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April 2009 Kukai

Congratulations to Carol Raisfeld, winner of our Kigo section and to Francine Banwarth, winner of our Free Format section!

April 2009 Results
Kigo Theme: 
April Fools
Free Format Theme:
Fence/Wall

First Place – Twenty-seven Points
April Fools
sending the kids to buy
elbow grease

Carol Raisfeld
(1,6,12) = 27 pts

Of all the practical-joke haiku, this one best tickled my own funny bone.


Second Place – Twenty-five Points
april fools
the sting of a prank
decades old

Roberta Beary
(3,5,6) = 25 pts


Third Place – Twenty-four Points
April Fools
the lake ice
still looks safe

Edward
(2,4,10) = 24 pts


Fourth Place – Seventeen Points
April Fools
teenagers twitter
under the cherry tree

Harvey Jenkins
(0,3,11) = 17 pts

Love the way modern life sneaks in here with a pun.


Fifth Place – Fourteen Points
sonny’s tomcat
gives birth to kittens
April fools

Gautam Nadkarni
(1,4,3) = 14 pts


Sixth Place – Thirteen Points
April Fools
caught by the forsythia
my new umbrella

j blain
(1,2,6) = 13 pts


Seventh Place – Twelve Points
April Fools
storm clouds blackening the sky
drop only their scent

Tom Genovese
(2,2,2) = 12 pts

april fools in our squabble the skylark passed by

sheila windsor
(1,3,3) = 12 pts


Eighth Place – Eleven Points
April Fools —
I peek at my
retirement portfolio

Paul David Mena
(0,2,7) = 11 pts

the crow's flight
a little sideways
April Fool

Joyce Clement
(1,1,6) = 11 pts

The crow as jester is perfect here!

April Fools . . . 
my best umbrella
full of holes

Bill Pauly
(0,5,1) = 11 pts

a sudden kiss
as we walk in the rain
April Fools

ARW
(0,4,3) = 11 pts


Ninth Place – Ten Points
April fools day
the baby learns
lemon juice

Jon Baldwin
(1,3,1) = 10 pts

may I help you?
an April fool answers
the store’s parrot

Susan Constable
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

vibrating the spider's web
a leaf stem-
April Fools

Leslie Montgomery
(0,2,6) = 10 pts


Tenth Place – Nine Points
april fool
a cuckoo smuggles in
the summer

_kala
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

April Fools morning
a patient in the mirror
practices a smile

Dorota Pyra
(0,1,7) = 9 pts


Eleventh Place – Eight Points
falling
for the pick-up line
an april fool

tom painting
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

April Fools,
a whispered promise
to leave his wife

Laurene Post
(0,2,4) = 8 pts


Twelfth Place – Seven Points
April Fools —
a foot of snow
on the parked cars

Patrick M. Pilarski
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

robin's song
an April Fool awakens
with a smile

Audrey Downey
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

April fool
the lilacs covered
with frost

Earl Keener
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

April Fools —
opening day fish stories
bigger and bigger

Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

April Fool's Day
an urchin in the playground
calls me father

Jacek M.
(0,1,5) = 7 pts


Thirteenth Place – Six Points
the cobra moth
folds its wings
April Fools!

Garry Eaton
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

dazzling sunshine
in cherry bloom showers
April fools

Keith A. Simmonds
(0,3,0) = 6 pts

April Fools,
he asks again
"will you marry me?"

Bre
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

April Fool’s gale...
cherry-petal pink whitecaps
on the Potomac

Janice Hornburg
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

New spring
same old truth
I'm still the April Fool

Tina
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

april fools
the dog
growls at me

polona
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

clear sky
we set out without raincoats
April Fools

Elaine Riddell
(0,1,4) = 6 pts


Fourteenth Place – Five Points
April fool —
my friend borrows money
never to return

~ Lilian Otieno
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

April Fools
the computer worm
that wasn't

Bruce Ross
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

April Fools —
the coroner's corpse
snickering

aom (tim)
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

Silk flowers
in daffodil leaves
April Fools

gourdman
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

frost
on two lips…
April Fool’s

A. Bodhi
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

April Fools
the hare
trying to recolour

Hermione
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

April Fools . . .
his shadow
makes its move

Francine Banwarth
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

April Fool's
Canada Geese on the lawn
with a decoy

andrea
(0,1,3) = 5 pts


Fifteenth Place – Four Points
April Fools —
bat making a blind date
to a mole

Virginia Popescu
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

first to sign for
tango lessons
such old April Fools

Barbara Snow
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

April Fools Day
she tells him she thinks
she's pregnant

Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

breakfast
outside with the robins
April Fools

Beth Powell
(0,1,2) = 4 pts


Sixteenth Place – Three Points
being dated
by another man...
April fool

Patrick Wafula
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

leader has
fulfilled his assurance —
april fool

Sunil Uniyal
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

April's first gust
swirls white —
the blown plum shakes

Don Holt
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

told that Jesus
had arrived at Mount Kenya —
April fool

~ Nelius Wangari
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

snowflakes
dot the shovel’s dust
April Fools

Ann Schwader
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

April Fool’s Day
he proposes
marriage

Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

April fool —
a fake invitation
for lunch

~ Peter Nguribu
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

the fifteenth
post office, long lines
of April fools

Frederick Gier
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

April fools
an empty whiskey bottle
under her bed

Elena Naskova
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

laughing old monk
re-enlightened
as aprils fool

Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

April Fools
my grandma was too heavy
for the trampoline

selwyn
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

local zoo —
Mr. Lion receives calls
from April Fools

Origa
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


Participants’ General Comments:

How few were those who read or followed the instructions about the subject line.

After reading all of these, I concluded that having a term like "april fool" for a kigo doesn't work very well.

Some of the submissions lack the full kigo (#37, 90,92) or don’t use it as required (#22).

The kigo seems to have baffled our poets. So many variations (and not so varied as all that) on a few themes. I'm not excluding myself from this judgment, but I decided not to submit in this category.

As it turned out the poem I submitted was turned in with slight variations by 8 of us. Ooops. Cliche, cliche.

Very entertaining!



First Place – Twenty-six Points
garden wall —
enough moon
to go around

Francine Banwarth
(2,5,10) = 26 pts

Elegant in its simplicity!


Second Place – Twenty Points
picket fence
she repaints his dream
each spring

Terra Martin
(2,4,6) = 20 pts


Third Place – Eighteen Points
between the fog
and the fence
daffodils

Kate Creighton
(1,3,9) = 18 pts

The problem with perfection in haiku is that it's very hard to talk about. But the consonance here is beautifully controlled, and the splash of bright color introduced by the daffodils brings the poem to a refreshing and satisfying finish.

I like the simplicity of this one; also that, for me at least, it illustrates a feeling of finding a bit of gladness between anxiety and limitation. Wish there was a good way to format it pictographically; it would sort of break up the one-sentence effect: between fog and fence daffodils


Fourth Place – Seventeen Points
rickety fence
held together
by jasmine

Andre Surridge
(0,6,5) = 17 pts


Fifth Place – Sixteen Points
checkpoint ...
fireflies, back and forth
through the fence

Carol Raisfeld
(1,2,9) = 16 pts


Sixth Place – Fourteen Points
No fence —
Just an open
gate

helge t.
(1,3,5) = 14 pts

This says so much in so few words. It's the one that makes me stop and think, and stop and think again.

stone wall
the glimmer of snail trail
crossing over

polona
(1,3,5) = 14 pts

Origami-
the shadow of a butterfly
flickering on the wall

Vasile Moldovan
(1,3,5) = 14 pts

I find the uncertain relationship between the two parts of this intriguing. The poem does not leave me satisfied, but, in this case, that's not a bad thing.

dark horizon...
a sea eagle climbing
a wall of wind

Li Ree
(0,5,4) = 14 pts


Seventh Place – Thirteen Points
graveyard wall —
on the street side
cherry blossoms

Gautam Nadkarni
(0,3,7) = 13 pts


Eighth Place – Twelve Points
monastery wall
a monk strolls
the quiet side

tom painting
(0,3,6) = 12 pts

Simple and effective.

moonlit prison
the clematis quietly climbs
over the wall

Tore Sverredal
(0,3,6) = 12 pts


Ninth Place – Eleven Points
old fence
apricot blossoms fall
on both sides

Ella Wagemakers
(1,2,4) = 11 pts

Simple, effective and a nice twist on “the grass is always greener on the other side.”

a row of sparrows
white-washing
the picket fence

Terri French
(1,2,4) = 11 pts

Interesting though perhaps a little…ah, earth (which certainly never stopped the Japanese masters.

border town
a tumbleweed escapes
over a rusty fence

Garry Eaton
(0,4,3) = 11 pts

a neighborhood
of high fences —
the scent of lilac

Bill Kenney
(0,2,7) = 11 pts


Tenth Place – Ten Points
across the grass
and up the wall
a swallow's shadow

Paul Hodder
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

seawall
thoughts drifting
along

Roberta Beary
(0,1,8) = 10 pts

An effective juxtaposition.


Eleventh Place – Nine Points
new neighbor
he adds another row
to the wall

Ben Gieske
(1,2,2) = 9 pts

memorial wall
echoes of soldiers
dying

Don Baird
(1,2,2) = 9 pts

Poignant and thought-provoking.


Twelfth Place – Eight Points
neighborhood gossip
another patch of couch grass
creeps under the fence

Susan Constable
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

spring moss —
a hole in the wall
between us

Nelson
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

old stone fence
deep in the woods —
a trace of snow

Joyce Clement
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

dry-stone walls...
the signature of ancestors
across the valley

Dejan Pavlinovic
(0,1,6) = 8 pts

The use of 'signature' and the link between L1&3 make this special.


Thirteenth Place – Seven Points
barbed wire fence
the cows have all summer
to find its weakness

Harvey Jenkins
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

library wall ... I leave a pseudonym

Helen Buckingham
(0,0,7) = 7 pts


Fourteenth Place – Six Points
chain link fence —
a hog nose snake
weaving himself in

Barbara Campitelli
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

April morning —
dew hangs on the
barbed wire fence

~ Malombe Johnson
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

coming home
a row of schoolboys
on the orchard wall

Terry O'Connor
(0,1,4) = 6 pts


Fifteenth Place – Five Points
anniversary —
flowers
for the sea wall

aom (tim)
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

morning glories
flying off the fence —
two butterflies!

Tomislav
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

I think the kire would work better, placed after glories in Line 1

roofless house —
walls between the tree
and its apples

Gosia Zamorska
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

longer, the rains
shorter
the fence

Barbara Snow
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

spring cleaning
he throws his voice
over the fence

Mary Davila
(0,1,3) = 5 pts


Sixteenth Place – Four Points
beyond the fence
ranks of gravestones
dad among them

if
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

link by link
the snow peas climb the fence
headed for the sun

jeff hanson
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

cooky-baking
the wall between us
crumbles

Ellen Compton
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

old battlefield...
rooted in the crumbling wall
a bleeding heart

Janice Hornburg
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

grandma's last photo
strings hold the hollyhocks
against the fence

Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

prisoners
from morning till evening —
the school fence

~ Lucy Nyambura
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Effective in the way it mirrors how some kids feel. I was (and had) one.

wind gust —
the rusty fence hooks
a white shirt

Caleb David Mutua
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

lowing calf
the moon is caught
in the barbed wire fence

Earl Keener
(0,0,4) = 4 pts


Seventeenth Place – Three Points
behind the fence…
the two sways settle down
separated

Rita Odeh
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

posts with barbed wire
now and then
still above the snow

Horst Ludwig
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

moonlit night...
illicit lovers sharing a kiss
over the fence

Patrick Wafula
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

a drip of coffee
blurring the silky napkin
cat - behind the fence

oana posnaies
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

Graveyard —
high wall separating
the quick from the dead

Virginia Popescu
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

new neighbors
a straight line of foliage
where the fence was

j blain
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

lizards sheltering
under the block wall —
hot afternoon

~ Abraham Muuo
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

hot afternoon —
a green lizard peeps through
cracks on a rusty wall

~ Otinga
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

realtor’s office
with the image of a door
painted on the wall

ARW
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

open sky
the sun climbs
over the privacy fence

Beth Powell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

knotted rope
behind the sea wall
memories of winter

Patrick M. Pilarski
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

split-rail fence —
a billy goat and
the greener grass

Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

pile of bricks
in the shadows
Berlin Wall

Susan Sanchez-Barnett
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

more stones
to add to the pasture wall
spring thaw

Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


Participants’ General Comments:

While kigo section left something to be desired (for my taste at least), free format section offered quite a few strong haiku, which made the decision much more difficult. On a different day I might have decided differently.

Other points given back. I've only done that once before (comment on free format votes)

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