For this assignment, you are to take another look at one of your original pieces in the informal writing unit. You need to revise the piece so that it conforms to the model paragraph.
Select a piece that you like, want to work on, and have more to say.
When you revise, you need to READ the paragraph critically to see where you can make changes. (See the pdf handout on Developing Detail: How to on the sidebar under Homework Resources)
You should revise the piece, format it in double space, and make sure the conventions are standard.
Questions to Ask of Each Paragraph:
1. Does the paragraph have a clearly defined point?
2. Does each sentence support the point?
3. Is each sentence connected to the point?
4. Are there any sentences which are not relevant?
5. Is there sufficient detail to support the point?
6. Is the organization of the paragraph clear to the reader?
7. Does the organization of the paragraph support the point?