"Well, your time to die is now." says the prideful Ark as he starts to swing his sword. Thanatos yells, "I WILL NOT BE HELD DOWN A KNEE FOR SOME HUMAN PESTS!" he charges up a fire attack within himself and fires a radius fire and launches Ark back almost to the back of the river as Ark gets back up, he sees Thanatos charging up to his complete power demon form. As soon as Ark tries to stop it, it is too late; Thanatos has turned himself into his true demon form as Ark looks in horror. Gripping his sword tightly but still shaking, Ark realizes that he must fight an actual demon. Ark sprints towards the demon with N.I.B in front of him to bash the demon. The demon flies into the air with hyper-fast speed and launches Ark at the gate. Ark feels sinister behind him and immediately sees that one of the people who made up the wall was grabbing him and pleading to set his soul free. As Ark stands back in horror, the demon speaks to Ark in a nasty and raspy voice, "I have entertained you enough human, us gatekeepers have mastered our demon form and are not bound by a rage, so I am still Thanatos, and I will add you to my collection of people that you see on that very wall." Ark sprints towards Thanatos, but he flies behind him, and fire blasts Ark from behind his back. Ark fell and saw that Thanatos was charging up a super attack, and since he is in his demon form, he fires it at Ark. Ark lets out a scream of pain and manages to pick himself back up. Thanatos is flying up in the sky and says to Ark, "won't you just fall already, human." Ark looks up, then looks down and gets an idea. Ark screams to Thanatos, "don't think you're safe up there, demon!" Thanatos laughs and suddenly sees Arm running towards him and yells at Ark, "your silly illusions won't fool me, human. "Then suddenly when Ark gets to the top, he stabs his blade in the chest where Thanatos was already stabbed and said to him, "this is no illusion, my friend this is the power of a HUMAN!" then Ark proceeds to start cutting Thanatos down to split him in half!
The things that really inspired me to write this story are two pieces of story. One of them is Dante's divine comedy called Dante's inferno and another manga from Japan called berserk. My writing process at first was just “write an interesting story about a guy killing everything in hell” but now I want to write a story with a deeper meaning and where the character isn't the main hero from other stories. I'm structuring an essay into parts sort of like video games where there are different levels.
I like how imaginary this piece is. It felt real as I was reading. I also like the meaning you had behind it. No demon is capable of stopping a Human. I also like how you included like caps letter and exclamation marks in order to show the tone of the characters.
--Luis Valencia
I really loved the imagery in this story especially since its portraying a battle scene. Some things I really liked was the fact that the author managed to tell the reader in detail what Ark did to the demon Thanatos. I noticed that the author uses a lot of imagery to explain his story since I'm guessing most of his story in this chapter is full of battle.
--Emely Galdamez
I love the vast amount of imagery and the way it sounds like a script to an anime or a very well written novel. Also like how it draws inspiration from Berserk.
--Saul Diaz
I really liked how much thought you put into this piece and how it has inspired you to want to write a story with a deeper meaning and something different. I liked how you described each action of both characters in detail. Keep up the good work!!
--Arianna Ramirez
I really loved the imagery in your story, It was so great, I could see the battle in my head. I enjoyed how you made it seem as if Ark would die and in the end he, a human, was able to defeat and kill a demon. Amazing message.
--Maria Soto
I really like the level of detail that was put into this story. I liked that the author was able to describe what's happening in vivid detail. It feels as if I could really imagine the character and the situation they are in.
--Victoria Brito