Congratulations to *** Aalix Roake & Eduard TARA ***, winners of our Kigo section and to *** Vinay Leo R. ***, winner of our Free Format section!
VOTER'S comments are indicated by "**" below the respective poems.
Kigo Theme:
Morning Cold/Morning Chill
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First Place - 24 Points
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morning chill -
the dog curls
into a perfect circle
Aalix Roake
(2,6,6) = 24 pts
AND
morning chill –
the hole in the pocket
seems bigger
Eduard TARA
(1,3,15) = 24 pts
**can imagine the fingers in the pocket very well. loved this ku. thanks.
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Second Place - 23 Points
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frozen dawn
the sound of
nothing
Sandi Pray
USA
(2,4,9) = 23 pts
AND
a white hair
in my eyebrow...
morning chill
polona
(0,8,7) = 23 pts
**I love the vivid contrast/connection between the body and nature. Simple in the best way, and full of feeling.
**i feel this has a few layers, the white on the hair opens them up. thought provoking. i mulled over this a while. beautiful.
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Third Place - 20 Points
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morning chill
the rough edges
of my breath
Alan S. Bridges
(1,5,7) = 20 pts
**Similar to other entries involving breath clouds, this one has immediacy.
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19 Points
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morning chill ...
yesterday's leaf clings
to the rake
Jayashree Maniyil
Australia
(1,3,10) = 19 pts
**I initially resisted "yesterday's leaf" as too poetical, but I was won over by the truth and resonance of the image.
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16 Points
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a V of geese
at the vanishing point
morning chill
Tom Painting
(1,2,9) = 16 pts
morning chill-
the chimney smoke
curls back into itself
sanjuktaa
(0,5,6) = 16 pts
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15 Points
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morning chill -
the other side of the bed
empty
Israel López Balan
(1,2,8) = 15 pts
**This is most effective I think, if we take the chill literally before turning to the metaphorical implications. Then lines 1-2 deepen the chill.
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14 Points
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pine needles
blanket my path...
morning chill
Pat
(0,2,10) = 14 pts
**"blanket" suggests that the beauty of the scene may take some of the chill out of the chill. Placing the "chill" last is an effective choice.
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13 Points
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the cat gets a kiss
before I do --
morning chill
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(1,2,6) = 13 pts
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12 Points
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hitching a ride
I stretch my thumb
into the morning chill
Harvey Jenkins
(2,1,4) = 12 pts
chill of this morning
his first anniversary
of being widower
Gabriel Sawicki
(0,4,4) = 12 pts
morning chill –
a sparrow pecking sunbeams
on the window sill
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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I wear his scent
while wearing his sweater
morning chill
maxianne
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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morning icicles
her body warms
my fingers
Collin Barber
(1,0,7) = 10 pts
**Makes one curious to know what "she" has to say about this.
morning chill--
the seed gatherers
talk in whispers
Bill Pauly
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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morning chill -
at the bus-stop
red faces
John McDonald Edinburgh Scotland
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
morning chill
she wraps both hands
around the coffee mug
Edward
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
morning chill
I tell her I didn't mean
the things I meant
Bill Kenney
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
morning chill...
the sun rises on
a basket of fish
Raamesh Gowri Raghavan
(Mumbai)
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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morning chill
even wearing gloves
they text
Paul Hodder
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
the chill
of the morning after . . .
once we were innocent
Ron C. Moss
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
morning glory —
a blue sky
shivers awake
Vinay Leo R.
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
morning cold
the dog sets the pace
on our way home
Marleen Hulst
-The Netherlands
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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morning chill
on the desert beach a heart
made of stones
Ludmila Balabanova
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
morning chill
the maple's sudden
lack of leaves
Bryan Rickert
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
stars
falling through clouds-
hoarfrost
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg city, Mongolia
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
morning chill
even the red leaves
huddled together
Barbara Campitelli
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
morning chill
still inside the cupboard
a winter mouse
Barbara Snow
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
frosted panes --
lighting the wood stove
at daybreak
Ruth Powell
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
**This paints such a clear and lovely scene for the (shivering) reader.
cold morning-
a stray puppy in front of
the hot dog shop
Ailoaei Cristina
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
cold morning --
the hawk's scream circles
around every tree
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
USA
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
chill morning
the street sleepers
covered in mist
Ramesh Anand
Bangalore, India.
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
morning chill--
the toast butter
refuses to spread
aom (tim)
(0,0,7) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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a ray of sunshine
stumbling upon the panes...
morning chill
Keith A. Simmonds
T & T
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
morning chill--
a baby mallard swims
in its mother's wake
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh,India
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
**"baby mallard" felt wrong at first, but it's perfectly appropriate. A quiet and subtle poem: the chill is felt and, in a way, welcomed in the light of the appealing image.
mug of tea
taking the chill off
the dawn
Ellen Compton
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
**i prefer coffee myself, but this i could relate to.
morning chill –
the cat brings home
a dead mouse
Tomislav
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
dawn rush hour --
the smell of snow
fallen far away
Michael McClintock
(0,3,0) = 6 pts
unsparing cold -
today's newspaper
in the morning fire
Ajaya Mahala
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
the farmer
hugs the calf
morning chill
Kala Ramesh
Pune, India
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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morning cold dead leaves cross the sidewalk
martin gottlieb cohen
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
cold morning -
crouched among pumpkins
the scarecrow
Cezar Florin Ciobîcă
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
morning chill –
my breath fogs
the car window
-Anitha Varma
Kerala, India
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
morning chill
I walk in on my child
cutting himself
John McManus
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
chilly morning
blue mountains
on a sea of mist
Elaine Riddell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
folded garden chairs
together,
morning chill
ogi
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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Morning chill
Ready for the wedding cake
sugar roses
Steliana Cristina Voicu
Ploiesti, Romania
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
morning chill
the autumncoloured melancholy
in the brooks voice
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
morning chill
of your pillow next to mine-
first hoarfrost
Lavana Kray
Romania
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
December morning
the kitten gives me
an eskimo kiss
Terri L. French
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
** I’m not a cat person (even in haiku) but this haiku is light, simple, unselfconscious and perfect - like a kitten ;-).
morning chill-
one more kiss
before we part
--Kashinath Karmakar
India
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
early morning chill
heading north, lines of pelicans
. . . and more . . . and more
Peggy Heinrich
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
morning chill--
her face grows
more wrinkles
--R.K.Singh,
Dhanbad, India
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
you whisper
through a cobweb—
morning chill
Darrell Lindsey
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
deciduous trees
wearing crows instead of leaves
early morning chill
Deirdre Godwin
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
our song transposed
into a minor key...
morning chill
Angela Terry
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
waiting for the results
morning chill
Autumn Moon
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
chill—
our shadows feeding
on the silence
Alegria Imperial
Canada
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
dark of the morning-
he covers her cold shoulder
with kisses
Leslie Montgomery
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
morning chill the cry of a screech owl
h gene murtha
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
in the streets
the scent of fresh baked bread—
morning chill
John Daleiden
Phoenix, Arizona
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
breath against
the fading stars
morning chill
Ann K. Schwader
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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cold morning winds howl
turn up the collar for warmth
these frozen streets moan
todd eddy
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
cold dawn --
ice flowers glowing
on my window
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
Belgium
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
morning cold
slow cooking oatmeal
brings old comforts
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
morning chill –
stubs of red and yellow
in the crayon box
Paresh Tiwari
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
morning chill ...
once again late
for the school bus
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
raw first light sparkling coyote tooth piercing a barbed wire fence
krw
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
morning chill —
the warmth of my blanket
and dreams
Gautam Nadkarni
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
morning chill
leaves
like butterflies
carol pearce-worthington
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
morning chill--
I walk barefooted
on star grass
~ Johnathan cobo
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
morning chill --
I pull my blanket
up to my head
~ Brian ambaisi
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
sleeping in ...
nothing to lose
but the morning chill
Kat Creighton
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
chilly morning --
a noisy cock crows
on and on
~ Dennis shakava
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
hands too stiff
to swipe the bus card
morning cold
Diane Mayr
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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freezing
I go out without a coat
the morning paper
Tom Conally
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
breathing in
the morning cold
glass fibers
Petya Gleridis
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
frosty dawn
the kitten with a dead mouse
.......moping
--Kirsty Karkow
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
sun strikes
the swaying spider ball
legs spring out!
assu
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the cat and flowers
inherited from my neighbor --
morning cold
Dorota Pyra
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
cold morning
she arranges her plush toys
as her dream fades
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
morning cold
clouds of dog's breath hang
in midair
Laurene
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
shivering --
the first raindrop
hits my neck
~ collins omuganda
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
frost on the tent
crackle of campfire
first cup of coffee
jill
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
pen between fingers -
steamy breath fogs up the air
on this morning cold
Daniela Bullas
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
morning chill --
a mushroom seller
smiles in her hoody
Ken Sawitri
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
chilly morning-
his head burrows deep into
the baby sling
Angelee Deodhar
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
morning chill
pulling wood
from the top of the pile
Beth Powell
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
cancer...
frost curls the leaves
in a way falling didn't
j cully
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
our oatmeal
from a wooden spoon--
frost on the window
DeVar
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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morning chillness
my woolen blanket
hugs me in warmth
Purush
nashville[TN]USA
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
on the fallen leaves
last night’s frost sparkles
autumn morning
RD McManes
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
cinnamon toast
sprinkled with white sugar—
chill autumn dawn
Ignatius Fay
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
November morning.
Where did she get that trendy
pale-gray Kashmir shawl?
Horst Ludwig
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
autumn morning
on the windowsill
last of the basil
D. W. Skrivseth
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning cold-
the little camel reaches for
mom's neck
Rita Odeh
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning cold
a thick icicle droops
from the garden tap
Barbara A. Taylor
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
winter chill --
the predawn chirrups
are frozen
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad, India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning workout---
a gust of cold wind
hits my face
~ Catherine Njeri Maina
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning frost
the miniature dachshund
dances to pee
Doris Lynch
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
autumn sunrise
the chill that reaches
goose bump heights
Karin Anderson
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
trapped by the dog
beneath heavy blankets
sleeping in
Mark A. Fisher
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning alarm
she kisses away
the chill
Ralf Bröker
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Cold bedroom
early morning stretch,
winter moon.
Trevor Camp
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
Morning chill
the timid glows from
two outdoor smokers
Starbear
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
barefoot on the deck
filling the raccoon-emptied
brrrrrird bath
Donna Bauerly
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
he gathers kindling
shards by the chopping block
cold mornings loom
gourdman
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
frosty roses
I begin to knit
a green poncho
Radka Mindova
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning cold
over my hot tub
the white elfs
Inez Goma
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning chill
steam rising
from Chinese buns
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning cold:
a waddling bumblebee
on the roadside
1jungman
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning chill
news from the philippines
of typhoon haiyan
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning chill
the sound of silence
on the school premises
quamrul hassan
dhaka, bangladesh
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
morning chill...
my hang over grin meets
her frozen smile
S. E. Buffington
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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The morning silence
crushed by my bootsteps etching
hollows in the drifts.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
alarm beeps
there is snow on the ground-
where am I
Casey
morning chill -
the fire engine kid's toy
no more option
GH.POSTELNICU.sTOPs
ROMANIA
morning mist --
goose bumps on my arm
grow bigger
~ Patrick Wafula (Kenya)
down the chimney
flames shiver and dance for warmth
a gust of morning chill
Bernard Gieske
the morning chill
sneaks under her coat
she pulls me closer
Bill Hudson
awakening
with chilly silence about
autumn morning
natalia kuznetsova
sunrise drunks
waxwings on frozen berries
bohemians indeed
Jon Espen Vassbotn
Morning chilled quilt
came to warm itself up
with my toes!
Juhani Tikkanen
dawn chill on Enceladus
base station at 85K
sunrise through the ice ring
—F.J. Bergmann
no joy, no warmth
in the mornings--
November
James Dobson
morning cold
dwindles the warmth
even of her memory
Vishnu P Kapoor
morning chill . . .
hanging on tree branches
corpses of flood victims
Christine L. Villa
USA
morning chill
from behind the fireplace
his statement
Irena Szewczyk
morning chill
the fog disappearing
grown iris by a gate
Neelam Dadhwal
morning cold
morning chill
the relief of Hot Springs
Raffael de Gruttola
frosted cars---
I dig out my
old wooly bathrobe
Marylouise Knight
trees tired already in the sun’s zero birds muzzling morning cold
Bill Gottlieb
the cat’s drinking bowl
a morning cold
ensō
helge t.
Samhain* morning
crisp and chill
soothing earth to sleep
Frances O'Keeffe
*samhain is the Irish word for November; the 1st of November is traditionally the beginning of the Celtic New Year – the earth ‘hibernates’ till spring rejuvenation.
Mt. Sureanu -
the morning chill
shivering me
Miorita
freezing morning
the Chevy roars and coughs
as I stamp my feet
mechaieh
morning chill--
the snowmobiles
came in the night
D. Scott Watson
chill dawn’s light
through autumn leaves
this golden day
soji
morning chills-
by the time I know it
my hands freeze
Ernesto P. Santiago
Solano, Philippines
frog gone
sunrise pulls
on the pond’s first ice
LeRoy Gorman
we dress in silence
last night's angry words still fresh
morning chill
April Serock
first step outside...
suddenly the wind is
aware of me only
Dejan Pavlinovic
Pula, Croatia
chilly morning
lingering in bed
nestled by cat and human snores
Deanna Tiefenthal
such warm feelings
touched by snowflakes for the first time...
a cold morning
--gillena cox
Trinidad and Tobago
forgetting
to close the window--
morning chill
Chandra Bales
bright morning sun
yet damp laundry
freezes instantly
Jane DeJonghe
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General Comments:
**Gosh, this wasn't easy.
**Thank you. It is a great pleasure to go through lovely haiku by poets across the continents.
**Just looking at the incredible numbers!
this kukai has grown by 50% since I started ..
many thanks to our awesome organizers …
**Some really outstanding haiku in this kukai. Thanks again for this opportunity to read and vote on them.
**Voting is very difficult; this series offers many superior "chills".
**How nice it would be to roll in the ice...it's 35C inside my house today...too hot to move! Thanks for your time and the opportunity.
**Still warm here in AZ although the night are beautifully cool.
Free Format Theme:
Puddle
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First Place - 56 Points
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ink puddle —
the words that
never were
Vinay Leo R.
(4,16,12) = 56 pts
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Second Place - 28 Points
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this puddle
what my paper boat knows
of the sea
sanjuktaa
(4,3,10) = 28 pts
**"my" weakens this for me; "a" or "the" would work better, to my ear.
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Third Place - 27 Points
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alley puddle –
a paper boat glides
over the stars
Paresh Tiwari
(0,7,13) = 27 pts
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23 Points
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rain puddle —
I step into a piece
of sky
Gautam Nadkarni
(2,4,9) = 23 pts
rain puddles...
what I choose
to ignore
Michele L. Harvey
USA
(1,4,12) = 23 pts
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21 Points
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tipsy night-
chasing the moon
puddle after puddle
--- Kashinath Karmakar
India
(1,3,12) = 21 pts
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18 Points
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jogging...
from puddle to puddle
the moon
Tomislav
(3,2,5) = 18 pts
**Too many good ones and too little points! I had shortlisted 14 , but had only these 6 points to give.
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15 Points
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ill again...
a crust of ice
on every puddle
polona
(0,4,7) = 15 pts
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14 Points
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mud puddle...
the toddler brings it
home with him
S.E. Buffington
(1,3,5) = 14 pts
** nostalgic. i was once that very toddler! thanks for this.
a new argument
yesterday's puddle
frozen again
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,3,8) = 14 pts
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13 Points
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in the puddle
a ghetto child's paper boat
sails for the moon
JOHN McDONALD EDINBURGH SCOTLAND
(1,2,6) = 13 pts
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11 Points
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jumping
from cloud to cloud
little rain boots
Dejan Pavlinovic
Pula, Croatia
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
sunlit puddle
have I already begun
to disappear too?
Collin Barber
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
after the rain –
quivering in a puddle
the evening star
Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
roadside puddle--
watching myself
walk past
Arvinder Kaur
Chandigarh,India
(0,1,9) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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night showers --
jacaranda petals
float in a puddle
~ Catherine Njeri Maina
(1,1,5) = 10 pts
crescent moon –
a lost earring
in a puddle
Eduard TARA
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
**Wonderful, beautiful, original image: Bravo! However, I think a different line order would have had more mystery and impact: in a puddle / a lost earring / crescent moon
the funeral procession
stops again -
clouds in a puddle
Israel López Balan
(0,0,10) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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puddles
many isolated moons
together on road
Vishnu P Kapoor
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
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7 Points
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jumping fish
surpassing the moon
in water
Undring
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
splashing in a puddle
filled with the sky
a chickadee
Angela Terry
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
a doll in a puddle
behind the house for rent --
waist-deep weeds
Michael McClintock
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
three children
playing in a rain puddle -
a quorum
Aalix Roake
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
sudden showers
the playground dissolves
into puddles of laughter
-- Nandini Nair, India
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
late autumn...
the little puddle
freezes first
Tuvshinzaya Nergui
Tsetserleg city, Mongolia
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
new boots
cracking the ice
on each puddle
Ruth Powell
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
puddle reflection
wondering what %
of me is water
Bill Pauly
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
on the puddle the city lights shiver
dsnake1
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
**with some slight editing this would be perfect
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6 Points
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windy morning
waving buildings
under my feet
ogi
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
our curious cat
staring into a puddle...
unknown depths
natalia kuznetsova
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
last night's dream in the puddle this leaf
Angie Werren
Amelia, Ohio
USA
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
**Nicely befuddles the reader's assurance about where dream ends and waking reality begins. There's not space enough to analyze the rhythmic complexity, but it should be mentioned.
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5 Points
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Jack Frost's icy breath
works its crystal handiwork -
puddles into glass.
Robert C. Howard
Belleville IL
(1,1,0) = 5 pts
in a puddle
the lazy ripples
of a cold breeze
Keith A. Simmonds
T & T
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
warm puddle
the puppy's tail pokes out
from under the bed
Laurene
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
in the puddle
a sepia masterpiece
shimmers
Barbara A. Taylor
Mountain Top, NSW
Australia
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
** i imagine the moon's reflection on a wet night. quite nice.
puddle—
a homeless man stomping
on bits of sky
Alegria Imperial,
Canada
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
Sunday rain. . .
the kids eat pancakes
puddled in syrup
Terri L. French
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
the puddle
finds its own level
my grief
Paul Hodder
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
**"grief" is a long way from "puddle." Adding an "ing" to "find" in line 2 would shorten the distance.
after the storm
a piece of sky floats
in the puddle
Marylouise Knight
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
peering into
a puddle-
a puppy wags her tail
Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
a rosary of suns
the holes in chapel road
after the rain
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
filigrees of ice
edge the puddle
autumn dusk
Tom Painting
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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deep puddle --
a white duck splashes
water on me
~ Dennis shakava
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
wild cry-
a deer wading through
rain puddles
Rita Odeh
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
October rain
this puddle full
of angels' tears
Barbara Camppitelli
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
after the rain -
discovered in the sky
a hole in the shoe
Norsto
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
rain puddles —
a flurry of butterflies
settle between us
Jayashree Maniyil
Australia
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
shallow puddles --
lifting my trousers
as I jump
~ James Bundi
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
shadows
bathe
in mud puddles
Bill Gottlieb
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
dawn
ice on the puddle
already broken
Beth Powell
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**The poet's first glimpse reveals that someone or something has been there before. Captures the sense of dawn's mysteries.
from a curb
I watch their reflection --
moving clouds
Peggy Heinrich
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
autumn wind
my face frozen
in a puddle
Sandi Pray
USA
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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Earth a blue speck
reflected in liquid methane
thinking of home
—F.J. Bergmann
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
trudging through puddles
burdened by a heavy heart
tears muddy the path
todd eddy
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
hint of rainbow
in a mere puddle..
a rural road
--gillena cox
Trinidad and Tobago
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
his new boots
don’t miss a puddle
wet Thanksgiving
Ignatius Fay
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
cold rain-
a wet foot is
sinking
Casey
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
** funny way to put it. not sure if the "is" is even necessary.
November romance -
passing through the puddles
two strangers
Steliana Cristina Voicu
Ploiesti, Romania
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
fingerprints
of last rain -
no two puddles match
Ajaya Mahala
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
after the rain --
an old man fills a jar
from a puddle
~ Isabelle Prondzynski
Kenya
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
without a trace
her footsteps through
driveway puddles
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
duck and toddler
united in
puddle love
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
evening wind -
a puddle adorned
by leaves
Miorita
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
face down in the puddle a squirrel
h gene murtha
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
November sun
warms frozen birdbath--
a sparrow splashes
jill
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
harvest moon
tonight’s reflection
in yesterday's puddle
RD McManes
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
**I like the interaction of "harvest," "tonight's," and "yesterday's." There's something willed about this one; the author is just at the edge of the frame.
A sparrow sipping
three times from the gray puddle —
then looking at it
Horst Ludwig
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
looking at stars
I step in a puddle
another spring
Bill Kenney
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
puddle splash
he beats my story
with a bigger one
Christine L. Villa, USA
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
a night
by itself a puddle has
the moon
Neelam Dadhwal
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
deep
in the puddle
my mother's face
Chandra Bales
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
on this puddle
the ice too thick to break--
morning recess
DeVar
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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Everything froze,
before winter
embraced us!
- Shakib Hasan
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
pool of sweet water
etches the ancient rock
century by century
Doris
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
rain at sundown-
a puddle of moonlight
under the banyan
Anitha Varma
Kerala, India.
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
transient ice film
traps scarlet leaves
in a puddle
gourdman
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
sun puddle
my pug's universe
collapses
Alan S. Bridges
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
raindrops
falling in a puddle
weather forecaster
Tom Conally
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
storm moon puddles at dawn
Pat
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
rainy afternoon
one of many puddles
holds a golden leaf
D. W. Skrivseth
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
puddle of ashes
just a wisp of smoke remains
after Guy Fawkes Day
Deirdre Godwin
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
sidewalk puddle veins of ice across the sky
martin gottlieb cohen
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
reflected
on the glass façade—
a puddle moon
John Daleiden
Phoenix, Arizona
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
starlit puddle
out there a billion puddles
reflecting us
Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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pumpkin diamond
in the puddle
arctic sunset
Petya Gleridis
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
spilled gasoline
rainbow fades
in the next puddle
Gabriel Sawicki
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
shots fired--
the mother and child
jump a puddle
Ron C. Moss
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
the puddle
torn at the edges
as tears rip away
Bernard Gieske
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
piddle-puddle
mother teaches all her dogs
to pee on command
--Kirsty Karkow
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
rhythm and blue-
the rainbow
from puddle to puddle
Lavana Kray
Romania
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
cold breeze
shivers in a burrow
weaver moon
Ramesh Anand
Bangalore, India
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
remember me?
I was the first child on the moon
in the puddle
Oddbjørn Aardalen
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
finished crying...
in the pool of my tears
I make shapes
Raamesh Gowri Raghavan
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
did you see
this carl-lewis-like jump?
the puddle nods
Ralf Bröker
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
drought
silt dust marks
the last of the puddles
Anonymous
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
I'm free again—
the horse's hooves crush
frozen puddles
Dorota Pyra
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
end of the rain
my child discovers
the after effect
Irena Szewczyk
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
an airplane flies
through the puddle...
reflections
carol pearce-worthington
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
under the ficus
The Watchtower to sop
up the puddle
Diane Mayr
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
raindrops
form waves on a puddle --
Soweto dump site
~ felix
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points This Time, Sorry.
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puddle ahead
cockroaches
swarm in liasion
Purush
Nashville [TN]USA
crepuscular rays -
in the mirror of a puddle
sasanqua beckon
Daniela Bullas
genuine slalom
between the high way puddles -
flat frogs ... a lot
GH.POSTELNICU.sTOPs
ROMANIA
Capitol dome
mirrored in a Mall puddle
sparrows bathe
Barbara Snow
hopping
in the center of the puddle
she scolds him again
Bill Hudson
kindergarten class
a child mirrors
on his soup's puddle
Ken Sawitri
field of yellow grass
all watery from snow melt
roosting gulls
maxianne
Red Boots shouts
here's another one
brown water flies
assu
after a shower --
the kids see a patch of sky
in each puddle
Kumarendra Mallick
Hyderabad, India
my water breaks
into love puddles
her newborn cries
Karin Anderson
growing puddles
plane lands
the clouds
Jacek.K.
giggling toddlers
they stomp back and forth
in their first puddle
Edward
I lay my cloak
on the puddle--
my darling pauses...
James Dobson
Heavy autumn rains -
a young puddle flowing
towards the High Seas!
Juhani Tikkanen
puddle:
panic-eyed red fox pauses
just long enough…
krw
hot spring thermophiles
rainbow puddles
Mark A. Fisher
steady downpour:
a raindrop hops
from puddle to puddle
-- Chitra Rajappa
turquoise puddles filling dinosaur tracks
Autumn Moon
Backyard puddle
a green frog leaps in,
water noise
Trevor Camp
water crowns
rising from puddles -
the child in me
Anonymous
oily red puddle
beside the motorbike
a white poodle
olivia andersson
hospice wall-
in Escher's Puddle
water,sky,earth
Angelee Deodhar
holiday nostalgia
etching of ice lace
over a puddle
Anonymous
sparrows forsaking
the dust bath for freezing
puddle edges
donna Bauerly
red kettle
the dog curls back into
its puddle of fur
j cully
the girl praying
a Holy Mary ...
puddle on the floor
Anonymous
from somewhere
a drop joins the puddle
water! - - a lily!
1jungman
searching for a path
moonlight and flashlights
in the puddles
Robert Kania
a pool of rain
the dog lapping up
morsels of faraway mushrooms
mechaieh
frozen puddle -
a stray dog removes the blood
on the Orion's belt
Cezar Florin Ciobîcă
calm after the storm
shining expanses
of lakes and puddles
Elaine Riddell
dirty puddles-
missing classes
not an option
Ernesto P. Santiago
Solano, Philippines
puddle mud
a grandson’s land
before time
LeRoy Gorman
driving students
to the class
the teacher splashes thru' the puddles
quamrul hassan
dhaka, bangladesh
geometric
ice designs
form atop puddle
Jane DeJonghe
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General Comments:
**Many good haiku. It's getting harder and harder to give a vote.
**I found it hard for the first time to allocate my 6 votes, but finally found 6 haiku I really enjoyed. Thank you!
**Speaking generally, some of the poems that got my votes probably won't make the top of the list, and i deliberately left out a couple that will likely end there but with such quantity of accomplished poems i tried to go for the less obvious.
**I am glad to go through a large number of lovely haiku.
**Quite interesting the varied takes haijin-s wrote a haiku/senryu on the theme though a lot dwelt on the theme of "reflection (mirror)". Thanks again for this wonderful opportunity
**I would have gladly given each of these amazing haiku more points, but was constrained by
the total of six points.
**Many thanks again for this wonderful chance to read and vote on some excellent haiku and for my haiku to be read and voted on as well.
**Unfortunately, I haven't seen a puddle for months!!! Had to buy water to fill my house tank. Normally I depend on rainwater. First time had to do this in 25 years! Sadly, the spring veggies have wilted:( [From Australia]
**In Kenya, "puddle" is a kigo for the current season, the short rains. I expect quite a few haiku in this category!
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The Shiki Monthly Kukai Team