Dear Friends,
Here are the results for the August 2014 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was SUNFLOWER, and our Free Format subject was GOODBYE(S)/DEPARTING WORDS..
Congratulations to ***Rita Odeh***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***F.J. Bergmann***, winner of our Free Format section!
VOTERS' comments are indicated by "**"
POETS' comments are indicated by "^^"
Kigo Theme:
SUNFLOWER
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First Place - 29 Points
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Gaza sky-
the sunflower field
facing darkness
Rita Odeh
Nazareth, Israel
(2,6,11) = 29 pts
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Second Place - 26 Points
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Van Gogh Gallery
the bus group turns
toward the sunflowers
aom (tim)
(4,5,4) = 26 pts
AND
as if
they know all the answers-
nodding sunflowers
-- Kashinath Karmakar,India
(2,3,14) = 26 pts
**As if anyone, including the writer and reader, does. Brings us, with subtlety in execution, into the mind of the speaker.
** This poem borders on aphorism, but interesting enough to warrant a point.
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Third Place - 25 Points
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without
a hint of hubris
. . . sunflowers
Hansha Teki
(2,8,3) = 25 pts
**At last...a haiku that simply gave us the beauty and wonder of the sunflower.
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20 Points
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sunflower field . . .
bicycle wheels
spin into dusk
Bill Pauly
(1,5,7) = 20 pts
**on first reading i almost wheeled past this lovely haiku but its irresistible charm with echoes of summer holidays as well as grand cycling tours kept drawing me in
**I would have given this more points, but it's too similar with other bicycle in the field poems.
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19 Points
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sunset
a sunflower
bows its head
Alan S. Bridges
(0,5,9) = 19 pts
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18 Points
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sunflower oil -
summer splutters
in the pan
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh, India
(2,5,2) = 18 pts
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14 Points
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sunflowers --
it's hard to imagine
the snow
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
USA
(1,2,7) = 14 pts
giant sunflowers
the children's
upturned faces
Paul Hodder
(0,2,10) = 14 pts
**The play of literal and metaphorical is what I like most about this one: faces like sunflowers, but also faces upturned to gaze at the sunflowers.
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13 Points
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ripe sunflower...
the way life bends
towards the ground
Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
(2,2,3) = 13 pts
rainstorm
my daughter retouches
a sunflower
carlos gesmundo
(0,5,3) = 13 pts
**Well, you've got nature, you've got art, you've got human relationship. And all without any visible straining for significance or effect. My favorite of the month in the kigo category.
sunflower -
only the scarecrow
doesn't turn its head
Petru-Ioan Garda
(0,2,9) = 13 pts
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12 Points
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Setting sun -
sunflower's shadow
still warm
Juhani Tikkanen
(2,1,4) = 12 pts
little league game
a sunflower sprout
in the outfield
terri l. French
US
(0,1,10) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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summer's end
the sunflower's heart
turns black
Beth Powell
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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peasant girl...
within her eyes I see
sunflowers
--- Gautam Nadkarni
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
sunflower field—
my inner child
blazes a path
Carl Seguiban
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
** liked the idea. that our inner child is still alive and going on the path it wants to.
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9 Points
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sunflower field...
swaying umbrellas
under the rain
Dejan Pavlinović
Pula, Croatia
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
sunflowers
heads bent
...monks at prayer
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
near death--
the sunflower
bows its head
Edward
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
**powerful. the contrast i feel is vivid. the sunflower bowing its head to pay final respects to the person dying, or the sunflower drooping away. beautiful.
sunflower on a cloudy day her smile
Bill Kenney
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
sunset
the shadow of the sunflower
taller than the sunflower
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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branching sunflowers
I may be a secret
optimist
Jennifer Savage
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
sunflower fields --
a bus full of school kids
follow the teacher
Jayashree Maniyil,
Australia
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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fading sunflowers
my well-washed
T-shirt
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
**I really like [this one]. We all have our favorite piece of clothing. I would guess that the poet had a favorite sunflower T-shirt which he wore so often that by the end of summer it was faded, just like the real sunflowers.
he buys a print
of van Gogh’s sunflowers...
rainy weather
Kirsty Karkow
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
late sunflowers
widow puts on
lace lingerie
Gabriel Sawicki
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
cloudy morning;
they face every direction-
sunflowers!
manoj saranathan
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
last of summer
chickadees empty
each sunflower head
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
gentle breeze
in the sunflower field
a black box
Samar Ghose
Australia
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
sunflowers the size of her freckled smile
polona
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
at the end
of the alley
sunflowers
Roberta Beary
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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betrayed confidence
the sunflowers
hang their heads
Ignatius Fay
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
rain outside;
of sunflowers, one
funeral wreath
dust
(0,3,0) = 6 pts
early autumn
sunflowers sway
with the wind
R D McManes
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
**A more indirect, more suggestive line 1 would strengthen this; it's a good one, though.
on tippy-toes
reaching for the flower
reaching for the sun
maxianne
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
**Though it struck me as cutesy on first reading, "tippy-toes" economically establishes the voice of an adult looking at a child, and, from there, the ku goes on and on.
solar eclipse--
the sunflowers now
stargazing
Yesha Shah
India
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
day after day
following the sun
daily commute
Chandra Bales
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
** i can relate to this commute.. but i don't know if i'd deduce there was a sunflower prompt from this, if i didn't know it already.
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5 Points
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early morning –
a tramp sleeping among
the sunflowers
Tomislav
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**Beautiful contrast. I like the way the reader cannot be sure whether to be sad or happy for the tramp.
an hour’s drive
sunflowers continue
beyond our destination
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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art exhibition
a bee buzzing around
Van Gogh's picture
Petya Gleridis
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
beneath clear skies
untended sunflower fields -
demarcation line
natalia kuznetsova
Moscow, Russia
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**This is very poignant and speaks of today's sad truth.
fibonacci eye
opposing golden spirals
sunflower seed head
Tom Conally
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
she will say yes!
sunflower petals
in the breeze
Raamesh Gowri Raghavan,
Mumbai, India
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
a rainy Sunday
sunflowers outside the church
with heads bowed
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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sunflowers at the dump reason to smile
John Soules
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
snail's pace
the sunflower follows
the sun
Nancy Smith
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
holding the sunflower
she remembers
the lies her mother told her
Bill Hudson
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
spending time with friends -
sunflowers and moon flowers*
are blooming in turns
Daniela Bullas
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
^^Epiphyllum oxypetalum (knows as: Dutchman's pipe, queen of the night or nightblooming cereus)
sunflower field -
delivering his first speech
from a tree
Audrey Downey
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
air alert over-
in a sunflower field
the children take selfies
Lavana kray
Romania
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
sunflower field...
the beginning and the end
of happiness
Radka Mindova
Bulgaria
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
brushed in rich pollen..
a bee reflects the yellow
of a sunflower
Pat Geyer
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
beheaded
bags of seeded suns
on the subway
Doris
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
sunflower state of profusion
Tom Painting
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
weight of seeds
a sunflower bows
to the soil
Elaine Riddell
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
time to prayer
even the sunflowers
turn toward Mecca
cfc
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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Monarch Butterfly
kisses a sunflower
the clouds blush
Jenn McSweeney
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
last dew drop
clinging to the sunflower
not much longer
Bernard Gieske
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
train passes
sunflower sees off
the cloudlets
Boris Nazansky
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
sitting on a step
is it the stillness or
the last sunflower
Sandi Pray
North Carolina
USA
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
at dusk--
even in a field of sunflowers
. . . sudden death
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the dragonfly
catches a twitching pattern
on a sunflower
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
under the rotting orange tree
a sunflower---
the randomness of life
Dica
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
sunflower field --
specks of gold at
daybreak
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad India
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
Yellow horizon
Sunflower fields are swaying
just beyond the crest.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville Illinois
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
morning sunflower
each day
a new beginning
Raffael de Gruttola
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
a moment captured
falling petal held by time
Van Gogh’s sunflowers
Deirdre Godwin
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
slate clouds
yet somewhere
a sunflower
Paresh
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
her likeness
to a sunflower...
not a rose
Ruth Powell
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
shortening days
sunflower still turns
to love the sun
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
distant thunder...
Monet's sunflowers
vivid on the wall
Anitha Varma
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
** would have been even better if the sunflowers were in the third line, to give it an aha! moment. Monet in the second line gives away that it's a painting, right?
I count the spirals
in sunflower seeds--
Fibonacci
James Dobson,
UK.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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early morning
sunflower seed-heads
stripped by lorikeets
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
overbaked mud pies
not even sunflowers
out of the crust
mechaieh
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the buds
awake to the rising sun ...
a field of sunflowers!
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
broad yellow face shines up
hundreds of black teeth
waiting to sprout
F.J. Bergmann
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
father's death
a sunflower sulks
at the grey sky
Vinay Leo R.
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
heat waves...
from a train window
the sunflowers
Neelam Dadhwal
India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
farm stand
this year buckets
of sunflowers
Diane Mayr
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
give them crayons
and big paper--
ask about sunflowers
jill
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
sunflower tangle
the summer I
planned
Ann K. Schwader
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
sunset
last time heads turn
sunflowers
Binnoo
India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
park bench --
sunflower seed husks
scattered about
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Waiting to be found
in the sunflower field -
an airplane fragment.
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Dawn on the field -
sunflowers preparing
for Surya Namaskara
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
her sunflowers
my recovering aunt
taller every day
Shelley Krause
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
summer clouds...
the sunflower field
and old regrets
~Devika
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
beaming back
at the super moon...
sunflower
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
sunflowers -
coloreful holiday postcards
thrown on the table
Krzysztof Kokot,Poland
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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buttery sunshine
petals shimmer, a zephyr;
cyan sky...no clouds
Tanja Cilia
golden tint
flashing high to sky
whispering winds
Purush
nolensevilleTN [USA]
silhouettes -
dreaming
your sun-lit faces
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
morning, sunbutter
what part of Ukraine
you are from
Ralf Bröker
Fields of sunflowers.
A reddishly setting sun,
they too observe it.
Horst Ludwig
late summer morning
a spotted owl hoots
the sunflowers eyes full of tears
Oddbjørn Aardalen
bewitched by
Apollo's chariot
sunflowers
Carolyn Coit Dancy
scintillating crowns
in the August morning wind...
a sunflower dance
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
waiting patiently
til summer comes around
and a sunflower smiles
Judi Honiker
wound on the landscape
the new bypass over
the giant sunflower
Garry Eaton
sunflowers
full of plump striped seeds
I save some to plant
assu
mountain journey
ending at the coastal road
sunflowers for company
Carol Raisfeld
family painting
a sun kissed face signs
her tiny canvas
Ken Sawitri
Indonesia
almost warm –
the sight of petals around
the green seed
Ramesh Anand
Bangalore, India
world history
written word by word
in sunflowers
Angela Terry
dried grass crunch
grasshoppers hitting elbows-
four-foot sunflower ascent
Sue H.
sunflowers!
in the world before me
there they are
Michael McClintock
family vacation
sunflower in the garden
with bent head
Yukiko Yamada
porch table
sunflowers in a vase
the starry, starry night
Jon Espen Vassbotn
bright sunflowers
border his
splash-of-color garden
Jane DeJonghe
with deep gassho
the day ends—
zenflowers
Sondra J. Byrnes
New Mexico
about turn
westening sunflower
homeward bound
rebba singh
July end --
drooping old sunflowers
shed their grey leaves
~ Patrick Wafula
working on her tan
lounging in the August sun
Black-eyed Susan smiles
todd eddy
the squirrel
sunflower seeds scatter
hunger no more
Jone Rush MacCullochj
late summer
the sunflowers bow their heads
and turn brown
Gerry Bravi
Canada
rainy morning--
one sunflower lingers
on my teacup
Anonymous
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General Comments:
**Thanks, once again, for all shikikukai folk!
**Curious how the choice of topic seems to work on poets. Seems to me that this time the topic of goodbye touched more souls and elicited more original work than did sunflowers.
**It was difficult finding something fresh and original. Too many wrote about sunflowers following the sun or other stereotypical facets of sunflowers.
**I have a feeling that most poets just 'mailed-in' their entries, the quality is not as strong as previous kukai.
**Thank you so much for this fascinating kigo, which I very much enjoyed. It brought in interesting haiku, quite different from what I had expected. I hope you also have some sunflowers to enjoy!
**once again, a long short list ..
**Thank you for hosting. Enjoyed going through the ballot as always :)
Free Format Theme:
GOODBYE(S)/DEPARTING WORDS
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First Place - 29 Points
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hospice care
the way you don't talk
about next year
F.J. Bergmann
(1,7,12) = 29 pts
**I usually find "the way . . ." structures offputting, but here it's appropriate, meaningful (not just what isn't said, but the manner in which it isn't said), and quite powerful.
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Second Place - 26 Points
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small hands
against the window
her first goodbye
Carol Raisfeld
(2,6,8) = 26 pts
**Genuine pathos, unmarred by sentimental rhetoric.
** takes me back to childhood in an instant. wonderful.
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Third Place - 25 Points
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first star
the day softens
to afterthought
Tom Painting
(3,5,6) = 25 pts
**easily I can relate with, saying goodbye to the day and contemplating the day that has gone by
**Beautifully expressed. Thank you for a lovely haiku, which I shall remember
AND
boarding call
I carry the taste of your kiss
through airport security
aom (tim)
(2,4,11) = 25 pts
AND
clean break
your good-bye left
on a sticky note
terri l. French
US
(0,5,15) = 25 pts
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23 Points
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again changing the tune i want played at my funeral
Alan S. Bridges
(2,4,9) = 23 pts
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21 Points
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late afternoon --
the last strip of sunlight
slips off my desk
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(1,4,10) = 21 pts
**Sharply observed, and, I think, rich in metaphorical implication.
^^Secretary’s note: My favorite haiku of the kukai.
**I'm wondering whether ellipses or a stronger m-dash after L1 would have been better
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20 Points
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falling leaves your bags at the door
John Soules
(1,3,11) = 20 pts
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14 Points
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goodbye -
prairie grass sways
this way and that
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh,India
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
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12 Points
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tasting of rain
the station platform
empties
Jennifer Savage
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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dead of winter
respirator garbles
her last words
Ignatius Fay
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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no name
on my sister's
stone
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(1,1,5) = 10 pts
alone now
under
the half moon
Paul Hodder
(0,4,2) = 10 pts
waving goodbye
her words taken
by the wind
Bill Kenney
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
**loved this beautiful image.
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9 Points
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fluttering out
of the funeral spray
. . .white butterfly
Carole MacRury
(1,3,0) = 9 pts
her flying kiss -
reached
and still reaching
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
casting letters
into the bonfire
feeble sparks
mechaieh
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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goodbye in every dew drop of the night
Samar Ghose
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
day's end...
geese in formation
etched on the sun
Anitha Varma
Kerala, India.
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
**A beautiful image, and the verb tense works well.
hauling the boat
we let the gulls
have the last word
Beth Powell
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
**Good haiku is like this. It fires up the imagination.
**I like the core idea, although the repeating articles are a bit bothersome. Still, I think it merits a point
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7 Points
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he waves at me
while biting a mango --
school departure
~ javan okeyo
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
freighters passing
in the night
the weight of goodbye
Angela Terry
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
laughing
until we cry
last embrace
todd eddy
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
taxi’s here
my lingering maybe
and who knows . . .
maxianne
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
no words at all
at the fork in the road...
winter hedgerow
Raamesh Gowri Raghavan
Mumbai
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
mile high—
her words
sinking in
Carl Seguiban
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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caressing my face,
her white-gloved hands
mean good-bye
Michael McClintock
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
**So tender. This haiku brought me close to tears.
Dear John…
he never could
spell my name
Michele L. Harvey
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
fleeing sparrows --
perhaps all soft words
fade
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
USA
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
It left quietly
without a note or reason
loves empty farewell.
Robert C. Howard
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
good-bye --
a slight shiver
from her touch
~ kevin achidiva
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
goodbyes said;;;
the windows darken
one by one
Anonymous
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
final goodbye
blossoms on the water
slowly drifting downstream
Bernard Gieske
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
fork in the road
hoping that her path
finds mine again
Vinay Leo R.
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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crow's nest -
youngsters arguing
where to fly
Juhani Tikkanen
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
home from the funeral
looking up to the jars
of candied stories
Ken Sawitri
Indonesia
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
bus station
the flow of tears
as she signs goodbye
Edward
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
friends hug and part -
in the sky
southbound geese
john mcdonald
Edinburgh Scotland
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
not knowing
that was good-bye
his off-hand wave
Ruth Powell
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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My mother told me
that "-ye" in "good-bye" still reads
its "God be with you."
Horst Ludwig
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
a small boat leaving
the sounds of a motor hushed
in a misty rain
Gerry Bravi
Canada
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
at her funeral
each one of us too polite
to say what we feel
Deirdre Godwin
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
** stood out because it brings a touch of humor to an otherwise grave topic
train whistle...
a tear rolls down
to the dust
Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy
Birmingham, UK
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
** can imagine this scene. nicely done.
old photo —
still waving goodbye
to her memory
--- Gautam Nadkarni
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
old old cat
letting her occupy my lap
for much too long
Diane Mayr
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**I have an old cat, so I really felt this one.
only the silence of the flowers and gravestones.
dsnake1
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
selamat jalan*
your hair scented
with mangoes and cloves
Doris
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
^^ *In Bahasa Indonesian selamat jalan means happy journey, said to the person leaving. Jalan means travel, journey.
the train leaves
I find a note
in my pocket
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
sandal wood
and her husband…
inside the urn
Shernaz Wadia
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
**Commonly caskets are made from polar, beech and the more expensive mahogany, the fact it's sandal wood tells of the affluence or importance of a person and also a clue to his geographical origins.
he shouted
at the grave each night
I'm sorry
assu
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
death notice
three months behind
cicada's empty shell
Yukiko Yamada
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
see you later
my father said
only I didn't
Dica
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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my sawn down cherry-
its sawdust pillows
my head
Lavana kray
Romania
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
train moves out
time for goodbyes
gone with it
Frances O'Keeffe
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
a long year ago,
under these same stars
I bade you farewell...
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg city, Mongolia
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
good-bye --
I stare at her wedding ring
as she waves
~ max kutai
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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crimson leaves
swirling in the pale sunlight...
farewell to summer
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
winter night;
after her parting
… the silence
manoj saranathan
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
summer's end...
the scent of a rainbow
in our goodbye kiss
Paresh
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
late in life
our goodbyes outweigh
the hellos
R D McManes
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
no goodbyes...
one more white brushstroke
over the canvas
Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
I bid good-bye
to my shivering puppy --
end of term break
~ collins mugusi
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
last goodbye -
the fanning of the hand
obscures the eyes
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
our wine glasses
capture sunset reflection...
farewell party
natalia kuznetsova
Russia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
her soft footfall
before the front door closes
morning mist
Harvey Jenkins
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
almost morning
before we part...
a moon remains
Pat Geyer
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
hiss of steam--
I read the goodbye words
on her lips
James Dobson, UK.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
hesitating finger
above the send button-
a fight too much
Dejan Pavlinović
Pula, Croatia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
summer's end
one more time he turns
and waves "goodbye”
Ellen Compton
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
drifting tree cotton
I spin a goodbye too
Neelam Dadhwal
Chandigarh, India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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shadows
come and soon go...
nothing new
Rita Odeh
Nazareth, Israel
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
keeling over
withered flowers
he touches the grave stone
Bill Hudson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
slipping a cheque
for what I owe him into his coffin
sad goodbye
Garry Eaton
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
autumn coloured wood
the sound of a distant churchbell
time to say good-bye
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the time has come
for us to be apart...
wilting lilies
Kirsty Karkow
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
snow flurries
mountains and rivers
turning white
rcm
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
saying goodbye—
taken down pictures
still on the wall
Sondra J. Byrnes
Santa Fe, NM
USA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
drafting will-
leaving all behind
but my dreams
Yesha Shah
India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the principal
bids the students farewell --
long holidays
~ christine
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
no words for goodbye
I pat the dog and wave
as I leave
Elaine Riddell
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning sun
dew departs leaving
tip of grass moist
Binnoo
India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the ganges
ever renewing itself
namaste
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
No word for goodbye -
only a handkerchief
waving in the wind
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
shorter days —
the pressure of unwept tears
as I pass your street
Shelley Krause
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
suddenly I see empty
all the stork nests -
goodbye my dears
Petru-Ioan Garda
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
hospice progress...
the night Dad's "see 'ya"
became "good bye"
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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long have I loved you
now I must be on my way...
this night I must die
Tanja Cilia
time to say good bye
stay not in yester years
bask in present sense
purush-
nolenseville,TN
Kind wind helps the tree
wave goodbye to its glory-
floating down the stream
Jenn McSweeney
progress
a new estate where once
we rode our ponies
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
wallpapers move or does wilde?
Ralf Bröker
the end of the heat -
red leaves dry up and fall off
before my vey eyes
Daniela Bullas
as the sun lowers
saying goodbye one last time
tears in the sand
Judi Honiker
a baby myna
stretched on its last beat ...
lengthening shadows
Anonymous
empty now
no goodbye wave
from her terrace
Anonymous
parting ...
“never more,”
this time
dust
goodbye, shores –
ship disappears in the first
autumn rain
Tomislav
without words
the pine speaks for me
last ray of sun
Sandi Pray
North Carolina
USA
sudden death –
keeps voicing the goodbye
left unsaid
Ramesh Anand
Bangalore, India
fireflies and crickets missing
good-bye to butterflies and bees-
global warming casualties
Sue H.
each step stabs
my ingrown toenail deeper
goodbye waltz
Anonymous
the leaves falling fast
after we say goodbye
at the station
Adelaide B. Shaw
moonlit grevillea --
wishing the night
with you, again
Jayashree Maniyil
Australia
sewer breakage --
I try out this last shaky
stepping stone
~ James Bundi
she's gone
sorrow
surrounds me
Jane DeJonghe
early nightfall --
I bid my friends farewell
after a sweet meal
~ diana vigedi
"always and always"
holding her small smile
on my face
Chandra Bales
she leaves me
the canyon too
says goodbye
Bill Pauly
sometimes good-bye
is a good thing--
good-bye poison ivy
jill
pregnant dandelion
breath of aoleus
goodby fluffy seeds
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
rainy season
goodbye's spring
be ...come september
rebba singh
empty see - saw
rusty swings
children have grown up
Petya Gleridis
Saying "good-bye"
when my heart cries "don't go!"
a mother in me.
Anonymous
goodbye note
her hugs & kisses
smell of jasmine
Rafał Zabratyński
the captain's laughter
his good-bye
didn't see it coming
Jone Rush MacCulloch
^^heartbroken over the passing of Robin Williams this week.
our long goodbye…
that sad song
repeated on the neighbor’s radio
~Devika
battle field --
the wounded waves hand before
closing his eyes
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad India
preparing
to say goodbye...
recurrent cancer
cfc
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General Comments:
**Farewell to many fine goodbyes!
**Not a lot of subtlety in this month's entries!
**after the initial culling i was actually quite pleasantly surprised by the quality of the remaining free format poems and assigning the points proved more of a challenge than expected.
**how difficult it was to choose this time ! so many good poems on 'goodbye'
**Thank you for these too, it was a joy reading the best of them.
^^Challenging and enjoyable theme!
^^Thank you ! Enjoyed writing on the theme !
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