Put commas after subordinate clauses (each student made of list of words to check for)
Replace the word "it" with another word, do this for the first five times the word "it" is used
No two sentences in any one paragraph may begin with the same word
Add a new paragraph to the end of the story; this paragraph is a "moral to the story." What is the moral of your story? What are we to learn from your story. Say the moral in a new paragraph. Add the new paragraph to the end of your story