Here are the results for the March 2016 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was DEW and our Free Format subject was DRIFTWOOD.
Congratulations to ***Vinay Leo R.***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Sondra J. Byrnes***, winner of our Free Format section!
VOTERS' comments are indicated by "**"
POETS' comments are indicated by "^^"
Kigo Theme:
DEW
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First Place - 39 Points
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leaf dew —
this struggle
to let go
Vinay Leo R.
(3,10,10) = 39 pts
**I can feel the struggle.
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Second Place - 23 Points
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school bus stop
all the new sneakers
wet with dew
--Diane Mayr
(1,5,10) = 23 pts
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Third Place - 19 Points
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dewdrop...
what does the leaf know
of nothingness
sanjuktaa
India
(0,7,5) = 19 pts
**This makes me think of the ‘dewdrop world’.
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17 Points
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dewdrops
all the time
in the world
Bill Kenney
(1,3,8) = 17 pts
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15 Points
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morning dew
scent of lemongrass
beyond the garden
Casey Daniel
(1,3,6) = 15 pts
insomnia
her slippers
wetted with dew
Tom Painting
(1,3,6) = 15 pts
fading stars
the old dog licks dew
from his fur
polona
(0,4,7) = 15 pts
**A nice balance of similarity and difference in the juxtaposition.
harbour mist . . .
the morning entangled
in wharf side nets
Marion Clarke
Warrenpoint, Northern Ireland
(0,4,7) = 15 pts
**What a wonderful image! And such a mood, too! Love the sounds of the words in this one.
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14 Points
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maternity ward
the dew-eyed father's
first hello
aom (tim)
(1,4,3) = 14 pts
forest reflection
a snail pauses
at a dewdrop
Harvey Jenkins
(1,2,7) = 14 pts
**Beautifully rendered. Such a mood created in so few words.
ancient oak --
dew in the spiderweb
takes its time
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,4,6) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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see how it leans
this blade of grass…
morning dew
D W Skrivseth
(1,1,8) = 13 pts
**I love the close observation and simplicity of this one.
**This poem would be better without the word "see."
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12 Points
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every step
a practice step--
path of dew
Sondra J. Byrnes
Santa Fe
New Mexico
USA
(1,3,3) = 12 pts
blue lilac--
a dewdrop merges
with another
Carole MacRury
(1,1,7) = 12 pts
**A quality I like in haiku is resonant insignificance, as here in the merger of a couple of dewdrops. The moral of the story: keep looking.
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10 Points
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from the sky
returned to the sky
morning dew
Simon Hanson
Queensland, Australia
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
on-coming traffic --
on the windshield
a galaxy of dew
kawazu
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
**For me this would be improved by omitting ‘on’ in L2 but it is unusual and striking.
April wedding . . .
their vows
moist with dew
Bill Pauly
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
**Lovely!
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9 Points
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the rising sun
sets every leaf alight
morning dew
assu
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
and yet ...
her laughter dancing
barefoot on the grass
maxianne
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
**Well, Issa's genius told him to stop after "and yet," but this extension of his classic ku has verve and spirit, and I want to believe that line 2 is not just a happy accident.
dew drops
on the cusp of dawn
bird notes
Barbara Kaufmann
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
**Yes, even though the dew will be gone soon, the bird song lingers.
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8 Points
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do fairies bathe?
a purple pitcher plant
brimming with dew
Kirsty Karkow
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
through a dewdrop
by the rosehip thorn
a red train passing
helge t.
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
leaping deer
a spray of dew
and gone
Michael McClintock
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
**What a great image of the “leaping deer.” And just as quickly is the dew gone as the deer.
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7 Points
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setting moon
dew drops
lead us home
Jone RushMacCulloch
Portland, OR
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
spruce bog
a heavy dew
bends the spider webs
Edward
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
dewy grass
a partridge sipping
first light
kaiser kahn
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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morning dew -
fading away the summer
on her kimono
Ana Drobot
(Bucharest, Romania)
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
glittering dew
in a spider's web --
morning sunrays
~ Patrick Wafula
(Kenya)
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
poetry
the morning dew
of language
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
first dew
our relationship
still in the dark
Bernard Gieske USA
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
after the prom
sharing the chaise longue
with dew
Doris
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
taking with it
all of yesterday
morning dew
Sreelatha Nair
India
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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dewdrops
on a lemon blossom
what might be
Bruce H. Feingold
Berkeley, CA
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
**The ephemeral nature of dewdrops lends a subtle poignancy to that "might" in line 3.
new lovers
after the meteor shower
morning dew
Alan S. Bridges
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**How sensual!!!
Passiontide --
the herding dog
shakes off dew
(Ramona)
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
dew
new shine
of the snail trail
Boris Nazansky
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
morning dew -
after breakfast
the funeral
Israel López Balan
Mexico city
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
dewdrops at dawn ---
the maypole is ready
for its day
James Dobson,
Prudhoe, UK.
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
spider's web
the beads of dew
full of gravity
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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morning dew
congealing on my mirror
a forgotten name
Alegria Imperial
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
orphanage room
on the glass window
a sparkling dew
Ken Sawitri
(Jakarta, Indonesia)
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
Dawn sunshine...
drops of dew quiver
upon a daisy
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**I can feel that quiver!
all night diner
a streetwalker comes in
from the dew
LeRoy Gorman
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
morning dew
my grass is richer
with silver
Celestine Nudanu
Ghana
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
piñon pine seedlings
shimmering with morning dew
her faith wavers
Cyndi Lloyd
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
morning dew
all those faces
starting back at me
Paresh
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
morning shift –
pearls of dewdrops
on a spiderweb
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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shining like pearls
on all the grass blades
dew drops....
purush
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
at his headstone
forget-me-nots washed in dew...
silent tears
Natalia Kuznetsova,
Russia
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
wrinkles
in every dew drop -
scything
Lavana kray
Romania
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**Totally unexpected!
dew on pine ...
scent of the trail
to the lake
jill
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
autumn morning --
a gold nugget in each
blade of grass
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad India
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
spring morning...
in grandma's garden
snails surfing dew
S.E. Buffington
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
dew
on the daffodil
sparkling
Barbara Campitelli
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
dewdrops on the field -
the ones who departed
unsung,unknown
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh,India
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
water restrictions
he washes his car
with morning dew
Bill Hudson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
dewy web
cherry blossoms
in every drop
Ramesh Anand,
Bengaluru, India.
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
**And which cherry blossoms do we prefer – these, or the conventional ones growing on trees and in too many haiku?
**Exquisitely beautiful! How wonderful that something different was presented with this web.
one last kiss—
dewdrop at the leaftip
doddering
Shrikaanth
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
**I love the lightness in this one. I picture the last kiss as a little awkward. Very touching.
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2 Points
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dew drops on a spider's web
sparkling in the morning sun
just like diamonds
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
dew
a cup of tea before
the funeral
oga
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
dawn
night no more
tears of dew
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
morning silence
breaking with the clamour
of falling dew...
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg, Mongolia
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
sudden chill --
stepping on the dewy
star grass
~ andrew odinga
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
dew on the grass
wets my trouser's hem --
walk at sunrise
~ Samuel Musili
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
on a dew-drop
seeing the blue sky –
the sun rises
Miorita Alba
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
dew kissed rose-
from petal to petal
autumn sunrise
- Kashinath Karmakar
India
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
gliding dew . . .
the routes
that tear takes
Ajaya Mahala
Pune, India
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
our two bicycles
lie in the spring grass
filled with dew
Tomislav
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
morning sun
on the heavy dew-
my tent steamy
Ruth Powell
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
skinny dew worms
measuring the sidewalk
cool April rain
Ignatius Fay
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
dreams
evaporate like
morning dew
Jens-Christian Kjær
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
what if you become
a sea and swallow me...
iris dew drop
Rita Odeh
Haifa
Israel
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
passed away -
her early morning tears
on the clinic lawn
Eleonore Nickolay
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
dew ephemeral as the ashes in her urn
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
humid morning --
dew on a machete
forgotten outside
~ Michael Cosmas
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
cold morning --
a car windscreen
covered in dew
~ Arnold Echenje
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
old, bare feet in dewy grass
their first spring
springs to mind
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
at dawn
dew on the hawthorne
tips a blossom
Beth Powell
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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murder mystery?
dew drops on that blade of grass
and a dragonfly
Daniela Bullas
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
iced dew drops
morning sun
brilliant
Juhani Tikkanen
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
so much dew--
the paperboy's socks
soaked to the toes
DeVar
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning sunshine --
our lawn grass covered
in glittering dew
~ Anne Njeri
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
first light ... he shakes
dew from the rolled newspaper
onto violets
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
humid midnight --
my white shirt falls
on dewy grass
~ Salphine Akose
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
dew dropping
from a banana frond --
morning cold
~ Isaac Okumu
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
silently lamenting
the passing of nightly silence…
dewdrops
Bill Gottlieb
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**Just beautiful! I’m right there in the moment, too.
stale bread on the lawn
one magpie landing heavily
scatters dew
Sheila K Barksdale
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
foggy dew ―
in the end
drink
did kill him
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
dripping from broad leaves
dew trails across
her child's headstone
Bre
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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in the morning dew
seagulls cacoophony
when grandpa lands a cod
Lindusen
Norway
Glistening with dew
a spider's web between twigs
pretty diamond choker
Aziza Hena
Bangladesh
early gray dew ~
Gramp grumbles
to himself
Anonymous
foggy morning
over dew-drenched lawns
a blue wren skips
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
we wait up...
dew condenses
on the grass
--Barbara Snow
The finch sang -
morning dews kissed
her blushing face.
Iffat Jahan Suchona
leaves shiver
with every dew drop
soon it will be spring
Judi Honiker
Clearwater, FL
dewdrops reflect
the sun's first rays
rise and shine
Giselle Maya
France
doe and fawn framed by
mist rising from morning dew
arouse wonderment
Poseytoon
morning dew
the coolness of a snail's song
twinkles
Svend A. Doggfall
crystal gazing...
first rays reveal a rainbow
in the dew drop
Vandana Parashar
Ambala Cantt
India
jewels in the sun,
dew-drops on a web…
beautiful trap
John Hubbard
Morning woodland stroll
dawn-light shining like gemstones
in the morning dew.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
dew drops reflecting
a grasshopper’s smiling face-
nice morning mirror
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
rising sun --
water droplets sparkle
on a spider's web
~ yamame (Kenya)
on a cool morning
snowballs to my face –
mountain dew
Anonymous
home at midnight --
every blade of grass
sparkling with dew
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(Ireland)
the dew
on the apple I gave her
is gone by lunchtime
Paul Hodder
droplets of dew
wet my black shoes--
morning walk
~ sarah akoth
first sun ray
shines on dew drop -
mother's nose pin
Sudebi Singha
Kolkata, India
hibiscus blossoms
sparkling with dew --
rising sun
~ mercy kanyiva
sunrise --
the green riverbank grass
glitters with dew
~ dennis shakava
a spiderweb
shivers off dewdrops—
rainbow dawn
Marietta McGregor,
Australia
early morning dewdrops
appear then disappear
as he lay dying
Stevie Strang
dew's
coloured beads
rolling on the pansies
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
cold night --
a forgotten basin
dripping dew
~ Hannah Kiruki
morning dew
he gets to work with his eyes
closed
Dorota Ocińska
Poland, Łodź
drop by drop
dew falls from our roof --
cold night
~ Mercy Mukosia
narrow path --
dew on the grass
wets my shoes
~ Margaret Wangui
a handful of dew
maiden bathes her face for luck
first morning of May
Deirdre Godwin
dewdrops sliding
down a windowpane --
morning cold
~ Eric Kariuki
moving day
heavy dew drops
boxes damp
Yukiko Yamada
banana fronds
dropping dew like tears --
sunrise garden
~ Eren Owuor
from each leaf bud
a single dewdrop
dangles
Jane DeJonghe
dew flying low
just see the swans
eyes
jean south
fragrant dawn
newly planted garden
dew harvest
Anonymous
thin leaves of grass
nodding in the night
watering the soil
Starbear
a hard day’s night-
the Heiligenschein watching
over the beggar
Cristian Mocanu
late morning -
dew falls
from the blossom
-Priscilla Cook
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General Comments:
**I am drunk on dew!
**a good crop of dew haiku, i had to leave out a few fine poems
**I noticed an association between dew and time in several poems….Great poems, congratulations to all the poets!
**I could easily have picked a lot more, these were so very vivid. Congratulations to all the haijin.
**I find it a bit tricky to write against the season but I appreciate the nod to the poets in the southern hemisphere.
Free Format Theme:
DRIFTWOOD
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First Place - 33 Points
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alone
at day's end
driftwood
Sondra J. Byrnes
Santa Fe
New Mexico
USA
(3,3,18) = 33 pts
**Certainly a no-frills ku, but that hint of ambiguity around who or what is alone makes it.
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Second Place - 25 Points
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refugees
on foreign shores
winter driftwood
Bruce H. Feingold
Berkeley, CA
(1,5,12) = 25 pts
**Wow! a great one!
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Third Place - 23 Points
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driftwood
my thoughts ebbing away
tide by tide
Ken Sawitri
(Jakarta, Indonesia)
(0,8,7) = 23 pts
**Yes, I love when certain thoughts ebb away. So well said.
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19 Points
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driftwood –
scent of a memory
from a distant forest
Andrei C. Szava
(2,3,7) = 19 pts
**Absolutely love this!
alone on a beach
looking for who I once was
driftwood
Barbara Kaufmann
(1,4,8) = 19 pts
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17 Points
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driftwood-
an untold story
from shore to shore
- Kashinath Karmakar
India
(1,5,4) = 17 pts
driftwood
my grandchild shows me
a dragon
Bill Kenney
(0,3,11) = 17 pts
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15 Points
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half buried driftwood ~
I too am such a long way
from home
Angèle Lux
(1,3,6) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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charred driftwood
stories around the fire
from a distant shore
Simon Hanson
(0,4,6) = 14 pts
**I love where this ku takes me.
dance of waves -
the sheer loneliness
of driftwood
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh,India
(0,4,6) = 14 pts
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12 Points
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grandma's house
all the driftwood
that's come to rest
aom (tim)
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
**This is, I think, a bit too open to be completely successful, but the upside of that is its suggestiveness; one would like to meet grandma.
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11 Points
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the charred end of driftwood autumn deepens
polona
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
**Simply beautiful!
goose barnacles
clinging to driftwood…
my restless life
Marietta McGregor,
Australia
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
**The hint in the image that my life is parasitical as well as restless gives this some psychological interest.
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10 Points
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honeymoon...
the driftwood fire
all but ash
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
sea-tossed
for a while the moon nestled
in the driftwood's curve
Anonymous
(0,4,2) = 10 pts
after the storm...
weary birds resting
upon driftwood
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
**So well observed and written with sympathy.
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9 Points
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long night-
a driftwood tortured
by the wind
Rita Odeh
Haifa
Israel
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
nursery window
driftwood rocking
in the waves
kawazu
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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greyed by the sun
broken by the tide . . .
driftwood
Beverley George
(2,1,0) = 8 pts
hot night -
using driftwood
as a doorstop
Miorita Alba
(1,0,5) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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after the storm--
a driftwood mobile
twists in silence
Carole MacRury
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
**What a unique image - "driftwood mobile." The devastation and sense of loss is so palpable in this haiku. Wonderfully rendered!
intricately carved
on a driftwood cross
the vagabond's name
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
a white feather
caught on driftwood
planting moon
Giselle Maya
France
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
his prodigal son
still lost on the road...
driftwood
Natalia Kuznetsova
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
lake at dawn
a floating birch slides
under the fog
--Diane Mayr
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
**I like the specificity of "birch" and that surprising but authentic last line.
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6 Points
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mother's lost ring
all eyes focused between
shells and driftwood
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
(0,3,0) = 6 pts
wind and tide
a driftwood horse
lost in beach grass
Michael McClintock
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
after the divorce
all down river
driftwood
Bernard Gieske USA
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
driftwood
talk of phantom ships
around the fire
Beth Powell
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
back from vacation
in her laundry bag
driftwood & witch stones
(Ramona)
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
collecting driftwood . . .
a blind man remembers
summer love
Marion Clarke
Warrenpoint, Northern Ireland
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
the eye
the knot left behind
driftwood
Alan S. Bridges
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
**What a beautiful observation!
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5 Points
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driftwood sculpture
a dragonfly skimming
until the trout
Ignatius Fay
(1,1,0) = 5 pts
**Does not catch a single moment, but splendidly pushes the boundary.
driftwood-
colours of the sea and sand
in her eyes
Ruth Powell
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
Night on shore
worms' safe nap inside a
lone driftwood
Aziza Hena
Bangladesh
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
nude beach—
faces in the driftwood
staring me down
Bill Pauly
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
ebb tide--
wedged between secrets
a driftwood
Alegria Imperial
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
driftwood--
remembers the curve
of the waves that carried it
Jill
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**The first word of the second line and the last three words of the last line could well be dispensed with.
old driftwood
Dad's favorite
walking cane
charlie smith
raleigh, nc
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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inuksuk shadows
around a driftwood fire
Northern lights
Garry Eaton
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
**What wonderful light play in this ku. I had to look up inuksuk. Beautiful mood in this haiku!
**I especially liked [the] inuksuk image.
our children's photos
tucked
in the driftwood mirror
Allison Millcock
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
hands of driftwood
shaking
the waves
jean south
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
strutting
past driftwood
the proud raven
Bill Gottlieb
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
driftwood
by the mountain lake
setting aside our differences
Cyndi Lloyd
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
riding the ebb
all the years
we believed in love
Paresh
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
silted pond --
perched on the twig
a dragonfly
Kumarendra Mallick
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**What a beautiful contrast – the murky pond with the clearness of dragonfly wings. Very enlightening.
canoeing
down the river
driftwood
Juhani Tikkanen
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
this bench
made from driftwood
far from home
Paul Hodder
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
driftwood search --
the curve of the bay
at dawn
James Dobson,
Prudhoe, UK.
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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tsunami driftwood -
sun tan and sea salt hold on
tightly to his skin
Daniela Bullas
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
driftwood
the journey of weathered faces
running aground
Devin Harrison
Vancouver Island - Canada
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
**Very interesting haiku. I picture people reaching the ends of their journeys.
the driftwood, the stars,
the birds of passage, who
navigates after who
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
driftwood -
a rusty fish hook pricks
my barefoot
Lavana kray
Romania
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
carved
on the piece of driftwood
a love heart
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
driftwood altar
she leaves a note
the waves respond
Jone Rush MacCulloch
Portland, Oregon
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
rendezvous
driftwood enough
for a bonfire
Tom Painting
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
his life
carried from wave to wave
driftwood
Dorota Ocińska
Poland, Łódź
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
hands down
and one leg up -
a driftwood's beach yoga
Ajaya Mahala
Pune, India
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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a scatter of shapes
woodcarver’s morning
scavenger hunt
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
out to sea, bobbing
next to a piece of driftwood
his ashes
Stevie Strang
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
aimless meander
sharing time with gulls and sea
and wave-polished wood
Deirdre Godwin
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
end of summer bonfire -
tossing her last piece of driftwood
into the flames
-Priscilla Cook
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
smooth sea
the rough texture
of dry driftwood
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
colored flames dance
from driftwood fires
-- spring break
Bre
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
Moonticklesong
two hearts of driftwood
crushing in the sea
Lindusen
Norway
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
**I love the phrase “moonticklesong” – how refreshing! The emotion this ku creates is so palpable. Really beautiful!
critic's review:
the abandoned driftwood
near the parking lot
--Barbara Snow
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
name etched
on a piece of driftwood
aroma of tea
Casey Daniel
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
giving her comfort
the therapist's kind words...
driftwood
Ana Drobot
(Bucharest, Romania)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
An old man’s hands
weathered like fallen branches
drifting through time.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
weathered wood,,,
this burden
made lighter
D W Skrivseth
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
driftwood campfire
the shapeshifting
in girlfriend’s story
Ramesh Anand
Bengaluru, India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
driftwood moving abroad my home nowhere
Shrikaanth
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
driftwood these days-
fifty years ago
the mines on the beach
dsnake1
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
driftwood smoke
his joke
about rape
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
**Maybe a bit obvious in its exploitation of a hot button issue, but it does pack a punch.
the shore of Maine
gathering driftwood
in the winter
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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two logs on the river
mom and dad
at a distance
hawktalk
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Summer noon -
the driftwood came ashore
with a chain locket.
Iffat Jahan Suchona
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
all my expectations
returned dishonoured
drift woods at my doorstep
purush
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
rockbound shore
a sculptor collects driftwood
for his studio
Kirsty Karkow
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
woman's torso
a pebble marks its navel
shape of the driftwood
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
cremated remains
go down river
with the driftwood
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
driftwoods remain
the bridge overhead
another spring comes
Yukiko Yamada
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
sea-washed huts
a bald eagle perched
on a driftwood
Jayashree Maniyil
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
sand dollar rich...
kids combing driftwood
with sea mist hair
S.E.Buffington
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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discarded plastic
drifting on ocean currents
not unlike driftwood
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
tangled driftwood
tossed upon the shore
time passages
Judi Honiker
Clearwater, FL
driftwood grounded
on a pliant pink plain
his vasty palm
assu
old tree
pulled up and abused
wrecked driftwood
Jens-Christian Kjær
life swirls and bobs as
driftwood flounders in the sea
to oblivion
poseytoon
river bend
flash floods move tangled driftwood
closer to the sea
Edward
ugly ducklings?
caught in the log boom
some driftwood
maxianne
how wayward
waves take the driftwood...
juvenile offender
Vandana Parashar
Ambala Cantt
India
washed ashore
cut lengths of old growth
saddens my heart
Bill Hudson
between blue waves
starfish’s sanctuary
a forlorn driftwood
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
driftwood fishwheel
the salmon too
travel
Doris
an old man
gazes at the driftwood
and muses...
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg, Mongolia
her son’s fish
made of driftwood -
art therapy
Eleonore Nickolay
France/Germany
splitting driftwood the two divorced
oga
tsunami ends -
lovebirds on driftwood
aimless
Sudebi Singha
Kolkata, India
windswept waves
a driftwood shelter
on the beach
DeVar
Drifting—now—toward—shore—
Adventure-lined—brittle—gray—
Hands catch—raise me up—
James Thoune
Bowling Green, KY USA
hundred-year flood
driftwood is taken
to a bus stop & left
LeRoy Gorman
where the sea
rubbed...
driftwood sculpture
John McDonald
Edinburgh Scotland
this Floating World
driftwood
follows with the current
Raffael de Gruttola
Natick, MA USA
a row of waves . . .
the gleam of driftwood
among the debris
Tomislav
Whitney's "LOVE YOU-OO"
I hurl driftwood back in
"...will always..."
Sheila K Barksdale
Remembrance Day
an old woman sighs close to
pieces of driftwood
kaiser kahn
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General Comments:
**Drifting along.....
**again, pleasantly surprised by the number of quality entries
**I noticed lost of associations between driftwood and deeply emotional states… Very interesting haiku!
**Some fascinating images!
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