Summary
teen lives a privileged lifestyle, with a wealthy hedge fund father, and a MILF mother, though they are stressed all the time about "HIM" and what they "HAVE" to do. Apparently, the next thing he wants is their son, and they both refuse to give him up.
so the devil kills them (collects their souls), and sends a seductive demon to bring their son into the fold.
Characters
Balor - the devil
David Romero- the son - 6'
Kora - the temptress -- born in 1862, close to 150 years old
"for NYC" - visually 35 y/o - 5'9" - dark hair
"for David" - visually 22 y/o - 5'10" - dark hair, busty, from north carolina, slight accent
"a gift to David" from Balor
Lynne - the angel - (before pic pic pic - after pic pic pic pic pic pic - pic pic pic pic pic pic- pic pic)
parents - (Selene Romero - 5'6", Tristan Romero - 5'10")
References
Tension Ideas
** maybe the god/devil intro is over the devil killing David's parents... and he challenges the devil to confess to murdering his parents and still win him over
Kora gives him everything he asks for.... turning him into a tech mogul billionare at age 24
** maybe this isn't really god/devil, but more chaos/order.... Lynn the angel wants him to create order, while Kora wants to create chaos and excitement.
Lynn want to make him rich and secure within the systems of man (connected, rich tech mogul billionare)
Kora wants to make him a satan-king with true power (to control minds, and ultimately reshape reality) and tear down civilization of man
** god and the devil have a playful wager (devil is trying to win him over)
in an opening scene, the devil is trying to corrupt someone, and that person realizes it, and calls him by name.. and prays for god, and god appears to save the human soul and smite the devil... though it's more of a patronizing silly game
the devil (chaos) asserting he "should be the one in charge". that people want indulgence, they want excitement, that god has brainwashed them
god (order) asserting the devil's followers don't follow him, only his bribery. they always return to me in the end.
god offers a wager... "reveal yourself and your plan to an innocent of my choosing, and if you can earn his devotion, without any lies, I will let you out of the shadows, let humans choose between us again"
the devil is massively over confident... "just let me know who, and it will be done"
"aren't you forgetting something? a wager is not a wager without something to lose. If he dies before you succeed, then i will put your fate in his hands. deal?"
the devil grumbles.... but he hasn't had a chance like this in eons, so he submits... "i accept. who do you choose?"
** consequences **
the devil can't let David die (but he can kill anyone else) - maybe david notices this and starts to "test" it
he approaches david first with casual bribery and carnal pleasure (his inheritance, gifting him the servant Kora)
david eventually wants to know "what does he want with me?"
-> "he wants your help, bringing the world out of the decay and misery of christian morality. to remind them to live for the now"
(complex balanced conversation about paganism)
The devil (and Kora) indulges david's desires... to be a billionare tech mogul.. changing the world...
kora leads and transforms him... explains how the "rules" work (the limits to the devil's influence)
teaches him to trust the devil's hand... (that people will do as he wishes) first with women
then by recruiting talent, and pitching investors, and leading his company, (while Kora corrupts and encourages him always to think bigger.. hire more people, fuck whoever he wants, take whatever he wants)
they purchase a nearly dead public company as a way of going public quicker
finally by announcing his audacious product (with a wrinkle of indulgence)
Kora escorts him from the product launch to a large private jet
inside she shows him a computer screen of his new net-worth... $1.7B in after hours trading
Kora asks how it feels, to be a billionare tech mogul. (surreal)
Are you ready to hear the truth, to hear Balor's plan? (she explains the battle between God and Balor. she explains the fall. she explains the wager. and then she makes the devil's offer. He's not trying to take his soul or make a slave out of him or take him to "hell", whatever that is. Balor is offering to be David's sponsor, to make him a satan-king, like the chosen kings of old. If he will devote himself to Balor, he can reshape humanity however he likes.
Questions / Thoughts
should we make Kora not so busty at the start? YES -> so she can "transform" in front of him?
does he have a girlfriend? What is the backstory there? When did he lose his virginity?
what other "improbable" hints can we drop that Kora is supernatural?
David should have a girlfriend, who tries to convince him super-hot Kora is trouble
initially his g/f gets sidelined, but she comes back as an angel with a mission..
Long Arc Ideas
Perhaps David is important for some reason. Perhaps Kora is from the devil, and his girlfriend is an Angel.
Perhaps there is a deadline, like his 18th birthday? maybe god and the devil made a wager about him? about who can recruit him.
the Devil (chaos) controls events and randomness, corrupt thoughts, feelings, and perception
"power to play within the system"
but God (order) controls the substance and structure of everything... he seldom makes changes, because of ripple effect...
"power to change the entire system"
(through his proxy, david's g/f) he shows david the truth, and tries to enlist david to help him
asks how he would change things, how he would make things better
Kora is seducing David, promising him his wildest dreams -- seductively offering to make him the envy of the world
..meanwhile taunting his angel g/f for all her 'meaningless talk'...
the angel responds, how Kora is right, she won't steal and hurt others to make him happier... but together they can change things... HE sees beauty in all our uniqueness, and he wants to look at the world through your eyes
tell me, 'what do you see in her? is it her looks? he made man and woman, he can remake them."
Kora taunts more, "go ahead, David, tell her why you want me. he won't do anything about it"
... david confesses his does find her sexy, but it's her confidence, her seductive energy..
Lynne response, "ahh.. he is starting to see. he made woman a reflection of man, a mirror to show you the best part of yourself.. but you want a muse to inspire, an idol to admire." - and with that she's remade as a sexy, fit, strong, tall fitness model (pic pic pic)
..that turns the tables, as lynne is immediately alluring, and direct, and seductive -- in ways David had always wished she would be. he's surprised and drawn in. "is it really you?"
David ends up back with Lynne...
Story Intro
David Romero is raised in a wealthy life of privilege and is about to turn 18
His parents gains came with help from Balor (the devil), and now he wants David.
His parents don't want their son to be taken over, so they defy "Balor", and are killed for it in a freakishly improbable way.
The next day, the family lawyer brings "his assistant" Kora to be David's new "assistant slash butler"
Except Kora is really a 150 year old demon servant of Balor... who remade herself into the perfect young seductress with a slight southern drawl
At first Kora is just helpful and disarming.. like a hot butler/driver.
She makes lunch, gives him massages, drives him around, manages logistics of the house
They attend the funeral together...
afterwords, he cries. she consoles him. his emotions are running high, they are in very close proximity, and she's intentionally sending mixed signals, whispering to him, getting really close....and he kisses her.
*** THE KISS **
after finishing the kiss... she 'talks him down' - confessing she's attracted to him, but also that it "wouldn't be right" for her to go any further. he just lost his parents. she's being paid to be his assistant. etc. etc.
she alludes to how
'if you feel the same way when this is all over, we'll see.'
(family lawyer) goes over the real details of his family fortune, and the terms of his trust fund
he goes over the fortune... but "there is a catch" ???
she opens his mind to what he can do now that he's very wealthy
she takes him Ferrari shopping... and they actually buy one
Only he can't drive stick, and doesn't want to learn on a Ferrari..
so she "takes over" driving, and they joyride around the city..
then she takes them to a racetrack (which she rented out for him),
and drives a hot-lap to show him what the car is capable of
then she shows him what an insanely skilled driver she is
afterwords, they take a break on the fairway of the racetrack, where he gushes about how good a driver she is.. asking how she learned to do that. / She makes up a story about growing up in north carolina, and having two older brothers obsessed with racing
He has to show up for finals, so...
She drops-off and picks-him-up from school in the Ferrari, and his classmates are jealous of the car and the girl..
she takes him out to a very exclusive club to celebrate, hidden behind a plain door (her night club)
they show up at the club, to a non-descript door
inside, there are beautiful scantily clad women everywhere. he asks if it's a strip club... and she explains it's not, it's more of a playground for the ultra wealthy
she asks him to look around and see if there are any girls he likes... which makes him a little uncomfortable because he thought he was here to be with Kora.... ? does he say something ?
they are escorted to a VIP area above the floor...
then a couple gorgeous girls are sent up ?
Kora explains that David's been through alot in the last month, but that he's just gained access to his trust fund, and it's time for him to start living a little.
Kora orders them drinks, which the girls make (moscow mule), and then waits for David's reaction when he tries it
the girls dance for them a little, kissing, touching each other, then getting in close and touching/kissing both of them...
David is a little distracted by Kora kissing the other girl, until his girl starts fondling and teasing him, first with her hand, then with ice in her mouth... he's consumed by her skill, and she keeps him going for five or six minutes until he can't take it anymore and loses it into her mouth.
as she leaves to clean herself up, Kora asks the girl to dance for them, and curls up next to David, asking him what he thinks of his "new life"?
He can't believe any of this. Sometimes he wonders if it was him that died and went to heaven.
"You think they have clubs like this in heaven?" she jests.
"no, I suppose not. but seriously, how and why is this happening? And who are you? You're not a legal assistant. You're outrageously gorgeous, you cook like a professional chef, drive like a racecar driver, yet you're barely older than I am. How is that possible?"
"Do you really want to know?" He nodded, and she waved the dancer out of the room. "You're family success, you're mother's good looks, they were not from effort, or luck, or because of a prestigious college. You're parents made a deal with someone powerful, we call him Balor. Have you ever heard that name before?"
"A few times. The day before my birthday, my parents told me to stay away from him. That they wanted me never to be trapped like they were."
"Do you feel trapped right now, David?" He shook his head. "I'm here because Balor sent me to you. None of us know exactly what he wants. What we know is that he gives us anything we desire, and in exchange we give him our loyalty. You're parents fortune, your fortune, is a product of that arrangement, an arrangement Balor is generously willing to continue with you. I'm not here to handle the details, just to let you know that your choice is coming. Choose Balor, and you're world can be filled with wealth and power and experience that you can't imagine. Forsake him, and you may find it suddenly find things slipping through your fingers."
"What are you saying? That Balor can take away my inheritence?"
"Ohh David. He can do whatever he likes. He is the ruler of this world, the Fallen Star. He is the Devil Himself."
"You're saying my parents made a deal with the Devil? Like the actual Devil? You know how crazy that sounds?"
"I understand extraordinary claims require extraordinary evidence. He found me when I was fourteen, beaten and abused, but fierce and resourceful. He made me the same offer. Since then, I have served him well, and for that I have earned not only wealth, but true power. Including the power to take on any form I choose. I took on this young persona for you. I prefer one a little less, childish."
** TRANSFORMATION **
David's vision suddenly blurred, and he felt uneasy, like he was about to faint. It passed in just a few seconds, and when it did, he felt queasy. Instead of Kora seeming approachingly pretty, she was intimidatingly gorgeous. Her previously brown eyes had turned piercing green, her face was more slender and striking, and her hair was streaked with dramatic red highlights. However, those changes paled in comparison to her breasts, which had grown large and round and were literally popping out of the top of her dress. (pic pic pic pic pic pic pic pic)
"Whoa. Holy shit!" David startled, not able to accept what he had just seen. "How did you do that?"
"I told you. I am Kora, demon servant of Balor, who has offered me to you as a gift. I can give you nearly anything you desire. Success, money, fame, women, and sex... lots and lots of sex. I can make any woman your slave, your seductress, your mistress. Shall I bring the girls back for you to play with?"
"Holy shit! This is not happening.
??? what next ???
? she flaunts her role as a provider of desire and pleasure. (money, toys, girls)
? she climbs ontop of him, and starts to fuck him? (or maybe she started earlier)
(but i'm not 21) "don't worry, they won't card you if you're with me... trust me."
they decide the backstory will be that she's his (step-sister? step-mom? roomate?)
she encourages him to look around for a pretty girl he likes.
(which is hard for him, because none of the girls are nearly as hot as Kora)
finally after lots of pressure, he points out a pretty girl across the room
Kora whispers to the waitress, and the girl is summoned over
after they start sleeping together...
she teases him about how lucky he is... she bets none of his friends are getting a blowjob before breakfast
she teases him about the fact that she can turn him on whenever she wants
Ideas
maybe open with an introduction to and remaking of Kora?
she's a wealthy Madame, an impressively gorgeous apparently ~36 y/o high class Madame, who finds, remakes, trains, and supplies gorgeous girls to wealthy elites, their parties, and their friends
show her recruiting and converting a new girl
finding a corruptible vane young girl at a bar. not quite pretty enough. not quite tall enough. not quite fashionable enough, not quite sexy enough, to get any attention with the men. Befriend her. The girl is envious of Kora's beauty, which Kora sluffs off as just a wrapper. She's known girls like her. What she wants isn't just to be pretty, she wants to feel powerful. To command the attention of others.
Kora asks her what guy she would want, if she could have any guy at the bar.
Kora teases the idea she can get that guy, if she really wants it.
Kora does a 'mini makeover'... taking her to the bathroom, giving her a cleavage revealing low cut lace up sweater, stuffing her bra to puff up her tits, teasing out her hair. -- but also giving her a little supernatural boost ( pic pic pic)
then she demonstrates.. enticing the guy over. forwardly french kissing him. then...
?? somehow manipulating him...
?? maybe by "glamoring" him with hypnotic suggestion to be just as attracted to the girl
before they leave, she gives the girl a card, telling her that when she wants to have that power for herself, to call
show her receiving a messages from Balor, though her "handler" (the Romero family lawyer)
he explains that he has an important assignment. An innocent is going to experience a terrible tragedy, and he'll need 24/7 emotional support, care, and the kind of connection you specialize in..
Alright. Sounds like a keeper by day, play-thing by night. I know the perfect girl, she's barely 20, but she's already a true believer.
"No. He said he has to be you. This one is especially important to him. He wants him brought into the fold and doesn't want to take any chances."
A sour taste flooded her mouth. She'd spent decades building her life, her business. She winced at the thought of leaving it. But then she wouldn't have any of it without Balor. She quickly buried her dissent and smiled, "of course. I can go right away. Will you be tending my flock here directly, or should I put someone in charge?"
"You should put someone in charge. I'm on deck for this new disciple as well." She silently scowled again, as that certainly made things more complicated. He approached her, adding a few more details. "Also, he's young, turning eighteen tomorrow. Balor wants you relatable yet irresistible. Compassionate yet seductive. Caring yet..."
She raised her hand to cut him short, "you know how long i've been doing this. This is what I do. show him to me." He touched her hand, and suddenly a flash of images, thoughts, and memories of the life of David Ramero flashed through her head. From the way he looked up to his father, to the false bravado of a child raised in privilege, to the physique of someone sculpted for sports, to the petty crushes and sexual inexperience of a teenager, to the wank material he used to excite himself. She almost knew more about David than he knew about himself. "Say no more." Suddenly, she began to change. First decades of age melted off her, her face becoming smooth and clear. Then her waist and arms and legs slimmed, while he chest inflated and firmed. Finally, she made herself taller. She decided 5'11" would inspire David's fascination with taller girls while only raising a little extra attention. When she was done, she could equally fit in on a college campus or as the star of a porn movie. "This should do nicely. When do I start?"
"The tragedy happens today. His parents have lost their mortal usefulness and will be collected. You are to go over tommorow at 1pm. I'll introduce you as my assistant, Anita." With that, he stepped closer, admiring her new form. His weakness for physical seduction had faded a century ago, when he got a taste of real power, but he still found himself instinctual attracted to her new form. He intimately reached for her neck, brushing her hair out of the way in the process. "Wow, I see why he wants you to go personally. You're stunning."
... she flaunts that she could send any girl looking like this, and any girl can give a man what he wants. he wants me because I know how to always have him coming back for more.
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AThe day before his 18th birthday, they sit him down, and try to dance-around their "grand bargain" with a "powerful man", and how they have to defy him, and they don't know what will happen to them. Then they go on about not trusting strangers, how people will be out to get things from him. (money?) yes, but more than money. But he has to promise, never to give in, never to be seduced by someone offering the world to him.
The next day is his birthday, and his parents give him a new car, and staff are all over the yard preparing for a lavish party, and then suddenly, unexpectedly, the most freakish accident occurs, and a small airplane literally crashes on top of his parents in their backyard. The boy is distraught and destroyed, weeping over the bodies, and not even able to think straight. Fire trucks show up, sirens howling, but there's just some charred remains and hunks of metal, no actual fire.
He runs to his room and smokes up, then collapses.
The next day
He wakes up to a ringing phone at 11am. It's his family lawyer, offering his condolences, asking how he's holding up, asking if he needs anything immediately? His assistant Anita is bringing over some groceries, a credit card, ATM card, and some spending cash. Do you have anyone that can come stay with you? A relative? A friend? .... no, i don't know. can we talk about this later today, my head is killing me?
He wakes again to the sound of the doorbell being run over and over. He stumbles down the stairs, and opens the door to a casually dressed young girl, with dark straight hair, glasses and a youthful face that suggested she was only slightly older than him. Only she was possibly the hottest girl he'd ever seen. And she was tall, very tall, he suddenly realized he had to look up to meet her eyes. "Uhh? He-llo?" he stammered out, dumbfounded as he looked her over. (pic pic pic pic pic pic pic) While her white t-shirt and jeans were simple, they showed off every curve of her slender body, especially her unusually large rack. He looked down, trying not to stare, and when he realized she was wearing heels he felt a little less intimidated. On the ground on either side of her was a grocery bag, and it suddenly clicked, "ohh, you must be Anita. Please come in."
"Yes, the woman smiled and picked up the bags. As she entered the house, she smirked and stared him in the eye. Then he watched her perfect ass saunter directly towards the kitchen, like she'd been in his house a hundred times before. He closed the front door and rushed to catch up.
In the kitchen, she was already putting the groceries away. She didn't seem to need any help, so he curled up on a stool and watched. Bread and cereal in the pantry - fruit, vegetables, milk, and some tasty looking steaks into the fridge. As beautiful as she was, anything she did seemed like a show. When she was finished, she neatly folded the bags, "at least now you won't starve."
"Yeah, that's good," he agreed and chuckled. As she walked towards him, she had that look again, directly staring him down, like she knew him, or knew something he didn't know, or was just so confident she was going to do whatever the hell she wanted. She reached out and flirtatiously touched his arm. Up close, sitting down, her height advantage seemed even more prominent. She looked like she couldn't be more than a few years older than him, but he'd never seen anyone so confident. Maybe his father, but only sometimes.
"Ohh, you poor thing. They told me what happened. I'm sure it was terrible to lose your parents, and right in front of you no less. Are you processing it yet, or still in shock?" She didn't wait for a reply, but instead circled around, conspicuously dragging her hand up his arm. Her flirtation was suspicious, and he was about to challenge her, when her hands found his shoulders and started firmly and rhythmically squeezing. Her grip was strong, and as his muscles resisted, he winced slightly. "Yeah, I could see how much tension you're holding from across the room. I'm going to loosen this up. All you have to do is let go."
It hurt, but it felt good, as she kneaded his shoulders. At first he resisted, but then he felt himself relaxing. "Oww!" A sharp pain drilled his back, as she squeezed much harder than he expected. "Oww! Oww, stop!" Only she didn't let go, she squeezed even harder, much harder than he thought her capable of. The pain was so sharp, his instinct was to get up and away from her, or somehow stop her, but he found his arms non responsive, and when he tried to stand her grip was so strong he couldn't budge. "Owwwww," he cried out, "what? let me go. Owwww."
"Don't fight it. Relax, and the tension will be gone." It was hard to listen with daggers drilling into his shoulder blades, but he couldn't get up, so he didn't have much of a choice. He tried to relax, calm his mind and his muscles. A minute later, the pain finally started to subside, and she eased her grip, moving her hands a little, and causing him to wince once again until he was able to get that tension to also let go. "Better?" She asked, as she released, and swung around to his side.
"Uhhh, yeah actually," he said, a little delirious from the jello like sensation of floating calm having replaced so much tension. He rotated his right shoulder, and it felt light and effortless. "Whoa, that's really good. So are you some kind of masseuse or something?"
"As you get to know me, you'll find I know how to do a little bit of everything. Right now, you're probably wondering why I'm even here. You're parents were very well off. You've been through alot, and right now the most important thing is for you to be comfortable and process what's happened. So (family lawyer) asked me to stay here here to make sure you eat, and sleep, take care of yourself, and don't do anything stupid."
"Anything stupid? What? Like suicide? I'm not. No. That's not me. But what do you mean stay here? Like in the house?"
"Yes. In the house. You can tell me where. And please don't say no, because I'm already on thin ice with (family lawyer), and he'll just stick me back in the filing room. I'd much rather be here with you, and nobody should be alone after losing their family. It's cruel."
"I guess that makes sense. I still can't believe they're gone." His mind drifted, looking across the kitchen, finding it hard to imagine his mom or dad wasn't going to round the corner into the room and be totally okay. He snapped out of it as she tugged on his arm.
"Earth to David. You're thinking about them aren't you?" He nodded. "I know how horrible it is. I lost my father when I was twelve. One minute he was there, the next he was gone. The world just isn't fair sometimes. You'll start to really feel it when you do things you used to do together, and they are just not there. That's why I'm here. Because people have no idea what they are capable of in the throws of grief, and those who care about you want to be overly careful rather than sorry."
"Okay. I guess that makes sense." He heard everything he said, but it barely registered. Like she was suddenly a million miles away, and his brain was stuck in a fog.
"At some point we'l going to set you up with a professional therapist, but for now, just know that you can tell me anything you want, or nothing at all. Whatever you feel comfortable with." He nodded. He felt like he was falling backwards down a tunnel, and she was talking to him from the other end. "David? You suddenly look really sad. Can I give you a hug." He nodded but didn't move, so she reached around him and firmly squeezed him.
David suddenly felt his eyes welling up, and laid his head down as he started to silently weep. "I..I can't believe they are gone." As he cried, the tunnel and fog faded, and he found himself grasping Kora tightly. His vision blurred with tears, and he wiped his face against her. When he realized he had just smeared his face into her right breast and left a prominant wet spot on her shirt, he stiffened up in embarrassment. "Ohh, I'm so sorry."
"No. You don't need to apologize. My breasts bring me so much unwanted attention that if they can provide some comfort and catch some tears, it'll be a huge improvement." She looked down and rubbed the wet spot on her shirt, "and this will be dry in no time." Of course, David watched her fingers push into the soft flesh, how could he not? Then he wondered if she was flirting with him. Though she was so attractive anything she did seemed flirty.
He realized he had spaced again and was just staring at her tits. He startled himself, and looked up to find she was watching him do it. He started another apology, but she shook her finger to cut him off.
"No apology, that's my fault, I tricked you into it. I usually hate the way most people stare at them the moment they meet me, but when I meet a nice cute guy who doesn't stare, I suddenly miss the attention and worry he doesn't like me. It's a very bad habit. Sometimes I think they are such a curse."
"Really!?" David exclaimed, a little to emphatically not to explain. "It seems like," he realized he better be careful, "some women pay
?? where is this going ??
she flirts and takes care of him... and maybe even disarms him (treating him like a little brother)
the next day
then she confesses she is attracted to him...
blaming herself for her unprofessional awkwardness...
confessing that she thinks he's cute
until finally they kiss, "breaking the ice" and diving right into full on making out...