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December 2012 Kukai Results

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December 2012 Kukai

Dear Friends,

Here are the results for the December 2012 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was DECEMBER SOLSTICE, and our Free Format subject was DEPARTING

 

Congratulations to *** ALEGRIA IMPERIAL***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***TOM PAINTING***, winner of our Free Format section!


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The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.

Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.


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In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.

(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.

 

VOTER'S comments are indicated by "**" below the respective poems.

 POET'S comments are indicated by "^^" below the respective poems.

Kigo Theme:

December Solstice


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First Place -  29 Points

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winter solstice

the widow tightens

her braids

 

Alegria Imperial

 (0,10,9) = 29 pts

**Very picturesque and melancholy

 

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Second Place -  28 Points

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a crow’s call grows longer winter solstice

 

martin gottlieb cohen

 (3,3,13) = 28 pts

**No way to put this other than in the words the poet has chosen.

 

AND

 

winter solstice

the weight

of old arguments

 

gogatsu

 (1,4,17) = 28 pts

**Just the sort of thing that might weigh heavily through the longest night.

 

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Third Place -  27 Points

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solstice

his scent more woodsmoke

than aftershave

 

Michele L. Harvey

New York, USA

(2,6,9) = 27 pts

 

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24 Points

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solstice

banking the fire

to last the night

 

Michael Brock

 (1,2,17) = 24 pts

** This reads cozy even though it’s cold outside.

 

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21 Points

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solstice-

the turtle reverses

its direction

 

Rita Odeh

 

(2,3,9) = 21 pts

 

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19 Points

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solstice

either way

she feels cheated

 

Tom Painting

 

(2,4,5) = 19 pts

**I feel like this is an aging woman who feels she is running out of time. So it doesn't matter if the days are long or short, there just aren't enough of them left. Well done

 

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17 Points

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solstice walk the tide turns us back

 

Peter Newton

 

(2,1,9) = 17 pts

**Even the longest walk must finally confront its limits.

 

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15 Points

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longest night

my third round

of counting sheep

 

-- Cara Holman

 (0,3,9) = 15 pts

 

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13 Points

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longest day —

a Mayan shadow crosses

the calendar

 

Hansha Teki

New Zealand Summer Solstice

(2,2,3) = 13 pts

 

 

 solstice dark

no way to warm

mother's hands

 

Roberta Beary

 (0,3,7) = 13 pts

**A real darkness in this one.

 

 

patched blankets

warm from the dryer --

the longest night

 

Michael McClintock

 (0,2,9) = 13 pts

 

 

solstice darkness-

the river of stars

slows its journey

 

Kirsty Karkow

(0,2,9) = 13 pts

**Something enormous and beautiful within the frame of this small poem.

 

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11 Points

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shortest night —

on the sundial,

a mayfly

 

Natasha

Resident in New Zealand

(1,2,4) = 11 pts

**Oh, the irony ;-)

 

 

winter solstice . .

a man strokes a dog

under the bridge

 

Sandi Pray

Robbinsville, NC

USA

(0,3,5) = 11 pts

**Something both desolate and warming about this one

 

 

solstice-

beyond the night

still night

 

sanjuktaa

 (0,2,7) = 11 pts

 

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10 Points

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december solstice

the chillness of morning

newspaper

 

Ramesh Anand

India

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

**Using the sense of touch well in this one. I can feel the morning chill on the newspaper

 

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9 Points

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sitting alone

I hug myself

winter solstice

 

BILL KENNEY

 (0,3,3) = 9 pts

 

 

solstice

the stars twinkle back

at the snow

 

Katrina

 (0,2,5) = 9 pts

 

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8 Points

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longest day

the evening sun lingers

in the doorway

 

Elaine Riddell

 (0,2,4) = 8 pts

 

 

winter solstice:

a flock of sparrows

huddle in the cold

 

-- Chitra Rajappa

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

 

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7 Points

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 midwinter...

Newtown's deep darkness

settles in

 

S.E. Buffington

(2,0,1) = 7 pts

 

 

the longest night -

browsing old letters

by the fireside

 

Laura Csilla

(0,3,1) = 7 pts

 

 

winter solstice -

a cloudy moon above me

all day long

 

Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

solstice moon;

the wisteria vines too

have withered..

 

manoj saranathan

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

 

oh, so carefully

she carries the candle

...the longest night

 

--Diane Mayr

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

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6 Points

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winter solstice…

the echo of mirrors

slicing dreams

 

Ted van Zutphen

 (2,0,0) = 6 pts

 

 

December solstice sparks from the plow

 

John Soules

 

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

^^The sparks I had in mind were from the carbide tips of the snowplow (we live in Wingham ,Ont. which is about a 1/2 hour drive from the east coast of Lake Huron and subject to squalls off the lake) but what I love about haiku is that what is important is what the reader brings to the poem and his/her subsequent interpretation and the emotions that are released (unlike when I went to school....long,long ago.....and you analyzed a poem to death trying to figure out what the poet meant.

 

winter solstice

the warmth of your poem

by the light of the fire

 

Terry O'Connor

Ireland

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

 

 

Shortest day of the year

Memories of you get longer

Day by day

 

Angelika Kolompar

(0,3,0) = 6 pts

 

 

winter solstice—

can you feel

the turning?

 

Marylouise Knight

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

December solstice

the low rice supply

in the pantry

 

Audrey Downey

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

solstice

the stable passage

clogged with night

 

Earl Keener

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

 

 

winter solstice,

wishing for the stars

of childhood

 

- j blain

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

 

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5 Points

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December birthday

mom’s 92nd solstice

wish for a hundred

 

Kath Abela Wilson

California, USA

(1,1,0) = 5 pts

 

 

solstice-

counting the days

until New Year

 

Ailoaei Cristina

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

solstice

the old dog and new kitten

share the woodstove heat

 

Edward

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

solstice snow

his remark about the white

in my hair

 

polona

Slovenia

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

 

honeymoon---

even the solstice night

doesn't last long

 

kash poet

India

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

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4 Points

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 snow-capped church domes

glimmering in the moonlight -

the longest night

 

natalia kuznetsova

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

 

 

solstice . . .

luminaria glow

on the dying man's home

 

Bill Pauly

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

 

 

solstice brunch

the redness of

fresh ripe tomatoes

 

Bill Hudson

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

no solstice for December sorrow

 

Donna Bauerly

Dubuque, IA

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

solstice night -

missing the warmth

from his body close

 

Cezar-Florin Ciobîcă

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

solstice

boy sitting on a rock

studying ants

 

Aalix Roake

New Zealand

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

**Seems a perfect way for a boy to spend the longest day of the year.

 

solstice

only a dollar left

for the carolers

 

Christine L. Villa

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

december solstice

another excuse for the newly weds

to make love

 

Quamrul Hassan

Bangladesh

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

longest night-

dried lavender buds

with my letter of amends

 

Dawn Apanius

Ohio USA

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

solstice

the stars so sharp

and far

 

Ann K. Schwader

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

december -

deep in the corridor

sunrays

 

Israel López Balan

Mexico

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

 

even in the dark

singing from branches

december solstice

 

Vishnu P kapoor

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

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3 Points

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December solstice

still by the old bagpipe

beating the noise

 

Ernesto P. Santiago

Philippines

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

through the long dark night

earth turns in her way

toward the light

 

jill

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

December solstice

buck races across the lawn

past reindeer shapes

 

Doris Lynch

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

Shortest daylight time,

and library closed early.

It will get colder.

 

Horst

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

winter solstice

holiday cards back and forth . . .

the lost connections

 

Peggy Heinrich

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

as days shorten

the laundry basket

fills faster

 

gourdman

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

winter solstice

the sun barely rises

over the snowy roof

 

Tore Sverredal

Sweden

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

blowing

on dandelion seeds

... a Christmas wish

 

Anne Curran

New Zealand

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

the shortest day--

outside the school, two boys

eat fresh snow

 

DeVar

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

solstice night --

fresh snowfall softens

the dark trees

 

Ruth Powell

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

winter solstice -

on Orion’s shoulder

the Little Owl

 

Sara Winteridge

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

solstice –

enjoying

more dreams

 

Virginia Popescu

PHOENIX

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

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2 Points

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baked ham and sorrel

parang* music in the air ...

December solstice

 

Keith A. Simmonds

 Trinidad & Tobago

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

^^“'Parang' is the present Trinidadian interpretation of the Spanish word, parranda .  Parranda is the action of merrymaking and also refers to the group of carousers who serenade their friends throughout the year. The word parranda in general Spanish is used mainly in the expression andar de parranda, which in the modern Trinidadian vernacular is 'to go paranging,' akin to the Venezuelan  parrandear, meaning not only merrymaking in the original sense, but also 'liming' or enjoying oneself, with or without music, moving from place to place with no time limit in mind. “(Moodie-Kublalsingh 1994, 65-66).

 

solstice

seed catalogues waken

my appetite

 

John Daleiden

Phoenix, Arizona

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

warming my toes

in fuzzy red socks

December solstice

 

Deborah P Kolodji

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

**I liked the quirkiness of this lovely young haiku, which made me feel happy.

 

solstice -

the winter sun skims the

arctic horizon

 

Anonymous

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

longest night –

cuddling up with a book

on haiku

 

Stella Pierides

DE/UK

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

SMS to Santa -

tomorrow night is shorter

come this night please

 

STOPS

ROMANIA

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

December Solstice...

space station sails overhead

in a cold dark sky

 

Tom Conally

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

potted plants still

facing south

winter solstice

 

Carol Pearce-Worthington

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

long night moon

I open another bottle

of wine

 

Angie Werren

Amelia, OH

USA

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

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1 Point

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solstice

the clearcutting

seeds in the frozen soil

 

Oddbjørn Aardalen

 

 

december solstice -

billions of trinkets

prolong the shortest day

 

Robert Kania

Poland

 

   

in a circle

singing up the sun

sol stetit

 

Carolyn Coit Dancy

USA

 

  

december 2012 solstice

last sunlight quickly fades

into night forever

 

RD McManes

 

  

our briefest day

is your country’s longest

. . . one world

 

Anonymous

 

 

 solstice

standing in dad's shadow

his hot son

 

André Surridge

New Zealand

 

  

solstice bushfire

a night sky of embers

and burning stars

 

Ron C. Moss

Australia

 ^^I have been out to bushfires in Tasmania as I write this

 

longest night

my little fellow tries to hide

something

 

Ralf Bröker

 

  

Solstice

picnic basket oozing

hot sticky jam

 

Karin Anderson

 

  

resting

for a while -

solstice sun

 

Juhani Tikkanen

 

  

solstice...

pasqueflowers are seen

in my dream

 

Tuvshinzaya Nergui

Tsetserleg city, Mongolia

 

  

a scent of cookies

in the festive air--

solstice

 

A. D. Jaden

Des Moines, Iowa

 

  

vinter solstice

she flips a coin

before the kiss

 

Jon Espen Vassbotn

 

 

  

solstice

so short space for some snowflakes

to fall on the grave

 

Lech Szeglowski

 

 

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No Points This Time, but thank you very much for sharing your haiku with us

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solstice

cold stiff fingers

stoop and scoop

 

–if–

 

 

return of the light

sun-standing-still...

solstice

 

dragonfly

 

  tweaking old poems

I switch on the new desk lamp:

winter solstice.

 

Cristian Mocanu

Deva, Romania

 

 

 Men in solstice

revolve round money

wisdom disappears

 

purush-Guntur

 

   

christmas

rapidly approaching-

an odd warmth

 

Casey Southards

 

  

 a side up egg

slides the arctic railroad track

solstice

 

Svend A. Doggfall

 

  

december solstice

quick trip

more candles

 

Bernard Gieske

 

  

 

today's snowfall

snowier than yesterday's

-- solstice

 

maxianne

 

  

 the longest night:

a deeper darkness, breathing

trance of firelight

 

--Ginny Hoyle

 

  

 longest night the fire pit is stoked

 

D W Skrivseth

  

  

a scale pan

heavy with shadow

cold solstice

 

Eduard TARA

 

   

last year's Yule log -

scent of the neighbor's wood fire

and baked ham

 

Brenda Roberts

Fort Worth TX

 

  

Johnny Canuck merrily

slid his toboggan

over crisp snow and winter solst ice

 

Eric Pet

   

 

the solstice lights barely flicker --

our first Christmas

without her

 

Angela Terry

 

  

winter solstice -

the white queen smiles

an hour more       

 

Vinay Leo R.

 

   

a break in the clouds

gold spreads out beneath the grey

Sun’s Return has come

 

Deirdre Godwin

 

 

  Shortest day,

snow on the driveway

a long haul.

 

Trevor Camp

 

 

 last day

snow ends fall

December Solstice

 

Jim Applegate

 

   

winter solstice

stalking red deer

in highland heather

 

Terri L. French

^^Well that isn't how it's celebrated where I live. But my grandmother's family was from Scotland, so I imagine perhaps my great great grandfather stalked a few deer during the winter solstice!

 

 

December Solstice –

watching the movie

Apocalypse now

 

Petru-Ioan Garda

 

   

december solstice

arrives too soon.

no mistletoe.

 

Jill Campbell

 

  

half empty

Solstice wine tasting

full of mirth

 

Anonymous

 

   

December solstice –

now there's more time

for people at bar

 

Tomislav

 

  

 gods smiling

in children

december solstice

 

Tatsuya Onai

 

  

 midwinter solstice

already we watch

for brightening days

 

Frances O'Keeffe

 

   

sacred solstice

reminding me

from darkness -- light

 

Jane DeJonghe

 

  

 December solstice

we don our headlamps

and ski into the long night

 

Beth Powell

Canada

  

 

solstice downunder

my longest day

your shortest

 

Barbara A Taylor

Mountain Top NSW

Australia

 ^^Sunshine and humidity, storms, bush fires, cicadas and cricket...this is the sweltering summer downunder.

 

 

solstice -

the camellia blooms

stay true to themselves

 

Anonymous

 

 

 solstice window...

a christmas orange half in sun

half in shadow

 

Anonymous

 

   

december solstice

both day and night

longer this year

 

Stevie Strang

 

   

winter solstice –

the children making finery

for the Christmas tree

 

Miorita

 

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General Comments:

 

**hard to chose from the many lovely solstice haiku

 

**Once again, so many good haiku that voting has been another challenge.

 

**This was a hard one! I could happily have voted for many more. Thanks to you all for a beautiful collection.

 

**Beautiful choices. Happy solstice.

 

**Thank you for the privilege of entering my thoughts.

 

** Thanks for a lovely choice of topic.

Free Format Theme:

Departing

 

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First Place -  23 Points

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lost for words

she unfolds and folds

her napkin

 

Tom Painting

(1,5,10) = 23 pts

 

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Second Place -  21 Points

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the part of me

you took with you

fractured moonlight

 

-- Cara Holman

(1,3,12) = 21 pts

 

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Third Place -  18 Points

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departing birds

the solitary tree

voiceless again

 

Eduard TARA

(2,2,8) = 18 pts

 

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17 Points

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light rain

one suitcase

everything

 

- j blain

(2,2,7) = 17 pts

**Short and well, not so sweet. This one says. . .everything

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15 Points

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tallgrass prairie

I say goodbye

to what I know

 

Michele L. Harvey

(1,2,8) = 15 pts

 

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14 Points

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snow moon --

the warmth left in my hand

when you let go

 

Angie Werren

(0,5,4) = 14 pts

 

 

this morning

the coffee pot

only half full

 

maxianne

(0,3,8) = 14 pts

 

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13 Points

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twilight hush —

birdsong withdraws into

the shadows

 

Natasha

(1,3,4) = 13 pts

 

 

departing . . .

the heaviness of

mother’s hug

 

Ramesh Anand

(1,1,8) = 13 pts

 

 

all that

she left behind

low tide

 

Paul Hodder

(1,0,10) = 13 pts

 

 

departing crows

nothing for me either

on this treeless hill

 

Michael McClintock

(0,3,7) = 13 pts

**The objective made subjective.

 

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11 Points

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salty air

already the beach

feels empty

 

Michael Brock

(1,0,8) = 11 pts

 

 

first funeral

my child says goodbye

to his hamster

 

John McManus

(0,1,9) = 11 pts

 

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10 Points

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a stone skips

across the mill pond...

memories ripple

 

Vinay Leo R.

(1,2,3) = 10 pts

 

 

train station

taking off our gloves

for a goodbye kiss

 

Marleen Hulst

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

**Well, what is the etiquette in this situation? Anyway, the oddities of human behavior observed with a cold but not unfriendly eye.

 

 

this man I once knew

departing brain cell

by brain cell

 

Elaine Riddell

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

**I really liked this one, but might consider putting "brain cell by brain cell" altogether on the last line for more of a surprise element.

 

 

not knowing it was goodbye the thinning treetop

 

David Grayson

(0,1,8) = 10 pts

 

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9 Points

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silvery sun;

the last skein of geese

leave the lake

 

manoj saranathan

(0,2,5) = 9 pts

 

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8 Points

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leaving

the house

door ajar

 

Bernard Gieske

(0,3,2) = 8 pts

 

 

a child leaves

without asking the way--

stones upon stones

 

Terri L. French

(0,3,2) = 8 pts

 

 

last remnants

her departing footprints

leave with the snow

 

–if–

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

 

cold departure breath still hangs in mid air

 

D W Skrivseth

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

**A very vivid image

 

 

how to say goodbye...

on a crossword puzzle

dad's last words

 

Christine L. Villa

(0,0,8) = 8 pts

**Quite unique and poignant

 

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7 Points

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wilted roses:

... the room

still fragrant !

 

-- Chitra Rajappa

(1,1,2) = 7 pts

^^I would like to dedicate this to Robert Bauer. He will be missed by all of us who have participated in the Shiki Monthly Kukai.

 

 

parting gift . . .

a hooker removes

her makeup

 

Hansha Teki

(1,1,2) = 7 pts

 

 

flickering candle-

the wind

shifts direction

 

Casey Daniel Southards

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

autumn's edge

more than summer

to put away

 

Donna Bauerly

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

the wind. . .

separating two trees

growing together

 

Mirko Varga

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

empty cocoon --

a young butterfly stretches

and flies away

 

~ Patrick Wafula

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

 

 

time to go...

the dragonfly clings

to a dewdrop

 

sanjuktaa

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

**Lovely image. it brings forth that reluctance to leave.

 

 

farewell speech--

the ticking clock lengthens

his silent pauses

 

kash poet

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

 

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6 Points

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falling leaves starting over

 

John Soules

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

**This feels as though something has been left out, but that is oddly appropriate to the theme.

 

 

funerals -

the rain turns

into snow

 

Cezar-Florin Ciobîcă

(1,0,3) = 6 pts

^^My poem (in memory of Robert)

 

 

the acacia blossom

becomes clearer and clearer --

departing darkness

 

~ James Bundi

(0,3,0) = 6 pts

 

 

empty gutter -

the wind sweeps along

my last paper boat

 

Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

naked trees…

letting go

of a branch

 

Carol Pearce-Worthington

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

sinking sun…

a frozen pond blinds

my reflection

 

Ted van Zutphen

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

 

 

vesper bells -

instead of the prayer

his last haiku

 

Laura Csilla

(0,0,6) = 6 pts

 

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5 Points

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waving goodbye -

the quiet moon

in a blue sky

 

Israel López Balan

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

Christmas night

...the sounds of car doors

closing

 

--Diane Mayr

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

**A universal experience--Christmas is over. The beginning of the post-season doldrums.

 

 

at the train station --

running out of time to hear

each other's stories

 

Shelley Krause

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

 

 

departing...

the tendency to say

it like it is

 

Kirsty Karkow

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

 

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4 Points

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the beauty

of a hummingbird

for just a brief moment

 

Bill Hudson

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

 

 

the stillness

within my cat's eyes

a shadow on snow

 

Svend A. Doggfall

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

 

 

silent night . .

she kisses the furrow

on his brow

 

Sandi Pray

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

 

 

in his death throes

escaping like a butterfly

from its chrysalis

 

gourdman

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

departing

broken string

red balloon in blue sky

 

Vishnu P kapoor

(0,2,0) = 4 pts

 

 

a huge meteor

flashes across our dark sky

a bright light behind

 

Keith A. Simmonds

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

the letter

from the future

my trembling hands

 

Oddbjørn Aardalen

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

departing

he holds a light

that shows the way

 

Beth Powell

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

my letters to you

returned--address unknown . . .

icy moon

 

A. D. Jaden

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

 

 

scent of rain

in the wind

departing year

 

BILL KENNEY

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

 

you leave forever

without saying a word--

withered reeds

 

John Daleiden

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

 

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3 Points

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wilted blue

forget-me-nots

his parting words

 

Polly W. Swafford

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

long days departing

leading to long cold nights...

I pull up the quilt

 

Tom Conally

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

final farewell ...

come back to me

as my son

 

Tuvshinzaya Nergui

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

her ship

fading... in the first

autumn rain

 

Tomislav

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

 

 

Fleeing.

A last look up the hill

to the church.

  

Horst Ludwig

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

departing again from the grave shadow play

 

martin gottlieb cohen

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

dearly departed -

she tunes out

the sad words

 

carmel lively westerman

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

one last farewell drink

before my ship sails again

into the unknown

 

Deirdre Godwin

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

celebrating life

with eulogies and hymns

a radiator hum

 

Elizabeth Warren

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

once more

reminding myself

its better this way

 

Hazel

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

 

 

saying goodbye

my comatose father

squeezes my hand

 

Carolyn Coit Dancy

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

my dark grief . . .

the sum of those small things

missing from each day

 

Beverley George

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

summer visit

they wave goodbye

through the sunroof

 

André Surridge

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

departure lounge

calling her for the last time

for the third time

 

Quamrul Hassan

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

empty space...

falling into

sorrow.

 

Jill Campbell

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

**Nice word play

 

 

parting gift

favorite flowers

on casket

 

charlie smith

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

leaving home -

in the rearview mirror

mom's wave

 

Ruth Powell

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

**A lovely and tender image

 

 

silent snowfall

in the dead of night

her soul departs

 

Tore Sverredal

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

 

a leaf

races in the wind

after him

 

Alegria Imperial

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

 

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2 Points

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they left

i saw them go

-- they're all still here

 

miriam chaikin

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

fresh flowers

the ground snow covered

goodbye old friend

 

RD McManes

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

this lovely dream

slowly heads downstream

reluctant to wake

 

Peggy Heinrich

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

light departing

from my being

in which I am

 

Ernesto P. Santiago

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

 

 

snowy tree -

a skylark flew away

long time ago

 

Robert Kania

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

first flight -

the clouds level with

my seat

 

Brenda Roberts

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

drafted ...

wife waves back

from her pane

 

gogatsu

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

torn moon

my reddest rose

quivers goodbye

 

Karin Anderson

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

a whole life waiting

for “her ship to come in” …

until the end

 

Marylouise Knight

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

The year's gone.

Again it'll be good

to feel spring.

 

Trevor Camp

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

all kinds of regret meeting in departures

 

Sara Winteridge

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

still missing you.

 

in the bare sky a vapour trail

of a jetliner

 

dsnake1

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

hoping the rain

conceals my tears -

your departure

 

Anonymous

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

 

arlington cemetery...

how dad would have loved

laptop computers

 

Anonymous

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**Tugs at the heart

 

 

silent night

sending a nengajo

to her address anyway

 

Kath Abela Wilson

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

 

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1 Point

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the choirmaster departs

choristers fill the empty space

his beloved songs

 

---Aalix Roake

 

 

death song . . .

the acorn still warm

from their hands

 

Ron C. Moss

 

 

departing steps

dying out in the mist

now...memories

 

natalia kuznetsova

 ^^With prayers for Robert

 

 

he waves good-bye

as he takes the last seat --

dusty road

 

~ Febril Suzat

 

 

his long boat burning

on the outgoing tide

only memories

 

Angela Terry

 

 

the long goodbye

he stares at the new holes

in his sleeping bag

 

Stella Pierides

 

 

falling snow meditating between snowflakes

 

Robert Henry Poulin

 ^^ Just be silent within yourself, and the way of the haiku will find you.

 

 

In his departing

A search for new things

To replace him

 

Angelika Kolompar

 

  

unspoken goodbye-

winter wind shaped leaves

that haven't fallen

 

Dawn Apanius

 

 graduation day

she promises to call

the taxi honks twice

 

Edward

**This works only if we read lines 2-3 as forming a single unit ("phrase" in Jane Reichhold's terminology), but I'm willing to do that.

 

 

Shadows of hands

moving on the walls-

departing hour

 

Vasile Moldovan

 

 

waxing moon, almost full

brightens an entire landscape

then slips behind clouds

 

Jane DeJonghe

 

 

once more

this memory puzzle

of your virtual remains

 

Jon Espen Vassbotn

 

 

how long has it been?

still you sit undisturbed

in my In box

 

Barbara A Taylor

 ^^Sunshine and humidity, storms, bush fires, cicadas and cricket...this is the sweltering summer downunder.

 

 

the loneliness

of a train whistle

departing

 

Stevie Strang

 

 

his empty seat

a Christmas mug

that says “Grandpa”

 

Deborah P Kolodji

 

 

instead of farewell

just a tear

washed by the rain

 

Virginia Popescu

 **A very poignant image

 

 

it’s raining –

I look at the passenger boat

who goes away

 

Miorita

 

 

his eyes

gather small movements

winter stillness

 

--Peter

 

 

susuki,

along the road's edge -

from nowhere to nowhere

 

Drago

 

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Tears roll down

wetting my apparel

she departs quick

 

purush-Guntur

 

 

turning the calendar page...

seeing certain dates

has new meaning

 

dragonfly

 

 

closed-down channel-

the last test picture flickers

shaped like a tear.

 

Cristian Mocanu

 

 

parting...

a tank destroyer crosses

the rice field

 

Rita Odeh

 

 

we say goodbye

as if for the last time

rustling oak

 

Anonymous

 

 

so far, yet so close

you stay with us

like the moon

 

Earl Keener

 

 

running dark

the great gray ship

disappears

 

--Ginny Hoyle

 

 

I see the dying tree

before the hospice

time to say goodbye

 

Urszula Wielanowska

 

 

departure zone

at home surrounded

by loved ones

 

Anonymous

 

 

August moon --

Lake Victoria shimmers

as we take off

 

~ Isabelle Prondzynski

 

 

grueling week . . .

in courtroom sharktank . . .

separation at last

 

Eric Pet

 

 

they hug tightly

at the road junction --

final exam

 

~ Isaac Ndirangu

 

 

patterns of frost

a little boy kisses Ken

goodbye

 

Ralf Bröker

 

 

Christmas holiday --

my lovely black rabbit

passes on

 

~ Barrack Elung'ata

 

 

grandson departing

new life in army

will be missed

 

Jim Applegate

 

 

what separates our lips // the butterfly we tear halfway

 

old pajamas

 

 

chime -

the old globe-trotter depart

for the last time

 

Petru-Ioan Garda

 

 

predating departing -

possible sometimes in love

and alphabet soup

 

STOPS

 

 

annual lunch

the departing club member

sits with her group

 

Anonymous

 

 

a lover's departure

his scribbled letters

fill a shoe- box

 

Anonymous

 

 

his departing ceremony---

making

a sign of the cross

 

Tatsuya Onai

 

 

leaving mama--

I pet her dog one more time

blink back tears

 

jill

 

 

funeral -

flowers on the grave

all my farewell

 

Małgorzata Miksiewicz

 

 

graveside

celebrating

lifelong friendship

 

Frances O'Keeffe

 

 

empty desks

in the quiet school--

goodbye, goodbye

 

DeVar Dahl

 

 

flakes on the birdbath

robins riding

the north wind home

 

Bill Pauly

 

 

his exit . . .

the sea drops out

from under my feet

 

Lech Szeglowski

 

 

left the quay -

the wake not yet

smoothed out

 

Juhani Tikkanen

 

  

 

departures gate

in every short silence

a longer kiss

 

Terry O'Connor

 ^^My condolences on the loss of your friend and colleague. I hope I am not too late to enter my poems in this tribute to Robert ?

 

A shooting star

disappears –

our hands slowly drop…

 

krw

 

 

December leaving

last fly tumbles

onto the windowsill

 

Doris Lynch

 

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General Comments:

** Whew. Never had that happen before. There were so many good ones under Free Format that when I finally got it whittled down to six I was afraid to look back for fear I'd missed even one more.

 

**Close to closing time for December Shiki, but I had several choices too many in each category and it took time to whittle them down.

 

**Thanks again for this great opportunity to read some good haiku and vote on them, too.

 

**Lots of love-lies.

 

**This was quite a gloomy collection, maybe due to the sad occasion we commemorated. Very few haiku showed that a departure can be the start of a brand new adventure, a happy beginning, a new day or a new life. It was these haiku that I liked best.

 

**I think that Robert would be glad and - somehow - he will read all of those haiku.

 

**How very sorry I am to hear about Robert's passing. Please accept my sincere condolences. His memory will live on in our Shikimonthly, that is for sure.

 

**It will be interesting to see how many types of departures there will be in your haiku collection!

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