Congratulations to Laurene, winner of our Kigo section; and to Laura Orabone AND Carole MacRury, winners of our Free Format section!
September 2007 Results
Kigo Theme:
Morning Glories
First Place -- 28 points
new neighbors —
blue morning glories
in the weed pile
Laurene
(1,5,15) = 28 pts
An effective, simple way to show how people differ.
First impressions. And, if I think of the morning glories as the neighbors, what's the weed pile?
Second Place -- 26 points
summer's end
the morning glories
enter the mailbox
RaV
(1,6,11) = 26 pts
Third Place -- 24 points
morning glories
in the chain link fence
an inmate's finger
Josh Wikoff
(0,5,14) = 24 pts
Unusual image and it conveys the isolation nicely.
Fourth Place -- 17 points
leaning together
beside her grave
morning glories
Neil Muscott
(2,2,7) = 17 pts
monastery ruins
an old trellis supports
morning glories
tom painting
(1,4,6) = 17 pts
The things that last . . .
I liked this poem’s richness of texture. On one level, the phrases “monastery ruins” and “old trellis” evoke a sense of rustic beauty. On another level, the contrast of a monastery’s weighty stonework against the light frame of a trellis makes the image of trellis and morning glories seem all the more delicate. On a deeper level, the old trellis supporting morning glories can be seen as a metaphor for how a monastery supports spiritual growth. On yet another level, the poem speaks of how something old and abandoned, such as an ancient ruins, can still support life and still have aesthetic value for those sensitive and poetic enough to see it.
Reymond B.
Fifth Place -- 14 points
hunting cabin —
morning glories cover
the outhouse
-- LGD
(0,4,6) = 14 pts
A bow to Basho's contrast of high and low.
Sixth Place -- 12 points
morning glories
closed tightly
against the night
Beth Powell
(0,5,2) = 12 pts
wind tunnel . . .
a hummingbird fans
the morning glory
Kala Ramesh
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
wild morning glory
binds a thistle
to a thistle
Mark Hollingsworth
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
Seventh Place -- 11 points
morning glories
continue to climb
toward the full moon
Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,8) = 11 pts
again I survive
dying in a dream . . .
morning glories
Collin Barber
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
Eighth Place -- 10 points
the last guest —
morning glories fading
to almost white
Cherie Hunter Day
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
Ninth Place -- 9 points
the old wall —
hiding its holes
morning glory
Maria
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
I know how the old wall feels, and I envy the quality of its cover. The dash at the end of line 1 could be dispensed with.
garden wedding —
morning glories trumpet
the bride's arrival
Tristan Coleridge
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
children laughing
near the school entrance
morning glories
gillena
(0,0,9) = 9 pts
Tenth Place -- 8 points
morning glories —
what can I say of them
that Issa hasn't
Mary Lee McClure
(1,0,5) = 8 pts
stillborn
morning glories taken
by an early frost
Karen Briggs
(1,0,5) = 8 pts
shaking moth balls
from our frayed blue quilt —
morning glories
Beverley George
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
outside pre-school —
morning glories
all lined up
Paul Hodder
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
I enjoyed the comparison of the children to the flowers.
morning glories
last night’s jazz
blares in my mind
eddybacher
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
I like the way the flare and the blare of these two are juxtaposed.
Eleventh Place -- 7 points
immigration raid
kudzu and morning glories
strangle their garden
Carmel Lively Westerman
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
morning glories
the bone trees twined
with stars
Laura Orabone
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
another day
with no dog barking —
morning glories
Israel Lopez Balan
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
just five seeds
and the morning glories
rule the garden
Glen Keener
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
coastal fog —
the morning glories
unopened
Dejah Leger
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
A nice observation.
Twelfth Place -- 6 pts
morning glories
stone still and deadly
the mantis waits
Edward
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
This juxtaposition of one of nature’s most efficient killers (the praying mantis) against delicate flowers effectively summaries the dichotomy of nature, for that is what nature is - something beautiful and deadly, something to be admired and respected. We think of ourselves as being separate from nature, but in fact mankind too is a living expression of nature; mankind too is capable of creating great beauty and great destruction. We are, perhaps, the most glorious and most terrible manifestation of nature’s dichotomy.
Reymond B.
the shadow
of a late bee
sunlit morning glory
Carole
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
the old shed —
don't let it fall
morning glories
Ann K. Schwader
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
too late
for the morning glories —
autumn wedding
Carol Pearce-Worthington
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
Having been married a couple times I know what it's like trying to find in season flowers you like for the bridal bouquet.
Thirteenth Place -- 5 points
sunrise —
the morning glories and I
wake up together
Betty
(1,1,0) = 5 pts
in the park —
morning glories idling
on a mango tree
~ Bilha Wanjiko
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
I just love "idling".
a damselfly
in the morning glories
dying breeze
Susan Constable
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
blue morning glories
bask in the remaining heat —
with them my old cat
jill
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
Sensual images; nice juxtaposition of the flowers and cat; effective use of "remaining heat" to suggest the change of season.
mourning doves
among the morning glories —
infinite blues
--Lorene
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
neighbours
peep through the fence
morning glories
Tanya Dikova
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
I couldn't resist the potential cheekiness.
last date —
morning glories
in his eyes
Ivana Vanja Nikovic
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
camouflaged
in the morning glories
Bindweed
gourdman
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
indian summer
morning glories twine
'round the pumpkin patch
~fedelmia
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
Good seasonal images.
dewdrops
on the morning glory
scattered sun
Tom Maretic
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
steel town dawn . . .
a glow of morning glories
through the smog
Nancy Smith
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
morning glories —
no space for me to
jump over the fence
~ Catherine Maina
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
This echoes the essence of a classic.
Fourteenth Place -- 4 points
Grampa disapproved
of Gramma’s morning glories
they wasted water
Deirdre Godwin
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
She brushes the hair
from her eyes
trails of morning glories
Glenn Laundre
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
morning glory
on the old paling —
the smile of grandma
miorita
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
A lovely metaphor.
A break in the clouds;
suddenly in the spotlight:
morning glories
Rey Barreto
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
colonial town
on a simple white fence
morning glories
Bruce Ross
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
windy evening —
morning glories
curve inwards
~ Anne Wairimu
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
Seeing what's there, and letting it speak.
war telegram —
morning glories
in cold glass
Ron Moss
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
old garden
the hoe's handle
winded with morning glories
Dorota Pyra
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
first kiss
morning glories
by the door
Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
A perfectly captured moment.
Fifteenth Place -- 3 pts
sunlit
morning glories
traffic slows
Allen McGill
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first sunbeam
through the knothole
bud of a morning glory
---Jacek M.
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first frost
tangle of morning glory vines
still green
Jeanne Jorgensen
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Grandma's house —
Morning glories twine
over faded paint
-- Leena Halych
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Heavenly Blue —
flashbacks
of morning glories
--Autumn Moon
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
school bus coming
on a cloudless day
morning glories
Bill Kenney
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
chanting our prayers
in vacation bible school
morning glory
Pris Campbell
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
morning glories
my granny replays
a Satchmo record
Petar Tchouhov
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
morning glories —
the seed of yet
another haiku
-- Richard Kay
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
summer's end —
sapphire morning glories
curl around bronze mums
Hazel A. Witherspoon
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
General Comments:
There are getting to be so many poems each month that it is quite a task to sort them out. Lots of good morning glory poems, though.
Free Format Theme:
Rainbow
First Place -- 21 pts
sudden downpour
bleeding on a concrete sky
the chalk rainbow
Laura Orabone
(3,1,10) = 21 pts
rainbow's end. . .
the trawler's gillnet
drawn tight
Carole MacRury
(2,3,9) = 21 pts
Second Place -- 19 pts
the arc
of his line at sunrise
rainbow trout
Susan Constable
(2,3,7) = 19 pts
The peacefulness of early morning fishing well-depicted.
Almost too poetic but firmly grounded in the real.
after a storm
the rainbow bending over
what's left
Bill Kenney
(1,4,8) = 19 pts
Third Place -- 16 pts
double rainbow
her second wish
a small one
--Irene Golas
(2,2,6) = 16 pts
Were it in my power, I'd grant her a big one. She sounds like the sort of person who ought to write haiku.
autumn stillness —
rainbow trout
bump my waders
John Healey
(0,5,6) = 16 pts
For me, the bump only deepens the stillness.
Fourth Place -- 15 pts
tisk tisk of sprinklers —
over suburban lawns
look-a-like rainbows
Neil Muscott
(3,2,2) = 15 pts
Nice use of sound in this one.
Reminds me of that old song about ticky-tacky. Light satirical touch.
greens and browns —
the painted rainbow
of the bullied child
Paul Hodder
(2,3,3) = 15 pts
Very astute and tender observation.
Fifth Place -- 14 pts
fast train...
trying to catch
the rainbow
Carol Pearce-Worthington
(0,2,10) = 14 pts
Sixth Place -- 13 pts
rainbow
a dragonfly visits
the lily
Earl Keener
(1,2,6) = 13 pts
in a dew drop
on the white rose
a rainbow
Peter Macrow
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
A white rose is a lovely, romantic image all by itself. Add to it a rainbow in a dew drop and it becomes all the more enchanting. An exquisite demonstration of poetic alchemy.
Seventh Place -- 11 pts
salmon run
just where they must leap
rainbow
Bruce Ross
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
The imagery of this dynamic haiku is so vivid; I could clearly see the salmon leaping across the rainbow created by sunlight hitting the spray of water. So much action packed in so few words – well done!
sudden rainbow —
the bus arrives
almost empty
Israel Lopez Balan
(1,1,6) = 11 pts
I wanted to give this one a point because of the two mysteries: the 'sudden' rainbow and the 'almost empty' bus and how they interact. Together they help build a sense of waiting and the boredom and entertainment that gets noticed therein. Something exciting in the rainbow unexpected, something disappointing in the bus, probably empty of the one waited for.
Eighth Place -- 10 pts
brief rainbow
a dragonfly
lingers
Ann K. Schwader
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
A nice haiku moment of transition.
sunny morning —
a new spider web shines
with rainbow colors
Zhanna P. Rader
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
double rainbow
the unopened letter
on her desk
Sjs (Stevie)
(0,0,10) = 10 pts
Ninth Place -- 9 pts
on the wall
of her doll house
she paints a rainbow
Betty
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
A tender moment of a child's rendering of the reality.
an old printer
all colours of the rainbow
on his hands
--Jacek M
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
Tenth Place -- 8 pts
a rainbow arcs
the summer sky —
blunted crayons
Collin Barber
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
I love this image!! The description is exactly like it always feels for me, now painted in words.
tracing a rainbow
across the sand
a peacock
Pris Campbell
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
water sprinkler
counting the splashes
to the next rainbow
Juliusz Wnorowski
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
urban day camp
a rainbow of children
spill down the hill
Elizabeth Fanto
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
Eleventh Place -- 7 pts
sleet on the window —
my niece's rainbow
on the fridge
Keith Heiberg
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
lollipop
her rainbow
tongue
Beverley George
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
rainbow —
somehow the magic
still there
Mary Lee McClure
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
Twelfth Place -- 6 pts
rainbow . . .
Dad's fish
a 'catch and release'
Alice Frampton
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
such a long journey
from the primordial ooze
to the rainbow’s end
Deirdre Godwin
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
long rainy day ~
he depicts a rainbow
I don't see
Ana Cadarin
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
this rainbow
like me . . .
just dust in the wind
-- Richard Kay
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
for a moment —
painting the sky
...rainbow
maria
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
It is the line “for a moment” that makes this poem resonate, for it is the transient nature of rainbows that makes their beauty poignant and magical. If they lasted years they would not be so special. But no, rainbows in the sky appear infrequently and disappear too quickly. The lives of great men and woman are the same. Princess Diana, Marilyn Monroe, Luciano Pavarotti, and Martin Luther King, Jr., they came and went, painting our world with their glorious colorful lives and dis appeared too quickly from our sight. But, just as rainbows are unforgettable, so are they. “For a moment” we see rainbows but for a lifetime we remember them. Of course some rainbows, like Martin Luther King, Jr., never truly disappear because of how profoundly they touched our lives.
falling leaves
each tree sheds
a rainbow
Karen Briggs
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
Indian summer —
faded into the rocks,
the rainbow trout
Dejah Leger
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
posing
just under
the rainbow
Beth Powell
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
afternoon showers —
a plane droning
across the rainbow
~ Vivian Adhiambo
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
special child . . .
a rainbow breaks open
her smile
Ron Moss
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
Misty September
a rainbow connects
the two islands
Angelika Coloma Bygott
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
Thirteenth Place -- 5 pts
rainbow arching
above the mud
where soldiers lie
Leslie Montgomery
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
fading rainbow
pouring all of its colors
into hot air balloon
Kurt R. W.
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
fading rainbow
nobody touches
her wet hair
Petar Tchouhov
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
last farewell
the highway's end turns up
into a rainbow
Lech Szeglowski
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
night rainbow
far away on a hill
the temple lamps
Kala Ramesh
(0,1,3) = 5pts
kindergarten
a student paints a rainbow
on her dress
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
rusty Ford
in a puddle
rainbow
gourdman
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
anniversary
crystal necklace
a rainbow on her chin
andrea
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
in the splash
from the car wheel,
a little rainbow
Tom Maretic
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
Fourteenth Place -- 4 pts
rainbow haiku —
I earnestly gaze
at the sky
~ Catherine Maina
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
deep into summer
storm clouds pause for the rainbow
a dance with no lead
Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
prism's rainbow —
classroom eyes
on the bright playground
- Munzar
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
see the rainbow
all the colors of the crayons —
daughter tells us
jill
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
Yes, kids do say the darnedest things, don’t they? That was a dandy.
oil slick
children stare at
the rainbow
Allen McGill
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
double rainbow ...
I need a new pair
of lenses
Ella W.
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
wet shoes —
street musician is looking
at the rainbow
Ivana Vanja Nikovic
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
violent prairie storm
he tells his little sister
it leaves rainbows too
Edward
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
I find kiddie ku ludicrously easy to resist, but this one tells its story elegantly and economically.
harbor seal —
motor oil rainbows spin
in the boat's wake
aom (tim)
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
Rainbow Bridge...
even this river
not filling the sea
George Hawkins
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
thruway north —
a mile of apple trees
before the rainbow
Ami
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
Fifteenth Place -- 3 pts
gay pride —
a parade of rainbow flags
dancing past
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
Of the two parade poems in the list, I like this one because of the exuberance it shows, a real celebration of identity comes out in the word 'dancing'.
summer cleaning
a rainbow above
the manure spreader
Janice
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Her scarf —
a rainbow of flowers
moving in the sky
--R.K.SINGH
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
deep hammock
complete
with a rainbow
Scott Mason
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Beneath the rainbow
lost in morning fog drifts
ghost trees walking
LaVerna B. Johnson
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
love parade —
everywhere
colors of the rainbow
-- Derwisz
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
'Love parade' is a little abstract, but I like the sense of feeling that saturates the poem with the word 'everywhere', it seems to instantly cause the mind to look around and confirm that all around happiness that might occur at such a parade.
acrobatic feats —
the kitten wildly pouncing
sun-catcher rainbows
~fedelmia
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
now running free
beyond the Rainbow Bridge
the dog I put to sleep yesterday
angelee deodhar
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
in the fountain
on the hand organ's music
rainbows dance
max verhart
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
horizon
and rainbow
in the mist
Cornelia
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
a rainbow
splashes the seawall
yawning seals
eddybacher
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
General Comments:
Once again it's quite difficult to cut out haiku that I like.
Somehow I didn't respond to most of the rainbow poems--even mine deserved only 4 or 5 points :)