Dear Friends,
Here are the results for the January 2016 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was FIRST READING, and our Free Format subject was MOVING WATER
Congratulations to ***Rita Odeh***, winner of our Kigo section and to ***Shrikaanth***, winner of our Free Format section!
VOTERS' comments are indicated by "**"
POETS' comments are indicated by "^^"
Kigo Theme:
FIRST READING
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First Place - 22 Points
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first sunrise-
a spider, too
reading the silence
Rita Odeh
Haifa/ Israel
(2,5,6) = 22 pts
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Second Place - 17 Points
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first reading
the weight of the new
diet book
Paul Hodder
(0,4,9) = 17 pts
**New Year resolutions! After so many parties, even the diet book gains weight, or at least becomes so important to us! Very playful and at the same time so serious!
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Third Place - 16 Points
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Dr, Seuss
my diction
in my daughter’s voice
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(0,5,6) = 16 pts
**My mind's ear just kept coming back to this one...
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15 Points
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first reading
baby&me deep
in mother goose
Roberta Beary
(1,2,8) = 15 pts
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13 Points
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back from war -
first Braille reading of a tale
to his boy
Lavana Kray
Romania
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
first reading the river opens up at last
Bill Pauly
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
** Very interesting allusion, that the river finally gets to speak his mind and allow us to read him! Perhaps as a result of meditation, observing and understanding nature, we get as a reward a moment of illumination.
reading the look
on your face
first light
Sondra J. Byrnes
New Mexico USA
(0,2,9) = 13 pts
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12 Points
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dark matter--
a new look
at what I can't see
jill
(2,2,2) = 12 pts
first reading ...
the last year spills
from a bookmark
Vinay Leo R.
(0,4,4) = 12 pts
First reading --
recalling the warmth
of my mother's lap ...
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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notes in the margin
of the book she left behind —
New Year’s Day alone
Shelley Krause
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
a line through
my first resolution ...
moonrise
S.M. Abeles
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
heads together --
sounding out words
of their first book
Bre
(0,4,3) = 11 pts
**Love the visual of the heads leaning in together over the book...
doctor reading
my baby's growth ...
first scan
(Archana Kapoor Nagpal, Bangalore, India)
(0,4,3) = 11 pts
first reading ...
warmed by a breath
of hot tea
Boris Nazansky
(0,4,3) = 11 pts
**I like the simplicity of this scene.
new year . . .
searching the news
for something new
Bill Kenney
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
new years day
opening a novel
on the train
Ruth Powell
(0,1,9) = 11 pts
**Resonant with the feeling of being carried along...
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10 Points
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first reading...
on the steamed glass
his farewell poem
Criss Dexter
(1,1,5) = 10 pts
first reading
where words lie before
their utterance
Hansha
(0,4,2) = 10 pts
a new year -
reading the future
in the "Help Wanted" ads
Laurene
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
before reading
smelling every poem--
new book
Kashinath Karmakar
India
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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fresh snow
animal tracks
first reading
Bernard Gieske
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
afternoon darkness…
Issa becoming more
illuminating
D W Skrivseth
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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first reading . . .
the will that reminds me
nothing lasts
Garry Eaton
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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deep footprint
in fresh morning snow:
where no one walks
Danijel Bara
(2,0,1) = 7 pts
first reading
nothing transpires
in between the lines.
purush
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
first reading -
my tattered
old bible
John McDonald Edinburgh Scotland
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
first reading
my blood pressure
under control
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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the treaty with the aliens
seemed promising at first
then we read the subtext
F.J. Bergmann
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
first reading;
a snowflock is stopping
at my window
Manuela Burlacu
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
an unread electric bill ...
New Year's candle
flickers
Juhani Tikkanen
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
fresh snow finding all the woodland calling cards
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
first reading
the tealeaf couple settle
companionably
Nancy Smith
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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holy scriptures...
from being human
to humane
Vandana Parashar
India
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
a month since her death
last journal entry takes me
out of the New Year
Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
first reading
birch and oak varieties
of frost calligraphy
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
first reading of the year
her posthumous haiku
just published
Yukiko Yamada
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
first reading
still lightyears
to go
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
cuneiform symbols
I read the passage of birds
new year’s first snowfall
Deirdre Godwin
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
first reading -
he asks her to make
coffee
Ana Drobot
(Bucharest, Romania)
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
New Year morning
first reading by the fingers
a lump in the breast
Livre2
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
first reading
within sight of the surviving
poinsettia
Barbara Campitelli
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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New Years day
murmuring the river reads
the same sky
Beate Conrad
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
sunday morning
playing chiropractor
with a new book
todd eddy
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
broken seal -
her love letter's
first reading
-Priscilla Cook
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**I liked that this haiku reflects the reality that there is - by definition - only ever one first reading... and also hints that there may be many more.
first reading
the guest director
snores softly
Edward
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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community garden plot
something I didn't plant
so much red leaf lettuce
Bill Hudson
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
and be
the first reading as a myth
(and the last one)
Andrei C. Szava
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
my book’s dawn-
on the first page
mild sunray
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
first ebook,
a long sleepy day
in winter sun
--Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
New Year's Day morning
I open my old Bible
after quite some years
Horst Ludwig
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
storm -
in the helmsman's hands
the Quran
Dorota Ocińska
Poland
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first reading
in his native tongue
ASL
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
"what dogs know"
first reading aloud
to my dog
Chandra Bales
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first reading --
faded letters
from my shoebox
James Dobson
Prudhoe, UK.
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Twelfth Day -
absorbed in the dinosaur book
grandson and grandma
(Ramona)
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first reading
an old friend buys the flowers
herself
Beth Powell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**I think anyone recognized the beginning of Virginia Woolf’s Mrs Dalloway! I have spent some years studying it. She is an old friend by now. Interesting way of creating a modern haiku, just like Woolf herself created a new novel!
first reading
year of the monkey
haiga cards
kawazu)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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in the sunny spot
rapt in a new book
dry fingers
Ignatius Fay
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
first reading -
her Dear John letter
unopened
Darrell Byrd
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
"Call me Ishmael."
thus it starts but already
my past intrudes
Gerry B.
(Canada)
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
his last will
a stenographer's
diary
Alegria Imperial
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
words dance
celebrating new year
-coffee steam
Nimi Arora
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
writers’ retreat
first reading alone
in my room
Tom Painting
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
her letters
with yester years warmth
second day of snow
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
reading a New Year’s card -
the shape of
a monkey’s shadow
Angela Terry
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
Away from Kazakh
on a sidewalk bench
reading Persian haiku
Ken Sawitri
(Jakarta, Indonesia)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
new diary
leafing through
the summer weeks
Eleonore Nickolay
(France/Germany)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
chapped lips
I choose Shakespeare
for my first reading
Anitha Varma
Kerala, India
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
Midsummer Night's...
seduced by the nymph
in a world of words
Gautam Nadkarni
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
first read
he can now write
mom
quamrul Hassan
(dhaka, bangladesh)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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first novel...
first reading...
first rejection
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Finally starting
a book bought in college --
resolution kept.
mechaieh
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
poet Keats
on his peak in Darien
a sea wind blowing
Michael McClintock
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
^^For me, one of the greatest (and my first) "a-ha" moments in English literature was reading Keats' poem "On First Looking into Chapman's Homer"!
First reading -
the child's eyes on
colorful pictures
above words
Aziza Hena
Dhaka, Bangladesh
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
first reading -
he tries to read the headlines
of the wet newspaper
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
first reading
"... at your own risk"
in second gear
oga
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
first reading
with good intentions in mind -
a new diet book
Natalia Kuznetsova
Moscow, Russia
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
content to be blind -
boy's first read of Mouse Sumou*
to his grandparents
Daniela Bullas
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
^^Japanese folktale
January 2
reading grandma’s old diary
today we are twins
Anne Zooey Lind
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
first reading -
last year's journal
. . . any progress?
Jane DeJonghe
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
**A near-universal experience for any journal-keeper, I think!
our mailbox
filled with greeting cards –
I still delay reading
Tomislav
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Finally
the haiku anthology…
my first reading
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
boathouse --
a leisurely look at the photographs
in first reading
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad, India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
pioneer child's life
hummingbird
here and gone
Doris
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
"first reading"
then the life beyond the quotes ...
?,+$-,§,—,@,‰,!,
Rafał Zabratyński
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
first reading of the year-
is that Grandpa’s handwriting
on the ex libris?
Cristian Mocanu
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
First reading was
just the last love letter
since the yesteryear
Vasile Moldovan
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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cold spring teahouse dark
stubborn winter holding on
first reading brings light
poseytoon
(0,0,0) = 0 pts
Water tricking down her cheek,
Helen read the buzz
in Annie’s loving throat.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
imprints in mind
and marks on the buttocks - first reading
on an uneven rock
Ajaya Mahala
Pune, India
closed captions on
to binge on Downton Abbey
-- New Year's Day
maxianne
The slice
of an onion
Release the rapids.
Gary Serock
Gserock@yahoo.com
first reading:
year of the monkey predicts
healing for roosters
Cyndi Lloyd
first reading:
dozing, dreaming of a great white whale
shipwrecked on Sado Island…
Kurt
grandfather's book
opened in New Year's cold light
first reading
assu
again and once more
I ask what this word is...
first reading
~ Tete John (Kenya)
drawn into
the first reading in church --
New Year's Day
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(Ireland)
New Year's passing
the first reading
is his will
--Diane Mayr
holiday rush --
the time it takes
to break in a book
Terri L. French
US
awakened to New Year -
reading from the time from cellphone
blasts of fire crackers
gillena cox
St James, Trinidad and Tobago
New Year—
a baby, an hourglass
figure in his future
an end
Bill Gottlieb
first reading:
"Childhood memories"
by Ion Creangă
Miorita
engrossed
deep in history notes
my first dirty book
Shrikaanth Krishnamurthy
Birmingham UK
the first book
on a new library card--
dollar bill bookmarks
DeVar
First light
New bible, new markers
New truths to be mined
Hazel A. Witherspoon
grandfather's glasses
and newspaper happily
baby gurgles
Frances O'Keeffe
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General Comments:
**Not many haiku submitted seemed to fit with the guidance we were given. (Note: Japanese people traditionally select some personally meaningful material to read on January 2; reading it is called the first reading of the year.
**Ah, there were so many wonderful haiku! I found it difficult casting my votes. Six points just wasn't enough.
**The prompt was challenging and I loved it
**How I love to read all these marvelous entries. Thanks to everyone!
**I've never thought the "first . . ." convention travels well. As the note suggests, it's a specifically Japanese practice that can't have much meaning in other parts of the world. Moreover, it goes back to the lunar calendar, according to which the beginning of the year is associated with the first signs of spring. January 2 is just another winter day.
**A terrific theme indeed!
Free Format Theme:
MOVING WATER
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First Place - 29 Points
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your ashes...
the river carries away
a part of me
Shrikaanth
(2,4,15) = 29 pts
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Second Place - 26 Points
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low tide
a hermit crab
tries on houses
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(2,3,14) = 26 pts
**So clear and un-fussy... for me, this is the kind of haiku that sinks in and stays in your mind for the rest of the day.
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Third Place - 21 Points
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clear night
moonlight spins
the water wheel
Rafał Zabratyński
(2,5,5) = 21 pts
**In spite of a rather flat first line, this catches the imagination.
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19 Points
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the reflection
of the heron
departed
helge t.
(0,5,9) = 19 pts
**Great capture of that moment when the reflection becomes too disturbed to see.
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15 Points
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filling the gaps
between the floes ...
these stars
(Archana Kapoor Nagpal
Bangalore, India)
(1,2,8) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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river under ice our silence
Ann K. Schwader
(0,4,6) = 14 pts
a boiling kettle
forgotten on the stove...
winter sunset
--Kirsty Karkow
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
**An entrancing picture -- beautiful.
**One can make a bit of a story from these images and the word "forgotten", but that is not required.
**Ah yes, not so much forgotten as ignored in my household. I hear that whistle blowin’.
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12 Points
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flash floods...
the moment it all begins
to make sense
Ana Drobot
(Bucharest, Romania)
(1,2,5) = 12 pts
winter rain
a shrunken stream
carries the sky
Alegria Imperial
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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river at sea-
the silent exchanges
underneath
Ajaya Mahala,
Pune, India
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
the talk
icicles lengthening
from the eaves
Tom Painting
(1,0,8) = 11 pts
**Is that the talk I think it is?
spring breakup
the thunder and lightning
of river song
Angela Terry
(0,4,3) = 11 pts
buzzards cry a river full of rain
polona
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
**Multiple meanings gracefully expressed.
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10 Points
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storm runoff -
sorting through our things,
now yours or mine
Laurene
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
**Loved the tension between uncontrollable events and the desire to be in control, here.
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9 Points
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melting snow--
all the typos
i see
Sondra J. Byrnes New Mexico USA
(1,0,6) = 9 pts
from the waterfall
taking home a fern
sketched in pencil
Michael McClintock
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
**I like the quiet surprise in this one
nothing to say -
the sound of waterfall
at night
Israel López Balan
Mexico City
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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a drenched rose
her lips
reluctant to open
Ken Sawitri
(Jakarta, Indonesia)
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
trail of a raindrop
on the windowpane
first love
Boris Nazansky
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
winter dusk;
after the birdsong dies-
the gurgling brook
manoj saranathan
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
**Appreciated the way in which this haiku brings attention to the shifting nature of attention.
harvest field
the first dipperful
over his head
Barbara Snow
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
dusky stream
the ant journeys
on last year’s leaf
Nancy Smith
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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a tear drops
into a clear creek -
who can separate them?
Danijel Bara
(2,0,1) = 7 pts
single pane windows
carried ice crystal patterns
into melt puddles
eric p
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
sugaring days
snowmelt outpaces
the snow
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
**sugaring days is such a great term for a snowy day. and the snowmelt outpaces the snow is such a vivid visual.
the dog’s
last injection—
snow flurries
Cyndi Lloyd
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
ebb tide
the shore comes alive
at sunrise
Tom Conally
Gibsonville, NC
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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spring shower
white-and-pink flowers
are so fragile
Dorota Ocińska
Poland (Łodź)
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
steady rain --
the peaceful sound of drips
from the trees
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(Ireland)
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
no snow for Christmas
the empty rooms
of the children
Eleonore Nickolay
( France/Germany)
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
waterfall --
my words of joy
are white
James Dobson,
Prudhoe, UK.
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
garden waterfall -
there are as many rainbows
as many viewers
Daniela Bullas
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
ah, moon
moving water again
you rock
Anne Zooey Lind
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
the moment
I saw you, bluebird...
first drizzle
Rita Odeh
Haifa/ Israel
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
intensive care unit...
the stars fall one by one
from melting icicles
Criss Dexter
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
autumn
the stream running by
my evening walk
Bill Kenney
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
**Liked the connection and the little bit of tension between the narrator & nature.
**I liked the play on words in this one.
steady rain
the happiness of children
splashing
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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whitecaps
on steel-gray waves
Dad’s camp sweater
Ignatius Fay
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
Rivers over plains,
crimson streams beneath our skins -
life gifting nectar.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
cold night
on the pond a ........ripple
dsnake1
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
bottleneck --
a raindrop's ramble
down my windshield
Terri L. French
US
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
water
fall
water
Paul Hodder
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
**so much is conveyed in these three words. You have the flow
water, the water fall, and the water flowing away. I love it
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4 Points
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seeking always seeking
the river rolls on
to find the sea
Frances O'Keeffe
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
acid rain
I drop a tab
of coolness
Hansha
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
snowfall: the only gift from my childhood
Andrei C. Szava
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
swiftness of deadwood
in moving clouds
in moving water
Vishnu P Kapoor
Chennai, India
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
empty shore —
not a wave washes
your name away
Vinay Leo R.
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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rain on teahouse roof
hides braided lovers joy song
natural wonder
poseytoon
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
sockeyes
through a gauntlet of currents
they follow an urge
Gerry B.
(Canada)
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
the frozen river
freely flowing beneath…
a cold smile
D W Skrivseth
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
whitewater…
fox fitfully curled
on moonlit rocks…
kw
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
a steady drip
passed my window
january icicles
kawazu
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
a light drizzle
the man pisses balancing
on his two stumps
Bruce H. Feingold
Berkeley, CA
USA
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
passing river -
green shrubbery bowing
to take a dip
gillena cox
St James, Trinidad
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
lightning through stained glass
water rising
under Noah's ark
Garry Eaton
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
wind on the sea the sea reaches back
Simon Hanson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
spawning run
behind large boulders
salmon stop to rest
Edward
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
frozen river ...
thick ice
moving nowhere
Juhani Tikkanen
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
birth pangs--
the stream gurgles
over the day moon
Anitha Varma
Kerala, India
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
boat ride...
my thoughts moving faster
than the rapids
Gautam Nadkarni
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
catching the water
from our leaking roof --
heavy rain
~ Anne Njeri
(Kenya)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
New Year’s outing
so many things passing
under the old bridge
Cristian Mocanu
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
**Easy to see and feel this one, and also interesting to see what "things" each reader's mind might fill in.
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2 Points
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flash flooding
we evacuate patients
in a rowboat
Bre
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
**I love this image and can really identify with it.
baptism . . .
whose water is it,
child of God?
Bill Pauly
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
bubbles in
the bathtub
my father with mask
hawktalk
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
frost smoke
the full moon moves into
a bride
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
nothing
but the roaring forties
in your eyes
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
chopping ice
on the Rivanna River
moving water
assu
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
all routes
have become muddy streams
autumn downpour
Yukiko Yamada
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
pre-term birth the flow of dreams through flash floods
Yesha Shah
Surat, India.
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
El Nino
Mississippi flows freely
deep in the new year
Donna Bauerly
Dubuque, IA 52003
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
Hawaiian waterfall
the weight of the world
on her back
Doris
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
still water
below the moving leaves...
windy day
Dejan Pavlinović
Pula, Croatia
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
a chinook wind
starts the icicles dripping--
wet wool socks
DeVar
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
cleaned-out fridge --
floodwater ferrying
olives to the sea
mechaieh
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
hogging the hot tub
her husband
and mine
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
vernal torrent -
a young birch with a nest
dashing to the falls
Natalia Kuznetsova
Moscow, Russia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
tilting the paper
the water colors blend
oh the threatening seas
Bill Hudson
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
flash flood
a child’s inner tube
carried by the river
David Grayson
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
rain timpani
the sound of
moss growing
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the river meanders time to gather scent of violets
jill
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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granny's rocker
high on the cart
...floodwater
John McDonald
EDINBURGH SCOTLAND
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
moving water -
overnight the river
changes direction
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
whitewater …
the surf digs sand from
beneath my feet
Darrell Byrd
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
summer rain
brother and me
buck naked
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
ripples after ripples
in my placid life...
pouring rain
Vandana Parashar
India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
out
with eyes on
ice floe
oga
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
bamboo arrangement
with random sips of water
it makes do
Harvey Jenkins
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
The slice
of an onion
Release the rapids.
Gary Serock
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
swan feather floats
on moving water-
rippled beauty
Munia Khan
Dhaka, Bangladesh
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
last day of summer...
the tide
receding
Kevin Knezevic
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
she didn't make it—
tonight falling snow
muffles the city
maxianne
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
i spoke to the rain
the rain said: there is a river
running through your heart
Carol Pearce-Worthington
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
shelf ice-
coyote watching
the river flow
Ruth Powell
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
multi-coloured litter
floating on Ngong River --
Soweto dump site
~ Arnold Echenje
(Kenya)
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Summer morning…
shimmering sunshine splashes
down the waterfall
Keith A. SIMMONDS
Rodez, FRANCE
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Gi Gong --
I smell the ocean's
blue hour
(Ramona)
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Silent night – slowly a white star descends
Beate Conrad
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
a slipstream
moving unseen
sixty winters
Beth Powell
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the air that holds
a skipping stone
daydreams of you
S.M. Abeles
Washington, DC
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Weekend chores
Rainbows dance
While doing dishes
Hazel A. Witherspoon
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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Martian polar caps
ice flowers
alternating springs
F.J. Bergmann
(Secretary's Comment: I enjoyed this scifaiku!)
icicles...
my mom’s electrocardiogram
too long-expected
Manuela Burlacu
Rain drops
covering my pond
in a bowl
Aziza Hena
Dhaka, Bangladesh
Spring St. Croix
clear, lively sparkling
morning sun
Horst Ludwig
rain rain rain
shooting the rapids
happy ducks
Bernard Gieske
a plastic Santa
shoots the rapids…
the big low
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
moss at the foot steps
stays stranded as it is
flows of running water.
purush
Cracks in ice
signs of moving water
despite frigid cold
Phil Mizener
I sit on the bank
watching water slip away
I miss you so much
Deirdre Godwin
pop-up storm
the gurgle of rain
through a rusted grate
--Diane Mayr
waiting out winter
longing to dance with
the Waters of March
todd eddy
rain after
the wildfire, hosing
winter, ash
Bill Gottlieb
winter sun --
my shadow ripples
with the waterfall
Tomislav
early morning row —
we work so hard to move
the top six inches
Anonymous
plastic rubbish
lies stuck on the riverside --
blocked drainage
~ Antony Joseph
(Kenya)
the river flows by --
her shadow has rhythmic gait
of a teen
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad India
two kids cheer on
their floating toy cars --
open drainage
~ Patrick Wafula
(Kenya)
blue sky again –
the river depose
ice floe ashore
Miorita
submerged
a fish grazes
spring on steps
Nimi Arora
ash
upon gentle breeze-
snow fall
Kacy Lee
bridal night
her smile belies
her bleeding heart
quamrul Hassan
(dhaka, bangladesh)
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General Comments:
**This is HARD! I had 17 in my first draft picks
**Wish I had more points to give. Quite a few nice ones in this prompt.
**So many amazing entries but very few votes to give ...hard indeed!
**A delight to read the entries. And tough decisions to award the points!
**Yes, many are very moving. Once more, thanks to everyone.
**Wish I had more points to award for this free-format vote.
**It was lovely to read all the entries. I wish I had more points to give!
**I love this prompt- I love moving water
**Just about everything moves faster than I do these days.
Thank you for participating in the January 2016 Kukai!
With much appreciation,
The Shiki Monthly Kukai Team