Post date: Oct 26, 2011 7:07:55 PM
Rewrite essay.
Yesterday's assignment was focused on organizing and delivering content / information. Essays are practical, informative, and blunt--good job.
Today's assignment is focused on (1) improving transitions, (2) using descriptive words, and (3) creating a conclusion.
Yesterday's essay had the sound and feel of a recipe (which is good, it is functional, it works). Today's essay should have the sound and feel of an advertisement--well, not exactly the sound and feel of an advertisement but the writing should be more "descriptive" and "accessible" and "reader-friendly" and less practical, blunt, and direct.