By Amah'rion Poston
During the day I'm lost
While I'm trying to find my way through the light
I still seem to face obstacles even though it's clear to see
I bump my head due to such spite
I wish to see something better each time
But my senses seem to play in my demise
Entering that daily ponder
I begin to wonder
If I’ll ever see something more immense than what i’ve received
At the dead of night I prepare for my stroll
Hoping that whatever is in store for me
Doesn’t take a toll
Walking in the darkness next to a decrepit house
The sound of heavy barking far ahead
Light breeze grazing my face, sounding like light whispers in my ear
Resulting in me grasping my blue hoodie
So many things to be apprehensive about
Except I'm only full of anxiety for what I may oppose
I look down at my feet and I become distracted
Looking at my dingy white vans
Dark dirty bands across the strings
And I feel a tap on my shoulder
I see a familiar man
Skin brown, haircut low, and a nice tidy Jogger suit
I look him in the eye and tears begin to form
I finally found you.
The title of my poem is called After Daylight. It is based on a girl searching for someone very dear to her. She hasn't seen him since she was merely a young girl. So when she grew older she decided to search for him. She faced obstacles while looking for him. While adding things to my writing, I decided to add more diction to help the reader visualize the scenes.
In the beginning of my poem I started off with a different time of day, and emphasized some of the struggles this girl faced while searching for her special someone. “While I'm trying to find my way through the light, I still seem to face obstacles even though it's clear to see”. I ended my poem with a cliffhanger, not telling the reader exactly who the girl found. Or who the man was to her but just enough to keep the reader thinking/guessing.
For diction I used words that would explain in detail what was going on throughout the scenes the girl was in to help the reader visualize what she felt, heard, or seen. For example I wrote “Walking in the darkness next to a decrepit house,The sound of heavy barking far ahead,Light breeze grazing my face, sounding like light whispers in my ear ,Resulting in me grasping my blue hoodie”. I wrote this to emphasize what she was surrounded by. This affected the tone of my writing because it gives off a certain feeling while you’re reading the text. If I was to describe the tone of this piece I'd say it's calm, a little sad, and mysterious.
The purpose of this piece is to show that giving up isn't always the case. She was persistent and determined to find this person despite the bumps she had to come across. I chose to write about this because I have faced a lot of obstacles in my life and I've even chosen the give up route. It has never taken me anywhere, but when I am persistent I tend to face success. And that goes as far as anyone. I chose to connect with my audience by using great diction to help the reader understand her perspective better.