January 2013 Kukai Results

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WINDOW 

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First Place -  41 Points

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store window

my daughter’s posture

mimics my own

–Ignatius Fay–

(2,8,19) = 41 pts

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Second Place -  30 Points

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icy window

thawing the moon

with her breath

Eduard TARA

(0,9,12) = 30 pts

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Third Place -  25 Points

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window mannequin

her party dress

20% off

Tom Painting

(3,6,4) = 25 pts

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21  Points

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reading issa

on the train ...

the landscape

gogatsu

(2,3,9) = 21 pts

** Very subtle. The window is present, though not mentioned. And the landscape could be that observed outside (through the window) or that evoked by Issa's poetry. Or both. Beautiful.

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20  Points

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abandoned house

this sudden desire

to look inside

Urszula Wielanowska

(0,3,14) = 20 pts

**Very compelling

**I like the suspense here.

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17  Points

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window pane

touching the finger marks

of my grandson

Ramona

(1,3,8) = 17 pts

**Is a very tender image, encompassing youth and age and family relationships, I sense much is going on here: love, longing for youth, feeling protective, memories, melancholy, joy and more. I would have given this a 6 if it were allowed.

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15  Points

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stained glass window

the moon lights the halo

of saint francis

André Surridge

(Hamilton

New Zealand)

(2,2,5) = 15 pts

summer illness

a day spent learning

from clouds

Jan O'Loughlin

(Australia)

(0,5,5) = 15 pts

old barn

from a broken window

bird song

Marleen Hulst

(The Netherlands)

(0,3,9) = 15 pts

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14  Points

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hospice window...

Dad tells me again

he sees sun dogs

S.E. Buffington

(0,5,4) = 14 pts

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12  Points

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seeing

both sides

window

Frances O'Keeffe

(2,2,2) = 12 pts 

window moon--

an imperfect circle

in a perfect square

---kash poet

(1,2,5) = 12 pts

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11  Points

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same old view

from the kitchen window

new curtains

Barbara Snow

(1,3,2) = 11 pts 

rain covered window -

she re-reads his

obituary

Carmel Lively Westerman

(0,1,9) = 11 pts

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10  Points

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dirty windows -

a widower

stares at the ceiling

Robert Kania

(0,3,4) = 10 pts

**You wondered what else he hadn't cleaned. Poignant stuff.

tea steam

the window swirls

with snow

Ann K. Schwader

(0,2,6) = 10 pts 

January thaw

pressed against the window

two cat noses

--Diane Mayr

(Salem, NH)

(0,1,8) = 10 pts

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9  Points

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winter tree

letting in

the dark

BILL KENNEY

(1,2,2) = 9 pts 

midsummer night

opening a window

into forever

Liz Rule

(1,1,4) = 9 pts

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8  Points

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tap at the window

a reminder to restock

sunflower feeder

gourdman

(1,1,3) = 8 pts 

days of fire-fighting

opening the truck window

to smell the first rain

Ron C. Moss

(0,2,4) = 8 pts

^^We have had bad fires here [Australia]as you might have heard, 126 homes destroyed and we are still working to bring them under control with more hot weather coming our way.

That haiku was a welcome moment of relief when a cold front came through and brought a tiny bit of rain...never forget that smell.

**Over 170 bushfires raging in my state, and the temperatures have been close to 40C..........uncomfortably hot, but at least I am safe, thus far.

origami birds--

the window shields them

from the storm

James Dobson.

(0,1,6) = 8 pts

**Beautifully done!

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7  Points

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wet windows

into the soul

her eyes

RD McManes

(2,0,1) = 7 pts 

after leaving ...

on the steamy window

your hand

Ailoaei Cristina

(1,2,0) = 7 pts 

old building -

still christmas lights

in a window

Israel López Balan

(Mexico)

(1,0,4) = 7 pts

homestead window . . .

handprints

from a childhood ago

Bill Pauly

(1,0,4) = 7 pts 

the setting moon

through bare branches

to my pillow

jill

(0,2,3) = 7 pts 

breakfast alone

the kitchen window fills

with half the moon

polona

(0,1,5) = 7 pts 

junk shop--

an old window

catches my eye

aom (tim)

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

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6  Points

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little winter moon

wet nose prints

on the window

Angie Werren

(1,0,3) = 6 pts 

a tiny cellphone

in her pocket

window to the world

doris kasson

(0,3,0) = 6 pts

**"iPhone" would have been better, but I like the thought.

night walls--

docking on my window

a sailboat moon

Alegria Imperial

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

winter dusk

slowly vanishes

the window

Vishnu P Kapoor

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

grandma's window-

an apple falls not far

from the tree

Rita Odeh

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

sleepless night

the south window frames

the rising moon

Audrey Downey

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

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5  Points

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full moon's

bright light

wakes me

Jane DeJonghe

(1,1,0) = 5 pts 

New year

A new window

On the world

Angelika Kolompar

(0,2,1) = 5 pts 

window view...

the reflection of myself

in empty streets

Dejan Pavlinovic

(Croatia)

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

a moth comes

to the window -

fireworks

Laura Csilla

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

merging . . .

his last breath drifts

out the window

Kirsty Karkow

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

a window full

of December sun --

the baby's room

Michael McClintock

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

Christmas in Texas--

though my window

big flakes of snow

Bre Roberts

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

ice-thick window --

the wobbling world

beyond

Gene Doty

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

an open window

she picks up the phone

to call him

Anne Curran

(Hamilton

New Zealand)

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

cottage window

one original pane

of wonky glass

Elaine RIddell

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

**In so few words a picture is painted - I can see that cottage and its old pane of glass.

^^ This was a nineteenth century building from the days when they were not able to make glass with an even thickness, so the view through the pane was slightly distorted.

**My old farmhouse is almost 100 years old, and everything in it is wonky, including me!:)

picture window

he watches their argument

turn into a fight

Edward

(0,1,3) = 5 pts 

freezing cold ...

the new moon hides

between the flower pots

Tore Sverredal

(0,1,3) = 5 pts 

dirty windows

the Northern Lights

do not mind

Nahum

(0,0,5) = 5 pts

**Lovely. I would not mind too.

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4  Points

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waiting room

looking out through

rain-streaked windows

Cara Holman

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

last raindrops -

a barefoot child skips

through clouds

Sandi Pray

(Robbinsville, NC

USA)

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

the dogs tell me

what the window can't

- out and back in

- ru

(Canada)

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

on the deathbed -

the hospital window

frames the twilight

Cezar F. Ciobîcă

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

ice storm

through the window

her voice

martin gottlieb cohen

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

fractured light--

sunrise breaks through

hexagrams of ice

Doris Lynch

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

**A very strong image.

green Christmas

making a snowman

in the fogged window

Alexander B. Joy

(0,0,4) = 4 pts 

beyond my window a window to the unknown

dietmar tauchner

(0,0,4) = 4 pts 

beneath my window-

children wanting a carrot

for his nose

Barbara Campitelli

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

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3  Points

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midnight rendezvous

my pebble cannot reach

her top floor window

Harvey Jenkins

(0,1,1) = 3 pts 

lilacs wafting

through open windows

purple light

Angela Terry

(0,1,1) = 3 pts 

picture windows

every moving scene

a masterpiece

Karin Anderson

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

**It wasn’t until moving to this house in Maine that I understood why they are called ’picture windows’, so this haiku is especially appealing. 

sun beaming

through the rear window

a fresh start

Carolyn Coit Dancy

(0,1,1) = 3 pts 

a swollen dampness

sticking windows and doors–

things I can't forget

Adelaide B. Shaw

(Millbrook, NY

USA)

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

winter window --

my eyes wake up

to the foggy sky

Ramesh Anand

(0,0,3) = 3 pts 

I write my name

on the foggy window...

cold spell

Tom Conally

(0,0,3) = 3 pts 

window-seat flight

under a midnight sun

the tundra

Ellen Compton

(0,0,3) = 3 pts 

sunshine

through stained glass windows

his loss of faith

Beth Powell

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

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2  Points

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sun on my shoulder

picture window

filled with yesterdays

Donna Bauerly

(Dubuque, IA)

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

pain refracted

pane reflecting

window of my soul

Tanja Cilia

(0,1,0) = 2 pts 

Through the window

Watching my wife working

She must be cold –

Bernhard Kopf

(0,1,0) = 2 pts 

rain ——

the poor woman's wish

a window

Svend A. Doggfall

(0,1,0) = 2 pts 

the church warden

closes the wooden window --

Sunday downpour

~ James Bundi

(0,1,0) = 2 pts 

grandmas ex libris

an open book

by an open window

Jon Espen Vassbotn

(0,1,0) = 2 pts 

in from the storm

steam from the stew

fogs the window

DeVar

(0,1,0) = 2 pts 

see my orchids?

in the window? pink blotches?

Google Street View

Maxianne

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

winter light

in other peoples' windows...

chapter two

Kat Creighton

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

window

echos

all her love tips

purush-guntur

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

bedridden

opening the curtain

my mother smiles

Bill Hudson

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

**A poignant image. Reminds me of my mother too.

occupied

my windows -

angry trojan

Juhani Tikkanen

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

new year’s eve --

dust on the old window

glints in the sun

~ Isabelle Prondzynski

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

crunchy snow

outside my window

blue tits are chirping

Irena Szewczyk

(Poland)

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

distant thunder;

the arc of a raindrop on

the windowpane !

manoj saranathan

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

open window

the sweetness of spring wind

rustles my loneliness

Dawn Apanius

(Ohio, USA)

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

cold when he leaves

the hall window

my son installs

LeRoy Gorman

(0,0,2) = 2 pts 

harvest moon with

falling leaves in the window...

no longer alone

Seby Lucacs

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

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One Point

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an open window

upon a challenging world ...

light in the tunnel

Keith A. Simmonds

(T & T)

januarys night window

a robin sleeps

the summer under the wing

Oddbjørn Aardalen 

Sirius rising

the sound as pebbles

pepper my windowpane

Michele L. Harvey 

behind the window

a six pack drinks

her dream

Ralf Bröker 

a whistled tune

from your window--

interrupted

Ginny Hoyle 

from up here

I can see where streets meet

What comes next?

Marylouise Knight 

moment of delight

pigeon at the window-ledge

iridescent black

Deirdre Godwin  

window of illusion    stone buddha does not speak    nirvana within

D W Skrivseth 

sun

shines through the netted

window too

Nadalsuren Purevdorj

(Ulaanbaatar Mongolia) 

framed by the window

a landscape of

my neighbor's junk

--Peter Newton  

a shadow lingers

on frosted glass -

too many ghost stories.

dsnake1 

route home

the windows no longer lit

by tannenbaume

Jennifer Savage 

through our window

lights and

a hallowing rain

carol pearce-worthington 

montains

behind tall buildings-

a Windows

María Santomauro 

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No Points This Time, But Thank

You For Sharing Your Haiku

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the candle flame

twisted by rippled glass

still gives light

Tony Nasuta

(Timonium, MD)

posed in my window

the moon close to jupiter

says cheese and smiles

dragonfly 

illness gone -

at the window her bright eyes

forsythia-lit

John McDonald 

(Edinburgh Scotland)

From the bus window:

"Chateaubriand Special tonight."

That's where I should eat.

Horst Ludwig  

sun from the window

fluroscent light from the wall--

dusky face

--R K Singh 

fresh air slips in

between window slats

the yellow dust

Ernesto P. Santiago 

(The Philippines)

painter's dream to fill

the blind windows of the church

with angels' eyes

STOPS 

(ROMANIA)

the slain kids

an opportunity for

urgent reform

Barbara A Taylor 

(Mountain Top NSW

Australia)

dog chasing its tail --

taunted by the rabbit

just outside the window

mechaieh 

(Nashville, TN)

my youth...

the destiny is seen

through a big window

Tuvshinzaya Nergui 

(Tsetserleg city, Mongolia)

rain drumming blues

behind hospital windows

bedridden world

natalia kuznetsova 

window

tear running down her cheek

to her heart

Anonymous 

the spider balanced

between pane and storm

heeds both ways

Anonymous 

shadow theater -

at young neighbour window

light went out

Krzysztof Kokot PL 

Dark window

the house is silent

bright full moon.

Trevor Camp 

sculpy gator

swims through my desk

her furrowed brow

assu 

(Tuscaloosa, AL)

near the window

grows a birch -

rustle of leaves

Miorita 

bustling city

still, this Hansel-Gretel woods

outside my window

Peggy Heinrich 

Every window

Has

Every life

Tatsuya Onai 

sparkling air

from my kitchen window --

frozen fog

Ruth Powell 

cityscape at night:

glistening crosswords

of shadows and light

-- Chitra Rajappa 

gazing out the window

watching the snow

ideas accumulate

Mr PC 

(Maryland)

other New Years . . .

the abandoned home's windows

wear ferns of frost

Catherine J.S. Lee 

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General Comments:

**Boy! The Kukai just gets bigger and bigger ……………

** So many good haiku, only 6 votes. sigh

**Very difficult. So many nuanced options to consider. Lovely stuff.

**Some really good ones in this batch. Thanks again.

** Wishing everyone at Shiki Kukai a happy, healthy, prosperous, and creative New Year.

**Thanks again for yet another chance to be read, be voted on and do the same for other poets' haiku!

** I see this could get addictive. But in a good way. Great learning experience.

**Thank you for your time, and for setting up another exciting kukai!

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