

withered begonia

 

Michael McClintock

(1,3,3) = 12 pts

**All that remains of the life of a tidy and considerate person. Beautifully observed and written.

 

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11 Points

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abandoned house

the withered ivy

still hugs a wall

 

Eduard TARA

(1,1,6) = 11 pts

 

 

withered violets—

the open curtain's

empty bed

 

Roberta Beary

(0,1,9) = 11 pts

 

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10 Points

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gold grass

the hay smell passing

down the hill

 

Jennifer Savage

San Diego, CA

(1,2,3) = 10 pts

 

 

autumn loneliness --

sweeping the highway,

withered leaves

 

Ramesh Anand

(0,3,4) = 10 pts

 

 

frozen river

recalling the names

of dead wildflowers

 

Dawn Apanius

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

**The interaction of "frozen" and "dead" lends a subtle melancholy to "recalling the names."

**Although I wasn’t sure if “dead” was necessary, I was taken by the power of this haiku. Winter wildflowers:

 

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9 Points

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frost-tipped field

I've learned the lesson

of letting go

 

Michel L. Harvey

(0,3,3) = 9 pts

 

 

beginning of the end . . .

she stops

watering her plants

 

Bill Pauly

(0,1,7) = 9 pts

 

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8 Points

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chickadees

rustle

dry leaves

 

Jane DeJonghe

(0,3,2) = 8 pts

 

 

annual review

the dirt around

a withered plant

 

Dan Schwerin

Waukesha, WI

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

 

 

long night moon

a withered leaf spins

before the wind

 

Ellen Compton

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

**Turns beautifully on the perfectly placed "spins," and "before the wind" admits of more than one reading.

**terrific opening line packed with atmosphere which continues right through to the last line.

 

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7 Points

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a chilly wind

between the leaning gravestones

withered grass

 

Catherine J.S. Lee

(1,0,4) = 7 pts

** I particularly like the mood-setting effect of the words: chilly, leaning gravestones, withered. They form a distinct picture and feeling – almost make me shiver.

 

through the dead pampas grass glistening mud

 

martin gottlieb cohen

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

a wild rose

withering in her hair

gypsy woman

 

Carolyn Coit Dancy

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

abandoned house

the withered ivy

on the window sill

 

Harvey Jenkins

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

**What is noticed as a way of suggesting what is felt; good technique.

 

 

spilling

from the toddler's hand

withered daisies

 

André Surridge

Hamilton,

New Zealand

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

**Not merely a cute picture, a thoughtful reflection on time.

 

 

January dusk --

a breeze rustles

through dry leaves

 

~ Isabelle Prondzynski

Kenya

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

 

late November

the rattle of Queen Anne's lace

in the wind

 

--Diane Mayr

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

 

first grapes

withered on the vine

her soured marriage

 

if

(0,0,7) = 7 pts 

 

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6 Points

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some birds to north

others to south -

withered dandelion

 

Israel López Balan

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

 

a withered petal

drifts from the potted rose . . .

dominoes collapse

 

--Kirsty Karkow

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

 

Ash Wednesday

the poinsettia's

withered leaves

 

Barbara Campitelli

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

**has a different winter kigo in each of its 3 lines - a winter kigo trifecta.

 

a withered leaf

now an ice pendant –

winter morning

 

Origa

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

 

mown grass -

stars and fireflies

exchanging blinks

 

Lavana Kray

Romania

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

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5 Points

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skeletonized

asparagus stalks

over the snow

 

F.J. Bergmann

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

 

 

Valentine's day -

on the windowsill

a withered rose

 

Laura Csilla

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

 

 

Heads down

the plants

withered to odd weather

 

purush Guntur

INDIA

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

 

 

freezing shadow

the willow

hiding nothing

 

Gregory Longenecker

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

withered berries –

chewing over what’s left

of me

 

Stella Pierides

DE/UK

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

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4 Points

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ripe watermelon

on a withered vine

breakfast

 

RD McManes

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

we try to revive

Mom's violets...

forgotten when she was ill

 

Rose Marie Stutts, EdD

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

beneath the clock

the jade

dying

 

Donna Bauerly

Dubuque, IA

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

**redo as 2 liner?

 

beneath the clock

dying jade

 

 

marriage over

her indoor plants

wither outside

 

Elaine Riddell

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

sigh!

next to her welcome mat

these withered plants

 

doris kasson

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

in the thaw

skittering on withered grass

our laughter

 

Alegria Imperial

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

wild grape

on withered vines

the acrobatics of waxwings

 

Tom Painting

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

 

wilting roses

on the bedside table

a book of tantra

 

Lauren Mayhew

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

 

between thawing

and sprouting

a layer of last year

 

~ ru

Canada

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

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3 Points

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winter prairie worn threadbare by a dry wind walking

 

Ginny Hoyle

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

not even spring rains

can coax our love to blossom

flower without scent

 

todd

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

In the widow's vase:

red roses from the last-year

St. Valentine's Day.

 

Zhanna P. Rader

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

dead flowers

at her leaning headstone...

short memory

 

natalia kuznetsova

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

unwatered tulips...

the hands of time

turning

 

Vinay Leo R.

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

yellow tips

on each bamboo leaf—

I take a nap

 

Marylouise Knight

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

rain at last--

the withered maize

is unmoved

 

James Dobson

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

snowflakes falling

on withered jade

passages

 

Jone Rush MacCulloch

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

withered ivy-

the horse spills

its rider

 

Rita Odeh

Nazareth, Israel

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

withering cactus

he bargains not to call

hospice yet

 

Christine L. Villa

USA

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

twilight mist

the whisper of the wind

in the withered grass

 

Tore Sverredal

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

hungry moon...

a white tail harvests

our dust bowl corn

 

S.E. Buffington

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

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2 Points

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tomato worms -

nothing left but

withered plants

 

Anonymous

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

sputniks -

tonight a hoarfrost

on the hemlock

 

sara winteridge

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

in a child's hand

withered daisy flower -

life is fragile

 

Zbigniew Myslowiecki

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

after her stroke

my elderly neighbor cuts back

her winter garden

 

Penny Harter

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

vine flickers

around the core

of a withered tree

 

Emma Pageot

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

desolate garden

last of the sun-scorched sweet peas

droop on the trellis

 

Deirdre Godwin

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

Bright blue sky

cut flowers for gifts -

now withered.

 

Trevor Camp

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

black silhouette

of last summer's poppy

against the snow

 

Ruth Powell

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

withered thistles

under the snow – a banquet

for the goldfinches

 

Tomislav

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

withered mums

one green shoot emerges

from the root

 

Janice Hornburg

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

by the glacier trail

shriveled cranberries…

tasting fall

 

Doris Lynch

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

withered milkweed

the once empty seedpods

now hold winter snow

 

Edward

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**I would really like it if it was shortened:

 

withered milkweed

the empty seedpods

hold snow

 

spring--

a green stalk

under withered leaves

 

Dica

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

withered lacecaps ...

I count on both hands

those I've lost

 

Kat Creighton

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

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1 Point

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held Christmas mail

contains house-sitter's regrets

withered plants

 

assu

 

 

dry season ...

farmers struggling with

wilting peppers

 

Keith A. Simmonds

T & T

 

  

snowdrops sentinel

by withered red leaf carpet

nice to meet the spring

 

STOPS

 

  

holidays over   can’t recall the reason   withered poinsettia

 

D W Skrivseth

 

  

he sits

watching over lifeless maize...

cracked soil

 

~ Febril Suzat

Kenya

 

  

exam of painting -

my "The withered plants"

are better than fresh

 

Robert Kania

 **Without line one I would have given two or three points

 

blind date

withered flowers

no show

 

Bernard Gieske

 

  

withered plants

on the balcony

first frost

 

John Soules

 

 

 a robin's remains

beneath the bramble

chill wind

 

Cara Holman

 

  

spring snow falling

whispers in last years grass

my father's words

 

Mark A. Fisher

Tehachapi, CA

 

  

browned leaves, dried petals...

recycling remembrances

into pot pourri

 

Tanja Cilia

 

  

windy day--

resting under snow

withered roses

 

gogatsu

 

  

fifth holiday album-

in the pot behind him

a dying cactus

 

Jon Espen Vassbotn

 

  

Valentine tulips

drooping over the rim

flirtation

 

Barbara Snow

 

  

grapevine,

next time I will be

more careful

 

---kash poet

 **Haiku or senryu? And what about the kigo? Still, i can't help liking it...

[I think withering of the grapevine could be implied here]

 

solstice moon;

the wisteria vines too

have withered

 

-manoj saranathan

 

  

withered rose...

always attached

to her soil

 

Jayashree Maniyil

 

  

puckered cactus

showing its one bloom

off

 

--Peter Newton

USA

 

  

mama's gone--

snow-laden hydrangeas

her funeral bells

 

jill

 

  

one sleek red leaf

picked from withered plants

in my old book

 

Kath Abela Wilson

 

 

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gray, lank grass

dragging at tulip leaves

threadbare blanket

 

mechaieh

Nashville, TN

 

 

Grandma lives in the nursing home

no one comes to visit

wither on the vine

 

Anonymous

 

  

lying listless

on withered creeper

a golden bird

 

--R.K.Singh

 

  

of light and darkness

the sun coleus is

releafing itself

 

Ernesto P. Santiago

Philippines

 

  

mid-winter sunshine:

prayer plant's three new leaves,

four withered

 

Andromeda Jazmon

 

  

throwing them into the snow

withered flowers

memories

 

Bernhard Kopf

Vienna, Austria

 

  

Summer finally.

Two of the currant bushes

somehow didn't take.

 

Horst Ludwig

 

  

long before spring

kindling evening fires

with withered weeds

 

Giselle Maya

Martin de Castillon,

France

 

  

a moonbeam

kisses a withered straw

my frozen ears

 

Oddbjørn Aardalen

 

  

TV night

hedge banks wither

along maize fields

 

Ralf Bröker

 

 

 the last gasp

of an old tree -

withered wintry storm

 

Juhani Tikkanen

Finland

 

  

Back lit by the sun

Ornamental grass seed heads

glow back to life

 

gourdman

 

  

tentative yet--

like desire without ease

buried bulbs swell

 

Ed Higgins

 

  

the porch waits in snow

no wind no sigh

naked bonsai swings

 

kragerø

 

  

white down

breaks branches

withered tree

 

Urszula Wielanowska

 

  

amid castle ruins

withered plants to and fro

in morning breeze

 

Vishnu P Kapoor

 

  

withered baby's breath

against the rose

love's edges start to curl

 

Jennifer Thompson

 

  

summer holidays

I return to yellow lawns

and drooping plants

 

Barbara A Taylor

Mountain Top NSW

Australia

 

  

a lemon now withered

from the day she died . . .

my grandpa's lost love

 

Ron C. Moss

 

  

one last glimpse

of my father’s hands

withered plants

 

Anonymous

 

  

in a dark window

withered geranium

seen better days

 

Frances O'Keeffe

 

  

Ganesha moon

may I borrow your trunk

for my flowers?

 

Alan Summers

 

  

King of the brown thumb

my withered plants include

even hardy cactii

 

Philip Mizener

 

  

withered plants

in this sudden frost

my love turned away

 

John Daleiden,

Phoenix, Arizona in the Sonoran Desert

 

  

glad-handing

elephant ear, its welcome tiring

with the cold

 

Anonymous

 

  

winter flu

after four days

withered dahlias

 

Stevie Strang

 

  

to the window

a lover went out

withered ivy

 

LeRoy Gorman

  

 

flowers

seen as withered

in time breath

 

Tuvshinzaya Nergui

Mongolia Tsetserleg city

 

  

old man sips tea

watching the withered flowers –

the hot sidewalk

 

Miorita

 

  

whitetail deer paw

through the crusty snow

last year's sweet peas

 

DeVar

 

 

 shelf of withered plants

holding flower show tickets

......hope springs eternal

 

Hazel A. Witherspoon

 

  

the dust

of clipped rose canes...

one day closer to spring

 

j. cully 

 

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General Comments:

 

**This was apparently a tough kigo to avoid being trite... but loved these.

# 36—by Michael McClintock (12pts)

# 61—by Sandi Pray (37pts)

#125—by Scott Abeles (38pts)

 

**I had 12 candidates for votes and could have had more! What a crop of "witherers" :)

 

**A number of good haiku in this selection. I ended up liking most some poems that address the assigned subject only tangentially but still enough to work.

 

**A classic theme and daunting challenge.

 

**Thanks! I won't make any withered comments.

 

**An exceptionally high number of strong contenders in this month's kigo list.

 

**There were many beautiful and touching haiku. It was difficult to make a choice.

 

**This is the hot dry season [in Kenya], and so "withered plants" could perhaps even become a kigo in Kenya for the present time of year :

 

**I enjoyed prowling through the Issa site [source of the kigo section example for February]

 

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Free Format Theme:

COVER 

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First Place  -  40 Points

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churchyard . . .

knowing the names

covered in snow

 

Michael McClintock

(2,7,20) = 40 pts

**This one grew on me; its fusion of image and thought is finally irresistible.

**Very poignant

**A lot of atmosphere, resonance, and unsentimental poignancy is packed into these few but well-chosen words within the well-crafted haiku.

 **for specific image, would have preferred "name" instead of "names" in line2.

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Second Place  -  35 Points

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zen garden

covered with snow:

zen garden

 

John McDonald

Edinburgh Scotland

(2,9,11) = 35 pts

**It is what it is.

 

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Third Place  -  31 Points

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within the crow’s caw the coming night

 

martin gottlieb cohen

(2,7,11) = 31 pts

**echoes of the Basho's classic in this fine one-liner

 

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25 Points

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fig leaf

the Sunday school class

stifles their giggles

 

Michele L. Harvey

(1,5,12) = 25 pts

** Pick of the litter ;-)

**can't be bad if it makes me grin from ear to ear

**My chuckles were not stifled.

**As light as a fig leaf, but that's all right.

**I like what's unsaid in it

 

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22 Points

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a warmer day...

the pond's surface

covered with sky

 

~Devika

(0,5,12) = 22 pts

 

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19 Points

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last letter

lily petals cover

her words

 

Eduard TARA

(1,5,6) = 19 pts

 

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18 Points

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early dusk -

slipping between the covers

of my favorite book

 

Cara Holman

(1,3,9) = 18 pts

 

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17 Points

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autumn rain

mountains

fade away

 

Jan O'Loughlin

Australia

(1,3,8) = 17 pts

 

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16 Points

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from head to toe

our two year old

finds the flour

 

Harvey Jenkins

(0,3,10) = 16 pts

**My niece loves to help in the kitchen too.

 

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15 Points

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under cover

of darkness

our heart to heart

 

Tom Painting

(2,2,5) = 15 pts

**like the ambiguousness of "heart to heart"; would have given more points if first word "under" omitted resulting in two liner: cover of darkness/our heart-to-heart.

 

first snowfall

she spreads a new quilt

over the bed

 

Janice Hornburg

(0,2,11) = 15 pts

 

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13 Points

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snow falling on snow angels

 

polona

(0,3,7) = 13 pts

 

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12 Points

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the wood casket

covered with flowers -

butterflies

 

Israel López Balan

(0,3,6) = 12 pts

 

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11 Points

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hiding under the cover

of the compost bed

scent of spring

 

doris kasson

(2,2,1) = 11 pts

 

 

twilight moon

the misty field fills

with jackdaws

 

Tore Sverredal

(0,0,11) = 11 pts

**I felt that more mystery would be added by dispensing with “mist”.

 

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10 Points

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great grandma's quilt

the edge frayed from years

of little chins

 

Diane Mayr

(2,1,2) = 10 pts

**Love the image of story time

**I really enjoyed this but felt it needed paring down just a little.

**We leave our imprint on inanimate objects all the time - they become visual and tangible memories of what we've done, where we've been. The "little chins" that animate this poem, the image of babies, contrasts beautifully with the image of "great grandma," with the quilt serving as the bridge between the old generation and the new, as well as connecting the generations of babies in between. Nothing invokes the sense of connectedness, the sense of continuity, and the sense of family as strongly as a quilt.

 

covered in jasmine -

she brushes moonlight

through her hair

 

Sandi Pray

Robbinsville, NC

USA

(1,0,7) = 10 pts

 

 

slow music...

he covers me

with olive oil

 

Ramesh Anand

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

 

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9 Points

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early spring

step by step the deer tracks

recede

 

Svend A. Doggfall

(0,3,3) = 9 pts

**A remarkable haiku that succeeded in giving me the impression of the slow, cautious movement of deer wandering in the woods. In addition, without mentioning the words "snow" or "melting," that is exactly what the poem makes you see. The spring thaw, the reluctant retreat of winter, the rhythm of the seasons, the movement of deer through the wilderness, it's all here. A well crafted gem!

 

I like to

cover my ice

with vodka

 

Bill Hudson

(0,2,5) = 9 pts

 

 

peek-a-boo---

the baby covers

his own eyes

 

Penny Harter

(0,0,9) = 9 pts

**What I like about this is that it catches a moment that, while not necessarily memorable, is delightful when it happens; and, now that we have the poem, the moment is more likely to be remembered.

 

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8 Points

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heaps of heavy fog

cover the evening sky...

the moon seeks shelter

 

Keith A. Simmonds

T & T

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

 

 

under the cover

of freshly fallen snow -

crocuses waiting

 

Kat Creighton

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

 

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7 Points

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dusk covering

a day of laughter

in the first snow

 

Ernesto P. Santiago

Philippines

(1,0,4) = 7 pts

 

 

watching the cat

till she's covered in darkness

moonless night

 

Gregory Longenecker

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

north wind

this cover to cover

night

 

Ann K. Schwader

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

**ah, the coziness of a warm blanket and a good book in spite of the elements...

 

snow- covered

country mailbox---

seed catalogues

 

John Soules

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

childhood home --

wedged between album covers

my rock star life

 

S.M. Abeles

USA

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

undercover

... an ant crawling out of

the insect book

 

Radka Mindova

Bulgariq

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

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6 Points

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then the clouds

covered the moon

and I was alone

 

helge t.

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

 

Valentine's Day

the chocolate-coated

first kiss

 

Ellen Compton

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

 

Alone, the kitten

rolling and tangled in yarn,

covered in fun

 

Rafael Cruz

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

 

ice

on the pond

laughter

 

gogatsu

(0,3,0) = 6 pts

 

 

still waters...

he covers my shiver

with his sweater

 

Roberta Beary

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

city sirens cover my mother's lullaby

 

--Peter Newton

USA

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

Heavy shower -

an old covered bridge

shelters two doves.

 

Zhanna P. Rader

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

**A beautiful quiet rural observation.

 

 

book cover

the author’s sun spots

airbrushed

 

Stella Pierides

(0,0,6) = 6 pts

 

 

subway train

she attempts to cover

Fifty Shades of Grey

 

Lauren Mayhew

(0,0,6) = 6 pts

 

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5 Points

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rainy afternoon…

two bluejays at the feeder

shake off their feathers

 

Dica

(1,0,2) = 5 pts

 

 

parting...

that scratched bark

of the plum tree

 

Rita Odeh

Nazareth, Israel

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

 

 

a sleeping snake

curled between the eggs--

layers of leaves

 

--R.K. Singh

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

hand covers hand

blue veins intersect

you’ve forgotten my name

 

Doris Lynch

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

almost covering the sun

too close to me-

a dragonfly

 

---kash poet

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

oil spill

covered head to toe

a snowy white egret

 

Stevie Strang

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

**Starkly sad, this vote for all endangered species

 

cloud cover...his hand on mine

 

Jennifer Thompson

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

 

air raid -

cherry petals covering

a lost puppet

 

Cezar Ciobîcă

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

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4 Points

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bundles of dead leaves

blanketing summer skies

dormant hydrangeas

 

F.J. Bergmann

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

restless behinds

rustling against barstools

he switches to covers

 

mechaieh

Nashville, TN

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

river mist creeps

across the garden--

all my flowers vanish

 

Rose Marie Stutts, EdD

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

first frost   a patchwork of cloths cover the garden

 

D W Skrivseth

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

opening day --

I cover my new textbook

with brown paper

 

~ DENNIS WRIGHT

Kenya

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

winter rain...

a sheet of ice covers

the slippery elm

 

S.E. Buffington

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

salt smell of home

brittle ice

covers the cove

 

Catherine J.S. Lee

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

Valentine's day --

she covers her neck

with a red scarf

 

~ Ezekiel Mbira

Kenya

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

**Being a guy, I'm proud of myself for getting line 2. Assuming I did. Hint: In my reading, there's only one person in the poem.

 

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3 Points

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cover band playing

words everyone knows

ain't no sunshine

 

Mark A. Fisher

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

**Lately was in a store where everyone is singing to overhead Muzak

 

Early waking -

under bed cover

snoring wife.

 

Trevor Camp

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

**I can certainly identify with this poem, as can, I'm sure, many other married men.

 

the long winter

a cover band

fills two hours

 

LeRoy Gorman

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

a warm wind

melts some of the snow cover--

mother's old quilt

 

DeVar

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

steady rain --

one large umbrella

covers us both

 

~ Isabelle Prondzynski

Japan

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

parting words -

a cover of raindrops

 

Vinay Leo R.

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

winter heat

pushing down

the covers

 

BILL KENNEY

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

^^Here's one from a New York apartment that may speak only to readers who have lived, and tried to sleep, in a New York apartment.

 

cover of pines--

brown eyes

of white-tailed fawns

 

jill

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

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2 Points

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spring warmth

under the cover of night

the lovers remain

 

Barbara Campitelli

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

storm clouds

cloak

mountain peaks

 

Jane DeJonghe

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

blue cover --

the book attracts me

to the left shelf

 

~ Elijah Juma

Kenya

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

child make a bow

in front of the statue –

the glazed frost covers the street

 

Miorita

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

spring rain

an imaginary spy hides

under cover

 

RD McManes

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**There’s a lot of play and yet a little yugen mystery too in this haiku, where the subject could be a child, or another small animal, or something else entirely.

 

fog uncovers

a boat named Dauntless--

hard on the rocks

 

--Kirsty Karkow

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**I like the wry humor of this.

 

 

Bombers glittering

high up in the sky. — Mother's

rough "Into the house!"

 

Horst Ludwig

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

full moon

a wolfs cry

a carrot nose smells snow

 

Oddbjørn Aardalen

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

newly planted

she covers the lemon tree

in case of frost

 

André Surridge

Hamilton,

New Zealand

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

a robin --

last year's leaves still

cover the ground

 

Angie Werren

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

burst of wind -

thistle carpet

on stair steps

 

Lavana Kray

Romania

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

parakeet critique

droppings cover

yesterday's headlines

 

Edward

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

winter vineyards

hillsides white

with frost cloth

 

Elaine Riddell

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**This is so quiet I completely overlooked it the first time through; it rewards a return visit.

 

bus ride —

she covers the suckling child

and sings lullabies

 

John Daleiden

Phoenix, Arizona in the Sonoran Desert:

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

scorching sun --

a vendor covers her stall

with a white sheet

 

~ Brian Mulando

Kenya

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

ground cover...

the idea slowly

picks up

 

Jayashree Maniyil

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**I like how it can read many ways

 

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1 Point

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rawhide ring

tucked under the couch cushion

dog sleeps soundly

 

assu

 

 

yellow bamboo leaves

cover the bare ground

late autumn

 

Anonymous

  

 

covered with red leaves

the old cat

snoring

 

Bernhard Kopf

Vienna, Austria

 

  

mid-winter

soba for long life

the scent of its steam

 

Giselle Maya

France

 

  

red knit stockings!

trees and street lamps

sheathed overnight

 

maxianne

 

  

childhood

rubber-band guns

"I've got you covered!"

 

Donna Bauerly

Dubuque, IA

 

  

the angry hen

covering her eggs—

my hand reaches under

 

Ed Higgins

 

  

flood plain -

a sparrow hawk covers

the evacuation

 

sara winteridge

 ** Good to have haiku that are objective in their subject matter. There are all kinds of animals can suffer from a flood disaster, not just humans, so a sparrow hawk, free from the land, will look for its own spoils.

 

freak storm -

blowing snow covers

the purple crocus

 

Anonymous

 

  

covered in shavings

the nude legs of fig trees

bare root

 

Jennifer Savage

San Diego

 

  

pine grows -

book cover

fades

 

Robert Kania

 

 

at peace

in the sweltering heat:

a buffalo covered in mud !

 

-- Chitra Rajappa

 

  

spring moon

face to face in bed room

she covers herself

 

Vishnu P Kapoor

 

  

ice coats the steps—

daydreams

where did you go

 

Marylouise Knight

 

  

the house

under cover of night

full of argument

 

Bernard Gieske

 

  

the wisdom

of a second marriage -

fallout shelter

 

Carolyn Coit Dancy

 

  

the hooker's red lips

a fresh cover of snow

in her footprints

 

Ron C. Moss

**A bit lurid at first reading, but it holds up on return visits; that "cover of snow" covers a lot.

 

mint covers the soil

a delicious green carpet

weeds cannot grow there

 

Tanja

 

  

blue antelope

today my bookcover

is dedicated to you

 

Alan Summers

 

  

her eyelids droop--

for a while

they cover the pain

 

James Dobson

 

  

biting winter wind

flannel shirt keeps nothin’ out

got no one to call

 

todd

 

  

hunting season dawns

under the covers the kitten

stalks my toes

 

Anonymous

 

  

mid-summer fog;

on the dark manhole cover-

a crimson maple leaf.

 

-manoj saranathan

 

  

mammatus clouds

cover the moon . . .

her milk starts flowing again

 

Bill Pauly

 ^^Thanks for your "wow" about my choice of mammatus clouds. Aren't they absolutely incredible? I had to Google, too; they're not in my best dictionary, of all things. Go figure.

 

windy snow

covers the strawberry field -

a single scarecrow

 

Juhani Tikkanen

Finland

 

  

on the cover

of his cat’s photo album

nose marks

 

Anonymous

 

  

cold breeze --

a mother covers her child

with a kanga*

 

~ Mercy Amunze

Kenya

**A kanga is a piece of cotton cloth printed with colourful patterns and a motto.

 

  

a cover for his thoughts

never marry a man

who wears sunglasses

 

Kath Abela Wilson

 

  

wailing baby...

a congregation's

covered smiles

 

j. cully

 

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cranberry bruises

cover her forearms

Christmas pageant

 

if

 

 

the furnace clicks on–

to cover my back I shift

closer to you

 

Adelaide B. Shaw

 

  

anniversary -

talking about love

with a cover girl

 

Laura Csilla

 

 

 ragged blue jeans -

her Valentine Day gift

discovering

 

STOPS

ROMANIA

  

 

love me tender

she caresses

his cover

 

Ralf Bröker

 

  

snow cover

clings to twigs fearing

the sun

 

gourdman

 

  

his bald spot covered

clumsily with the thin hair

oh, vanity...

 

natalia kuznetsova

 

  

porch in snow and pale sky

two cypresses covered with sacks

tracks of thin feet

 

kragerø

 

  

elation

my photograph chosen

for the cover

 

Barbara A Taylor

Mountain Top NSW

Australia

^^I have been lucky to have my images chosen for a front and a back cover of The Heron's Nest, haiku journal, in the past two years.

 

cover story

on a rescue mission ...

shooting stars

 

Angelo B. Ancheta

 

  

white everywhere –

undercover

snowdrops

 

Virginia Popescu

PHOENIX

  

 

toddler takes refuge

under the table

hairbrush phobia

 

Frances O'Keeffe

 

  

gentle, misting day

under cover of grey skies

spring begins to stir

 

Deirdre Godwin

 

 

 sticky snow;

sweetness covers

each twig

 

Andromeda Jazmon

 

 

 evening dew—

a half-covered moon

flits in his eyes

 

Alegria Imperial

 

  

just a light cover

over the spring bed

sunflower seeds

 

Barbara Snow

 

  

safe behind winters gloom

when signs of spring

blow my cover

 

Jon Espen Vassbotn

 

  

winter commute

cinnamon sugar of snow

covered grasses and puddles

 

Anonymous

 

  

fresh snowfall

over the city's grime

a mantle

 

Ruth Powell

 

  

a plate covered

with dust and spiders' webs --

rubbish bin

 

~ Rose Akaliche

Kenya

 

  

a hedge covered

by the snow – sparrows' twitter

spreading the warmth

 

Tomislav

 

 

roadside wreck --

its rear window covered

with dust

 

~ Joshua Kaweto

Kenya

 

  

nice

ornamental cover

the burning bush

 

Dan Schwerin

 

  

fourth watch-

covers not shielding me from stress

willing peace with the dawn

 

Hazel A. Witherspoon 

 

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General Comments:

**Too many good ones in the Free Format category this time - I wanted to give them all more points, but since I only had six, I wanted as many of my favourites as possible to get a little something!

 

**So many good covers to get warm under! And many senryu that brought forth laughter!

 

**Hard to choose this time. An unusually strong kukai.

 

** How important is it that we stick to the assigned topic? Of this month's entries, I liked #98 ("autumn rain") as well as any, but I didn't vote for it, because I felt it wandered too far away from "cover" to be considered. Of course, the winner in December's Free Format category had absolutely nothing to do with "departing," the assigned topic. But I didn't vote for that one either, and for the same reason. What should be done about poems that flagrantly disregard the topics that most of us consider binding when we submit our entries?

 

**Hello shiki team; A lovely selection of free formats.

 

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