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January 2013 Kukai
Congratulations to *** EDUARD TARA ***, winner of our Kigo section and to *** IGNATIUS FAY ***, winner of our Free Format section!
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VOTERS' comments are indicated by ** below the respective poems.
POETS' comments are indicated by ^^ below the respective poems.
Kigo Theme:
FIRST CALM
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First Place - 22 Points
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first calm
carefully raking
the zen garden
Eduard TARA
(1,5,9) = 22 pts
**This would have been more effective without the adverb, and some sort of punctuation seems called for at the end of line 1.
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Second Place - 20 Points
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first calm
the newborn babe
finds his thumb
doris kasson
(0,4,12) = 20 pts
**Nice one, but would have been even nicer had the second line simply said: "the newborn."
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Third Place - 18 Points
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first calm -
shoveling the snowdrifts
by starlight
Ruth Powell
(1,2,11) = 18 pts
**The calm that comes with doing something
**Very meditative activity based haiku, a concise picture of nature and human nature interacting, beautifully crafted.
AND
calm waters-
a duck glides
over the morning star
sanjuktaa
(0,4,10) = 18 pts
**I would have changed the first line to -first calm-, but a wonderful picture anyhow!
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16 Points
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first light
in the hayloft
the coo of doves
Tom Painting
(2,3,4) = 16 pts
still pond --
my rucksack emptied
of last year's stones
S.M. Abeles
(USA)
(2,3,4) = 16 pts
**I love the feeling of reverence and ritual captured in this poem, as well as the sense of a clean start, looking at the pond after all evidence of "last year's stones" has vanished. Lovely.
**This could either mean there is an opportunity to skip stones OR all the stones had been used before.
Nice double entendre.
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15 Points
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first calm-
a dangling branch touches
the tree's shadow
Rita Odeh
(1,2,8) = 15 pts
**This has a nice image. Although, I think it would be more effective as: first calm--/ a dangling branch touches/ its shadow.
dusk falls
across the page
first calm
Ann K. Schwader
(0,3,9) = 15 pts
**One of the calmest entries of the month
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14 Points
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peeing
after the fireworks ...
the stars
gogatsu
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
**I love this and can see the scene so well! A moment of calm and awe at the start of the year.
finally alone -
dust motes drifting
in a sunbeam
Sandi Pray
(Robbinsville, NC
USA)
(0,2,10) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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sweet sound of calm
my aging dog
softly snoring
Donna Bauerly
(Dubuque, IA)
(1,3,4) = 13 pts
side by side
in the freshly-fallen snow
deer tracks
maxianne
(0,5,3) = 13 pts
**After Richard Brautigan
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12 Points
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first calm
their snow angels are all
I hear now
Archie Carlos
(1,2,5) = 12 pts
after the holidays
familiar strangers
at the bus stop
BILL KENNEY
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
a dove's coo
drifts through the fog...
first calm
polona
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
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10 Points
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the first cry
of my firstborn
first calm
Irena Szewczyk
( Warszaw, Poland)
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
calm sea-
a wrecked lifeboat
coming to light
Vasile Moldovan
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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year of the snake ends
a spiral of chimney smoke
reaching for the stars
Nancy Smith
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
by chance
our steps in stride
with the cardinal's song
--Peter Newton
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
a good book
alone in my bed --
first calm
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
first calm
sunlight kisses
the toad
Ernesto P. Santiago
(Philippines)
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
first calm
snow falling
on the child's drum
André Surridge
(Hamilton,
New Zealand)
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
**Effectively evokes silence by indirection.
first calm--
the mouse gnaws
a new hole
aom (tim)
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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prayer song--
ripples settle
calming the moon
---kash poet
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
first calm --
a streak of color
between clouds
Angie Werren
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
my son
quietly drawing
forgets his gifts
Beth Powell
(Prince Edward Island)
(0,4,0) = 8 pts
the moon . . .
a city of Chinese smoke
half asleep
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
new year stillness
blackbird on silver birch
unmoving
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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morning calm . . .
from the ice-bound peak,
other peaks
Michael McClintock
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
first calm
... the space between
birth and baby's cry
Brenda Roberts
(Fort Worth)
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
quiescent moon
I finish sorting
her last box of papers
Cara Holman
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
first calm
your watchdog follows me
with his eyes
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
even the gulls
pause for this sunrise
first calm
Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
first calm-
melting snowflakes
on her hand
Seby Lucacs
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
**The things that become noticeable in a state of calm, and the process of melting itself suggests calm
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6 Points
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first calm...
fresh snow swaddles
the new year
Kat Creighton
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
first calm . . .
the newborn latches
to her breast
Natasha
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
snowflakes
a silent calmness
for the new year
RD McManes
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
foggy morning—
I light
a new candle
Marylouise Knight
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
midnight calm -
she pulls her breast
from the baby's mouth
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
first calm...
the snowman's hard shell
softens
S.E. Buffington
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
**Intriguing in its ambiguities
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5 Points
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new year’s moon
after the fireworks the hush
of fresh fallen snow
Liz Rule
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
departing year
his headstone warms
my fingertips
Lauren Mayhew
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
first calm -
my mother surviving
open heart surgery
Cezar F. Ciobîcă
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
granny's calm face
new sun rises
even on wrinkles
Vishnu P Kapoor
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
above the waves
calm of a solitary
gull
John McDonald
(Edinburgh Scotland)
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
the sound
of falling snowflakes
new year's morn
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
Times Square
now the crowds have left
first calm
Ellen Compton
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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first calm
the suitcase-shaped dents
in new snow
–if–
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
first calm
remnants of rockets
on new years step
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
a few days in
sleeping kittens
on the new calendar
LeRoy Gorman
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
dog waits at the door
she brushes confetti
from his collar
Diane Mayr
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**Even though the word Calm or any of its synonyms is not used here, the haiku suggests (to me) that this couple has gone off and quietly got married - the dog waiting at the door suggests calm as they return to their home.
first calm . . .
in my child’s eyes
light of oil lamp
Ramesh Anand
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
after the rockets,
the sweet stillness
of the grapefruit tree
mechaieh
(Nashville, TN)
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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cleaning
dust of one day -
the new year
Israel López Balan
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first calm
the family tucks in to
sticky rice dumplings
Barbara A Taylor
(Mountain Top NSW
Australia)
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
peering from the rubble
the dead calm of
disaster
Bill Hudson
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
after celebrating my house is empty again new year’s day calm
D W Skrivseth
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Newborn son
mother home at last.
All is calm.
Trevor Camp
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
new year's snow-
quiet after the bang
of the charity bin's lid
Dawn Apanius
(Ohio, USA)
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
first calm --
the blue heron wraps himself
deeply within it
Angela Terry
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
family room
devoid of Christmas bells
snow falls silently
Aalix Roake
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
mother in law
waving
first calm
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
now the first calm
snowmen
everywhere
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
twilight chaos:
silently
a star swims into view
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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hurricane hygiene:
a sponge
is not a shower
miriam chaikin
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
^^100% [damage from Hurricane Sandy] No elec., heat, elevators, water -- darkness and doom. …such an awful and bizarre time - someone not hit would not "get it."
After the fireworks
the street becomes calm, then
more fireworks -
Bernhard Kopf
(Vienna)
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
New Year
the first scream
from her blue baby
Aloysius
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the door slams
and he leaves for good
. . . whew!
Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
in between
New Year’s firecrackers
baby’s even breaths
Doris Lynch
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
first calm...
the pace of people in the street
becomes slow
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
(Tsetserleg city, Mongolia)
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
perihelion
our dog leaves
the cellar
Ralf Bröker
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the hustle bustle
of new year's day is over,
first nap of the year
Tom Conally
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
humming auld lang syne
she rocks and knits
while the tea cools
Edward
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
First Calm
Crows
Completely black
Tatsuya Onai
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
windless day --
children break the sunny face
of new snow
Gene Doty
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
first calm
staying up 'til after
the gunfire stops
Seren Fargo
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
stillness
of new snow only broken
by deer hoof prints
gourdman
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
in the old box
new year decorations-
first calm
Nadalsuren Purevdorj
(Ulaanbaatar Mongolia)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
First calm
after the fireworks –
the new moon
Miorita
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
new year's morning...
the roar of silence
through empty streets
Dejan Pavlinovic
(Croatia)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
newyear harvest;
two damselflies alight
on a hoe
manoj saranathan
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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One Point
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no wind
stillness blankets
the chill inside
Tony Nasuta
(Timonium, MD)
lonelier
this year than last
melancholy
Tanja Cilia
Removing make-up
after some new year's parties
before late bed-time
Horst Ludwig
New Year's morning ...
oasis of calm resolve
in the arms of hope
Keith A. Simmonds
(T & T)
New Year's Eve
after fireworks and ship horns
the bay soothes itself
Michele L. Harvey
first calm
as dusk drapes in
her outbursts cool down
purush-guntur
ceased snowstorm -
the whole view
whitened
Juhani Tikkanen
calm sea
the horizon ties
summers water birth
Karin Anderson
year's first kiss
our friends sing auld lang syne
fireworks later
Mark A. Fisher
(Tehachapi, CA)
all day long
the bowl game coverage
first calm
Barbara Snow
first calm
the maw of a winter sun
on her birdhouse
Alegria Imperial
fearful of dying . . .
the calm of a night sea
lit by the moon
Ron C. Moss
first calm moment--
I start to read
the nengajo cards
James Dobson.
first calm
like it or not, two achy weeks
in bed with the flu
Peggy Heinrich
baby sleeps at last
out in the garden
the wind drops
Elaine Riddell
New Year's Day
a parade of huge
summer clouds
Jan O'Loughlin
(Australia)
prolonged
by the cold snap
midnight calm
- ru
(Canada)
a cold hush--
huge snowflakes fall
straight down
DeVar
through rain
and melting snow--
raccoon tracks
jill
new year -
under the stars
the fireworks are over
Tore Sverredal
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No Points This Time, But Thank
You For Sharing Your Haiku
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first night
new year star
rests high
dragonfly
becalmed
the long shadow of a roach
martin gottlieb cohen
After New year
The first calm
Of the week
Angelika Kolompar
Dusty leaves
break days of silence:
spring's first rain
--R.K. Singh
first calm smile after
Maya's apocalypse
Rasputin's fire
STOPS
(ROMANIA)
calm...at last
after New Year's stormy night
and his moods
natalia kuznetsova
tempest is over
now the sky begins to clear
chimney smoke curls up
Deirdre Godwin
silent night
the busy Christmas lights
make not a sound
Anonymous
New year's first calm day -
the neighbors' kids and dogs
run after each other.
Anonymous
first calm
in the hoarfrost forest--
gunshot!
Bill Pauly
new neighbors ...
enwrought with chimney smoke
the first calm
Ramona
trees fall in fierce winds
eventually - stillness
precious peace
Jane DeJonghe
First calm after winter storm
Myriad white mounds
Where cars once were
Philip Mizener
landed
bright arcs of your fight done
my knife scrapes scales
Jennifer Savage
new year
an old acquaintance
brings me along
carol pearce-worthington
New Year's day
the calm penetrated by
a newborn's wail
angelee deodhar
calming of the wind
after a winter storm
feels warm
Mr. PC
the New Year
on a clean cold morning
the way is clear
Adelaide B. Shaw
(Millbrook, NY
USA)
first calm -
my baby's colic
goes away
Laura Csilla
after the storm
and turbulent air-
first calm
Maria Santomauro
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General Comments:
**So much beautiful imagery, so few votes.
**There were images of calm and images of first, but relatively few successfully brought the two together.
**This was tough; it appears that many/most did not understand the assignment.
**Dear editors, thank you for making this kukai be a joyful haiku-meeting again.
**Again, happy new year! Have LOTS of calm!
**For the most part, I found that those haiku which used the phrase "first calm" were too obvious. Used as a first line it was like a title, telling the reader what to expect; used as a third line, it was a summary or explanation of what the reader had just read.
**Thank you for such a lovely topic.
**I enjoyed participating, thank you.
**This theme really brought out some fine work.
A real gift of the holidays is indeed the calm
that comes after . . . It's natural that poets
especially know this.
**Wishing you a very happy new year -- and hoping that the entries received in this first kukai of the year will add to your happiness! I found the kigo a pleasant challenge, even though it is not quite part of the Japanese kigo list...
Free Format Theme:
WINDOW
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First Place - 41 Points
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store window
my daughter’s posture
mimics my own
–Ignatius Fay–
(2,8,19) = 41 pts
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Second Place - 30 Points
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icy window
thawing the moon
with her breath
Eduard TARA
(0,9,12) = 30 pts
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Third Place - 25 Points
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window mannequin
her party dress
20% off
Tom Painting
(3,6,4) = 25 pts
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21 Points
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reading issa
on the train ...
the landscape
gogatsu
(2,3,9) = 21 pts
** Very subtle. The window is present, though not mentioned. And the landscape could be that observed outside (through the window) or that evoked by Issa's poetry. Or both. Beautiful.
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20 Points
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abandoned house
this sudden desire
to look inside
Urszula Wielanowska
(0,3,14) = 20 pts
**Very compelling
**I like the suspense here.
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17 Points
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window pane
touching the finger marks
of my grandson
Ramona
(1,3,8) = 17 pts
**Is a very tender image, encompassing youth and age and family relationships, I sense much is going on here: love, longing for youth, feeling protective, memories, melancholy, joy and more. I would have given this a 6 if it were allowed.
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15 Points
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stained glass window
the moon lights the halo
of saint francis
André Surridge
(Hamilton
New Zealand)
(2,2,5) = 15 pts
summer illness
a day spent learning
from clouds
Jan O'Loughlin
(Australia)
(0,5,5) = 15 pts
old barn
from a broken window
bird song
Marleen Hulst
(The Netherlands)
(0,3,9) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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hospice window...
Dad tells me again
he sees sun dogs
S.E. Buffington
(0,5,4) = 14 pts
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12 Points
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seeing
both sides
window
Frances O'Keeffe
(2,2,2) = 12 pts
window moon--
an imperfect circle
in a perfect square
---kash poet
(1,2,5) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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same old view
from the kitchen window
new curtains
Barbara Snow
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
rain covered window -
she re-reads his
obituary
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,1,9) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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dirty windows -
a widower
stares at the ceiling
Robert Kania
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
**You wondered what else he hadn't cleaned. Poignant stuff.
tea steam
the window swirls
with snow
Ann K. Schwader
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
January thaw
pressed against the window
two cat noses
--Diane Mayr
(Salem, NH)
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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winter tree
letting in
the dark
BILL KENNEY
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
midsummer night
opening a window
into forever
Liz Rule
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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tap at the window
a reminder to restock
sunflower feeder
gourdman
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
days of fire-fighting
opening the truck window
to smell the first rain
Ron C. Moss
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
^^We have had bad fires here [Australia]as you might have heard, 126 homes destroyed and we are still working to bring them under control with more hot weather coming our way.
That haiku was a welcome moment of relief when a cold front came through and brought a tiny bit of rain...never forget that smell.
**Over 170 bushfires raging in my state, and the temperatures have been close to 40C..........uncomfortably hot, but at least I am safe, thus far.
origami birds--
the window shields them
from the storm
James Dobson.
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
**Beautifully done!
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7 Points
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wet windows
into the soul
her eyes
RD McManes
(2,0,1) = 7 pts
after leaving ...
on the steamy window
your hand
Ailoaei Cristina
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
old building -
still christmas lights
in a window
Israel López Balan
(Mexico)
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
homestead window . . .
handprints
from a childhood ago
Bill Pauly
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
the setting moon
through bare branches
to my pillow
jill
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
breakfast alone
the kitchen window fills
with half the moon
polona
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
junk shop--
an old window
catches my eye
aom (tim)
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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little winter moon
wet nose prints
on the window
Angie Werren
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
a tiny cellphone
in her pocket
window to the world
doris kasson
(0,3,0) = 6 pts
**"iPhone" would have been better, but I like the thought.
night walls--
docking on my window
a sailboat moon
Alegria Imperial
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
winter dusk
slowly vanishes
the window
Vishnu P Kapoor
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
grandma's window-
an apple falls not far
from the tree
Rita Odeh
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
sleepless night
the south window frames
the rising moon
Audrey Downey
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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full moon's
bright light
wakes me
Jane DeJonghe
(1,1,0) = 5 pts
New year
A new window
On the world
Angelika Kolompar
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
window view...
the reflection of myself
in empty streets
Dejan Pavlinovic
(Croatia)
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
a moth comes
to the window -
fireworks
Laura Csilla
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
merging . . .
his last breath drifts
out the window
Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
a window full
of December sun --
the baby's room
Michael McClintock
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
Christmas in Texas--
though my window
big flakes of snow
Bre Roberts
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
ice-thick window --
the wobbling world
beyond
Gene Doty
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
an open window
she picks up the phone
to call him
Anne Curran
(Hamilton
New Zealand)
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
cottage window
one original pane
of wonky glass
Elaine RIddell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**In so few words a picture is painted - I can see that cottage and its old pane of glass.
^^ This was a nineteenth century building from the days when they were not able to make glass with an even thickness, so the view through the pane was slightly distorted.
**My old farmhouse is almost 100 years old, and everything in it is wonky, including me!:)
picture window
he watches their argument
turn into a fight
Edward
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
freezing cold ...
the new moon hides
between the flower pots
Tore Sverredal
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
dirty windows
the Northern Lights
do not mind
Nahum
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
**Lovely. I would not mind too.
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4 Points
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waiting room
looking out through
rain-streaked windows
Cara Holman
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
last raindrops -
a barefoot child skips
through clouds
Sandi Pray
(Robbinsville, NC
USA)
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
the dogs tell me
what the window can't
- out and back in
- ru
(Canada)
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
on the deathbed -
the hospital window
frames the twilight
Cezar F. Ciobîcă
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
ice storm
through the window
her voice
martin gottlieb cohen
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
fractured light--
sunrise breaks through
hexagrams of ice
Doris Lynch
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
**A very strong image.
green Christmas
making a snowman
in the fogged window
Alexander B. Joy
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
beyond my window a window to the unknown
dietmar tauchner
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
beneath my window-
children wanting a carrot
for his nose
Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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midnight rendezvous
my pebble cannot reach
her top floor window
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
lilacs wafting
through open windows
purple light
Angela Terry
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
picture windows
every moving scene
a masterpiece
Karin Anderson
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**It wasn’t until moving to this house in Maine that I understood why they are called ’picture windows’, so this haiku is especially appealing.
sun beaming
through the rear window
a fresh start
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
a swollen dampness
sticking windows and doors–
things I can't forget
Adelaide B. Shaw
(Millbrook, NY
USA)
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
winter window --
my eyes wake up
to the foggy sky
Ramesh Anand
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
I write my name
on the foggy window...
cold spell
Tom Conally
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
window-seat flight
under a midnight sun
the tundra
Ellen Compton
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
sunshine
through stained glass windows
his loss of faith
Beth Powell
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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sun on my shoulder
picture window
filled with yesterdays
Donna Bauerly
(Dubuque, IA)
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
pain refracted
pane reflecting
window of my soul
Tanja Cilia
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
Through the window
Watching my wife working
She must be cold –
Bernhard Kopf
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
rain ——
the poor woman's wish
a window
Svend A. Doggfall
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the church warden
closes the wooden window --
Sunday downpour
~ James Bundi
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
grandmas ex libris
an open book
by an open window
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
in from the storm
steam from the stew
fogs the window
DeVar
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
see my orchids?
in the window? pink blotches?
Google Street View
Maxianne
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
winter light
in other peoples' windows...
chapter two
Kat Creighton
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
window
echos
all her love tips
purush-guntur
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
bedridden
opening the curtain
my mother smiles
Bill Hudson
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
**A poignant image. Reminds me of my mother too.
occupied
my windows -
angry trojan
Juhani Tikkanen
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
new year’s eve --
dust on the old window
glints in the sun
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
crunchy snow
outside my window
blue tits are chirping
Irena Szewczyk
(Poland)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
distant thunder;
the arc of a raindrop on
the windowpane !
manoj saranathan
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
open window
the sweetness of spring wind
rustles my loneliness
Dawn Apanius
(Ohio, USA)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
cold when he leaves
the hall window
my son installs
LeRoy Gorman
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
harvest moon with
falling leaves in the window...
no longer alone
Seby Lucacs
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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One Point
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an open window
upon a challenging world ...
light in the tunnel
Keith A. Simmonds
(T & T)
januarys night window
a robin sleeps
the summer under the wing
Oddbjørn Aardalen
Sirius rising
the sound as pebbles
pepper my windowpane
Michele L. Harvey
behind the window
a six pack drinks
her dream
Ralf Bröker
a whistled tune
from your window--
interrupted
Ginny Hoyle
from up here
I can see where streets meet
What comes next?
Marylouise Knight
moment of delight
pigeon at the window-ledge
iridescent black
Deirdre Godwin
window of illusion stone buddha does not speak nirvana within
D W Skrivseth
sun
shines through the netted
window too
Nadalsuren Purevdorj
(Ulaanbaatar Mongolia)
framed by the window
a landscape of
my neighbor's junk
--Peter Newton
a shadow lingers
on frosted glass -
too many ghost stories.
dsnake1
route home
the windows no longer lit
by tannenbaume
Jennifer Savage
through our window
lights and
a hallowing rain
carol pearce-worthington
montains
behind tall buildings-
a Windows
María Santomauro
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You For Sharing Your Haiku
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the candle flame
twisted by rippled glass
still gives light
Tony Nasuta
(Timonium, MD)
posed in my window
the moon close to jupiter
says cheese and smiles
dragonfly
illness gone -
at the window her bright eyes
forsythia-lit
John McDonald
(Edinburgh Scotland)
From the bus window:
"Chateaubriand Special tonight."
That's where I should eat.
Horst Ludwig
sun from the window
fluroscent light from the wall--
dusky face
--R K Singh
fresh air slips in
between window slats
the yellow dust
Ernesto P. Santiago
(The Philippines)
painter's dream to fill
the blind windows of the church
with angels' eyes
STOPS
(ROMANIA)
the slain kids
an opportunity for
urgent reform
Barbara A Taylor
(Mountain Top NSW
Australia)
dog chasing its tail --
taunted by the rabbit
just outside the window
mechaieh
(Nashville, TN)
my youth...
the destiny is seen
through a big window
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
(Tsetserleg city, Mongolia)
rain drumming blues
behind hospital windows
bedridden world
natalia kuznetsova
window
tear running down her cheek
to her heart
Anonymous
the spider balanced
between pane and storm
heeds both ways
Anonymous
shadow theater -
at young neighbour window
light went out
Krzysztof Kokot PL
Dark window
the house is silent
bright full moon.
Trevor Camp
sculpy gator
swims through my desk
her furrowed brow
assu
(Tuscaloosa, AL)
near the window
grows a birch -
rustle of leaves
Miorita
bustling city
still, this Hansel-Gretel woods
outside my window
Peggy Heinrich
Every window
Has
Every life
Tatsuya Onai
sparkling air
from my kitchen window --
frozen fog
Ruth Powell
cityscape at night:
glistening crosswords
of shadows and light
-- Chitra Rajappa
gazing out the window
watching the snow
ideas accumulate
Mr PC
(Maryland)
other New Years . . .
the abandoned home's windows
wear ferns of frost
Catherine J.S. Lee
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General Comments:
**Boy! The Kukai just gets bigger and bigger ……………
** So many good haiku, only 6 votes. sigh
**Very difficult. So many nuanced options to consider. Lovely stuff.
**Some really good ones in this batch. Thanks again.
** Wishing everyone at Shiki Kukai a happy, healthy, prosperous, and creative New Year.
**Thanks again for yet another chance to be read, be voted on and do the same for other poets' haiku!
** I see this could get addictive. But in a good way. Great learning experience.
**Thank you for your time, and for setting up another exciting kukai!
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