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"When you read this story, the first thing you notice is the author's use of imagery."
Revised:
"The first thing readers will notice is the author's use of imagery."
"Throughout the story you get the sense that bad things are awaiting the protagonist."
Revised:
"Throughout the story, the author creates a palpable sense of impending doom awaiting the protagonist."
Avoiding "you"
Right now, I am writing to an audience that needs directions, so when I write something on website like, "YOU should make sure your thesis statement is a debatable sentence", I am addressing YOU (the reader).
The following sentences, on the other hand, show INCORRECT ways to use the word "you".
Eliminating "I", "me", "my"
Sometimes using pronouns like "I" will only weaken your argument.
"I believe this novel is one of the most important works of fiction in American history."
Revised
"This novel is one of the most important works of fiction in American history."
"In my opinion, the author created a protagonist that audiences will have a conflicted relationship with."
Revised
"The author created a protagonist that audiences will have a conflicted relationship with."
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