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March 2016 Kukai

Here are the results for the March 2016 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was DEW and our Free Format subject was DRIFTWOOD.

 

Congratulations to ***Vinay Leo R.***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Sondra J. Byrnes***, winner of our Free Format section!

 

VOTERS' comments are indicated by "**"

POETS' comments are indicated by "^^"


Kigo Theme:

DEW 

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First Place -  39 Points

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leaf dew —

this struggle

to let go

 

Vinay Leo R.

(3,10,10) = 39 pts

**I can feel the struggle.

 

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Second Place - 23  Points

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school bus stop

all the new sneakers

wet with dew

 

--Diane Mayr

(1,5,10) = 23 pts

 

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Third Place -  19 Points

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dewdrop...

what does the leaf know

of nothingness

 

sanjuktaa

India

(0,7,5) = 19 pts

**This makes me think of the ‘dewdrop world’.

 

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 17 Points

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dewdrops

all the time

in the world

 

Bill Kenney

(1,3,8) = 17 pts

 

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 15 Points

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morning dew

scent of lemongrass

beyond the garden

 

Casey Daniel

(1,3,6) = 15 pts

 

 

insomnia

her slippers

wetted with dew

 

Tom Painting

(1,3,6) = 15 pts

 

 

fading stars

the old dog licks dew

from his fur

 

polona

(0,4,7) = 15 pts

**A nice balance of similarity and difference in the juxtaposition.

 

harbour mist . . .

the morning entangled

in wharf side nets

 

Marion Clarke

Warrenpoint, Northern Ireland

(0,4,7) = 15 pts

**What a wonderful image! And such a mood, too! Love the sounds of the words in this one.

 

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 14 Points

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maternity ward

the dew-eyed father's

first hello

 

aom (tim)

(1,4,3) = 14 pts

 

 

forest reflection

a snail pauses

at a dewdrop

 

Harvey Jenkins

(1,2,7) = 14 pts

**Beautifully rendered. Such a mood created in so few words.

 

ancient oak --

dew in the spiderweb

takes its time

 

Michele L. Harvey

USA

(0,4,6) = 14 pts

 

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13  Points

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see how it leans

this blade of grass…

morning dew

 

D W Skrivseth

(1,1,8) = 13 pts

**I love the close observation and simplicity of this one.

**This poem would be better without the word "see."

 

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 12 Points

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every step

a practice step--

path of dew

 

Sondra J. Byrnes

Santa Fe

New Mexico

USA

(1,3,3) = 12 pts

 

 

blue lilac--

a dewdrop merges

with another

 

Carole MacRury

(1,1,7) = 12 pts

**A quality I like in haiku is resonant insignificance, as here in the merger of a couple of dewdrops. The moral of the story: keep looking.

 

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 10 Points

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from the sky

returned to the sky

morning dew

 

Simon Hanson

Queensland, Australia

(0,3,4) = 10 pts

 

 

on-coming traffic --

on the windshield

a galaxy of dew

 

kawazu

(0,3,4) = 10 pts

**For me this would be improved by omitting ‘on’ in L2 but it is unusual and striking.

 

April wedding . . .

their vows

moist with dew

 

Bill Pauly

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

**Lovely!

 

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 9 Points

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the rising sun

sets every leaf alight

morning dew

 

assu

(0,3,3) = 9 pts

 

 

and yet ...

her laughter dancing

barefoot on the grass

 

maxianne

(0,3,3) = 9 pts

**Well, Issa's genius told him to stop after "and yet," but this extension of his classic ku has verve and spirit, and I want to believe that line 2 is not just a happy accident.

 

dew drops

on the cusp of dawn

bird notes

 

Barbara Kaufmann

(0,3,3) = 9 pts

**Yes, even though the dew will be gone soon, the bird song lingers.

 

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 8 Points

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do fairies bathe?

a purple pitcher plant

brimming with dew

 

Kirsty Karkow

(0,3,2) = 8 pts

 

 

through a dewdrop

by the rosehip thorn

a red train passing

 

helge t.

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

 

 

leaping deer

a spray of dew

and gone

 

Michael McClintock

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

**What a great image of the “leaping deer.” And just as quickly is the dew gone as the deer.

 

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 7 Points

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setting moon

dew drops

lead us home

 

Jone RushMacCulloch

Portland, OR

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

spruce bog

a heavy dew

bends the spider webs

 

Edward

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

 

dewy grass

a partridge sipping

first light

 

kaiser kahn

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

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6  Points

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morning dew -

fading away the summer

on her kimono

 

Ana Drobot

(Bucharest, Romania)

(1,1,1) = 6 pts

 

 

glittering dew

in a spider's web --

morning sunrays

 

~ Patrick Wafula

(Kenya)

(1,1,1) = 6 pts

 

 

poetry

the morning dew

of language

 

Oddbjørn Aardalen

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

first dew

our relationship

still in the dark

 

Bernard Gieske USA

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

after the prom

sharing the chaise longue

with dew

 

Doris

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

 

 

taking with it

all of yesterday

morning dew

 

Sreelatha Nair

India

(0,0,6) = 6 pts

 

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 5 Points

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dewdrops

on a lemon blossom

what might be

 

Bruce H. Feingold

Berkeley, CA

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

**The ephemeral nature of dewdrops lends a subtle poignancy to that "might" in line 3.

 

new lovers

after the meteor shower

morning dew

 

Alan S. Bridges

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

**How sensual!!!

 

Passiontide --

the herding dog

shakes off dew

 

(Ramona)

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

dew

new shine

of the snail trail

 

Boris Nazansky

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

morning dew -

after breakfast

the funeral

 

Israel López Balan

Mexico city

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

 

dewdrops at dawn ---

the maypole is ready

for its day

 

James Dobson,

Prudhoe, UK.

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

 

spider's web

the beads of dew

full of gravity

 

Rafał Zabratyński

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

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 4 Points

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morning dew

congealing on my mirror

a forgotten name

 

Alegria Imperial

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

 

 

orphanage room

on the glass window

a sparkling dew

 

Ken Sawitri

(Jakarta, Indonesia)

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

Dawn sunshine...

drops of dew quiver

upon a daisy

 

Keith A. SIMMONDS

Rodez, FRANCE

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

**I can feel that quiver!

 

all night diner

a streetwalker comes in

from the dew

 

LeRoy Gorman

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

morning dew

my grass is richer

with silver

 

Celestine Nudanu

Ghana

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

piñon pine seedlings

shimmering with morning dew

her faith wavers

 

Cyndi Lloyd

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

morning dew

all those faces

starting back at me

 

Paresh

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

morning shift –

pearls of dewdrops

on a spiderweb

 

Jayashree Maniyil

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

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 3 Points

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shining like pearls

on all the grass blades

dew drops....

 

purush

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

at his headstone

forget-me-nots washed in dew...

silent tears

 

Natalia Kuznetsova,

Russia

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

wrinkles

in every dew drop -

scything

 

Lavana kray

Romania

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

**Totally unexpected!

 

dew on pine ...

scent of the trail

to the lake

 

jill

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

autumn morning --

a gold nugget in each

blade of grass

 

Kumarendra Mallick

Hyderabad India

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

spring morning...

in grandma's garden

snails surfing dew

 

S.E. Buffington

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

dew

on the daffodil

sparkling

 

Barbara Campitelli

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

dewdrops on the field -

the ones who departed

unsung,unknown

 

Arvinder Kaur

Chandigarh,India

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

water restrictions

he washes his car

with morning dew

 

Bill Hudson

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

dewy web

cherry blossoms

in every drop

 

Ramesh Anand,

Bengaluru, India.

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

**And which cherry blossoms do we prefer – these, or the conventional ones growing on trees and in too many haiku?

**Exquisitely beautiful! How wonderful that something different was presented with this web.

 

one last kiss—

dewdrop at the leaftip

doddering

 

Shrikaanth

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

**I love the lightness in this one. I picture the last kiss as a little awkward. Very touching.

 

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 2 Points

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dew drops on a spider's web

sparkling in the morning sun

just like diamonds

 

Tom Conally

Gibsonville, NC

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

dew

a cup of tea before

the funeral

 

oga

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

dawn

night no more

tears of dew

 

Vishnu P Kapoor

Chennai, India

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

morning silence

breaking with the clamour

of falling dew...

 

Tuvshinzaya Nergui

Tsetserleg, Mongolia

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

sudden chill --

stepping on the dewy

star grass

 

~ andrew odinga

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

dew on the grass

wets my trouser's hem --

walk at sunrise

 

~ Samuel Musili

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

on a dew-drop

seeing the blue sky –

the sun rises

 

Miorita Alba

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

dew kissed rose-

from petal to petal

autumn sunrise

 

- Kashinath Karmakar

India

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

gliding dew . . .

the routes

that tear takes

 

Ajaya Mahala

Pune, India

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

our two bicycles

lie in the spring grass

filled with dew

 

Tomislav

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

morning sun

on the heavy dew-

my tent steamy

 

Ruth Powell

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

skinny dew worms

measuring the sidewalk

cool April rain

 

Ignatius Fay

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

dreams

evaporate like

morning dew

 

Jens-Christian Kjær

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

what if you become

a sea and swallow me...

iris dew drop

 

Rita Odeh

Haifa

Israel

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

passed away -

her early morning tears

on the clinic lawn

 

Eleonore Nickolay

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

dew ephemeral as the ashes in her urn

 

Donna Bauerly

Dubuque, IA

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

humid morning --

dew on a machete

forgotten outside

 

~ Michael Cosmas

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

cold morning --

a car windscreen

covered in dew

 

~ Arnold Echenje

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

old, bare feet in dewy grass

their first spring

springs to mind

 

Jon Espen Vassbotn

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

at dawn

dew on the hawthorne

tips a blossom

 

Beth Powell

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

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 1 Point

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murder mystery?

dew drops on that blade of grass

and a dragonfly

 

Daniela Bullas

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

iced dew drops

morning sun

brilliant

 

Juhani Tikkanen

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

so much dew--

the paperboy's socks

soaked to the toes

 

DeVar

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

morning sunshine --

our lawn grass covered

in glittering dew

 

~ Anne Njeri

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

first light ... he shakes

dew from the rolled newspaper

onto violets

 

Anonymous

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

humid midnight --

my white shirt falls

on dewy grass

 

~ Salphine Akose

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

dew dropping

from a banana frond --

morning cold

 

~ Isaac Okumu

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

silently lamenting

the passing of nightly silence…

dewdrops

 

Bill Gottlieb

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

**Just beautiful! I’m right there in the moment, too.

 

stale bread on the lawn

one magpie landing heavily

scatters dew

 

Sheila K Barksdale

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

foggy dew ―

in the end

drink

did kill him

 

Anonymous

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

dripping from broad leaves

dew trails across

her child's headstone

 

Bre

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

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No Points This Time, Sorry.

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in the morning dew

seagulls cacoophony

when grandpa lands a cod

 

Lindusen

Norway

 

 

Glistening with dew

a spider's web between twigs

pretty diamond choker

 

Aziza Hena

Bangladesh

  

 

early gray dew ~

Gramp grumbles

to himself

 

Anonymous

 

  

foggy morning

over dew-drenched lawns

a blue wren skips

 

Barbara A. Taylor

Mountain Top, NSW

Australia

  

 

we wait up...

dew condenses

on the grass

 

--Barbara Snow

 

  

The finch sang -

morning dews kissed

her blushing face.

 

Iffat Jahan Suchona

 

  

leaves shiver

with every dew drop

soon it will be spring

 

Judi Honiker

Clearwater, FL

 

  

dewdrops reflect

the sun's first rays

rise and shine

 

Giselle Maya

France

 

  

doe and fawn framed by

mist rising from morning dew

arouse wonderment

 

Poseytoon

 

  

morning dew

the coolness of a snail's song

twinkles

 

Svend A. Doggfall

 

 

 crystal gazing...

first rays reveal a rainbow

in the dew drop

 

Vandana Parashar

Ambala Cantt

India

 

  

jewels in the sun,

dew-drops on a web…

beautiful trap

 

John Hubbard

 

  

Morning woodland stroll

dawn-light shining like gemstones

in the morning dew.

 

Robert C. Howard

Belleville IL

 

  

dew drops reflecting

a grasshopper’s smiling face-

nice morning mirror

 

Munia Khan

Dhaka, Bangladesh

 

  

rising sun --

water droplets sparkle

on a spider's web

 

~ yamame (Kenya)

 

  

on a cool morning

snowballs to my face –

mountain dew

 

Anonymous

 

  

home at midnight --

every blade of grass

sparkling with dew

 

~ Isabelle Prondzynski

(Ireland)

 

  

the dew

on the apple I gave her

is gone by lunchtime

 

Paul Hodder

  

 

droplets of dew

wet my black shoes--

morning walk

 

~ sarah akoth

 

  

first sun ray

shines on dew drop -

mother's nose pin

 

Sudebi Singha

Kolkata, India

 

  

hibiscus blossoms

sparkling with dew --

rising sun

 

~ mercy kanyiva

 

  

sunrise --

the green riverbank grass

glitters with dew

 

~ dennis shakava

 

  

a spiderweb

shivers off dewdrops—

rainbow dawn

 

Marietta McGregor,

Australia

 

  

early morning dewdrops

appear then disappear

as he lay dying

 

Stevie Strang

 

  

dew's

coloured beads

rolling on the pansies

 

John McDonald

Edinburgh Scotland

 

 

 cold night --

a forgotten basin

dripping dew

 

~ Hannah Kiruki

 

  

morning dew

he gets to work with his eyes

closed

 

Dorota Ocińska

Poland, Łodź

 

  

drop by drop

dew falls from our roof --

cold night

 

~ Mercy Mukosia

 

  

narrow path --

dew on the grass

wets my shoes

 

~ Margaret Wangui

 

  

a handful of dew

maiden bathes her face for luck

first morning of May

 

Deirdre Godwin

 

  

dewdrops sliding

down a windowpane --

morning cold

 

~ Eric Kariuki

 

  

moving day

heavy dew drops

boxes damp

 

Yukiko Yamada

 

  

banana fronds

dropping dew like tears --

sunrise garden

 

~ Eren Owuor

 

 

 from each leaf bud

a single dewdrop

dangles

 

Jane DeJonghe

 

  

dew flying low

just see the swans

eyes

 

jean south

 

  

fragrant dawn

newly planted garden

dew harvest

 

Anonymous

 

 

 thin leaves of grass

nodding in the night

watering the soil

 

Starbear

 

  

a hard day’s night-

the Heiligenschein watching

over the beggar

 

Cristian Mocanu

 

  

late morning -

dew falls

from the blossom

 

-Priscilla Cook

 

 

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General Comments:

 

**I am drunk on dew!

  

**a good crop of dew haiku, i had to leave out a few fine poems

  

**I noticed an association between dew and time in several poems….Great poems, congratulations to all the poets!

  

**I could easily have picked a lot more, these were so very vivid. Congratulations to all the haijin.

 

 **I find it a bit tricky to write against the season but I appreciate the nod to the poets in the southern hemisphere.

 

 

 


Free Format Theme:

DRIFTWOOD

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First Place -  33 Points

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alone

at day's end

driftwood

 

Sondra J. Byrnes

Santa Fe

New Mexico

USA

(3,3,18) = 33 pts

**Certainly a no-frills ku, but that hint of ambiguity around who or what is alone makes it.

 

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Second Place -  25 Points

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refugees

on foreign shores

winter driftwood

 

Bruce H. Feingold

Berkeley, CA

(1,5,12) = 25 pts

**Wow! a great one!

 

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Third Place -  23 Points

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driftwood

my thoughts ebbing away

tide by tide

 

Ken Sawitri

(Jakarta, Indonesia)

(0,8,7) = 23 pts

**Yes, I love when certain thoughts ebb away. So well said.

 

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19 Points

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driftwood –

scent of a memory

from a distant forest

 

Andrei C. Szava

(2,3,7) = 19 pts

**Absolutely love this!

 

alone on a beach

looking for who I once was

driftwood

 

Barbara Kaufmann

(1,4,8) = 19 pts

 

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17 Points

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driftwood-

an untold story

from shore to shore

 

- Kashinath Karmakar

India

(1,5,4) = 17 pts

 

 

driftwood

my grandchild shows me

a dragon

 

Bill Kenney

(0,3,11) = 17 pts

 

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15 Points

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half buried driftwood ~

I too am such a long way

from home

 

Angèle Lux

(1,3,6) = 15 pts

 

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14 Points

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charred driftwood

stories around the fire

from a distant shore

 

Simon Hanson

(0,4,6) = 14 pts

**I love where this ku takes me.

 

dance of waves -

the sheer loneliness

of driftwood

 

Arvinder Kaur

Chandigarh,India

(0,4,6) = 14 pts

 

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12 Points

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grandma's house

all the driftwood

that's come to rest

 

aom (tim)

(0,2,8) = 12 pts

**This is, I think, a bit too open to be completely successful, but the upside of that is its suggestiveness; one would like to meet grandma.

 

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11 Points

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the charred end of driftwood autumn deepens

 

polona

(0,2,7) = 11 pts

**Simply beautiful!

 

goose barnacles

clinging to driftwood…

my restless life

 

Marietta McGregor,

Australia

(0,2,7) = 11 pts

**The hint in the image that my life is parasitical as well as restless gives this some psychological interest.

 

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10 Points

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honeymoon...

the driftwood fire

all but ash

 

Michele L. Harvey

USA

(1,2,3) = 10 pts

 

 

sea-tossed

for a while the moon nestled

in the driftwood's curve

 

Anonymous

(0,4,2) = 10 pts

 

 

after the storm...

weary birds resting

upon driftwood

 

Keith A. SIMMONDS

Rodez, FRANCE

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

**So well observed and written with sympathy.

 

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9 Points

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long night-

a driftwood tortured

by the wind

 

Rita Odeh

Haifa

Israel

(1,1,4) = 9 pts

 

 

nursery window

driftwood rocking

in the waves

 

kawazu

(0,2,5) = 9 pts

 

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8 Points

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greyed by the sun

broken by the tide . . .

driftwood

 

Beverley George

(2,1,0) = 8 pts

 

 

hot night -

using driftwood

as a doorstop

 

Miorita Alba

(1,0,5) = 8 pts

 

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7 Points

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after the storm--

a driftwood mobile

twists in silence

 

Carole MacRury

(1,1,2) = 7 pts

**What a unique image - "driftwood mobile." The devastation and sense of loss is so palpable in this haiku. Wonderfully rendered!

 

intricately carved

on a driftwood cross

the vagabond's name

 

Jon Espen Vassbotn

(1,0,4) = 7 pts

 

 

a white feather

caught on driftwood

planting moon

 

Giselle Maya

France

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

his prodigal son

still lost on the road...

driftwood

 

Natalia Kuznetsova

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

lake at dawn

a floating birch slides

under the fog

 

--Diane Mayr

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

**I like the specificity of "birch" and that surprising but authentic last line.

 

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6 Points

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mother's lost ring

all eyes focused between

shells and driftwood

 

Barbara A. Taylor

Mountain Top, NSW

Australia

(0,3,0) = 6 pts

 

 

wind and tide

a driftwood horse

lost in beach grass

 

Michael McClintock

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

after the divorce

all down river

driftwood

 

Bernard Gieske USA

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

  

driftwood

talk of phantom ships

around the fire

 

Beth Powell

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

back from vacation

in her laundry bag

driftwood & witch stones

 

(Ramona)

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

 

 

collecting driftwood . . .

a blind man remembers

summer love

 

Marion Clarke

Warrenpoint, Northern Ireland

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

 

 

the eye

the knot left behind

driftwood

 

Alan S. Bridges

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

**What a beautiful observation!

 

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5 Points

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driftwood sculpture

a dragonfly skimming

until the trout

 

Ignatius Fay

(1,1,0) = 5 pts

**Does not catch a single moment, but splendidly pushes the boundary.

 

driftwood-

colours of the sea and sand

in her eyes

 

Ruth Powell

(1,0,2) = 5 pts

 

 

Night on shore

worms' safe nap inside a

lone driftwood

 

Aziza Hena

Bangladesh

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

 

 

nude beach—

faces in the driftwood

staring me down

 

Bill Pauly

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

ebb tide--

wedged between secrets

a driftwood

 

Alegria Imperial

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

driftwood--

remembers the curve

of the waves that carried it

 

Jill

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

**The first word of the second line and the last three words of the last line could well be dispensed with.

 

old driftwood

Dad's favorite

walking cane

 

charlie smith

raleigh, nc

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

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4 Points

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inuksuk shadows

around a driftwood fire

Northern lights

 

Garry Eaton

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

**What wonderful light play in this ku. I had to look up inuksuk. Beautiful mood in this haiku!

**I especially liked [the] inuksuk image.

 

our children's photos

tucked

in the driftwood mirror

 

Allison Millcock

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

hands of driftwood

shaking

the waves

 

jean south

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

strutting

past driftwood

the proud raven

 

Bill Gottlieb

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

driftwood

by the mountain lake

setting aside our differences

 

Cyndi Lloyd

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

riding the ebb

all the years

we believed in love

 

Paresh

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

silted pond --

perched on the twig

a dragonfly

 

Kumarendra Mallick

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

**What a beautiful contrast – the murky pond with the clearness of dragonfly wings. Very enlightening.

 

canoeing

down the river

driftwood

 

Juhani Tikkanen

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

 

this bench

made from driftwood

far from home

 

Paul Hodder

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

 

driftwood search --

the curve of the bay

at dawn

 

James Dobson,

Prudhoe, UK.

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

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3 Points

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tsunami driftwood -

sun tan and sea salt hold on

tightly to his skin

 

Daniela Bullas

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

driftwood

the journey of weathered faces

running aground

 

Devin Harrison

Vancouver Island - Canada

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

**Very interesting haiku. I picture people reaching the ends of their journeys.

 

the driftwood, the stars,

the birds of passage, who

navigates after who

 

Oddbjørn Aardalen

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

driftwood -

a rusty fish hook pricks

my barefoot

 

Lavana kray

Romania

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

carved

on the piece of driftwood

a love heart

 

Svend A. Doggfall

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

driftwood altar

she leaves a note

the waves respond

 

Jone Rush MacCulloch

Portland, Oregon

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

rendezvous

driftwood enough

for a bonfire

 

Tom Painting

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

his life

carried from wave to wave

driftwood

 

Dorota Ocińska

Poland, Łódź

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

hands down

and one leg up -

a driftwood's beach yoga

 

Ajaya Mahala

Pune, India

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

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2 Points

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a scatter of shapes

woodcarver’s morning

scavenger hunt

 

Harvey Jenkins

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

out to sea, bobbing

next to a piece of driftwood

his ashes

 

Stevie Strang

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

aimless meander

sharing time with gulls and sea

and wave-polished wood

 

Deirdre Godwin

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

end of summer bonfire -

tossing her last piece of driftwood

into the flames

 

-Priscilla Cook

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

smooth sea

the rough texture

of dry driftwood

 

Rafał Zabratyński

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

colored flames dance

from driftwood fires

-- spring break

 

Bre

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

Moonticklesong

two hearts of driftwood

crushing in the sea

 

Lindusen

Norway

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**I love the phrase “moonticklesong” – how refreshing! The emotion this ku creates is so palpable. Really beautiful!

 

critic's review:

the abandoned driftwood

near the parking lot

 

--Barbara Snow

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

name etched

on a piece of driftwood

aroma of tea

 

Casey Daniel

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

giving her comfort

the therapist's kind words...

driftwood

 

Ana Drobot

(Bucharest, Romania)

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

An old man’s hands

weathered like fallen branches

drifting through time.

 

Robert C. Howard

Belleville IL

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

weathered wood,,,

this burden

made lighter

 

D W Skrivseth

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

driftwood campfire

the shapeshifting

in girlfriend’s story

 

Ramesh Anand

Bengaluru, India

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

driftwood moving abroad my home nowhere

 

Shrikaanth

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

driftwood these days-

 

fifty years ago

the mines on the beach

 

dsnake1

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

driftwood smoke

his joke

about rape

 

Anonymous

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**Maybe a bit obvious in its exploitation of a hot button issue, but it does pack a punch.

 

the shore of Maine

gathering driftwood

in the winter

 

Barbara Campitelli

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

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1 Point

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two logs on the river

mom and dad

at a distance

 

hawktalk

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

Summer noon -

the driftwood came ashore

with a chain locket.

 

Iffat Jahan Suchona

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

all my expectations

returned dishonoured

drift woods at my doorstep

 

purush

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

rockbound shore

a sculptor collects driftwood

for his studio

 

Kirsty Karkow

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

woman's torso

a pebble marks its navel

shape of the driftwood

 

Vishnu P Kapoor

Chennai, India

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

cremated remains

go down river

with the driftwood

 

Donna Bauerly

Dubuque, IA

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

driftwoods remain

the bridge overhead

another spring comes

 

Yukiko Yamada

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

sea-washed huts

a bald eagle perched

on a driftwood

 

Jayashree Maniyil

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

 

sand dollar rich...

kids combing driftwood

with sea mist hair

 

S.E.Buffington

(0,0,1) = 1 pts

 

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No Points This Time, Sorry.

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discarded plastic

drifting on ocean currents

not unlike driftwood

 

Tom Conally

Gibsonville, NC

 

 

tangled driftwood

tossed upon the shore

time passages

 

Judi Honiker

Clearwater, FL

  

 

driftwood grounded

on a pliant pink plain

his vasty palm

 

assu

 

  

old tree

pulled up and abused

wrecked driftwood

 

Jens-Christian Kjær

 

  

life swirls and bobs as

driftwood flounders in the sea

to oblivion

 

poseytoon

 

  

river bend

flash floods move tangled driftwood

closer to the sea

 

Edward

 

 

 ugly ducklings?

caught in the log boom

some driftwood

 

maxianne

 

  

how wayward

waves take the driftwood...

juvenile offender

 

Vandana Parashar

Ambala Cantt

India

 

  

washed ashore

cut lengths of old growth

saddens my heart

 

Bill Hudson

  

 

between blue waves

starfish’s sanctuary

a forlorn driftwood

 

Munia Khan

Dhaka, Bangladesh

 

  

driftwood fishwheel

the salmon too

travel

 

Doris

 

  

an old man

gazes at the driftwood

and muses...

 

Tuvshinzaya Nergui

Tsetserleg, Mongolia

 

  

her son’s fish

made of driftwood -

art therapy

 

Eleonore Nickolay

France/Germany

 

  

splitting driftwood the two divorced

 

oga

 

  

tsunami ends -

lovebirds on driftwood

aimless

 

Sudebi Singha

Kolkata, India

 

  

windswept waves

a driftwood shelter

on the beach

 

DeVar

 

  

Drifting—now—toward—shore—

Adventure-lined—brittle—gray—

Hands catch—raise me up—

 

James Thoune

Bowling Green, KY USA

 

  

hundred-year flood

driftwood is taken

to a bus stop & left

 

LeRoy Gorman

  

 

where the sea

rubbed...

driftwood sculpture

 

John McDonald

Edinburgh Scotland

 

 

 this Floating World

driftwood

follows with the current

 

Raffael de Gruttola

Natick, MA USA

 

  

a row of waves . . .

the gleam of driftwood

among the debris

 

Tomislav

 

  

Whitney's "LOVE YOU-OO"

I hurl driftwood back in

"...will always..."

 

Sheila K Barksdale

 

  

Remembrance Day

an old woman sighs close to

pieces of driftwood

 

kaiser kahn

 

 

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General Comments:

 

**Drifting along.....

 

 **again, pleasantly surprised by the number of quality entries

 

 **I noticed lost of associations between driftwood and deeply emotional states… Very interesting haiku!

  

**Some fascinating images!

 


 

 

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