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SLAM18a

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SLAM18b

Gun Control: 0:34-0:54 is too much silence. and what happened to the shot showing you doing a search? Maybe music? Need a voiceover message at the end. Maybe something like: "don't let it be so easy for guys like this to get their toys."

Deforestation: What is that terrible noise at the beginning? Too loud. Not a lot here. Just Katya at the beginning and Lily doing a youtube bit. Kinda lacking any depth or importance here with an important topic.

S.A. On Campus: This is great. but it needs an end.

Stress to the Test: Can't hear Olufemi. Love the voiceover. love the Rubi section. Fill in the black spaces? The kid with the Nike sweater needs to be louder. And a lower third to introduce him. Fix that shot of me where the tips of my hair are moved over. Turn up Olufemi. Great job all around. Love the message and great filming and production.

SLAM20 A

Body Shaming: Great job. You need to fade from black at the beginning and fade to black at the end. Command-t at the beginning and end. The lower thirds text you chose looks like it's making a mess on Tatiana's first shot. More B-roll during interviews! Long black space at 4:04 needs B-roll. This could use another interview if you have a good one.

Immigration hardships. The first shot is too long with nothing happening buy a dolly down the street. B-Roll! You are still using that same old shot where you pan all over the school. Put some images in there instead. Cut that shot out. Panning across an empty school has nothing to do with what you are talking about! Great Ken Burns shots during the talk about Vietnam. Good interviews. What's with the "The Beginning" image at 3:15? It's so random. Use B-roll over jump cuts rather than using a fade to try to hide it. More images with Ken Burns during interviews. Don't leave anyone on screen talking for more than 10 seconds unless they are exiting and animated.

Sexual Harassment: Turn you audio levels up. Need credits at the end. The three shots of Amoely at the beginning are edited weird. There is a zoom (at 1:05) that fades quickly to another shot that is cross-dissolving to Cindy. That's too much going on all at once. Cut out the overhead zoom shot and just use the shot of her drawing facing the camera. The interviews could use b-roll if you can find good images to illustrate what they are talking about.

Rough Draft: First of all this is not an appropriate title. I have no idea who did this video. Second, the video does not work which usually means you either added the video to the folder before final cut was done creating it or you logged off before the video uploaded to the server. Always watch your video before you turn it in, then, check that it looks ok in the folder. You can look at it in the folder and see that it looks different than the others.

SLAM20 B

East Bay Homelessness: You need to fade from black at the beginning and fade to black at the end. Command-t at the beginning and end. Get rid of all the text during the interviews. You don't need it. The San Francisco to San Leandro graphic would work if you were showing SF during the SF graphic and then went through the tunnel and came out in SL. You don't put credits here (1:17). They make the viewer think the video is over. Put the credits at the end. You shouldn't have two different people do the voiceover. Have Helena do the whole thing. She sounds great. Trash that damned Italian music! It's not right for this topic. I swear if I hear this in your final I'll flunk you all.

Racism in the Media. The "Racist Things" text goes on too long. Quick. Turn off noise reduction on the first skit. Why do the asians have to loose the fight? Racists! :) Take that Superman song out. It will get it banned on Youtube.

Sexual Assault: Cut those questions out! Turn up the audio until it bounces near the zero. The Rape graphic travels off screen. Don't do that. So many jump cuts in the interview with me. Use B-Roll over jump cuts! Get rid of the off camera questions!!! Driving down the street B-roll should be images with ken burns applied. Driving down the street is completely unrelated. Edit the interviews so that each person you interview answers the same question. Then go through the next question and show everyone's response, then the next question. Don't show this as four separate interviews.

Teen Suicide: You need to fade from black at the beginning and fade to black at the end. Command-t at the beginning and end. At 0:57 you try to hide a jump cut by adding a transition. Start the B-roll there instead. What does that skit have to do with your topic? Jump cuts everywhere. Some are ok. too many means you are just being lazy. Only use them when they are funny. Cover the others with images using ken burns. The A+ is funny. :)

SLAM20C

Drug Abuse: Great job. Take that Snoop Dog at the end out because Youtube might block your video. Maybe upload this version to Youtube today and see what happens.

Homelessness: Great job. Maybe add some text in the places where it's hard to hear what they say. I don't know what the woman is saying at 2:00. Finish that B-Roll at the end and you're golden.

Sexism and Gender Roles: The audio seems very low. Turn it up until the peaks are in yellow/orange. It's Little Tikes, not Little tik. Turn up that question before Dr. Richardson. The shot at 3:15 is way too quick and cut off at the end. Try doing the whole montage of answers without the fades. Just straight cuts. The credits go by way too fast at the end. Give people time to read.

Teen Suicide: You need to fade from black at the beginning and fade to black at the end. Command-t at the beginning and end. At 0:57 you try to hide a jump cut by adding a transition. Start the B-roll there instead. What does that skit have to do with your topic? Jump cuts everywhere. Some are ok. too many means you are just being lazy. Only use them when they are funny. Cover the others with images using ken burns. The A+ is funny. :)