The Shiki Monthly Kukai
June 2014 Kukai
Congratulations to ***Angela Terry***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Rita Odeh***, winner of our Free Format section!
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In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.
(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.
VOTER'S comments are indicated by "**" below the respective poems.
Poet's comments are indicated by "^^" below the respective poems.
Kigo Theme:
FRAGRANT WIND
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First Place - 26 Points
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a fragrant wind...
the things we remember
when we’re alone
Angela Terry
(3,4,9) = 26 pts
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Second Place - 25 Points
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fragrant breeze
a peony rearranges
its petticoats
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(1,8,6) = 25 pts
AND
fragrant wind
shifting the weight
of this mourning
cfc
(1,7,8) = 25 pts
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Third Place - 19 Points
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drifting
into a blackbird's song -
fragrant breeze
Asni Amin,
Singapore
(1,3,10) = 19 pts
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18 Points
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fragrant wind
my mother's voice calls
from beyond
Roberta Beary
(2,4,4) = 18 pts
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17 Points
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white gardenia blooms -
the bride reaches
for her inhaler
Carmel Lively Westerman
(1,4,6) = 17 pts
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16 Points
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fragrant breeze--
my daughter unfolds
her bridal dress
Anonymous
(1,2,9) = 16 pts
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14 Points
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sea wind
you remind me of someone
i once knew
Sandi Pray
North Carolina
USA
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
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12 Points
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the breeze
of our scented memories...
missing you
Rita Odeh
Nazareth, Israel
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
scent of gardenia
no way to hide
from my grief
Christine L. Villa
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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scented breeze...
i linger on the
back stoop
D W Skrivseth
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
east wind —
the scent of home
near yet far
Vinay Leo R.
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
napping in hammock
the scent of honeysuckle
drifts into my dream
Bridget Cougar
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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Mother's Day
the scent of lilacs
in her hair
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
old gardener
rests with his pipe -
fragrant breeze
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
lemon scented breeze . . .
the girl next door
has shampooed her hair
Michael McClintock
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
deck chairs
the salt sea breeze
ruffles my skirt
Kirsty Karkow
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
**This haiku paints a beautiful picture, to which the fragrant breeze naturally belongs.
wild grape blossoms . . .
the soft fall
of her satin gown
Bill Pauly
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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fragrant summer breeze
cottonwood seeds drifting
into their future
Gerry Bravi
(Canada)
(2,0,3) = 9 pts
after our quarrel
opening the window –
the fragrant breeze
Tomislav
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
summer night
the scent of jasmine
draws us to the porch rail
Tom Painting
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
June breeze...
the scent grows stronger
by one magnolia
~Devika
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
gentle chinook--
all over town
the scent of lilacs
DeVar
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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sunny wind
the scent of the ocean
circles in me
Ramesh Anand
Seattle, USA
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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jasmine dreams-
the far scent of ma in
summer breeze
Yesha Shah,
Surat, India.
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
funeral flowers
such fine words drift by
on a fragrant breeze
Ron C. Moss
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
oh my word downwind of a paper mill
Alan S. Bridges
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
evening gusts
comb the lake
lilac somewhere
Ginny Hoyle
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
night stillness...
just whiffs of lilac scent
nothing more
Natalia Kuznetsova
Russia
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
new hanging dryer -
in the orange blossom wind
a crow with my sock
Daniela Bullas
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
Mojave fragrance
wind brushing across
wet stones
Barbara Snow
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
fifth hour fasting—
whiff of someone's burgers
as the wind shifts
Ellen Compton
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
fragrant breeze…
tangling with my reverie
a bluebottle's hum
Anitha Varma,
India.
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
fragrant breeze -
the way your presence
fills my life
Anonymous
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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breeze enough
to carry rose scent
and stir the paper carp
jill
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
pouring down the pass
glacier scented wind
breathing Alaska
Doris
(0,3,0) = 6 pts
^^That's the beautiful glacier wind that pours off the ice fields into Juneau where we lived for six years. Best air in the world.
savoring
the same old same old...
honeysuckle breeze
S.E. Buffington
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
scent of gardenia. . .
how it browned before
the last dance
Carole MacRury
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
on the breeze
the national anthem and
a whiff of popcorn
--Diane
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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swaying poppies...
the laughter of children
from the park
-Shloka Shankar
Bangalore, India
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
Walking to the woods -
a light wind offers me
the scent of pine.
Zhanna P. Rader
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
daydreaming
the breath of wisteria
wafts through
Sondra J. Byrnes
South Bend, Indiana, USA
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
night breeze
from the sea
her scent
dust
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
the bride’s gown
in the scented July breeze
a glimpse of garter
Ignatius Fay
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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high mountain forest --
this wafting scent of cedar
leads to new tea leaves
Pat Geyer
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
pedestrians
the cologne could be
almost anyone's
- Ru
Canada
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
fragrant summer wind
the alfalfa farmers
switch to hogs
Edward
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
laundry on the line-
jasmine sweetens the breeze
filling the sheets
Lesliemont
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
summer wind-
before opening my mailbox
a message from jasmine
--- Kashinath Karmakar
India
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
sweet-scented wind --
the weight of this basket
on my arm
Angie Werren
Amelia, OH
USA
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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kaze kaoru -
bare feet on grass
move in time
Casey Southards
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
under the arbor
a fragrant whiff wafts away
my cares
Tom Conally
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
fragrant summer wind -
unmindfulness
wafts in
Ajaya Mahala
Pune, India.
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
wild roses
touching the wind
cloudless
Ann K. Schwader
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
wisteria breeze...
my whole face wet
with fragrance
Paresh Tiwari
India
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
receiving them
at the bamboo gates
mogra breeze
Jayashree Maniyil
Australia
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
half-way up a mountain
the scent of summer larch trees
mingles with horse-sweat
Sheila K Barksdale
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
Walking at sundown
A linden's gentle essence
unexpected breeze.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville Illinois
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
that scent!
a summer dalliance
stalks me
Hansha Teki
NZ
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
tailwind ---
bicycling with a fragrant
sundressed june
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
scent of lilac
the breeze ruffles
her purple hair
Beth Powell
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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mountains laugh intoxicated by fragrant wind
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, Australia
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
prisoner’s day pass
memories of hard steel softens
with this fragrant breeze
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
diverse scents from the shore-
employed seafarers sing
each in his own language
Cristian Mocanu
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
walking in the wind-
in the place of you by my side
a lavender field...
Lavana kray
Romania
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
fragrant wind -
raised to heaven
a rose garden
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
with the breeze
her kigo
"jasmine nights"
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
**A meta-haiku, and a nice one at that!
star jasmine
in the evening
the wind picks up
Jone
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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One Point
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heady scent
of sweet olive blows in
but where is the tree
assu
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
red butterflies swoon
in shimmering sunlight...
a fragrant wind
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
scented wind
breezing from her braid
spring smells so sweet
Purush
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
from across the sea
each wave filled with the desire
of a scented breeze
Bernard Gieske
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the evening breeze
a leisurely stroll
through the rose garden
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the sea in a conch shell...
old sailor's dying wish—
fragrant breeze
Samar Ghose
Australia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
evening breeze
wafts me back to
mum's lilacs
maxianne
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
summer skyline --
the breeze carries the fragrance
of the sea
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad, India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
nightingale's song
floats through the village
- jasmine breeze
Paul Hodder
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
one whiff of dried grass
I am back in the hay-loft
harvest memories
Deirdre Godwin
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
parasol fan dance
Mary Poppins lands
with fragrant wind
Karin Anderson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
reading a book -
the breeze bringing
scent of lily
Miorita
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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The park meadow mown,
a first waft of drying grass. -
I'm taking a rest.
Horst Ludwig
sipping mimosas~
days of languish at the beach
scented breeze
Judi Honiker
on the wind
from the man ahead of me
the smell of scented bath soap
Bill Hudson
pink roses bloom
down the lane-sweetness
fills the air
Tony Nasuta
fragrant summerwind:
are the white half moons
on my fingernails off or on?
Oddbjørn Aardalen
village belles in farms
wind redolent with scent
brushing their sweat
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
summer cold
honey-steeped wind
cotton on my tongue
~mechaieh
fragrant breeze ...
hot is my sigh
Naranan Namby
Chennai, India
smiling Bhudda
the wind brings the smell
of incence and peace
Gabriel Sawicki
what a fragrant wind -
my neighbor's strawberries
are less and less
Cristina Oprea
capricious wind
you tantalize with
lilacs... lilacs... lilacs
Laurene
rustle of mango leaves
jasmine-scented morning:
summer wedding
-- Chitra Rajappa
warm wind
lilac memories of mothers
humble bees
Anonymous
blue sky over
primrose bank
fragrant breeze
Frances O'Keeffe
the breeze finds lilacs
then crosses the street
to find me
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
I catch the breeze,
and its scent
of roses
James Dobson.
fresh summer scents -
lace curtain ripples
in breeze
Jane DeJonghe
"No flowers!"
the woman's sullen look―
greens sway in the breeze
Yukiko Yamada
oh to smell again
sharp scent whisked on the wind
skunk flattened on the road
eric p
standing downwind
of a perfumed passenger --
bus stage
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(Kenya)
on the breeze
scent of Solomon's seal
brings summer
Ruth Powell
fragrant cuddling breeze
surrounded by water
Morning-Noon-and-Night *
Anonymous
^^The common name of Brunfelsia australis , also known as “Eternity Plant” and “Yesterday-Today-and-Tomorrow”. Called “Le jasmine des îles” in French.
at the edge
breeze laden
with eucalyptus
Elaine Riddell
ah! this fragrant breeze -
so many yesterJunes
playing tag with today
Anne Zooey Lind
windy whisper
sopping up the fir smell
my memories
Anna Mazurkiewicz
park abroad...
this spring's wind and some rose
bristles
Lech Szeglowski
strawberry moon
the fruit scented breeze
ruffles its reflection in the pond
Rose Marie Stutts
Tuscaloosa, Al
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General Comments:
**Thank you for giving tis opportunity to read so many nice haiku.
**Thank you very much for the opportunity. I look forward to the prompts on your return.
**I have never smelled jasmine, but after reading all these Kigo entries, I would love to!
**This kigo, sadly, brought no surprises.
**To vote according to my personal taste, I could not, in conscience, vote other than above. I hope that is acceptable.
^^Secretary’s note: It is always acceptable to use less than 6 votes.
**Beautiful scents all round. I have a perfumed garden here. It can be over intoxicating at times. especially with datura and wisteria and rondeletia... Thanks for your time and the opportunity.
**This was a difficult kigo, which gave me plenty of new ideas for haiku at this time of year.
Free Format Theme:
HUT
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First Place - 28 Points
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empty hut...
in and out of the shadows
this black bird
Rita Odeh
Nazareth, Israel
(0,6,16) = 28 pts
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Second Place - 25 Points
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a garden hut
in the heat of the day. . .
the smell of shade
Carole MacRury
(1,9,4) = 25 pts
**"the smell of shade", Very nice! But I would have dropped the first "a", and those three dots
**Great use of the senses of touch and smell!
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Third Place - 23 Points
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our dream hut
the thatched roof leaks
moonbeams
Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy
Birmingham, UK
(1,6,8) = 23 pts
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20 Points
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a thousand voices
in the cabin's silence
summer wind
Sandi Pray
North Carolina
USA
(0,6,8) = 20 pts
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19 Points
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hut by hut
the clickety clack
of a train
Alan S. Bridges
(2,4,5) = 19 pts
abandoned hut …
the silence of wind chimes
rusting
Asni Amin,
Singapore
(2,2,9) = 19 pts
**Interesting use of the sense of hearing nothing...
peeling walls...
the old dog licks
a new wound
Paresh Tiwari
India
(1,5,6) = 19 pts
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16 Points
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hut in the mist -
the old yellow radio
still works
Israel López balan
(1,4,5) = 16 pts
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15 Points
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cholera leaflets
rattle at dusk . . .
the empty hut
Michael McClintock
(1,3,6) = 15 pts
hut on the hill
where the end of my world
used to be
Gabriel Sawicki
(1,3,6) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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this spring day
as I pass his hut . . .
the coughing
--Kirsty Karkow
(0,4,6) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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My little hut -
fireflies for light,
crickets for music.
Zhanna P. Rader
(1,1,8) = 13 pts
where his hut
used to stand -
blackberry brambles
Ruth Powell
(0,4,5) = 13 pts
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12 Points
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abandoned hut
\\\/// the weeds closing in \\\///
dsnake1
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
**The concrete haiku works for me. The lines enclose just as the meaning does. I am well aware of this form. Clever is OK; in service of meaning, worthwhile.
** regarding #74, I think it meets the current guidelines.
****Although I am not a fan of concrete haiku, and I did not vote for #74, I believe you were right in accepting it. This poem follows the left-margin rule (as you pointed out).
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11 Points
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the hut is old--
my sit-down
turns into a nap
James Dobson.
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
All Saints' Day...
a single candle flickers
in the widow's hut
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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under the full moon
the silence of barrack huts-
if tomorrow comes
--- Kashinath Karmakar
India
(2,1,2) = 10 pts
in the mountain hut
losing some signals
receiving others
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(1,3,1) = 10 pts
pizza hut --
a sliver of the moon
in her eye
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad, India
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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leaky hut…
my share of summer rain
in pewter vessels
Anitha Varma
India.
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
meditation hut—
the thunder growls
incantations
Sondra J. Byrnes
South Bend, Indiana, USA
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
chai fumes -
the pony slows down
near a roadside hut
Anonymous
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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fishing camp
not a comfortable chair
anywhere
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
**I like the wry humour in this one.
barely visible
through the flowering lilacs
the old woman's shanty
Bill Hudson
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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storm-
a child sharing the hut
with a baby deer
Lavana kray
Romania
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
man huts
so many names
for escape
Beth Powell
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
my lightless hut --
a cricket responds
to those outside
Tomislav
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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meditation hut
the wing whistle of a dove
landing on the mat
Angèle Lux
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
the hut
in the woods
each camper writes their name
Jone
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
all the night
my hut's queen
a full moon
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
writers’ retreat
through chinks in the cabin
the wind
Tom Painting
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
hay-filled hut -
colors of
the summer breeze
Angela Terry
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
a spider web sparkles
in the old hut window --
morning sun
~ yamame
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
a small hut --
her earrings twinkle
in the candlelight
Dubravko
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
leaky hut...
letting doubts
to seep in
Vinay Leo R.
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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mid-monsoon...
a stray dog enters
the shanty
-Shloka Shankar
Bangalore, India
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
a light year
from its own hut
the dew drop
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
old wooden hut -
a thread of water falling
from the ceiling
Miorita
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
dad's hut -
bottle of 'weed-killer'
smelling of whisky
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
evening stroll…
crickets welcome
me back
D W Skrivseth
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
forest monastery
the monk's kuti
fills with light
Paul Hodder
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
abandoned hut
the suitcase opens
to a typewriter
Roberta Beary
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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tortuous path
the roof of a mountain hut
shines below
Elaine Riddell
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
when the moon settles
in the roofless hut...
the light in the hut
Anonymous
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
sweat hut —
from every pore
darkness pours
Hansha Teki
NZ
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
sundown
from the sheep herder's hut
rising peat smoke
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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hollyhocks
hold up the fence
my childhood home
Judi Honiker
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
ramshackle cabin
competing with the weeds
yellow lilies
Gerry Bravi
(Canada)
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
empty cup...
through a nipa hut's roof
a dime of moonlight
Christine L. Villa
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
a toad house
made of a few stones
moss added, at no extra charge
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
abandoned hut
mouse droppings, bear scat--
the news from ‘72
Doris
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
clever moon!
turning the old hobo's hut
into a shining castle
Anne Zooey Lind
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
from hut-to-hut...
the bag lady brings
her own linens
S.E. Buffington
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
cracks in the hut --
June wind conducting
a choir of cellos
~ mechaieh
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
close to the hut
a wolf's howl softens –
Milky Way
Anna Mazurkiewicz
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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better than the Ritz
this breezy summer evening--
my riverside shack
Bridget Cougar
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
grandpa's hunting shack
each fall I patch the roof
like dad always did
Edward
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
hut
with blisters
table
dust
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
**Fine minimalistic haiku! (Hm, could even have left out «with»?)
back yard shed--
my summer road bike still
hangs from the rafters
DeVar
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
my tent
pitched by a cool summer stream...
grilled trout for supper
Tom Conally
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
backyard shade -
we build a hut
with palm fronds
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the hut
breathing again
first crocus
Bernard Gieske
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
raccoons --
I’ve been sleeping
in the spare room
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
USA
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
a welcome rest
from the lingering snow --
mountain hut
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(Japan)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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One Points
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storm struck hut
the pigeons nibble
on my begging bowl
Jayashree Maniyil
Australia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Butterfly
this thatched hut
will never hurt you.
purush
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
tough alpine hike
a hut appears crouched in mist
on wildflower fields
Harvey Jenkins
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
insomnia--
watching the hutments stir
in deep sleep
Yesha Shah
Surat, India.
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
at Walden Pond
imagining his hut
the sound of water
Barbara Snow
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
outside his hut
covered in yellow leaves
praying...
Samar Ghose
Australia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
an empty hut -
the crickets of childhood
recall everything…
Cristina Oprea
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
disused hut
just an empty
beggar's bowl
Karin Anderson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
abandoned hillside hut homeless man shivering beneath blanket of shattered stars
kurt w.
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
retreat
old fishing hut
riverbank
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
moonlit hut
rocks piled on rocks
to make a home
Ron C. Moss
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
abandoned hut
its holes, walls and the whole
green ivy covers
Yukiko Yamada
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
strange forest –
the branches hut
speaks...
Lech Szeglowski
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
peeling a banana
in my river cottage--
fish write a haiku
Bill Pauly
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
it stopped raining
going out from the hut
into the smell of mountains
Robert Kania
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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a ring of holes
and willows have been cut
wee house gone
assu
homegrown pot
for medicinal use
ice fishing hut
Ignatius Fay
Two eagles above
my old hinterland abode ...
cruising quietly
Horst Ludwig
bygone years
morning glory smothers
a shepherd's shack
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, Australia
something in my eyes?
the wellspring and the old hut
look the same but aren't
Daniela Bullas
fretting, we play
banjo after the sun sets...
our hut quiets
Pat Geyer
leaving for good
silent shadows of the past
echo in vacant hut
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
outside is as hot
as it is inside ...
my hut
Naranan Namby
Chennai, India
hilltop huts
light array pacing down
into dawn
Ramesh Anand
Seattle, USA.
in the red hut
on top of the old oak tree
a brooding angel
Oddbjørn Aardalen
Halloween 'Boo at the Zoo'
the vultures sulk
in the tapirs' hut
Sheila K. Barksdale
a fistful of pill bugs
their ticklish escape
Ginny Hoyle
chickee hut -
a palmetto bug chases
the tourists away
Laurene
climbers' hut
half a butterfinger
left behind
--Diane Mayr
summer toys
in the garden hut
do they play nicely?
maxianne
the river-side hut
chasing a receding stream
with step count
Ajaya Mahala
Pune, India
"Ten-Hut!"
the command for my child
WW II salute
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
indoors, against hut' s
still-standing stone corners
honeysuckle bushes bloom
Jane DeJonghe
Gnomus, Catacombes,
Baba Yaba in his hut -
Mussorgsky’s Pictures
Robert C. Howard
Belleville Illinois
rain
pattered tent -
fire crackers
Casey Southards
bowed by wind and years
one-room shanty leans awry
housing memories
Deirdre Godwin
our tree hut
shimmied in the wind
secure in maple arms
eric p
the clock is ticking
in the cracks of windows
wind whistles
Krzysztof Kokot
Poland
snug driftwood hut
a shield from marauding seagulls-
she eats a sandwich
Lesliemont
small stone cottage--
squeezing in those childhood treasures
from mama's sold house
jill
summer vacation-
the homeless man furtively
enters the “tree fort”
Cristian Mocanu
mating fireflies
filling in no time
the beggar's hat
cfc
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General Comments:
**Thank you very much for the opportunity.
** It is a pleasure to read so many good haiku.
**It was tough voting in this section. I have had to leave out at least another 4.
**What a variety. More time, and I would have entered every one.
**The concrete haiku works for me. The lines enclose just as the meaning does. I am well aware of this form. Clever is OK; in service of meaning, worthwhile.
**There are "women huts" too!
**This one brings up lots of outdoor memories.
**I enjoyed this topic and the resulting haiku.
**Again, thanks for your time and for the opportunity.
**Tough to choose. Many delightful interpretations.
**[Regarding the concrete haiku], I think it meets the current guidelines
**Some very attractive and creative haiku in this collection. Big thanks to those who write and contribute month by month -- I always enjoy the reading and selecting.
**Although I am not a fan of concrete haiku, and I did not vote for #74, I believe you were right in accepting it. This poem follows the left-margin rule (as you pointed out).
**A dozen haiku on my long list!
**Huts, for me, were childhood hide-a-ways.
**Thanks for providing this chance to write.
**Difficult themes this month
**Thank you again for the challenge -- it is great every month to observe something new!
Thank you for participating in the June 2014 Kukai!
We will announce the August 2014 Call for Submissions on Monday, August 4th. See you then!
With much appreciation,
The Shiki Monthly Kukai Team