By Carlos Ticas

It’s an urge, I was told every champion has felt it
Every successful person has felt it
The urge.. to quit
I don’t want to give up on my dreams…
I don’t want to give up on myself
I don’t want a life I’d be miserable having
I have people that have hope in me
Hearing people cheering me on
I cannot be a failure.
Listening to those who see something great in me
Reaching out to grab their hand
But I’m only tasting my tears
As they rolls down my face
I cannot let them down… I can’t let myself down.
It’s screaming my name to chase it
I'm reaching out with all of my strength to grab on to it
Stretching every millimeter of my body to reach it
But I feel so weak.
It’s a rope that I’m holding on to
It hurts now but in the end it will all be worth it
I can almost feel it
It feels so close yet so far away
I just have to push myself
To continue and continue and continue
Because I can’t stop, my future depends on it
I’m surrounded in a tunnel with dark clouds surrounding me
Raining hard without seeing the light in the end for a long time
I just have to keep my faith.

Author's Commentary

What inspired me to write this is how I’m constantly in fear of failure in not accomplishing my dreams, of not becoming who I want to be, the one I’ve always been building myself to become, the fear of not making it. Because I simply just want the best for myself doing what I love, but I’m constantly imagining the outcome of failure and everything that comes with it, but I hope and pray it goes great.

Rhetorical Analysis

My writing is focused on the anxiety and pressure I feel and not knowing how to manage it because of the dreams I have, I talk about my feelings of being weak, tired, scared of being a disappointment, it was almost therapy because I was holding these feelings in for long and writing them down was relieving, it felt like I was able to let some stress go.

The most important parts of my writing is when I say “I’m surrounded in a tunnel with dark clouds surrounding me raining hard without seeing the light in the end for a long time I just have to keep my faith.” because it reminds me that even if I’m going through the storms, to still keep my faith even if it gets hard, because it would be worth it in the end. I would say the tone of my writing is determined and anxious because I feel motivated to keep going but scared of failing on the thing that depends on my future.

In conclusion, the purpose of this was to explain how I feel scared, scared of failure, scared of disappointing myself, my close ones. I chose to write about this because I just felt something saying that this is what I should speak on since it’s always on my mind, since it’s always something I wanted to say but couldn’t find the words for. My audience is anyone who is willing to have an idea of what I am feeling.

Feedback

What I like about this poem is that from just reading it I can just know how the writer is feeling. My favorite stanza that I liked was ¨Its hurt now but at the end it will be worth it." I notice that the author is very detail word choice in the way that you can have a picture in your head by just reading the poem. Overall just by reading the poem I can see how its tell me that even though it difficult to not give up to keep trying and have faith.

--Jacqueline Santos

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