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December 2006 Kukai

Congratulations to Ron Moss, winner of our Kigo section and to Polona Oblak, winner of our Free Format section!

December 2006 Results
Kigo Theme: 
Starry Night
Free Format Theme:
Memories

First Place -- 25 pts
starry night . . .
what's left of my life
is enough

ron moss
(3,7,2) = 25 pts

** This haiku hits the mark completely. Reading it, I immediately felt the radiance of it's fullness and richness. Well done!


Second Place -- 18 pts
starry night
the fox's eyes
in the headlights

Polona
(2,4,4) = 18 pts

** that swift narrowing of focus, and it's all about light

counting the ways
I could have said goodbye
~ starry night

Paul Hodder
(1,5,5) = 18 pts


Third Place -- 15 pts
starry night
breathing deeper
and deeper

Grzegorz Sionkowski
(2,3,3) = 15 pts

starry night . . .
she adds another name
to the family tree

Francine Banwarth
(1,1,10) = 15 pts

starry night . . .
hot popcorn
in white paper cups

Carol Raisfeld
(1,4,4) = 15 pts

** WOW, It conjures blockbuster entertainment, shared experience, awe, even hunger and satiation; its original and easy for a reader to associate. And then a little more detail - white paper cups - takes it to another level. Very Nice.


Fourth Place -- 14 pts
starry night
a jet blinks across
the empty spaces

Bill Kenney
(1,4,3) = 14 pts

starry night
the scarecrow's hat
gleaming with frost

Jacek
(1,2,7) = 14 pts

starry night:
lowering
our voices

Linda Marucci
(1,2,7) = 14 pts


Fifth Place -- 13 pts
starry night
I smooth the goosebumps
on her arms

RaV
(1,2,6) = 13 pts


Sixth Place -- 12 pts
starry night
hearing the snow
underfoot

Ann K. Schwader
(1,3,3) = 12 pts

starry night
ice crystals sparkle
on the sidewalk

Warren Gossett
(0,3,6) = 12 pts


Seventh Place -- 10 pts
starry night
wail of a trombone
from the ninth ward

Ellen Compton
(1,3,1) = 10 pts

starry night;
the coolness of quarters
while ringing you

koast
(1,2,3) = 10 pts

starry night . . .
the scent of fresh snow
fallen on the mountain

--Michael McClintock
(1,1,5) = 10 pts

starry night
an angel peers through
the theater curtain

Earl Keener
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

slice of skates
on the frozen lake
starry night

Ruth Powell
(0,1,8) = 10 pts


Eighth Place -- 9 pts
starry night
counting the sleeps
until Christmas

Susan Constable
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

** A clever pun with sleep/sheep instead of a groaner

starry night — 
I locate Polaris
through my breath

Audrey Downey
(0,2,5) = 9 pts


Ninth Place -- 8 pts
starry night -
drifting snow
alters the constellations

MAM
(1,2,1) = 8 pts

starry night - -
the shimmering riverside
lantern procession

Daniela Bullas
(1,1,3) = 8 pts

** The lights below mirror the lights above-nice visual.

starry night...
one light missing in
the jeweler's neon

Keiko Izawa
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

starry night
my neck is tired
from looking up

Bill Hudson
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

starry night
snow angels and footprints
dot an open field

-- Karen Cesar
(0,0,8) = 8 pts


Tenth Place -- 7 pts
lighting off the candle
on the villa's terrace
-- starry sky

Tom Maretic
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

starry night--
the perfume
of white flowers

Autumn Moon
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

** Yes! Yes! We best not disturb them in their peace and quiet.

starry night
the sparkle
in her eyes

Meredith
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

starry night
the red kettle filled
with pocket change

tom painting
(0,0,7) = 7 pts


Eleventh Place -- 6 pts
starry night . . .
on every single twig,
an ice crystal rainbow

mike farley
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

sleepless night -
I scribble a poem
amidst the stars

Kala Ramesh
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

cold little hands
slip inside my mittens
a starry night

Barbara Snow
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

starry night
even the crickets are silent
only the wall clock

Johannes Manjrekar
(0,3,0) = 6 pts

starry night -
the old man
counting his years

miorita
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

starry night
over new snow
trees crack

Mike McCulley
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

starry night --
she blows out the candles
with one breath

Ana Cadarin
(0,0,6) = 6 pts


Twelfth Place -- 5 pts
starry night --
the doe's breath steams above
the ice as she drinks

Angela
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

starry night--
when the meteorite flashes
she holds me tighter

--LGD
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

starry night-
I blow warmth into the wings
of the rescued bird.

Cristian Mocanu
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

starry night
Cassiopeia breathing
diamonds

--Jazmine
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

one day
these bones will lie apart --
starry night

Sue Stanford
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

last call
he walks
into the starry night

aom
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

starry night . . .
in my new Zen book
I flip to any page

Andrew Riutta
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

** a genuinely witty juxtaposition.

Starry night
your icy toes
startling my thigh

Yositaka
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

starry night--
blossoms embroidered
on blue silk

Tristan Coleridge
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

starry night
fulfilling wishes
we never had

emile molhuysen
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

starry night
after each pause the cricket
a higher octave

Bruce Ross
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

** After some hesitation, I was won over by what I came to hear as the complexity and expressiveness of the rhythm.


Thirteenth Place -- 4 pts
starry night--
the window is wet
against my cold finger tips

Michael
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

starry night -
searching the internet
for constellations

robert naczas
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

starry night
galaxies of frost
in his hair

Andria Plowman
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

starry night
I try to listen
through Van Gogh's ear

Darrell Lindsey
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

starry night -
they are ever so old
her grandson explains

Jim Swift
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

** And I can see Gramma's patient smile as he does this.
** Most kiddy ku are cute or sentimental; this one rings true.

Evensong,
the church doors open,
starry night.

Trevor Camp
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

one last ornament
for the listing pine
starry night

Pris Campbell
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

starry night
under the blanket
a flashlight

w.f. owen
(0,0,4) = 4 pts


Fourteenth Place -- 3 pts
starry night -
my small hand firmly
in dad's big paw

max verhart
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

again
hand in hand;
starry night

Magdalena Dale
(1,0,3) = 3 pts

a cold and starry night
with the moon high overhead
we wonder what is out there

Mr PC
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

starry night
the tugboat's noise fades
on the playground

martin
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

starry night -
Venus close to
the moon

il.balan
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

starry night--
snow's
overture

William M. Gottlieb
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

** I love the anticipation of the snow keenly felt by the word "overture". Beautifully done.

Winter landscape
so clear in my mind
starry night

Ashi
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

the scratch a wool scarf
on the back of my neck--
starry night

DeVar
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

starry sky
the scream
of the owl

D.V. Rozic
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

starry night
the moon shivers
in the chill

Sjs
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

starry night
the twinkle in her eyes
when she smiles

Karen Briggs
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

starry night
i count
my blessings

Roberta Beary
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


First Place -- 25 pts
dusty seashell
the words he whispered
in my ear

Polona
(1,5,12) = 25 pts


Second Place -- 23 pts
All Souls' Day
I open my father's
black umbrella

Petar Tchouhov
(2,4,9) = 23 pts

** The moment a memory is triggered. "open" is such an eloquent word here.


Third Place – 20 pts
gran’s handwriting
I email my daughter
her recipe

-- ushi
(0,6,8) = 20 pts

** Finding the recipes brings out a daughter’s memories of her mother, and then the email brings out the granddaughter’s memories of two people. Well done!

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Fourth Place -- 14 pts
memories--
wondering if all of them
are true

Mary Lee McClure
(0,4,6) = 14 pts

**Bravo. I'm not sure all mine are true!
Reading this I had to LOL. So true, so true.


Fifth Place -- 13 pts
falling star
his last words
in a foreign tongue

Susan Constable
(0,6,1) = 13 pts

box of crayons
how hard I tried to keep
within the lines

--Irene Golas
(0,4,5) = 13 pts


Sixth Place -- 12 pts
frosty morning
the children smoke
pretend cigarettes

-- Karen Cesar
(0,1,10) = 12 pts

retirement -
no need to remember
the name of today

Jim Swift
(0,1,10) = 12 pts


Seventh Place -- 11 pts
stalactite
the first time my heart
was broken

Agnes Eva Savich
(1,4,0) = 11 pts

** Would have given you more pts. if possible. Ouch, the sharp pain....so simply yet fully captured. 
**A stalactite will do it if anything will. But the poet lets us define the exact connection.

fallen leaves -
two names carved
upon the tree

il.balan
(1,2,4) = 11 pts

talking about her...
a trace of honey
on your lips

Ana Cadarin
(0,3,5) = 11 pts


Eighth Place -- 10 pts
memories
grandma asks
who I am

Carmel Lively Westerman
(1,0,7) = 10 pts


Ninth Place -- 9 pts
relapse-
these wet streets
just as dark

Andrew Riutta
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

**It may help if you've been there, but I find this incredibly powerful.

memories:
I open the door;
no one there

Linda Marucci
(0,3,3) = 9 pts

wedding photo
i tell myself
we were happy

-Roberta Beary
(0,2,5) = 9 pts


Tenth Place -- 8 pts
his high school picture
still in my wallet
MIA 1972

Sjs
(1,1,3) = 8 pts

obituaries...
was it seventh or eighth grade
English class we shared

Joann
(1,1,3) = 8 pts

remembering him
a leaf falls
a butterfly rises

brephoenix
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

empty house
once filled with voices
winter day

Beth Powell
(0,1,6) = 8 pts


Eleventh Place -- 7 pts
depressed wild flowers
between the leaves of a book;
my first tryst

Magdalena Dale
(2,0,1) = 7 pts

sand beaches
surviving in these sandals;
Indian summer

koast
(2,0,1) = 7 pts

Christmas Day--
wood smoke and memories
mingle in the fireplace

Tristan Coleridge
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

trembling hands
dad points out where each ship was
Pearl Harbor

Edward
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

** A great theme addressed and powerfully worded too.

"Alzheimer" --
a snowflake winks
into the sidewalk

Earl Keener
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

leaving ...
my mother's hand
colder

oga
(0,0,7) = 7 pts


Twelfth Place -- 6 pts
granny's funeral
our tears run swifter
than memories

john tiong chunghoo
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

every day ~
passing the street
where she died

Paul Hodder
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

memories --
the old woman's mouth closed
like a drawstring bag

Sue Stanford
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

** Wonderful visual. Imitating this Ku I find feelings of sadness and loneliness. Wonderful job.

fireflies twinkle
in the old milk jug
that first kiss...

Pris Campbell
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

after the funeral
we serve food
on Mom's favorite platter

Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

graduation
remembering her first
baby steps

Meredith
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

I can't remember
struggling so hard before
to remember

Johannes Manjrekar
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

gift wrappings
blaze in the fireplace
again

gourdman
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

no snowflakes
only a few notes
of silent night

Jul
(0,2,2) = 6 pts


Thirteenth Place -- 5 pts
memories -
in granny's flat-iron
sepia photographs

D.V. Rozic
(1,1,0) 5 pts

eating kale -
back at grandma's table
longing for home

max verhart
(1,1,0) = 5 pts

memories
changing like the leaves
the truth fades

DJK
(1,1,0) = 5 pts

old home place -
a blackened chimney
twined in wisteria

Nancy Smith
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

new mattress arrives
your indentation
goes out with the old one

Elizabeth Fanto
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

tearful stare
she holds the old letter
from western union

Bill Hudson
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

he always sang
rummy tum tum rummy tum tum
my tipsy caroler

doris kasson
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

Evening,
thoughts of yesterday.
We both smile.

Trevor Camp
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

** Very good. I (we) have done this often.

coffee trees...
thick with white blossoms
memories of snow

shanna
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

Closing the eyes -
I meet again
my childhood

miorita
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

old photo
your face as a child
little sister

Ruth Powell
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

wedding anniversary--
remembering
how we used to do it

ash of moth
(0,1,3) = 5 pts


Fourteenth Place -- 4 pts
I carry it home
after my brother's wake
his mushroom basket

Francine Banwarth
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

carved jade
mother buries in my hand
a good luck charm

Audrey Downey
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

memories linger...
sunsets
we no longer share

MAM
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

over the minefield
autumn wind bending the grass ...
and my memories

Boris Nazansky
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

late winter
children's fridge art
now pastel

Alice Frampton
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

spring alley --
old lilacs breathe
seventeen

Ann K. Schwader
(0,0,4) = 4 pts


Fifteenth Place -- 3 pts
nursing home
my father turning over
a memory

tom painting
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

Valentine's Day-
on her coat an immortelle
just since then

Vasile Moldovan
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

Christmas past
river traffic lights up
the window rain

martin
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

baby's bib --
my father learns
first steps again

miriam chaikin
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

new puppy
curled up with a clock
fast asleep

--Senile Butterfly
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

sandpiper tracks
decorate the beach
then high-tide

Mike McCulley
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

that first bite
of the wild apple --
old, old memories

Michael McClintock
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

writing my memoirs:
so much of the forgotten
gets recollected

Zhanna P. Rader
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

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