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February 2007 Kukai

Congratulations to Carol Raisfeld, winner of our Kigo section and to Jacek Margolak, winner of our Free Format section!

February 2007 Results
Kigo Theme: 
Crocus
Free Format Theme:
Dreary

First Place -- 29 pts
crocus . . .
the balloon-man returns
to the park

Carol Raisfeld
(1,6,14) = 29 pts

** Like the oblique reference to the e.e. cummings poem.
** e. e. cummings territory. Perhaps it could have stopped at "returns."


Second Place -- 22 pts
first crocus
I make a promise
I can't keep

Tom Painting
(1,5,9) = 22 pts

** The special kind of ku that feels as though anybody could have written it, now that somebody has.


Third Place -- 20 pts
crocus
in grandmother's hand
spring again

Dany Fisher
(1,4,9) = 20 pts

** Nicely understated, even though "again" could be dispensed with.


Fourth Place -- 18 pts
budding crocus ~
the closed door
of my daughter's bedroom

Paul Hodder
(1,2,11) = 18 pts

** A perennial spring theme, deftly handled.

warm breeze
a white crocus
where the snowman was

RaV
(0,2,14) = 18 pts

** a fluid way to show the changing seasons.


Fifth Place -- 17 pts
first crocus . . .
so hard to be
original

Francine Banwarth
(0,4,9) = 17 pts


Sixth Place -- 16 pts
lonely crocus
a hole in the snow
just big enough

-me-
(1,5,3) = 16 pts


Seventh Place -- 15 pts
first crocus
a new spring
to my step

Susan Constable
(2,2,5) = 15 pts

crocus buds —
a neighbor's Christmas lights
still flashing

Dustin Neal
(1,3,6) = 15 pts


Eighth Place -- 14 pts
first crocus...
she leaks
my secret

ed markowski
(2,1,6) = 14 pts

sunny day...
first crocus in the garden
of a late neighbour

Rita Odeh
(1,1,9) = 14 pts

this crocus
like your friendship
still surprises

Beverley George
(0,4,6) = 14 pts


Ninth Place -- 13 pts
my first crocus
bobbing down the street
in a child's hand

Rose Marie Stutts, EdD
(0,3,7) = 13 pts

wild crocus
my finger touches
a saffron moon

Ron Moss
(0,4,5) = 13 pts

onions sprouting
in the pantry —
outside, a crocus

Barbara Snow
(0,5,3) = 13 pts


Tenth Place -- 12 pts
first crocus —
grandpa doesn't remember
his password

Israel López Balan
(0,3,6) = 12 pts

blue crocus . . .
the scented letter
returns unopened

Kathy Lippard Cobb
(0,2,8) = 12 pts

crocus buds
a new life stirring
in her belly

Karen Briggs
(0,2,8) = 12 pts


Eleventh Place -- 10 pts
One single crocus
Solitary survivor
Of a lost garden

Deirdre A. Godwin
(1,2,3) = 10 pts

our first crocus —
the neighbor's child
reaches to pick it

Mary Lee McClure
(1,2,3) = 10 pts


Twelfth Place -- 9 pts
crocus
in the old snow
glacier blue

Beth Powell
(2,0,3) = 9 pts

first crocus
what’s left of a snowdrift
beside the fence

DeVar
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

after her chemo...
the first blade
of a crocus

Joshua O Wikoff
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

crocuses on the snow
I am looking in
your sky-blue eyes

Piotr Mogri
(0,3,3) = 9 pts

** nice! This seemed very spiritual.


Thirteenth Place -- 8 pts
frozen ground
the crocus and i
wait for spring

Judi Honiker
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

first crocus
after recess soggy mittens
dot the playground

Edward
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

red crocus
she slowly removes
her rubber gloves

Petar Tchouhov
(0,1,6) = 8 pts


Fourteenth Place -- 7 pts
a crocus field —
the breeze plucks off one...
blue butterfly

Tom Maretic
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

yellow crocus
the class of children
burst into song

kjs
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

crocus bed:
outside the Buddhist Temple
a street beggar

-- ushi
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

mountain echo
the crocus never
come too soon

Collin Barber
(0,1,5) = 7 pts


Fifteenth Place -- 6 pts
first crocus —
my neighbor's pet pig
is missing

ito
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

dew spills
over the crocus lip
a groundhog's shadow

Pris Campbell
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

nursery crocus…
the half-open hands
of the napping baby

Keiko Izawa
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

in front of
the dryer vent
a sea of purple crocus

Michiko
(0,0,6) = 6 pts


Sixteenth Place -- 5 pts
another birthday —
crocuses in my garden
fade away again

Dorota Pyra
(1,1,0) = 5 pts

foolhardy —
early crocus
braves the snow

Geoff Sanderson
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

first crocus
a starling and I
have it to ourselves

Bill Kenney
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

now at dawn
the snowman becomes water —
white crocuses

Lech Szeglowski
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

starless night —
a white crocus opens
to the dawn

Nancy Smith
(0,0,5) = 5 pts


Seventeenth Place -- 4 pts
Crocus underfoot
I step toward the door
this time goodbye

Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

the clouds break
crocuses fill
with an inner light

max verhart
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

this morning
in spite of the winter
a blue crocus

Jasminka Predojevic
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

victory garden
surrounding the crocus
young dandelions

Bill Hudson
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

morning twilight
saffron waits within
the crocus

Mark Hollingsworth
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

snow
on the crocuses
sunshine

oga
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

first crocus —
the new kid waves
goodbye

Roberta Beary
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

white crocus
in her old flower garden
the first sign

Magdalena Dale
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

a crocus
by the back door —
distant thunder

Ami
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

spring equinox
without fanfare —
the crocus

Jeannie Martin
(0,0,4) = 4 pts


Eighteenth Place -- 3 pts
crack
in the parched soil
first crocus

Sjs
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

first sunny day
after weeks of storms
yellow crocus

Bridget Cougar
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

From the wet soil
a bud appear —
the first crocus

miorita
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

in the charred ruins
of an old farmhouse . . .
white crocus flowers

-- Richard Kay
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

first crocus —
being watered by
the neighbour's dog

Pia Sousa
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

Purple crocus —
vibrant in her
sterile hospital room

Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

along the river
two lines of light:
croci in bloom

Vasile Moldovan
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

Remembrance crocus
granddad planted in his time —
their burst of color

Zhanna P. Rader
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

crocuses bloom —
I stand up searching
for familiar birdsongs

Audrey Downey
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

Green crocus tips
Still frozen pond
I finger seed packets

yositaka
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


First Place -- 44 pts
dreary day —
only a gravedigger
whistling

Jacek
(4,8,16) = 44 pts

** Brings a smile, but there's real emotional complexity here.
** Happy and sad; I had to laugh. Well done!


Second Place -- 26 pts
dreary day . . .
he tells me all of it
again

Francine Banwarth
(3,1,15) = 26 pts

** One breath? More like one sigh.


Third Place -- 19 pts
dreary morning...
the taste and texture
of powdered eggs

ed markowski
(2,4,5) = 19 pts


Fourth Place -- 17 pts
dreary sunday
two magpies squabble
over a chip

Polona
(1,3,8) = 17 pts


Fifth Place -- 13 pts
dreary day
another phone call
offering condolences

Bill Hudson
(1,0,10) = 13 pts

** "another" says it all.

thick fog
the same
old news

Susan Constable
(0,4,5) = 13 pts

dreary morning —
I pull on the same socks
I wore yesterday

DeVar
(0,3,7) = 13 pts

dreary faces —
she plays the violin
in the subway

Jordi Climent
(0,1,11) = 13 pts


Sixth Place -- 12 pts
dreary day —
the rain gurgles
in the gutters

Angèle Lux
(0,2,8) = 12 pts


Seventh Place -- 11 pts
dreary day ~
the secrets
we keep

Paul Hodder
(1,2,4) = 11 pts

dreary alcove
between sips mother asks
my weight

Roberta Beary
(1,0,8) = 11 pts


Eighth Place -- 10 pts
the buzz of
florescent lights
deep winter

Michael Baribeau
(1,2,3) = 10 pts

dreary skies . . .
migrating geese struggle
to keep formation

Marie Summers
(0,2,6) = 10 pts


Ninth Place -- 9 pts
dreary winter morning
again the wail
of an ambulance

brephoenix
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

dreary light —
the withered bean plants
cling to their poles

max verhart
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

dreary day —
a second coat
of lip balm

Collin Barber
(0,1,7) = 9 pts

dreary weather —
the corner gargoyle's mouth
drips rainwater

Zhanna P. Rader
(0,1,7) = 9 pts

dreary day
I search for colour
in garden books

Beth Powell
(0,1,7) = 9 pts

dreary high tea —
a fly's long walk
over the host's cake

Ana Cadarin
(0,1,7) = 9 pts


Tenth Place -- 8 pts
how dreary!
these tiny bones
never left the nest

Joshua O Wikoff
(1,2,1) = 8 pts

** This one hit me in the gut-so sad!
** Well said!

dreary day —
he draws a stringless kite
on the room wall

Rita Odeh
(1,0,5) = 8 pts

dreary night
I look at the space
where the stars were

kjs
(0,1,6) = 8 pts


Eleventh Place -- 7 pts
dreary weather
no customers
at the car wash

Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

so dreary
but listen!
a bird sings

miriam chaikin
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

dreary night
I google her name
for a hit

Tom Painting
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

** So modern, yet so common a moment!

dreary day —
their fight in the morning
still with them at dinner

Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

dreary morning
the imprint on her pillow
already cool

RaV
(0,1,5) = 7 pts


Twelfth Place -- 6 pts
Look! A hummingbird
Sipping spring from the feeder
Dreary thoughts are gone

Deirdre A. Godwin
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

dreary thoughts
hot humid night in bed
trying to sleep

Michael Flack
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

dreary day
the meter man fumbles
for his flashlight

Earl Keener
(1,0,3) = 6 pts

dreary day —
an egret spreads its wings
to land

Ami
(1,0,3) = 6 pts

three nuns,
almost invisible...
dreary dreary day

Pris Campbell
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

dreary forecast —
stretched to the limit
a worm

George Hawkins
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

dreary day —
the empty coffee cup
still smells

Israel López Balan
(0,1,4) = 6 pts


Thirteenth Place -- 5 pts
Dreary clouds
my only blanket shrunk
with the last rain.

Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

return after years
stairs of the old house
run to nowhere

Dorota Pyra
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

damp wool smell
in from the drizzle
fireplace cold

Ruth Powell
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

dreary morning
the cat peers out
thru runnels of rain

susan delphine delaney
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

dreary
all those ads for Viagra
in my email

Sue Stanford
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

dismal month —
now the shiki kukai
wants a dreary haiku

Jim Swift
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

** What a perfect irony!

February dawn —
dreary, bare branches moving
in a cold wind

P.O. Williams
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

chair by the window
a lamp on for reading
in afternoon light

Charles Hansmann
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

winter's long goodbye —
the dreariness
of freezing rain

Mike Montreuil
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

dreary day —
icicles melting
drip, drip, drip

Tristan Coleridge
(0,0,5) = 5 pts


Fourteenth Place -- 4 pts
dreary sky…
in kannon’s open arms
a still pigeon

Keiko Izawa
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

constant drizzle
at noon sparrows and wind chimes
still silent

Edward
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

life
so colourful and joyous
what is dreary

Pia Sosua
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

dreary morning —
the old women sings
her last hymn

Dustin Neal
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

dreary day
another planeload of bodies
home from the war

Karen Briggs
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

** Oh, yes...

dreary park
at the statue of Venus
two snails making love

Ginka Biliarska
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

dreary day
the snow fox’s shadow
grows fainter

martin
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

Between this and that
shadow and dust
dreary road

Ashi
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

this winter
a fresh new meaning
for dreary

Mary Lee McClure
(0,0,4) = 4 pts


Fifteenth Place -- 3 pts
dreary sky —
birds in the tree form
a leafy pattern

ito
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

dreary morn
unclear thoughts
too cold to think

Dr. Wm Fraenkel
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

blackish snow shrinks
off beer cans and wrappers
dreary clouds

gourdman
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

dreary
my husbands disposition
after doing the taxes

carmel lively westerman
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

fourth of July
unpacking the
muddy tent

Barbara Snow
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

on the highway
only the car's looming shadow —
Death Valley

Lech Szeglowski
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

midnight dreary —
clocks strike twelve
for hours

Anil Engin
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

dark and dreary . . .
the filthy child draws
a sunny day

Kathy Lippard Cobb
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

dreary afternoon —
turkeys wandering
in a village playground

Tom Maretic
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

dreary street
tinfoiled windows
blind to spring

Terry Ingram
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

another day
gray skies gray walls gray desk
colorless life

DJ
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

dreary sky —
from the yellow foliage
rain of light

Corneliu Traian Atanasiu
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

dreary afternoon
yesterday's snow
without a sparkle

Sandra Nickel
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

dreary night
cloud shadows
swallow the moon

soji
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

dreary summer day
the ice cream van's jingle
in the distance

Lynne Rees
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

candle-lit skin —
she laughs
at how dreary her day was

aom (tim)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

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