Congratulations to Hortensia Anderson, winner of our Kigo section and to Keiko Izawa, winner of our Free Format section!
March 2007 Results
Kigo Theme:
Spring Wind
First Place -- 34 pts
spring wind —
the moon slips by
the open door
hortensia anderson
(4,6,10) = 34 pts
What an evocative and haunting image of the moon.
Great image, very subtle, but strong.
Second Place -- 24 pts
taking the combs
out of her hair
Spring wind
carol bleichert
(1,6,9) = 24 pts
Captures the mythic sense of spring as liberator, linked to a spontaneous, small-scale action; the concentration of real haiku.
Third Place -- 23 pts
spring wind
I catch
. . . my hat
Collin Barber
(0,6,11) = 23 pts
Nice playful spirit.
Fourth Place -- 19 pts
spring wind
between white clouds
a red kite
RD McManes
(1,7,2) = 19 pts
I thought this image was so arresting, and more unusual than many "kite" haiku this time of year....lovely, I wish I'd written it!
Fifth Place -- 17 pts
wine rings
on the café tables —
spring wind
David Grayson
(2,3,5) = 17 pts
spring wind
the scent of lilacs
before they bloom
soji
(1,3,8) = 17 pts
Spring wind ~
the yellow lining
of his jacket
Paul Hodder
(1,1,12) = 17 pts
A teasing and rather amusing hint of the unexpected revelation, even if we're not sure what's been revealed.
Beautiful!
spring wind
teaching a child
to whistle
Bill Kenney
(0,2,13) = 17 pts
Sixth Place -- 16 pts
spring wind...
my granddaughter's kite
higher than mine
ed markowski
(1,4,5) = 16 pts
Seventh Place -- 14 pts
spring wind
a piece of wool
in its beak
Quendryth Young
(1,3,5) = 14 pts
This is an example of 'detachment' from any emotional connection.
Eighth Place -- 13 pts
spring wind
the snap
of the mousetrap
Francine Banwarth
(0,4,5) = 13 pts
spring wind
the hatless roofer
whistling a tune
Audrey Downey
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
Ninth Place -- 12 pts
spring wind
my only son walks
ahead
Roberta Beary
(1,3,3) = 12 pts
Tenth Place -- 11 pts
spring wind
a sea of daffodil heads
do the wave
Carmel Lively Westerman
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
spring wind —
the meadow flowers tug
at their roots
Nancy Smith
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
the smell of sheets
dried in the sun
spring wind
Agnes Eva Savich
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
spring wind
a caterpillar climbs
the mailbox flag
Leslie Montgomery
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
Close observation.
spring wind —
the homework binder
slams shut
aom (tim)
(0,1,9) = 11 pts
This rings so true! I like the definitiveness of the two single- syllable words in the final line.
Eleventh Place -- 10 pts
spring wind
she asks if flowers
commit suicide
Petar Tchouhov
(1,3,1) = 10 pts
spring wind
the tree that came up from seed
stronger now
-- Karen Cesar
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
he tunes his guitar
in the next house —
spring wind
Israel López Balan
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
sea gulls . . .
a spring wind
from another shore
Marie Summers
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
spring wind —
no one to open
the window
Ana Cadarin
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
Found myself liking all the light-hearted ones best until i got to (this one) which sent a shiver up the back of my neck.
Twelfth Place -- 9 pts
the wake
of a willow branch —
spring wind
Ami
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
spring wind
the tiger kite pops
its tail
Darrell Byrd
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
Many fine kite poems; I think the "pops" made this one stand out.
a butterfly
clings to my trellis
spring wind
Pris Campbell
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
"Oh for a bee's experience / Of clover and of noon"--Emily Dickinson.
Thirteenth Place -- 8 pts
spring wind
the scent of jasmine
brings her back to me
Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(1,0,5) = 8 pts
spring wind
wizened hands
plant seeds
Tanya Dikova
(0,4,0) = 8 pts
spring wind
her ponytail
due east
Ann K. Schwader
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
Fourteenth Place -- 7 pts
spring wind
her muddy fingerprints
on the hem of my skirt
Dejah Leger
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
spring wind
from the garden's side
her song
Dorota Pyra
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
spring wind
the collared dove's breast
flutters
kjs
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
spring wind —
a parking ticket
in the park
-Rita Gray
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
Fifteenth Place -- 6 pts
first kiss
in the spring wind
eagles soar
doris kasson
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
spring wind...
a leaflet about life
in paradise
--Irene Golas
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
held still
in the spring wind —
seagulls
-- ushi
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
spring wind
winter trash flutters
on the barbed wire
Edward
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
spring wind
rattling the panes
our first kiss
Michael Baribeau
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
Sixteenth Place -- 5 pts
spring wind —
the heavy bells sounds
in solitude
Jordi Climent
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
spring wind —
a buzzard feasts
on a dead hare
max verhart
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
ancient pine —
a fresh spring wind
just for while
Lech Szeglowski
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
spring wind
in my neighbor's hair —
she looks younger
Ruth Franke
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
early spring wind . . .
a wave's foam lingers
on a rock
Bruce Ross
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
Wish i could have voted for this one, can see it happening.
spring wind —
a stranger answers
his phone
carol pearce
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
spring wind —
a dandelion blooms
by the old man's shack
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
Seventeenth Place -- 4 pts
a bit of new growth
through her thinning hair
spring wind
Carole
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
I loved this comparison between the Earth and the old woman!
the warm winds of spring
spread the pollen randomly
bees need no guidance
Mr PC
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
first spring wind
let fly the forgotten
winter leaves
emile molhuysen
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
spring breeze . . .
seeing her dance
my hips sway
Kala Ramesh
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
spring wind —
ivy vines tighten
in the moonlight
Ron Moss
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
spring wind —
old man winter
whispers goodbye
Tristan Coleridge
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
spring wind
the kite flies higher
and higher
Grzegorz Sionkowski
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
spring wind lifts
clothes on the line
and my heart
Ruth Powell
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
spring wind —
the taste of it
in the bow wave
Ellen Compton
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
Eighteenth Place -- 3 pts
spring wind
the chirps of a hungry
mouth
Terra Martin
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
spring wind rising —
melting ice for water
to mix up my ink
Glen Keener
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
lull in the spring wind
I run through the scales again
waiting to go free
Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
spring wind —
layers of color
outside the lines
Mary Davila
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
spring wind
a woodpecker's staccato riff
between gusts
Johnye Strickland
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
spring wind
mustard yellow waves
the farmer and his wife together
radhey shiam
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
it's Spring
wind your watch
ahead
Donna Bauerly
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
early warmth —
the promise of lilacs
in the spring wind
Warren Gossett
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
spring wind —
an autistic child
swims with dolphins
Anna Maria Scarpone
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
spring wind...
in her brown hair
white petals
Magdalena Dale
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
spring wind
the knotty pine catches
a rainbow kite
Laura Orabone
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
This brings to mind Charlie Brown's kite-eating tree.
Spring wind
the horizontal
spider silk
Sjs
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
General Comments: Very difficult this month! So many fine efforts.
It really hurt to eliminate some of them.
Free Format Theme:
Song
First Place -- 30 pts
old songbook
the faint stain of whisky
on a farewell song
Keiko
(3,5,11) = 30 pts
Second Place -- 21 pts
hazy moon —
a love song
lost to static
Collin Barber
(0,5,11) = 21 pts
Third Place -- 20 pts
dawn
in every direction
birdsong
Bridget Cougar
(1,4,9) = 20 pts
How original!
Fourth Place -- 19 pts
dawn breaking...
fishermen return
with a song
K. Ramesh
(1,5,6) = 19 pts
Fifth Place -- 18 pts
chilly morning
a bathroom crooner
murdering a song
dsnake1
(0,5,8) = 18 pts
Sixth Place -- 16 pts
dying light —
a song
in Hebrew
-- Karen Cesar
(2,2,6) = 16 pts
anniversary
humming our song
for the piano man
Bill Kenney
(0,3,10) = 16 pts
Seventh Place -- 15 pts
feral cat —
the cardinal's last song
caught in your throat
Donna Bauerly
(1,4,4) = 15 pts
I like the sharp edge of this one.
blue warbler
the whole body
sings its song
Quendryth Young
(1,4,4) = 15 pts
I can see--and I have seen--just this image. Well captured.
park busker
in all the breaks
birdsong
RaV
(1,2,8) = 15 pts
Alzheimer's
their old song
brings her back
tom painting
(0,4,7) = 15 pts
Eighth Place -- 14 pts
sirens' song —
still the fisherman
mends his net
Leslie Montgomery
(0,5,4) = 14 pts
Ninth Place -- 13 pts
filling the empty room the only child's song
w. f. owen
(0,4,5) = 13 pts
Tenth Place -- 12 pts
sunrise —
the cricket's song hidden
between the reeds
Jordi Climent
(1,3,3) = 12 pts
Eleventh Place -- 11 pts
riding my bike
over a cobbled road —
shake, rattle and roll
max verhart
(2,1,3) = 11 pts
Best use of song title!
A nice surprise!
morning dusk
the full moon lingers
for birdsong
Johnye Strickland
(1,1,6) = 11 pts
deep winter . . .
singing the songs
of her childhood
Susan Constable
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
Twelfth Place -- 10 pts
reaching in song
for the rhythm
her hips already found
marlène buitelaar
(1,3,1) = 10 pts
desert spring
a wind song spills
over the rim
Darrell Byrd
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
country cottage ~
the bedroom window
leaks birdsong
Paul Hodder
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
Thirteenth Place -- 9 pts
first day of spring —
whistling "Rockin' Robin"
in the potting shed
Tristan Coleridge
(2,1,1) = 9 pts
I'm right there enjoying this.
spring solitude
the song
of an unknown bird
Jeannie Martin
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
plastic flowers —
the spring song
of the peddler
Ana Cadarin
(0,4,1) = 9 pts
Fourteenth Place -- 8 pts
perfect pitch
at the ballpark
cricket song
Barbara S
1,0,5) = 8 pts
morning dew —
larksong spilling
over fresh-ploughed soil
jon
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
sparrow's song...
a distant knock
of an ax
Rita Odeh
(0,0,8) = 8 pts
Fifteenth Place -- 7 pts
que sera sera
spring lightning
which tree will it be
Terra Martin
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
One of my favorite songs, from a Hitchcock movie, I recall. Playful and clever, nicely done.
Ode to Joy
my hand-chiseled piece
of the Berlin Wall
Agnes Eva Savich
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
I remember a concert celebrating the fall of the Berlin Wall. During the Choral movement of Beethoven's 9th symphony, the tenor shouted "Freiheit" instead of "Freude" -- "Freedom" instead of "Joy."
bird song . . .
through an open window
the scent of earth
Carol Raisfeld
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
peeper's song —
my boots swallowed
in thawing marsh
-- ushi
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
To the sound of the frog is added the 'squelch' of boots sticking in the mud.
Sixteenth Place -- 6 pts
monday morning
the song of the city
assembles
Bill Hudson
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
her Victrola . . .
the old love songs
in a worn-out needle
Francine Banwarth
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
"La Montanara"
the old man
turns up the radio
Ruth Franke
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
I like the accuracy of the observation that a favorite song gets played louder than others.
Seventeenth Place -- 5 pts
mockingbird greets
spring with song —
all night long
Elizabeth Fanto
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
after divorce court
she hums on the freeway:
california dreamin'
Lech Szeglowski
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
The wittiest and, I'd say, the deepest of the "song title" entries.
an old lady
sprinkles salt into her coffee —
the long and winding road
Mary Davila
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
summer breeze —
kids making out
under the bridge
Ami
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
I assume this is the beautiful Seals and Crofts song, a classic!
Very evocative... Oh, to be young again.
songs of seduction
the bird's nest
...still empty
Sjs
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
New Year's eve
I sing a song to myself
in my native tongue
Audrey Downey
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
Rather awkwardly expressed ("my native tongue" borders on telling; haibun material, perhaps?), but the moment is real and poignant.
Touching!
Galveston...
the street musician's
thread bare mackinaw
ed markowski
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
sparrow's song
in a brown hedge
at the drive-thru
Beth Powell
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
Eighteenth Place -- 4 pts
freesias bloom
through the old window
a new love song
kjs
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
a worn violin
pilgrimage comes to an end
I hear a great song
Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
soft rain
bossa nova —
waters of March
Ann K. Schwader
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
99 Luftballons ...
another name
chiseled into stone
Anna Maria Scarpone
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
funeral song —
the hibiscus flower
sheds its white
Ron Moss
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
the mourning dove's sad song
. . . . on the sidewalk
a baby robin
brephoenix
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
Tune of an old song
Keep my memories alive
Though the words are gone
Edith
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
that song —
when you sing it like that
your hair shines
Michael McClintock
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
lunch hour —
heedless of the radio
a sparrow song
aom (tim)
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
praise song
a tone-deaf girl
raises the roof
George Hawkins
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
the quartet
leans in close
sweet adeline
Michael Baribeau
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
Good for a laugh!
morning song —
the gardener whistles
while he cuts
Israel López Balan
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
the little girl
mimics his song
chick-a-dee-dee-dee
carol bleichert
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
steady rain
tonight all the love songs
are blue
--Irene Golas
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
above the spray
a soaring gull —
song of the sea
Nancy Smith
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
Nineteenth Place -- 3 pts
the sun goes down
traces in the sand
deeper and deeper
Dorota Pyra
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
surrounded by song
I weep at the memories
the music invokes
Deirdre Godwin
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
checking my cd's
I found a song about you
seems like teen spirit
Mr PC
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
old song
on his car radio —
her first orchid
-Deborah P Kolodji
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
over the boat
hidden between the reeds
the cricket's song
Jordi Climent
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
dandelion fluff
the song of the skylark
surrounds the meadow
Jacek
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
half awake —
the dawn chorus stirs
my silent dreams
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
favorite song ...
trying not to hear it when
tone-deaf woman sings
ChristineOC
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
waiting for
the song of the house finch —
where is spring?
Barbara Campitelli
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
April crickets
their slender songs
echo each other
Laura Orabone
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
wind song
at my window,
lost steps
Magdalena Dale
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
with booming voice
the peddler's song
arrives before he does
Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,0,3) = 3 pts