When you fall asleep at night what's the last thing that comes to mind?
Is it the test that you have next week or all the stars in the sky?
Did you stop calling Pluto a planet so it didn't feel like you?
Did you stop believing lies that could set pants on fire?
Do you still stutter when you talk?
Your mouth could never keep up with your own thoughts
you were always so eager to talk.
Do you still giggle when you’re nervous?
Your giggles always canceled out the sound of your own voice.
Who was there when it felt like the only person you had was the man in the moon?
The faces from above sometimes felt more comforting than the earth
that hovered below your feet
that has seen all the tears you’ve weeped.
Have you learned to see life through your own eyes?
The thought and curiosity of how my past self would think of me now inspired me to write this poem. This poem was a reflection of my past self and my current self seeking validation. I structured my poem through the listing writing technique by asking questions then changed to providing explanations to them as my poem progressed.
I really liked lines 5-9 as it set the mood of the poem. I feel like these lines showcase the feeling the author was in as they asked themselves questions that connected with their younger self. This piece made me think of all the habits we've left behind with our old selves as we grew older.
--Liliana Sesmas
I really enjoyed how you used rhetorical questions for majority of your poem. They allow you to self reflect and each answer will always be different. My favorite line was line 10 where you express loneliness and comfort with the man in the moon.
--Mariah Martinez
The rhetorical questions is what I enjoyed because really I can't think of an answer, just solutions scattered. Another thing I liked was I cant get a grasp of your piece because it's intriguing to a point where I'm trying to understand your poem.
--Daniel Sorto