Here are the results for the May 2013 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject
was LONG RAIN(S), and our Free Format subject was DUST
Congratulations to ***Dorota Pyra***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Tomislav Maretic***, winner of our Free Format section!
VOTER'S comments are indicated by **
POET'S comments are indicated by ^^
Kigo Theme:
LONG RAIN(S)
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First Place - 44 Points
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long rains
I give a name
to the stray dog
Dorota Pyra
(3,7,21) = 44 pts
**A perfect little story in just ten syllables.
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Second Place - 28 Points
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long rains
the monk adjusts
his posture
Paul Hodder
(1,5,15) = 28 pts
**One imagines an eternity from one adjustment to the next.
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Third Place - 24 Points
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days of rain...
beginning a chapter
i've already read
polona
(3,3,9) = 24 pts
AND
another visit
to the hospital...
unending rain
Gregory Longenecker
(0,7,10) = 24 pts
**Successfully yokes the feeling of "will this ever end" to both the
unending rain & hospital visits.
**Not flashy, but solid
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19 Points
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tea in china cups
the wet afternoon perfumed
with tangerine peels
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,7,5) = 19 pts
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14 Points
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ceaseless rain -
the autistic child
drawing an ark
Cezar F. Ciobîcă
(1,2,7) = 14 pts
**would have given more points if no gerund in l.3
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12 Points
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cold rain -
hugging
her urn
Seby Lucacs
(1,3,3) = 12 pts
**would have given more points if no dash in l.1
monsoon season . . .
the tyrannosaurus skeleton
loses a tooth
Michael McClintock
(1,1,7) = 12 pts
Sunday rain -
cleaning the old wax
from the candlestick
Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
(0,1,10) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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relentless rain
the long frozen stalk
of a heron
Barbara Snow
(0,4,3) = 11 pts
**Love it!
long rain -
thousands of drops
between she and I
Israel López Balan
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
I warned you
about me --
downpour
S.M. Abeles
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
**Not sure what we are being warned of, but that's what makes it work.
long rains,
every night
the same lullaby
j. blain
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
all day rain...
pond carp nibble
at the ripples
Anonymous
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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field in rain -
scarecrow’s hat
for shelter
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(2,0,4) = 10 pts
the river
dredged of sunsets—
long rains
Alegria Imperial
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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river rise -
the fragrance of life
passing by
Sandi Pray
Robbinsville, NC
USA
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
between rains
the long walk home
in wet shoes
RD McManes
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
**This one jumped out at me as I was first reading the email, and, as
is often the case when that happens for me, it held up well... so
perfectly capturing the feeling of inescapability that comes with long
rains.
long rain
I empty the catch pan
again
kawazu
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
long rain
a stray cat
under the bench
Tatsuya Onai
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
endless rain –
she’s hiding her tears
in a handkerchief
Eduard TARA
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
**i.m.o.-would be better with "she hides..." in line two.
rainy season ...
the rut in the driveway
grows deeper
Kat Creighton
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
losing you . . .
the patter of rain
on the car roof
Ron C. Moss
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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long rain
the school reopens
for homelessness
Ramesh Anand
(2,0,2) = 8 pts
the sound
of an audience clapping
morning rain
helge t.
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
long winter rain
beyond the wall of clouds my longing
Dietmar Tauchner
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
**Although I think this would be better in 3 lines instead of only 2,
I gave it my vote. Perhaps it was intended to be 3 and just showed up
on my computer as 2.
[It was intended to be 2 lines – GH]
downpour...
a little stream swallows
the new road
Nadalsuren Purevdorj
Ulaanbaatar. Mongolia
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
**My favourite this month. The verb "swallows" is so apt!
winter rain
new cracks
in our foundation
John Soules
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
**A couple? A culture? A cosmos?
long rain
puddles turning
to pools turning
to ponds.
Bill Hudson
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
long rain --
I find an old friend
in my voicemail
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
(0,0,8) = 8 pts
**Love this one for its hints of both melancholy and hope.
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7 Points
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long rain
while you take me
to your heart
Ernesto P. Santiago
Philippines
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
cancer scare …
the chapter of long rain
in my book
Origa
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
morning breeze--
the remnant rain drops
holding on to leaves
Pravat Kumar
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
week-long rain
even the earthworms
drown in sorrow
Christina Nguyen
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
last hug on the beach -
the rain still smells
of your after shave
lavana kra
Romania(RO)
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
incessant rain ...
chasing each other
between the folds
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
drizzle…
the anticipation
of her voice
Ted van Zutphen
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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tiger lotus
floats beautifully
warm rain
C.D. Southards
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
**A rare case in which "beautifully" doesn't seem too extravagant for a haiku.
seventh day
no longer singing
in the rain
Ellen Compton
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
rainy days sweeping soggy maple buds a robin’s song
d w skrivseth
(0,3,0) = 6 pts
long weeks of rain
black ants parade in and out
of my recipe box
Nancy Smith
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
**My son says, "I always like these funny ones." Me, too.
rain day 3
my donation bag
splits in 2
Roberta Beary
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
your longlasting fall
drop after drop after drop
made a hole in stone
Trygve Johnsen
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
days of rain
the talk turns
to boat buying
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
two-day rain —
the old deck of cards
rediscovered
Shelley Krause
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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learning taiko
Japanese rainy season
inside and outside
charlie smith
raleigh, nc
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
long rain
after a dry summer...
the grass grows green
Anne Curran
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
monsoon rain
a boathouse slips its tether
to the river moon
Garry Eaton
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
fetal heartbeat doubling the effects of rain
Cherie Hunter Day
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
may jazz
the percussion solo
drags on
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**Perhaps my favorite in this month's submissions. We've all felt this
about a drum solo - or a rain storm - at one point or another!
long rains...
a stranded herd of beasts
in knee-deep waters
Barbara A. Taylor
Australia
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
washed-out roads
only frogs praise
long rains
-- ushi
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
garden puddles
the tangled roots
of our love
Dawn Apanius
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
in the mailbox
one windowed envelope
- long rain
Bouwe Brouwer
The Netherlands
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
the long rain
after the long drought -
sound of jazz
Laura Csilla
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
endless rain ...
tears keep streaming
from the willow
Tore Sverredal
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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long soaking rain
garden and gardener breathe
sighs of relief
gourdman
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
phantom pain
in the springs missing arm
itching rain
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
persistent rain
after the long drought—
realtor’s sign
–if–
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
long rain
nearly as good
as a car wash
Barbara Campitelli
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
day-long drizzle
reading a novel
600 more pages
Bernard Gieske
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
quiet with eyes closed
the baby sparrows huddle
beneath wet branches
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
week-long rain
work takes me south
to week-long rain
- ru
Canada
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
walk
a blackbird’s song
in long rain
gogatsu
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
long rain –
returning home our cat
complains
Tomislav
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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downpour...
under faintly fluttering tree
sparrows
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg city, Mongolia
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
long rain –
the joy of snail who is away
for a walk
Miorita
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
long rain-
little wings going
up, down
Rita Odeh
Nazareth, Israel
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
sightseeing...
untaken pictures
with the flood
Dejan Pavlinovic
Pula, Croatia
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Nyatike floods --
a white chick balancing
on a floating branch
~ Andrew Otinga (Kenya)
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
at last--
the gentle rain
falling, falling...filing
Rose Marie Stutts, EdD
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
long rain ---
longer a robin's wait
in her nest
---kashinath karmakar
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
flooding delta -
somewhere at least
one long rain?
Juhani Tikkanen
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
rain patter
on the window pane -
long night blues
natalia kuznetsova
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
steady weekend rain
his boardwalk monopoly
bankrupts all but one
Edward
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
to find again—
the musical notes in
a steady rain
Marylouise Knight
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
deluge the remains of dignity
Stella Pierides
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
long rain -
the acacia trees remain
without flowers
Ailoaei Cristina
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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another day of rain
even the thunder
drowned out
Warren Gossett
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
farmers wilting
under the dry season...
the rains procrastinate
Keith A. Simmonds
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
all that mattered--
swept along and drowning
in the rains of spring
--Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
finally sun
my bean sprout's
outgrown her raincoat
maxianne
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
will it ever stop
incessant pitter-patter
drumming in my brain
Tanja Cilia
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
rain on the roof
children running
updown the halls
--Aalix Roake
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
unvoiced words . . .
rain soughs persistently
through the leaves
Hansha Teki
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
over eyes
a dark cloud hovers
long rains
Vinay Leo R.
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
rain in the rain
moles on her back
in the shape of The Dipper
Johannes S. H. Bjerg
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
after rain -
from the flowers round
cricket song
Andronic Andra
Roumania
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
long rain
I salvage myself
in her fiction
Tom Painting
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
"caw-caw, caw-caw"
disgruntled by the weather
a crow in the rain
todd eddy
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
boarding the school bus
omigosh
mom brings me galoshes
doris kasson
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
rain collection -
our fifty-five gallon drum
overflows
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
no cricket song,
no star in the window -
will this rain ever stop?
Cristina Oprea
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
round of robins
hunting for worms—
family secrets
Doris Lynch
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
on our barn roof
the sound of summer rain--
soon three foot tall corn
Eduardo Rojas
Wheaton, ILL.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
sudden showers --
our child still playing
with the raindrops
~ Kelin Akidia (Kenya)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
sudden downpour --
a pair of slippers floating
on roadside water
~ Parrot (Kenya)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
midnight call
she holds me up to
the thunderstorm
Terry O'Connor
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
rain rain rain...
Mom and two ducklings
float on the lawn
S.E. Buffington.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
high-water mark half-way up the settee
Alan S. Bridges
Littleton, Massachusetts
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
after the long rain-
blueberries are much sweeter
outstanding roses
Hazel A. Witherspoon
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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One Point
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drowsy dawn::
last night’s rain still drums
at my window
Darrell Byrd
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
torrential downpour
waiting at the school bus stop
my windows fog up
-sakyu-
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
no birds sing
no sun no moon no stars
puddles more puddles each hour
Vishnu P Kapoor
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
endless rain
bicycle thief’s snoring
between thunderclaps
Kurt W.
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
spring stream
rolling, roaring, rumbling
through the threshold
Irena Szewczyk
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
on the beach
colorful umbrellas
sold out
Ralf Bröker
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
more raindrops
through this leaking roof --
I shift my bed
~ Catherine Njeri Maina (Kenya)
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
after the rains
the welcomed scent
of grilled hamburgers
--Diane
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
water puddle --
a clear reflection
of the sky
~ James Bundi (Kenya)
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
long rain...
passion fruit sizzle
on the table
martin gottlieb cohen
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
full water-butts --
I am close
to tears
James Dobson.
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
our day off together
turning
into a long rain
--Peter Newton
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
long rain-
I'm searching on Google,
images with the rainbow
Petru Ioan Garda
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
dripping rain
in the lantern light
still new pearls
Robert Kania
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
rain for a week
in the sodden leaf litter
hens scratching
Elaine Riddell
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
spring rain
your message soaks in
atop the mesa
- Jone Rush MacCulloch
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
long rains
on the leaky roof . . .
measure of my loss
Bill Pauly
Dubuque, IA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
spring rain
those extra hours
spent in bed
Stevie Strang
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
looming rain clouds
an ant hurries
with its grocery
Naranan Namby
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
long rain--
a collect call
from overseas
Michael Dylan Welch
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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sudden downpour
noisy trucks at midnight
crowded footbridge
--R.K. Singh
Dhanbad (India)
ninth day clouds
sink through sky sieve
wagtail’s bubbling song
greenfinch
norway
A side-walk drawing
of Picasso's young girlfriend —
and needed spring rain.
Horst Ludwig
dancing in the rain -
all inclusive Argen' Tango
tanga exclusive
STOPS
shivering as
the third day of rain
gnaws at my ceiling
mechaieh
puny blooms
a broken spring: how we long
for rain
Ginny Hoyle
water seeping in
waterproof tent
vacation rain
Mark A. Fisher
hoped for harvest
drowns in watery furrows
swollen seeds
assu
long cold rain
shadows stretch to flamingos
hot pink toenails
Anonymous
seeking lots of stuff
I hung out to dry
in a dry time
Donna Bauerly
Heavy rain,
thunder and lightning
and then peace.
Trevor Camp
spring rain
icy diamonds splashing
on our hair
Gabriele Brunsch
flooded road --
a mattress floating
on running water
~ Velma Adhiambo (Kenya)
I clean
my muddy gumboots --
rain aftermath
~ Elijah Juma (Kenya)
students run
to a nearby kibanda * --
sudden downpour
~ Jescah Auma (Kenya)
* A kibanda is a small shop created from wooden poles and plastic
sheeting for a roof.
heavy downpour --
a girl on a narrow path
runs for shelter
~ Anne Ambongo (Kenya)
raindrops falling
on my plaited hair --
scent of lotion
~ Eunice Muthoni (Kenya)
tornado season --
six inches of rain in
four hours
bre
afternoon rain --
students in our classroom
huddle together
~ Shilo (Kenya)
still raining-
more and more green
slice of the bread
Krzysztof Kokot PL
hail pings at the glass
thunder rolls closer
the rising sound of rain
Tony Nasuta
rainbow this morning
after ten straight days of rain
welcome sight to see
Deirdre Godwin
early rains...
thirsty roots
suckle
dragonfly
dark night -
sounds of rain on roof
and foxes barking
Jane DeJonghe
incessant down pour
the mouths of plants
duly wet.
purush-guntur
the discount rack
discounted again
rain without end
Cara Holman
brimming gutters
at the kitchen door
sopping dog wants in
Frances O'Keeffe
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General Comments:
**A strong batch of poems, and there were some very nice entries I had
to eliminate because they failed to indicate the duration of the rain
(anything sudden or occurring at a certain time of day, not to mention
the absence of it, is not "long" in my mind).
**I had a long list from which to cull! Many excellent haiku for the
dull days of "long rains."
**This was a really difficult vote for me. So many poems deserved
points. Congratulations to all that entered. Reading your entries was
a real treat!
**So many great haiku here! It was hard to pick.
**It was difficult to pick from this list. There are so many good ones
I decided to give 6 of them one vote each. I could have chosen 6
different ones equally good, but in the end these made a slightly
greater impression.
**Thanks for your time, and the opportunity. We have had a lot of rain
over the last two years! At last the sun is shining but it's autumn
chilly, with dancing toadstools....
**Some very interesting takes on the season reference. Enjoyed reading
through the whole batch.
**LONG RAINS is a season in East Africa (mid-March to mid-May). This
year, the rains were so heavy that they caused mudslides and deaths in
many parts of Kenya.
**A lot more than six fine haiku in these, and three worth more than
one point. So ... what a difficult choice. Thank you!
**as kigo efforts go this is pretty confused according to Gabi's
saijiki which say "long rain(s) is not a kigo." Though on the same
site Kenya claims is for March to May. The same database says ants are
generally summer... so... aargh!
**Thank you for another chance to read and vote on some wonderful
haiku and have mine be read, perhaps, get votes, too.
** Such a long rain of long rain haiku :) jiggity jog
Free Format Theme:
DUST
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First Place - 39 Points
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first raindrops –
the fragrance
of dust
Tomislav
(3,6,18) = 39 pts
**The kind of moment of heightened awareness that is close to the
heart of haiku.
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Second Place - 35 Points
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dusty attic -
a one-eyed doll
still smiling
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(1,7,18) = 35 pts
**A strong image, poignant, and even creepy.
**If we forget that it's a painted smile, this slips into
sentimentality. But that would be our fault.
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Third Place - 32 Points
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second marriage
I remove the dust
from my dress shoes
Harvey Jenkins
(1,6,17) = 32 pts
**Interesting but "dress shoes" in line 3 is too general.
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27 Points
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moving day
dust from one attic
to the next
Adelaide B. Shaw
(2,5,11) = 27 pts
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24 Points
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empty room
the moon tiptoeing
over dust
gogatsu
(2,5,8) = 24 pts
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23 Points
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solitude
a winter fly
stirs the dust
Bill Kenney
(0,5,13) = 23 pts
**This one has been done many times before so am giving it just 1 point.
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20 Points
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the summer we loved...
brushing dust
from a conch shell
polona
(1,3,11) = 20 pts
**A sentimental haiku or a haiku about sentimentality? I like the ambiguity.
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19 Points
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deep-south drought--
a puff of dust
from the catcher's mitt
Michael Dylan Welch
(0,4,11) = 19 pts
**I can see, feel, hear this one!
**Brilliant! I can hear the thud of the ball on leather.
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18 Points
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dust on the black keys--
her Chopin
still haunts me
James Dobson.
(1,3,9) = 18 pts
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16 Points
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window sill
spring moonlight gathers
on the dust
martin gottlieb cohen
(0,5,6) = 16 pts
**Dust getting a taste of its own medicine... can totally picture this one!
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15 Points
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desert spring -
a dust devil pirouettes
across the road
Darrell Byrd
(0,3,9) = 15 pts
specks of dust
in the sunlight
our last dance
Anne Curran
(0,1,13) = 15 pts
**Might be better flipped: "our last dance . . . / specks of dust / in
the sunlight"
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14 Points
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Mom's old table
writing her name in the dust
with my finger
-sakyu-
(1,3,5) = 14 pts
this life
dust motes
in sunlight
Paul Hodder
(0,5,4) = 14 pts
**Might be better flipped: "dust motes / in sunlight . . . / this life"
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13 Points
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dust
too much
of a small thing
Lynda True
(2,2,3) = 13 pts
**6 Points!
I've never done this before, but for me this one stood out among the rest!
[Only 3 points maximum are allowed for one poem, but I wanted to
include this comment and got permission to do so– GH]
dusty mirror -
face without wrinkles
today
Lavana Kray
Iasi-Romania (RO)
(1,2,6) = 13 pts
stone dust
the constant sound of
cutting the death date
Dorota Pyra
(0,4,5) = 13 pts
**An unusual kind of dust, here as evidence of one our clearest areas
of common ground... this one stayed with me.
summer’s dust –
the page I never covered
with words
Eduard TARA
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
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11 Points
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the old attic...
searching for memories
buried in dust
natalia kuznetsova
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
dust particles —
I drift with my thoughts
through a sunbeam
Hansha Teki
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
the marks we left
on one another --
dusty road
S.M. Abeles
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
** I would have given more points if "leave" were used in place of
"left" in line 1.
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9 Points
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dust to dust...
whispering poppies on
the old battlefield
Cezar F. Ciobîcă
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
piano keys...
the dust
of middle-age
Roberta Beary
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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red moonrise
whirlwind
on the priest's tomb
Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
under the bed
dust balls & toddler toys
the underworld
Bernard Gieske
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
empty closet
poignant memories
and our dust
charlie smith
raleigh, nc
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
**My favorite of the moving-themed submissions.
dust
a sign
of no action
Barbara Campitelli
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
dust atop the wardrobe
all the years
of good intentions
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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her memory
of the 1930's...
dust
Alan S. Bridges
Littleton, Massachusetts
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
**A starkness of expression entirely appropriate to what is expressed.
late spring cleaning—
this thin patina of dust
blurs our marriage
S.E. Herrin
Des Moines, Iowa USA
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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a moth
flails in the lampshade
its dust drifting
Warren Gossett
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
dust storm--
strangers among the heirs
at his wake
Alegria Imperial
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
so much dust
between the letters
writer's block
Stevie Strang
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
wiping the dust
off each bottle of beer --
local shop
~ Isabelle Prondzynski (Kenya)
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
dust in the wind -
every letter
of your name
Sandi Pray
Robbinsville, NC
USA
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
dry enough for a sparrow bath
Donna Bauerly
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
star dust
clouds her short romance—
the judge enters court
Donald Carlock
Glen Ellyn, Illinois
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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family farm dust trails the tractor
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
dry lightning...
a young farmer's dream
turns to dust
S.E. Buffington
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
sundust
the universe dancing
in the living-room
Gabriele Brunsch
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
laguna mesa
swirl of dust and feathers
sacred eagle dance
todd eddy
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
dusty cans
filled with keys
locks long forgotten
Mark A. Fisher
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
autumn sky -
arriving with the mail truck
a cloud of dust
Bouwe Brouwer
The Netherlands
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
clothesline
the Persian rug in a cloud
of dust
Stella Pierides
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
dust storm
blown away
by his lies
Anonymous
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
cloud of dust -
two names on the sidewalk
she can't sweep
Israel López Balan
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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dogs shedding
my feet take on
their summer coat
- ru, Canada
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
my bedroom
dust-covered crucifix--
still time
--R.K. Singh
Dhanbad (India)
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
across the pile
of laundered linens
cat prints
--Diane
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
moth flutters...
white wings dust
green shadows
dragonfly
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
ellipsis...
a mote of dust
in a beam of light
Cara Holman
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**I like this but wondering if it sounds better if L2 is 'dust motes'
instead of 'a mote of dust'
bookshelf dust
the paperbacks
of summer
Ann K. Schwader
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
lag on Skype
what we'll do
with Mum's remains
-- andrea
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
dust on a glass pane.
i write
an opinion
dsnake1
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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spring morning
she brushes the dust
off his jacket
Tore Sverredal
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
red dust flying
as I make footsteps
in my dream
Ernesto P. Santiago
Philippines
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first edition
with dust jacket
The Grapes of Wrath
Tom Painting
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first
she dusts the bedroom
her husband’s urn
---Aalix Roake
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
dust to dust…
a samara's descent
from the ash tree
Ted van Zutphen
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
spring cleaning
I dust Knick-knacks
and my father's flag
kawazu
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
frolicking
in the communal dust bowl
the hens take turns
Elaine Riddell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
childhood dreams
my happily ever after
covered in dust
Vinay Leo R.
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
pollen dust --
how many trees does it take
to paint my car yellow?
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
summer dawn
the herd of elephants
taking the dust bath
Ramesh Anand
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
dusty path-
baby's slipper caught
in a barbed wire
Rita Odeh
Nazareth, Israel
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
gold dust--
in great grandpa’s attic trunk
a small leather bag
Eduardo Rojas
Wheaton, Illinois
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
Sisyphus en miniature
I hoover up
ancestors and stars
Johannes S. H. Bjerg
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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more dust on the map
of Middle East Peace Quartet -
gunpowder like
STOPS
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
as pine dust yellows
the wild pond’s ripples--
a fox sneezes
--Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
tomorrow...
after my forefinger
the same dust
Dejan Pavlinovic
Pula, Croatia
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
grandpa rocks and stares...
in the attic dust blankets
his treasured keepsakes
Edward
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
pollen dust —
everywhere
once we see it
Shelley Krause
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
dust bowl
looking for
lost graves
Garry Eaton
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
grains of dust
on my black sweater
birthday morning
Dietmar Tauchner
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
a new house for sale
with a lovely mountain view
smelling of pine dust
Michael McClintock
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the sting of loss
glowing embers fall
into the dust
Ron C. Moss
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
I sneeze, I sniffle
dust bunnies under the bed
play tag with my broom
Tanja Cilia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
gravel dust
billows behind the roadster--
country roads
A.D. Jaden
Des Moines, Iowa
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
this love affair -
nothing left
but dust
Kat Creighton
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the kukai's kigo -
dust
I sneeze
deanna tiefenthal
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
end of the season-
dusted piano stands
in an empty hotel
Krzysztof Kokot PL
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
pollen dust
morning shovel kendo
with the weeds
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
moving again
the book boxes are full of
medieval dust
Origa
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
dust clouds the waters of my eyes
John Soules
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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One Point
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May's stronger sun
still choking on the dust
of my youth
–if–
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
kitty prints
across the black lacquer chest
time to dust
Bill Hudson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
^^this is not far from the truth.
Dangerous driving
with too warm spring winds moving
swaths and swaths of earth
Horst Ludwig
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
sunbeam
a dust particle sparkles
like real gold
RD McManes
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
circling the world
in the teeth of the wind
powdered earth
Ginny Hoyle
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**Love the all-world perspective of this one.
spring dusk
my angel statue sweeps
dust mites to stardust
Karin Anderson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
home ec project
dust
under the microscope
maxianne
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
deep summer
dust settles
on the ice scraper
Christina Nguyen
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
pardon our dust sale--
during remodeling
everything half price
Charles Werdenhoff
Joliet, Illinois
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
splatter of the first rain drop dust also rises
d w skrivseth
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
restless sea
wiping the dust off
my shoes
Ralf Bröker
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
abandoned shack
a layer of black dust
on the fan's blades
Barbara A. Taylor
Australia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
spring evening...
a farmer's daughter wipes
dust off the boots
Nadalsuren Purevdorj
Ulaanbaatar. Mongolia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
yellow monsters
growling in the dust
of the construction site
Rose Marie Stutts, EdD
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
a silly finger squiggle
from the last time
I dusted
--Peter Newton
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
cloud of dust -
a herd of weary antelopes
on the steppe
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg city, Mongolia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Away from my desk—
I could write my name
across it
Marylouise Knight
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Victory Day -
mother shakes the dust off
my grandfather's mantle
Petru-Ioan Garda
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
in pristine spring snows
a layer of cream color -
dust from distant storms
Jane DeJonghe
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
my cell alight
with golden rays
of dancing dust
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
cleaning out the file cabinet
divorce papers
A dust devil sweeps them up
Jone Ruxh MacCulloch
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
drought year,
the cat returns cloaked
in his dust bath
j. blain
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**Enjoyed the movement in this one... a nice contrast to the dominant
theme of dust as a marker of stillness.
after the storm
my ring finger tracing
"I love you" in dust
Bill Pauly
Dubuque, IA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
corn harvest
his sweat lined face turns
into a silent breeze
Terry O'Connor
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
mid-work week from heck
singing during my rounds
"Dust in the Wind"
Hazel A. Witherspoon
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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left behind
a child's dog-eared
primer
Terra Martin
bedroom curtains dust
oozing sun glimpse
a tit insist me to rise
greenfinch
norway
ready set go
gram's gonna talk
about the Dust Bowl
doris kasson
children scuffle
through decomposing granite...
Bonaparte's tomb
Gregory Longenecker
clouds of dust float
in the summer morning
sheep rumbling by
Keith A. Simmonds
T & T
dust upraised
by a passing herd of calves
coats his ecstasy
gourdman
morning shadows
stream from every speck
time to sweep
assu
dawn on mud road
a jalopy in hurry disturbs
the dust in repose
Vishnu P Kapoor
desert wind storm -
the hospital overflows with
asthma patients
Anonymous
no dust bowl hobo
left
my gran's hungry
Anonymous
clouds of spruce pollen
the yellow dust
of life
Oddbjørn Aardalen
dusted shoes
and traces lost in water -
the cry of a gull
Cristina Oprea
uncovered--
brushing dust from
the velvet mole
Barbara Snow
brushing dust
from the monitor screen
images grow bright
--Gene Doty
dust and loam
beneath my fingernails
garden in the bedroom
Doris Lynch
a layer of dust on the old tape
I clean the Chaplin's bowler hat
Robert Kania
Empty house
dust on the cremation urn -
a mouse squeaks.
Trevor Camp
a whirlwind
bending dusty corns
down, up, down
Juhani Tikkanen
dustheap
from his letters smoldering
heat
Irena Szewczyk
wet schoolbus window
"Joel + Rosalita"
no longer add up
mechaieh
the tenant has moved out
and left
the dust
Anonymous
from dust to mud
in one hour--
torrential rain
bre
man creates order
nature destroys it…remember
that thou art dust
Tony Nasuta
panning the Klondike
for the few who made it rich
dust turned into dreams
Deirdre Godwin
my allergic nose
get perturbed
dust sprays all along
purush-guntur
cold
in summer--
dusty windows
Tatsuya Oonai
empty cart
goes rumbaring –
a cloud of dust
Miorita
achoo achoo
found this gem
in my attic
Naranan Namby
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General Comments:
**Had a tough time selecting the six. :)
**It seems that dust haiku are not so monotonous as rain haiku. I wish
I had at least 3 more points to award in this section.
**This time too many said too much! Still, some fine gems.
**So much life among all this dust.
**A great variety of moments in this batch. Quite enjoyable though
there's a number of tendencies to tell rather than show. Thanks again
for this opportunity to read and vote.
**Thanks, and so grateful for this fun!
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Thank you for participating in the MAY 2013 Kukai!
We will announce the JUNE 2013 Call for Submissions on Monday, June
3rd. See you then!
With much appreciation,
The Shiki Monthly Kukai Team