10/18

Post date: Oct 18, 2011 8:23:32 PM

Third time, please rewrite essay.

• Use different paragraphs
• Put commas after subordinate clauses (each student made of list of words to check for)
• Replace the word "it" with another word, do this for the first five times the word "it" is used
• No two sentences in any one paragraph may begin with the same word
• Add a new paragraph to the end of the story; this paragraph is a "moral to the story." What is the moral of your story? What are we to learn from your story. Say the moral in a new paragraph. Add the new paragraph to the end of your story