Those cold little rooms still haunt me ,
Those little words you would fight to push out
Those little gray hairs that felt soft to touch
those moments remind me of you.
But why couldn't you remember my name
She would smile at me
She would mumble words at me
Think please think
Do you remember our trips?
I do
Do you remember when you would play with me?
I do
Now all I think about is your cold feet
Now all I think about is me and my dad crying
Now all I think is the day before you left; or ,
And that one phone call I got
Thank you for fighting to remember your son's name
Thank you for battling to recall your name
Thank you for struggling till the end
I love you.
What inspired me to write this poem was the “A Dog Has died” poem. It gave me the idea to write about someone I lost that I hold dearly. My grandmother was battling with dementia in her last days. My dad and I would visit her once in a while. I couldn't stand to look at her sometimes, it was too sad. I used repetition in my poem, just like I would do to her in person. In "A dog Has Died" the author throws his emotions, and that's what I tried to illustrate in mine. I used lots of reputation in my poem, and questions.
(About me)
When my mom and dad were still living together, I would visit my grandma, and she would take care of me when I was young. She was my best friend and would take me to McDonald's for breakfast. She would always buy the Bagel egg, bacon, and cheese sandwich, which I fell in love with because it was her favorite order. I started to grow up and started to ignore her. When my parents divorced, I took her for granted. Until her last days when she was gone, I noticed that she was the first person in my life to die that I couldn't stop crying and start crying when I think of her.
I really like that you can feel Mary's regret and desperation for her grandma. The memories and the way she structure her poem is amazing. Going from remembering to thanking is a way to express how much a person means to you. Whenever I read the description it made me think of my own experience with my grandpa. This poem overall is beautiful.
--Jessica Martinez
I really liked your poem, it is very emotional yet very realistic. This poem you can feel what you felt at that exact moment. I liked how your expressions had so many emotions such as confused, sad, broken etc. I noticed about your writing style that your punctuation is good and that everything fits perfect in place.
--Arly Morales
I loved your poem and the way you where describing how you where feeling in that very moment. This make me think about my grandma that passed away a few years ago, that's why I think I felt so connected to your words because I have felt that way before.
--Brandy Tovar