Congratulations to FRANCINE BANWARTH, winner of our Kigo section and to MANUELA DRAGOMIRESCU, winner of our Free Format section!
Kigo Theme
COMING OF SUMMER
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First Place - 36 Points
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coming of summer
a loon empties its call
into the lake
Francine Banwarth
(4,4,16) = 36 pts
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Second Place - 19 Points
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the coming of summer
insects at dusk
in full voice
Adelaide B. Shaw
(2,2,9) = 19 pts
the coming of summer
a boy drags a stick
along my fence
Garry Eaton
(0,5,9) = 19 pts
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Third Place – 16 Points
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apple blossoms float
on the koi pond...
coming of summer
Alan S. Bridges
(1,5,3) = 16 pts
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15 Points
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coming of summer
the full moon
through an open window.
Angela Terry
(1,4,4) = 15 pts
the coming of summer--
a child orders a wasp
out of her room
Jon Baldwin
(0,4,7) = 15 pts
**Amusing ;-)
**Love the imagery this conjures and the way it leads our thoughts into the unspoken mimicry of the adult ordering the child out to play.
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13 Points
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coming of summer
the wren
adjusts his tune
Michele L. Harvey
(0,2,9) = 13 pts
coming of summer
our neighbour decides
to speak to us again
Mike Montreui
(0,1,11) = 13 pts
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12 Points
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coming of summer --
an oriole leaves its song
in the wind
sanjuktaa
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
**Lovely.
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11 Points
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coming of summer
grandma casts a long shadow
with her walker
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,9) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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the coming of summer
his fingers trace the shape
of her tan line
Polona
(0,2,6) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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coming of summer--
a frog belly-flops
in the pond
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
a chicken pecking the sun
in a dew drop --
coming of summer
Virginia Popescu
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
**Love this image! But would like to see the 1st line end at the natural
pause after "chicken" and see a few syllables shed. By using "pecks" as the verb and switching to "summer has come", it would eliminate the double "ing", making the haiku smoother and more succinct.
**Great imagery. Moving "the sun" down to line 2 would improve the way this reads.
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8 Points
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the coming of summer
she jabbers about horse camp
at every meal
Edward
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
the coming of summer--
all the petals
i brushed off my hair
Alegria Imperial
(1,0,5) = 8 pts
**Beautiful.
coming of summer
the fire lookout scans
the high divide
Tom Painting
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
coming of summer
the old cat
in a new patch of sun
Bill Gottlieb
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
chalk marks
the coming
of summer
John Soules
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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The coming of summer
clouds spread open
magnifying the Sun
MARK LONERGAN
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
coming of summer
a lightness
in her step
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(1,0,4) = 7 pts
the coming of summer
wild roses
line the ditch
Christine Howard
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
coming of summer
the bird feeder
empty again
Stevie Strang
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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promising
the coming of summer--
bikini wax
Svetlana Marisova
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
the coming of summer
my sons asleep in the tent
on the back porch
Maxianne
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
drifting thoughts
and cottonwood fluff
summer has come
Ann K. Schwader
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
coming of summer --
a forget-me-not peaks
through the fence
Bruce H. Feingold, Ph.D.
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
**Very sweet.
fireflies stitching
the scarecrow's eyes --
coming of summer
Cezar F.
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
**Wonderful imagery.
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5 Points
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within the blossom
an apple is stirring...
the coming of summer
Cara Holman
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
The coming of summer --
walnut will cover
my window again
Petru Ioan Garda
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
coming of summer--
bunches of frog eggs
in the old pond
DeVar
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
coming of summer
fluttering of swallows
in the eaves
Frances O'Keeffe
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
riding our bikes home
at midnight --
the coming of summer
Ruth Powell
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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luna moth--
her pale green wings embrace
the coming of summer
Margaret Dornaus
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
the coming of summer
a baby bird takes
first flight
Agnes Eva Savich
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
boys on the wharf
poised to dive in--
the coming of summer
Beth Richards
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
**Love the anticipation this creates.
a mailbox full
of wedding invites
summer has come
Amicus
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
the coming of summer
the first brown spot
on the snow hare's back
---Jacek M.
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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familiar heartaches
the coming of Summer
in Rome
Alan Summers
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
feet cool in springs’ pond
await coming of summer
warm daydreams beyond
Keith Moser
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
the coming of summer --
the two top last may cherries
buzzed by hornets
Gh.POSTELNICU STOPS
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
at North Pole
glow in the snow--
the coming of summer
alex serban
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
the coming of summer --
smiling kids sharing the fly
of the same kite
Manuela Dragomirescu
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
coming of summer
an ant crosses the desk
martin gottlieb cohen
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
coming of summer --
his brother teaches him to spit
through his new tooth hole
Angèle Lux
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
coming of summer . . .
the heat-shimmered street sizzles
with cool rain
Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
coming of summer
the Bermuda grass
already going to seed
Bill Hudson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
the coming of summer --
she gave up just before
the lilacs bloomed
Johannes S. H. Bjerg
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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a migrant child
left behind in the village
summer has come
Darrell Lindsey
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the coming of summer
seagulls flock
the seashore
Maria Santomauro
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
summer has come --
the sun bleaches
cracked shells
mechaieh
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
sound of the wind
sweeping away blossom--
the coming of summer
Liz Rule
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
earlier now
my son and the sun
summer has come
Steve Mitchell
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
Tulips in summer
Tawdry burlesque dancing girls
Petals tossed aside
Pat Lammers
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
advent of summer
the flowering of Christmas
pohutukawa
Elaine Riddell
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
the garden punctured
with caladium tips --
the coming of summer
--gillena cox, T&T
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the coming of summer
human hives
under the linden trees
Vida (Tzetzka Ilieva)
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
coming of summer
thoughts of kite flying
—clogged catheter
if
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the coming of summer:
mangoes dominate
the dessert menu
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
Down in the park
drone of a lawnmower
Coming of Summer
Angelika Kolompar
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
coming of summer
a wandering star
vanishes
Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
shirt, tie, and pants
in a pile on the floor --
the coming of summer
Michael McClintock
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
coming of summer
an uninvited lizard
makes my home hers
- Shernaz Wadia
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
Lawnmower sharpened
dandelions in the lawn
summer has come.
Trevor Camp
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
a cry from the cuckoo
before dawn
the coming of summer
Carol Raisfeld
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the coming of summer
a new mother watches
the dawn
BILL KENNEY
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
coming of summer
his red sail billows
with laughter
Allison Millcock
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
the scent of lilacs
carried on the wing--
coming of summer
Marylouise Knight
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
a dusting of pollen
everywhere
the coming of summer
Deanna Tiefenthal
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
coming of summer
the turtle raft
piled high
Jennifer Corpe
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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One Point
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balloons of the party
explode without touch them --
the coming of summer
Israel López Balan
coming of summer-–
faithful traveling companion,
the moon
Patricia Lidia
coming of summer--
air a-quiver with rainbow streaks
dragonflies
Vishnu P Kapoor
a raging sea
with warm white waves:
coming of summer
Keith A. SIMMONDS
windblown ...
in the coming of summer
smoke rings
Don Baird
summer has come
the rabbits are longing for
carrot sounds
Oddbjørn Aardalen
two little girls
skipping down the street ...
summer has come
Anonymous
new slats in the fence
still unweathered . . .
the coming of summer
Michael Dylan Welch
first white nights
filled with lilac fragrance--
summer's coming
natalia kuznetsova
belly-laughter
by the pollywogs pond
summer has come
Svein Lie
the coming of summer
from my step rises
a butterfly
Bouwe
Many a caterpillar
make-havoc of leaves--
coming of summer
Vasile Moldovan
that glimpse of a swallow
this labyrinth of scents
the coming of summer
Jon Espen Vassbotn
coming of summer--
anticipation of bare toes
on wet sand
jill
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No points this time, sorry.
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Crack! Baseball
Under the lights
The coming of summer
James Sawers
the coming of summer
searching for swimming togs
at the back of the cupboard
Anne Curran
little mouse eating
blackberries on the vine...
the coming of summer
Tom Conally
summer
nears
his hand finds the baby's
kick
Anonymous
almost last seed
leaving the nest
coming of summer
Ashi
baby spiders herald
coming of summer
yellow beads in the sun
Emma Pageot
the moon
growing full since autumn
the coming of summer
Peleridis
first fireflies
rise from wilting iris
summer has come
Anonymous
refusals
and the fledgling finds its wings
coming of summer
Merrill Ann Gonzales
the coming of summer--
fig leaves emerge
from tender branches
James Dobson
the coming of summer
under cellar windows
a light green leaf
Ralf Bröker
season starts to green
growing right before our eyes
summer is coming
Deirdre Godwin
Early light,
unexpected memories
of summer come
Fr. Robert Pecotte
preparation for
the coming of summer...
honing the blades
Barbara A Taylor
The coming of summer --
last year's leaves
flying to freedom
Juhani Tikkanen
coming of summer
spiders hatching from buntings
toes from their shoes
Anonymous
noon ...
a butterfly lingers before
the coming of summer
Kat Creighton
the glimmer of water
through a pollen patch
coming of summer
--Peter Newton
still cold wind,
somehow pleasant –
coming of summer
Tomislav
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General Comments:
**It's really getting harder to vote with a great number of good haiku in each batch! But I chose these because they appealed to me and/or resonate with a truth.
**Too many beautiful haiku, it was a pity I had only 6 points available to share.
**As usual it was very hard to pick from these very inspirational haiku.
**There were far too many great haiku from which to choose. I think we must all be ready for summer!
And Now the Free Format Results
Free Format Theme:
[STORM(S)]
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First Place - 28 Points
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after the storm --
the old dry well
full of stars
Manuela Dragomirescu
(1,5,15) = 28 pts
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Second Place - 27 Points
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thunder ~
my daughter's
whisper
Paul Hodder
(2,7,7) = 27 pts
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Third Place – 21 Points
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a lone voice
between thunderclaps
calling her cat
Ruth Powell
(1,3,12) = 21 pts
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20 Points
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wildflowers in the storm getting wilder
Francine Banwarth
(0,7,6) = 20 pts
**A very good use of the single line technique with the double entendre.
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16 Points
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storm warning
the wind chimes
on every note
Tom Painting
(1,0,13) = 16 pts
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13 Points
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summer storm
the kite runner moves
in all directions
Bouwe
(2,1,5) = 13 pts
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12 Points
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thunderhead--
the heart of the flower
deepening pink
Liz Rule
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
monsoon season . . .
another bridge
left uncrossed
Margaret Dornaus
(0,1,10) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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thunder
a child whimpers
in her sleep
Agnes Eva Savich
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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Storm winds
Blow day
Into night
James Sawers
(2,1,2) = 10 pts
Approaching storm:
the toy boat bobs
on thunderheads
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
**In a very understated way, this piece gives a sense of how powerful storms can be - boats, like toys, can be tossed around when nature unleashes her forces.
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9 Points
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after the storm –-
between the wooden crosses
torn violets
Patricia Lidia
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
**Very poignant.
noting every
rhythmic raindrop
my tin roof
Amicus
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
he tells us
the storm is over
chick-a-dee-dee-dee
Beth Powell
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
the silence
between us...
brewing storm
Cara Holman
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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cloudburst -–
a hummingbird zips
with the lightning
Don Baird
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
cloudburst
the blur of brake lights
on the motorway
Polona
(0,0,8) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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fierce wind --
never again the old tree
will hold up the sky
Angèle Lux
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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our umbrella
in the neighbor's pool
sudden storm
Stevie Strang
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
after the storm
the garden swing covered
in cherry petals
---Jacek M.
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
summer storm -
burst of lightning through
the blind slats
Tomislav
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
summer squall --
his face softens
after the pain
Michele L. Harvey
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
a shaky hand--
more than a storm
in my teacup
James Dobson
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
the storm passes...
the transparency inside
a raindrop
Bruce H. Feingold, Ph.D.
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
thunder-storm --
in her blue eyes
a lightning
Virginia Popescu
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
storm brewing
the groom's side
keeps growing
Roberta Beary
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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upcoming storm
every break in the wind
breaks the conversation
Vida (Tzetzka Ilieva)
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
two geese honk
before crossing the road ...
gathering storm
Ted van Zutphen
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
thunder and lightning--
another cup of coffee
at the diner
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
snowstorm
a half knitted sweater
on her sick bed
John McManus
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
fast moving storm --
my lawn furniture in the
neighbors yard
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
**An amusing slant, on a less than amusing situation. This would read better if "in the" was moved down to the third line.
thunderstorm--
my fearless dog retreats,
tail between his legs
natalia kuznetsova
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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navigating through
a storm in a teacup--
the blue screen of death
Svetlana Marisova
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
spring storm --
I ditch
the nicotine patch
Johannes S. H. Bjerg
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
summer squall--
the muted lines
of the horizon
Kat Creighton
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
after the storm--
even cherry blossom petals
carry the scent of lilac
jill
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
afternoon storm
a fork of lightning
shimmers the wheat
Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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rains of sparks
from the anvil master's forge
sturm und drang
Garry Eaton
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
Two stray dogs
sharing only one bone--
storm in a tea-cup
Vasile Moldovan
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
high winds
and driving rain
my daughter's tantrum
Mike Montreuil
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
After the storm --
I walk on stilts
for not crush the snails
Petru-Ioan Garda
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**I love the picture painted in this haiku, the delightful use of language clearly shows the soft ground after the storm and the many snails adrift in it. I feel it tells us a lot about the writer's thoughtful outlook.
lighthouse weather
wide winged birds
over wild waves
Elaine Riddell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
wind storm
swaying white pines
stir the clouds
if
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
all the grays
in a winter sky...
light after the storm
Angela Terry
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
after thunder
the wait for lightning
could this be love?
Maxianne
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
thunderstorm--
my daughter's forehead
warm to the touch
Michael Dylan Welch
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
stormy morning
the new wind turbine
stands still
Ralf
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
a careless joke
and she's not laughing --
gathering clouds
Steve Mitchell
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
starlit storm
the wink of a one-eyed dog
as it sneezes
Alan Summers
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
**Love the imagery - very unique with a feeling of spring and the sense that the storm blows itself out very quickly.
thunder
the dog bolts
beneath the table
John Soules
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
after the thunder storm
a double rainbow brings back
the divine silence
Adina Enachescu
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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electric moment
tempest claws from clouds escape
even storms move on
Lorraine Marguertte Gasrel Black
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
blasting boulders
on mountain peaks
thunderstorms
Maria Santomauro
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
angry words last night
I remove each storm window
and feel the cool air
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
**I like the double meaning.
heading for shelter
in the darkness streaked with light
a time for stillness
Merrill Ann Gonzales
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
mid-sentence
our conversation zapped
by the storm
Barbara A Taylor
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
hurricane party
the wind teaches palms
a maenad dance
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
**I especially liked # 75 for the spirit of making the most of a bad
situation.
sudden squall
the fallen sparrow chirps
for it's mother
Carol Raisfeld
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
storm--
a kite flying escorted
by a galaxy of crows
Cezar F.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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State Highway 1
a flock of sheep huddle
against wind and rain
Anne Curran
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
hailstones
peppering the front yard...
the birds are hiding
Tom Conally
uprooted everything in its path
Alan S. Bridges
ominous black clouds
hover on the horizon
a storm lurking
Keith A. SIMMONDS
photo album
twisted by twister
lies on lawn
Anonymous
winter's first blizzard
he kicks at the snow
another lost dog bowl
Edward
winds lashing windows
between the gusts
one second of silence
Frances O'Keeffe
a tornado in my dream
nowhere to hide
I hide everywhere
Bill Gottlieb
fierce winds whirl
a washing machine
decorates a tree
Christine Howard
**A great "topsy turvy" depiction of the clash between the forces of technology and nature.
after the storm,
the rainbow tipped up
on a bed of hay
Constantin Stroe
Storm is coming...
the sun prolonged on the window
by a butterfly
Oprica Padeanu
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No points this time, sorry.
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sickened sky grown green
regurgitates homes and trees
leaves not what has been
Keith Moser
Japan quake freak aftershocks--
bloody Arabic storms,
WTC revenge
Gh.POSTELNICU STOPS
spring
the desert calm until the
august monsoon
Bill Hudson
window rattling--
storm's search for my candle
shaken with each thump
Vishnu P Kapoor
storm ends
...the rainfall supercooling
into glaze ice
Ramesh Anand
storm of his stroke
over --
a crutch earthing him
John McDonald
rafts multiply,
bobbing beside it --
the flooded ant-hill
Michael McClintock
winter gale, the
giant pie in the air
is a nun
Oddbjørn
It came swift
the unannounced storm
she took me with surprise
Ashi
sudden storm
seen and heard through glass
my Jade plant remains dry
Emma Pageot
tender drops
torn clouds
perpetuum jazzile
Peleridis
a sickle
in the sky
after the storm
gogatsu
after the storm
downbeat drops slowing
into backbeat
Jon Baldwin
my rose bowery
and its budding roses gone
with the storm
Alegria Imperial
thunderstorm
crouching behind the couch
with her kitty
Carolyn Coit Dancy
Wild west wind
curtains in the open window --
wringing wet.
Trevor Camp
the ground shudders
under storm loosened rocks
refugees riot
Allison Millcock
my ceiling fan
goes crazy in the heat wave
storm of haiku
Svein Lie
heavy rain
pelts against the house
a fearful music
Marylouise Knight
sudden rush of crows
across a Hallowe’en sky
storm warning issued
Deirdre Godwin
approaching storm
a few leaves turn grey
martin gottlieb cohen
broken jagged trees
random storm of nature
the wind shows no malice
Tony Nasuta
storm -–
mew soars on the sea
like a paper plane
Małgorzata Miksiewicz
growing up together,
north wind and east wind --
a storm
Juhani Tikkanen
storm wolfing down the sky --
fat little houses
apples to its eye
mechaieh
storm at dawn--
incorporating thunder
into Monday's dream
Jennifer Corpe
uncle's hat
in the appleblossom blizzard
hurricanes of laughter
Jon Espen Vassbotn
the squall
over the lawn
of pear blossoms
--Peter Newton
oatmeal porridge--
flakes of spring snow
dust the daffodils
DeVar
the calm after --
when the hailstorm
stops
sanjukta
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Thank you for participating in the May 2011 Kukai!
We will announce the June 2011 Call for Submissions on Monday, June 6th. See you then!
With much appreciation,
The Shiki Monthly Kukai Team
Free Format Theme:
STORM(S)
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First Place - 28 Points
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after the storm --
the old dry well
full of stars
Manuela Dragomirescu
(1,5,15) = 28 pts
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Second Place - 27 Points
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thunder ~
my daughter's
whisper
Paul Hodder
(2,7,7) = 27 pts
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Third Place – 21 Points
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a lone voice
between thunderclaps
calling her cat
Ruth Powell
(1,3,12) = 21 pts
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20 Points
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wildflowers in the storm getting wilder
Francine Banwarth
(0,7,6) = 20 pts
**A very good use of the single line technique with the double entendre.
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16 Points
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storm warning
the wind chimes
on every note
Tom Painting
(1,0,13) = 16 pts
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13 Points
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summer storm
the kite runner moves
in all directions
Bouwe
(2,1,5) = 13 pts
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12 Points
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thunderhead--
the heart of the flower
deepening pink
Liz Rule
(0,2,8) = 12 pts
monsoon season . . .
another bridge
left uncrossed
Margaret Dornaus
(0,1,10) = 12 pts
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11 Points
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thunder
a child whimpers
in her sleep
Agnes Eva Savich
(1,2,4) = 11 pts
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10 Points
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Storm winds
Blow day
Into night
James Sawers
(2,1,2) = 10 pts
Approaching storm:
the toy boat bobs
on thunderheads
-- Chitra Rajappa
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
**In a very understated way, this piece gives a sense of how powerful storms can be - boats, like toys, can be tossed around when nature unleashes her forces.
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9 Points
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after the storm –-
between the wooden crosses
torn violets
Patricia Lidia
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
**Very poignant.
noting every
rhythmic raindrop
my tin roof
Amicus
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
he tells us
the storm is over
chick-a-dee-dee-dee
Beth Powell
(0,3,3) = 9 pts
the silence
between us...
brewing storm
Cara Holman
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
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8 Points
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cloudburst -–
a hummingbird zips
with the lightning
Don Baird
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
cloudburst
the blur of brake lights
on the motorway
Polona
(0,0,8) = 8 pts
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7 Points
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fierce wind --
never again the old tree
will hold up the sky
Angèle Lux
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
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6 Points
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our umbrella
in the neighbor's pool
sudden storm
Stevie Strang
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
after the storm
the garden swing covered
in cherry petals
---Jacek M.
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
summer storm -
burst of lightning through
the blind slats
Tomislav
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
summer squall --
his face softens
after the pain
Michele L. Harvey
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
a shaky hand--
more than a storm
in my teacup
James Dobson
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
the storm passes...
the transparency inside
a raindrop
Bruce H. Feingold, Ph.D.
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
thunder-storm --
in her blue eyes
a lightning
Virginia Popescu
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
storm brewing
the groom's side
keeps growing
Roberta Beary
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
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5 Points
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upcoming storm
every break in the wind
breaks the conversation
Vida (Tzetzka Ilieva)
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
two geese honk
before crossing the road ...
gathering storm
Ted van Zutphen
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
thunder and lightning--
another cup of coffee
at the diner
Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
snowstorm
a half knitted sweater
on her sick bed
John McManus
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
fast moving storm --
my lawn furniture in the
neighbors yard
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
**An amusing slant, on a less than amusing situation. This would read better if "in the" was moved down to the third line.
thunderstorm--
my fearless dog retreats,
tail between his legs
natalia kuznetsova
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
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4 Points
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navigating through
a storm in a teacup--
the blue screen of death
Svetlana Marisova
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
spring storm --
I ditch
the nicotine patch
Johannes S. H. Bjerg
(0,2,0) = 4 pts
summer squall--
the muted lines
of the horizon
Kat Creighton
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
after the storm--
even cherry blossom petals
carry the scent of lilac
jill
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
afternoon storm
a fork of lightning
shimmers the wheat
Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
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3 Points
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rains of sparks
from the anvil master's forge
sturm und drang
Garry Eaton
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
Two stray dogs
sharing only one bone--
storm in a tea-cup
Vasile Moldovan
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
high winds
and driving rain
my daughter's tantrum
Mike Montreuil
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
After the storm --
I walk on stilts
for not crush the snails
Petru-Ioan Garda
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
**I love the picture painted in this haiku, the delightful use of language clearly shows the soft ground after the storm and the many snails adrift in it. I feel it tells us a lot about the writer's thoughtful outlook.
lighthouse weather
wide winged birds
over wild waves
Elaine Riddell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
wind storm
swaying white pines
stir the clouds
if
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
all the grays
in a winter sky...
light after the storm
Angela Terry
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
after thunder
the wait for lightning
could this be love?
Maxianne
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
thunderstorm--
my daughter's forehead
warm to the touch
Michael Dylan Welch
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
stormy morning
the new wind turbine
stands still
Ralf
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
a careless joke
and she's not laughing --
gathering clouds
Steve Mitchell
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
starlit storm
the wink of a one-eyed dog
as it sneezes
Alan Summers
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
**Love the imagery - very unique with a feeling of spring and the sense that the storm blows itself out very quickly.
thunder
the dog bolts
beneath the table
John Soules
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
after the thunder storm
a double rainbow brings back
the divine silence
Adina Enachescu
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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electric moment
tempest claws from clouds escape
even storms move on
Lorraine Marguertte Gasrel Black
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
blasting boulders
on mountain peaks
thunderstorms
Maria Santomauro
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
angry words last night
I remove each storm window
and feel the cool air
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
**I like the double meaning.
heading for shelter
in the darkness streaked with light
a time for stillness
Merrill Ann Gonzales
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
mid-sentence
our conversation zapped
by the storm
Barbara A Taylor
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
hurricane party
the wind teaches palms
a maenad dance
Anonymous
(0,1,0) = 2 pts
**I especially liked # 75 for the spirit of making the most of a bad
situation.
sudden squall
the fallen sparrow chirps
for it's mother
Carol Raisfeld
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
storm--
a kite flying escorted
by a galaxy of crows
Cezar F.
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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1 Point
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State Highway 1
a flock of sheep huddle
against wind and rain
Anne Curran
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
hailstones
peppering the front yard...
the birds are hiding
Tom Conally
uprooted everything in its path
Alan S. Bridges
ominous black clouds
hover on the horizon
a storm lurking
Keith A. SIMMONDS
photo album
twisted by twister
lies on lawn
Anonymous
winter's first blizzard
he kicks at the snow
another lost dog bowl
Edward
winds lashing windows
between the gusts
one second of silence
Frances O'Keeffe
a tornado in my dream
nowhere to hide
I hide everywhere
Bill Gottlieb
fierce winds whirl
a washing machine
decorates a tree
Christine Howard
**A great "topsy turvy" depiction of the clash between the forces of technology and nature.
after the storm,
the rainbow tipped up
on a bed of hay
Constantin Stroe
Storm is coming...
the sun prolonged on the window
by a butterfly
Oprica Padeanu
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No points this time, sorry.
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sickened sky grown green
regurgitates homes and trees
leaves not what has been
Keith Moser
Japan quake freak aftershocks--
bloody Arabic storms,
WTC revenge
Gh.POSTELNICU STOPS
spring
the desert calm until the
august monsoon
Bill Hudson
window rattling--
storm's search for my candle
shaken with each thump
Vishnu P Kapoor
storm ends
...the rainfall supercooling
into glaze ice
Ramesh Anand
storm of his stroke
over --
a crutch earthing him
John McDonald
rafts multiply,
bobbing beside it --
the flooded ant-hill
Michael McClintock
winter gale, the
giant pie in the air
is a nun
Oddbjørn
It came swift
the unannounced storm
she took me with surprise
Ashi
sudden storm
seen and heard through glass
my Jade plant remains dry
Emma Pageot
tender drops
torn clouds
perpetuum jazzile
Peleridis
a sickle
in the sky
after the storm
gogatsu
after the storm
downbeat drops slowing
into backbeat
Jon Baldwin
my rose bowery
and its budding roses gone
with the storm
Alegria Imperial
thunderstorm
crouching behind the couch
with her kitty
Carolyn Coit Dancy
Wild west wind
curtains in the open window --
wringing wet.
Trevor Camp
the ground shudders
under storm loosened rocks
refugees riot
Allison Millcock
my ceiling fan
goes crazy in the heat wave
storm of haiku
Svein Lie
heavy rain
pelts against the house
a fearful music
Marylouise Knight
sudden rush of crows
across a Hallowe’en sky
storm warning issued
Deirdre Godwin
approaching storm
a few leaves turn grey
martin gottlieb cohen
broken jagged trees
random storm of nature
the wind shows no malice
Tony Nasuta
storm -–
mew soars on the sea
like a paper plane
Małgorzata Miksiewicz
growing up together,
north wind and east wind --
a storm
Juhani Tikkanen
storm wolfing down the sky --
fat little houses
apples to its eye
mechaieh
storm at dawn--
incorporating thunder
into Monday's dream
Jennifer Corpe
uncle's hat
in the appleblossom blizzard
hurricanes of laughter
Jon Espen Vassbotn
the squall
over the lawn
of pear blossoms
--Peter Newton
oatmeal porridge--
flakes of spring snow
dust the daffodils
DeVar
the calm after --
when the hailstorm
stops
sanjukta
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