Here are the results for the April 2014 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was SLOW DAY, and our Free Format subject was ALLUSION
Congratulations to ***Dejan Pavlinović***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***S.E. Buffington***, winner of our Free Format section!
Please Note: Voter comments are in dark red italics. Poet's comments are in blue italics.
Kigo Theme:
SLOW DAY
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First Place - 20 Points
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airport delay...
behind the glass window
the same clouds
Dejan Pavlinović
Pula, Croatia
(0,4,12) = 20 pts
(P.s. This one is really happening right now :-) One hour delay fight to Venice at Lyon airport.)
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Second Place - 19 Points
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slow day
a dragonfly lands
on the bobber
Tom Painting
(1,3,10) = 19 pts
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Third Place - 18 Points
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slow day . . .
the sun-warmed turtle
starts to move
Kirsty Karkow
(1,5,5) = 18 pts
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17 Points
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summer noon —
counting each turn
of a rusted fan
Vinay Leo R.
(0,4,9) = 17 pts
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16 Points
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noon stillness...
tracing the rustle of
a young leaf
Paresh
(2,4,2) = 16 pts
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15 Points
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long twilight . . .
everything
already said
Bill Kenney
(1,2,8) = 15 pts
each hour
longer than the other...
first day of school
-Shloka Shankar
Bangalore, India
(0,5,5) = 15 pts
spring evening
the slow slide of bubbles
to the bathtub drain
Beverley George
(0,3,9) = 15 pts
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13 Points
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we breathe
one another’s air—
the old pine
Sondra J. Byrnes
USA
(1,3,4) = 13 pts
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11 Points
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on the way to shrine -
the sound of the bells scatters
cherry petals
Ailoaei Cristina
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
slow day
the old topics
circled
Ramesh Anand
Bangalore, India.
(1,1,6) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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checking again --
have the buds blossomed
yet
Leslie Montgomery
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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I too, slug,
am a stranger...
slow day
Rita Odeh
Nazareth, Israel
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
river
yet another
eddy
dust
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
deep in the slow day
an old couple is shining
the empty mailbox
Cristian Mocanu
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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cherry blossoms
the names he starts reading
off the Vietnam Wall
carlos gesmundo
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
slow day
I follow the progress
of a snail
Earl Keener
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
slow day . . .
the lawn sprinklers
wetting the sidewalks
Michael McClintock
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
slow day
watching a cloud face
morph
--Diane Mayr
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
slow day
even the slug
grows longer
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
**This made me smile -- a great and fitting observation!
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7 Points
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lengthening days…
strains of an evening raga*
in the wind
Anitha Varma
India
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
* A raga (literally "beauty, melody"; also spelled raag, raaga, ragam; pronounced rāga, rāg or rāgam) is one of the melodic modes used in Indian Classical Music.
tree shadow--
from sidewalk to yard
then everywhere
John Holt tori inu
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
all day rain . . .
a clown paints his face
without a smile
Ron C. Moss
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
dozing
with the Saturday crossword
still raining
Ruth Powell
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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cloudy dawn
dew lingers longer
on lotus leaves
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai India
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
dogwood blossoms
unfold
one by one
Jone Rush MacCulloch
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
slow day
my cat and I take turns
napping
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
strung on a contrail April clouds
Alan S. Bridges
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
desert chill…
a turtle turns
around
Ted van Zutphen
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
slow day . . .
counting daisy petals
in the rain
Bill Pauly
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
Slow day -
calculating the speed
of a garden snail.
Zhanna P. Rader
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
turning to Facebook
for the umpteenth time --
slow day
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
the beach hut’s
peeling blue paint –
slow days
Stella Pierides
DE/UK.
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
April showers?
we start another game
of Monopoly
Laurene
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
long day's end
the far island becomes
spring mist
Jan O'Loughlin
(Australia)
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
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Points
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5 long day...
the brightest sun discloses
my loneliness
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg city, Mongolia
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
long afternoon . . .
garden snails weaving
the rain-soaked lawn
Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
one note call
of the saw whet owl
a slow day ends
Beth Powell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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afternoon tea
after noon
me
helge t.
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
discussing free will
nothing better to do
than watch the snow melt
Ignatius Fay
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
oh, for a slow day---
to sit and watch the sun glide
through blue puff-cloud sky
jill
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
** I chose this for a point as I identify well with it. When my children were young/teenage and would complain of boredom, I'd tell them I had too much to do and say, ah, the luxury of being bored.
yard clean-up
through the pines a soft breeze
slows my pace
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
under slow clouds
she knits and knits
over and over
--Aalix Roake
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
cold snap . . .
the days before you come home
from rehab
Christine L. Villa
USA
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
November twilight --
Granny tries to recognize
the hand in her hand ...
Beate Conrad
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
flowering oxalis
and this indoor gardener
watching it rain
maxianne
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
April morning...
the old cat and I
snore in the sun
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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yes, do tell me yes.
i pace an eternity
in a single day!
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
armchair by the fire
popcorn, cocoa, cat and book
perfect afternoon
Deirdre Godwin
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
** I am glad that more people are using the 5-7-5 form
the cherrybloom and the morning
open
simultaneously
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
a shaft of sun--
for the pure joy of it
I pause
Gerry Bravi
Canada
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
slow day the Molasses River turns back upon itself
Doris
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
early spring...
at the end of long day
willows bud
Burenbileg Batsuuri
Ulaanbaatar Mongolia
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
oh, April sunrays!
waking me up
before the alarm clock
Anne Zooey Lind
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
slow day –
the sparrows splash
in the little brook
Tomislav
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
orbit
a ring forms
around my beer
S.M. Abeles
USA
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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kittenless -
the cat's mourning
the longest Sunday
Petya Gleridis
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
what day could be gray
watching a woods
greening
Donna Bauerly
Iowa
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
willing the clock on
in slow-falling dusk
towards end of day
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
all day
couple swallows carrying grass
tirelessly...
Nadalsuren Purevdorj
Ulaanbaatar.Mongolia
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
Palm Sunday morning
looks like some drizzle maybe,
maybe even snow
Horst Ludwig
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
loitering around
from morning till night
an endless day
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
rising sun
across desert sand
turtle's first step
Bernard Gieske
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
spring breeze -
turtles arrive to the pond
one by one
Israel López Balan
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
spring snow - I shovel
to the birdfeeders
then call it a day
Jane DeJonghe
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
seagull sky
at day's end
still no news
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
slow day ―
the way home by bike
with the light off
Yukiko Yamada
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
** I can feel with this -- a real spring haiku!
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1 Point
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spring clean up
four dead spiders
on my broom stick
Purush
Ellicott city MD
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
picnic blanket
the sizzle
of rotating weenies
carol pearce-worthington
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
warm spring sunshine . . .
croci blue peeks through
crying ice crystals
Eric P
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
spring fever-
endless night with cats outside
serenading
Natalia Kuznetsova,
Moscow, Russia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
spring snow
waiting to stroke blossom dew
on your dimples
Karin Anderson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
easy morning…
melting snow with a
cup of tea
D W Skrivseth
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
slow day dawning—
the snail’s egg nursery
just half full
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
lazy afternoon
whole dandelion globes
in spite of the breeze
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
ambulance sound… it’s taken
the rest of my life
to get here
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
finally at dusk
news of a safe delivery
first grandchild
Elaine Riddell
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
dragged
by the rickshaw-puller--
the squeak of a slow day
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
slow day
on the narrow road
mating snails
cfc
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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slow day
on the muddied path
pink petals at play
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
even on a long day
so little time - so many spring flowers
but barren bachelor’s buttonhole
Daniela Bullas
windrow opens
on the rough young sward
blue-eyed grass
assu
cherry flowers touch-
lying under the tree
till the end of wind
Lavana kray
Romania
slow day no mail
no check in the mail and lunch
is hours away
Ginny Hoyle
waiting for its arrival
the calendar says
today is spring
Barbara Campitelli
rain sounds good
covers pulled up to my chin
sleeping in
Tom Conally
waning moon!
just one whooping crane egg
left ...
Svend A. Doggfall
stinking pile -
changed cloth
of one more slow day
Ajaya Mahala
Pune, India
gooseberry oil -
an afterglow of her love
in all those braids
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh,India
Waiting for the postman –
the day is wasting
without result
Miorita
April weekend:
starting at my phone
for an update
Raamesh Gowri Raghavan
Mumbai, India
stand still sun-
the fight of the trapped fly
nearing its end
--kashinath karmakar,India
incessant rain--
to long for the first ray
like the last leaf
Yesha Shah
India
unsold Easter lilies -
all the buyers ensconced
in the church
Angelee Deodhar
the arum lilly spathe...
all day
I watch its shadow grow
Samar Ghose
Australia
tripping over daylight
still on the sidewalk
tulips laughing at me
- mechaieh
last day of Lent –
waiting for
Easter feast
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
war zone--
oh for a customer
to feel the peaches
James Dobson.
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Honorable Mention
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quiet bus stop
the surrounding area
litter free
Bill Hudson
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General Comments:
** lots of great images, but many of these haiku have no kigo reference.
**It's been difficult making the right choice in this section, there were so many brilliant entries! Such a pity that we have only 6 points to give.
**Several good haiku this month. I couldn't narrow it beyond six.
**Thank you for continuing this opportunity to write, submit, and vote.
**I liked a lot of these. I had to spread the wealth.
**As always thanks--your contest is never a "slow day."
**We are having hot spring weather here, in Autumn! Peach blossom outside my window!!!!
**Thank you for this collection, which was an interesting one. I would have liked to have focused only on the haiku that actually used the kigo, but then relented, as there were not that many, and as there were some other good ones that expressed a sense of slowness.
** There were not many haiku that actually mentioned the kigo "slow day".
^^Probably my error. I didn’t require it. (GH)
** I wonder why there were so many haiku mentioning turtles -- perhaps a spring kigo in some parts of the USA?
**I really enjoyed this exercise!
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Free Format Theme:
ALLUSION
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First Place - 20 Points
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Easter brunch...
the toddler orders
green eggs and ham
S.E. Buffington
(0,5,10) = 20 pts
**This made me smile! I wonder whether this has happened many times?
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Second Place - 18 Points
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Oh, snail, at my age
we should reach the hilltop
together
Tomislav
(0,5,8) = 18 pts
**Though I usually prefer haiku without punctuation, this illustrates well how I feel sometimes.
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Third Place - 17 Points
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abandoned barn--
one hundred years of solitude
and me
sanjuktaa
India
(2,3,5) = 17 pts
AND
wheelbarrow, chickens--
so much depends upon
the absent rain
Ginny Hoyle
(1,3,8) = 17 pts
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14 Points
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between tall pines echoes of other voices
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top NSW
Australia
(2,2,4) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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grin without a cat…
a sliver of a moon
gets caught in the tree
Anitha Varma
India.
(1,1,8) = 13 pts
**Very nice one!
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12 Points
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arlington-
the long shadow
of each white stone
Nancy Smith
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
[alluding to one of my two favorite haiku:
morning sun-
the long shadows
of little stones
Israel López Balan
Fourth Annual shiki Kukai
First Place]
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11 Points
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long night
my life closed twice
before its close
Ramesh Anand
Bangalore, India
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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between the years...
to stop or not to stop
her life support
cfc
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
[it alludes to the Shakespeare's to be or not to be.../Hamlet's soliloquy]
the “to be”
of the bee…
cactus bloom
Ted van Zutphen
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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prairie flower—
yes i said yes
i am yes
Sondra J. Byrnes
USA
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
first crocus
again I forget
where we live
Beth Powell
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
[Allusion to:
in this world
we stroll along the roof of hell
gazing at flowers
~Issa]
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8 Points
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passing an empty bench
just a spider and
a bowl
Bill Hudson
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
**3pts Brilliant! Love this and wish I'd written it, congrats!
autumn twilight
one-two-three crows landing
on the same branch
Adelaide
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
Fuji mountain
seems close for a boy
with new boot...
Burenbileg Batsuuri
Ulaanbaatar Mongolia
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
not seeing
the red of her lips
until that white flesh
Alan S. Bridges
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
debris search
the vastness of each
empty wave
Jan O'Loughlin
(Australia)
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
[Allusion to recent news items on the missing plane MH370]
e. e. the boy
eating mud-luscious
to see if it is
Bill Pauly
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
apple bite -
reddening
of desires
Ajaya Mahala
Pune, India
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
cruelest month
the white lilacs
under snow
Ann K. Schwader
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
[T.S. Eliot, “The Waste Land”]
the garden at dusk —
as good a place as any
for betrayal
Shelley Krause
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
dark cloud--
I wander alone
but for the daffodils
James Dobson.
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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winter blues
in my pocket
no petals
--Diane Mayr
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
splash and silence -
my life
near an old pond
Robert Kania
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
photo album...
Maud's fading youth
before her
-Shloka Shankar
Bangalore, India
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
[Note: This haiku alludes to a poem by W. B. Yeats titled, 'When You are Old'.]
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6 Points
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after street riots
burned tires and scattered debris...
time to gather stones
Natalia Kuznetsova
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
evening rain . . .
I let my dreams drip
on Pollock's canvas
Christine L. Villa, USA
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
rye field
a withered New Yorker
waits ...
S.M. Abeles
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
[J.D. Salinger, The Catcher in the Rye]
spring dusk;
the teakettle moving from
one hand to next
-manoj saranathan
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
[subtly influenced by and alluding to Buson's
Lighting one candle
with another candle--
spring evening.]
bleached bones
half buried in desert sand
paradise lost
Bernard Gieske
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
the only thing
we have to fear . . .
winter fog
Bill Kenney
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
[I don't think you have to be American to catch this allusion. But perhaps you have to be of a certain age (mine, for instance)]
it's a plane
it's Superman - no, it's
a bird!
Anne Zooey Lind
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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whiff of pig
scent of roses
... Blandings Castle
-- Chitra Rajappa,
Bangalore, India.
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
[This refers to P.G. Wodehouse's entertaining novels about the Lord Emsworth of Blandings Castle and his prize pig, the "Empress".
I had a lot of fun reading haiku using allusions as a technique. ]
dozing atop rusty stake clinging to muddy horseshoes Buson butterfly
krw
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
bullet holes
in the classroom Globe-
"e pur si muove"
Lavana kray
Romania
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
between one haiku
and another
the thesaurus and I
Barbara Campitelli
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
no one to listen --
everywhere I turn
fallen trees
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
the day moon
so clear in two pools—
ground zero
Samar Ghose
Australia
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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at the train station
without the destination board
I am alone...
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg city, Mongolia
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
gone with the east wind -
catkins from weeping willows
crossing the river
Daniela Bullas
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
Out, damn'd spot!
crimson stains each white petal
hibiscus
Doris
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
[refers to Lady Macbeth's hand-washing scene]
Mother Goose
hissing on her nest
one two three four five
Earl Keener
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
without you
a crooked highway
of loneliness
Ruth Powell
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
[The allusion is to a Bob Dylan song. I don't remember the name, but the first verse is:
If today was not a crooked highway
If tonight was not a crooked trail
If tomorrow wasn't such a long time
lonesome would mean nothing to you at all]
his empty chair
as we play poker —
autumn breeze
Vinay Leo R.
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
beauty pageant -
between participants
the apple of discord
Ailoaei Cristina
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
not
looking behind ...
his salt tears
dust
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
[Lot’s wife ...]
my brain coral paperweight a poor Yorick
Scott Mason
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
harvest moon -
the soft flow of her curls
in the winnowing wind
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh,India
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
[Allusion ...Ode To Autumn by John Keats ]
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3 Points
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Half Dome floating in the clouds with the Flying Pope
Bruce H. Feingold
Berkeley, CA
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
soaring up so high
could Daedelus even dream
of Apollo’s flight?
Deirdre Godwin
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
**I love the double meaning of Apollo!
my favorite frog
slips into the pond...
a long croak
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Je m’appelle Robert.
Although a name means little
It’s what I call me.
Robert C. Howard
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
[William Shakespeare - Romeo and Juliet]
shaking
peonies until
all let go
D W Skrivseth
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
the sound of crickets
in the bee-loud glade
he plants nine bean-rows
Jone Rush MacCulloch
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
[Thinking of Yeats...Innisfree]
sunset dying -
an empty beer can
caught by seaweeds
dsnake1
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
maybe
maybe not
choices, choices
John Hubbard
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
** Most of us can relate to this!
[Referring to Hamlet by William Shakespeare]
inconstant moon --
the lie in your eyes
you're not telling
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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eleven stars-
bowing down
to me
Rita Odeh
Nazareth, Israel
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
[Here is my haiku which alludes to the biblical story of Joseph's dream:0]
the last snow melted
northwest from the capital:
my roof-still standing…
Cristian Mocanu
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
[Note: the allusion here is to a famous tanka by the monk (some call him Bishop) Henjo (no.8 in “Hyakunin Isshu”)which reads:
my lowly hut is
southeast from the Capital
thus I chose to live.
and the world in which I live
they have called “The Mount of Gloom”
The house in which I live is indeed situated to the northwest of our country’s capital in a region prone to floods.]
sunflower haze -
Jack's and Allen's shadows
along the rails
Petya Gleridis
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
[Sunflower Sutra by A. Ginsberg and On the Road by J. Kerouac ]
Asked her age,
a mute beggar in rags
shows a finger.
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
[Allusion to Issa haiku:
Asked his age
he holds up one hand -
summer clothes (Issa)]
twice divorced
in bed with
women in love
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
Good Friday evening ...
The sun is arching over
troubled water.
Beate Conrad
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
[Allusion to P. Simon"s and Art Garfunkel's song "Bridge over Troubled Water" from 1970, which was influenced by the gospel music to which Simon was listening at that time, especially the Swan Silvertones and their song "Mary Don't You Weep". The name of the title track was inspired by the latter's line "I'll be your bridge over deep water, if you trust in my name."]
her many problems
some days La Mancha
not so far away
Ignatius Fay
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
lost love...
a planet ceases
to be
Paresh
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
hope is the thing with
feathers—turning old leaves
spring’s first robin
Gerry Bravi
Canada
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
in cloud's dark mist
a perfect petroglyph
of antlered deer
Jane DeJonghe
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
Independence Day . . .
at the twilight’s last gleaming,
the rockets’ red glare
Michael McClintock
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
[Lines 2 & 3 from “Star-Spangled Banner”, lyrics by Francis Scott Key]
Couldn’t resist the obviousness of this one . . . which many of us witness, just like this, each July 4th evening in public parks across the country . . .]
Eng. lit. exam:
April is the
cruelest month
Raamesh Gowri Raghavan
Mumbai, India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
[Alluding to Eliot's poem The Waste Land]
being in a hurry
the thief took on his back
a spider’s web
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
[My poem is an allusion of RYÔKAN's famous haiku :
"the thief
left it behind
the moon at the window "]
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1 Point
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the dust...
cowboys driving cattle
through purple sage
Kirsty Karkow
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
[-- Riders of the Purple Sage by Zane Grey]]
out of the dank earth
up through last year's leaves--
purple crocus
jill
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
a familiar walk
with Ezra
"make it new"
Donna Bauerly
Iowa
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
[Ezra Pound, of course, well known for Des Imagiste and, purportedly, writer of one of the first English haiku-like lines:
In a Station of the Metro
THE apparition of these faces in the crowd;
Petals on a wet, black bough.]
fidelity--
between us, no lies and
no questions
Yesha Shah
India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
[“Ask no questions, and you'll be told no lies.”
― Charles Dickens, Great Expectations]
your sudden death today
unnoticed by the busy city-
everyone going on as before
Leslie Montgomery
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
[attempting allusion to W.H. Auden's wonderful poem in which he remarks on the painting of Icarus' fall by Breughel in the last verse -from "Musee des Beaux Arts"
In Breughel’s Icarus, for instance: how everything turns away
Quite leisurely from the disaster; the ploughman may
Have heard the splash, the forsaken cry,
But for him it was not an important failure; the sun shone
As it had to on the white legs disappearing into the green
Water; and the expensive delicate ship that must have seen
Something amazing, a boy falling out of the sky,
had somewhere to get to and sailed calmly on.]
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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last hand clasp
your plane flies into
foggy skies
Anonymous
[Alludes to:
Matsuo Basho tr. Lucien Stryk
Friends part
forever – wild geese
lost in cloud.]
alluding dreams
her sweetest smiles
making a march past
Purush
rapt
in The Awakening
writers’ retreat
Tom Painting
"Sure great likeness, Mike,"
says Dave. "Me, too, - all I need
is the proper stone."
Horst
in my garden
beautiful daffodils
yellow as the sun
Tom Conally
can cruelty ever end
turns into stone
The Thinker *
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai India
[Rodin's sculpture]
opposite ends
of this star-flung poem
a mule ate them
assu
[Foundation trilogy, Isaac Asimov]
air stock still
yet the elm leaves shudder
is Freddy near?
maxianne
daffodils puckering up
tell me that you love me
junie moon
carol pearce-worthington
along my fence-line
squirrels are not gathering nuts . . .
spring has sprung
Eric P
flowers bright
flowers fading quickly
autumn holds both
Anonymous
[allusion to Shakespeare speech “ to be or not to be....”]
noisy guests
oblivious of the white chrysanthemum-
chatter on and on
Angelee Deodhar
[allusion to this haiku:
they spoke no word,
the host, the guest
and the white chrysanthemum
- Oshima Ryota]
early dandelions
brightly hint at
summer days to come
Frances O'Keeffe
peony buds –
kissing under the Bridge
of Sighs
Stella Pierides
DE/UK
sandstorm-
the lizard-colored sky
whirls at me
Nadalsuren Purevdorj
Ulaanbaatar. Mongolia
homebrew
under
the cuckoo's nest
Jon Espen Vassbotn
[Ken Kesey]
happy hour—
he introduces himself
a thief of love
Anonymous
[Shakespeare]
o wild west wind
autumn leaves fall
a branch at a time
Elaine Riddell
[Allusion to Percy Bysshe Shelley’s ‘Ode to the West Wind’]
implacable math
has bereaved me of reason
the fall so steep
- mechaieh
[allusion to A. C. Doyle, "The Final Problem"]
single
in glens, who's there
who's there who's there
Iris
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General Comments:
**Thanks a million.
**Thanks for organising such a wonderful kukai !
**A great topic for haiku. Without authors' notes, it was often hard to know what was being alluded to.
^^I thought it would be confusing to include all of the allusion comments with the voting list (GH)
**Allusion has been very hard to vote for. But thank you very much for the opportunity.
**So many delightful allusions ..
^^I enjoyed them too (GH)
**Wish I had known every allusion. :) Cheshire Cat, for sure! Thanks, as always, to all.
**This one was difficult, as I did not get many of the allusions... And yet, there are sufficient haiku below to distribute my votes.
** This one was difficult, as I did not get many of the allusions... And yet, there were sufficient haiku I enjoyed to distribute my votes.
**Slim pickings this month