by Diego Avelar
One day I went outside to meet my favorite person. She was on her way home and we had planned this yesterday. We called before we saw each other because we both love hearing each other's voices. I had to walk over to her place since I didn't have a car or bicycle to get there faster. The time it took for me to get there is about 15 minutes and she’s barely coming home from school since she’s doing in-person and I'm in an in-distance school. I don’t usually like going outside unless I’m with someone because it gets boring. But when I went out to go meet up with her, even though I was walking by myself, I liked walking and the wind hitting my face felt really good and this is the first time I liked that. Hearing the cars go by and the sun hitting my face was refreshing but I was sweating a lot which I hate. We’d already met a couple times and it’s risky because she has a strict family, or rather a strict mother so we can’t meet all the time as we want to but we’re making it work. And not only that, since her mother is strict, she doesn’t let her go outside because she’s basically a rebel but ever since we started talking, she’s calmed down and hasn’t done any bad things so far which is good. But yea, we got into a call and we talked. We talked about what we’re gonna do when we see each other because we literally don’t know what to do when we see each other until we actually see each other which is pretty funny. But yea, we talked about that and I usually tease her because she’s shy and I'm pretty shy too but i'm not too shy which is good I think. And when I tease her, she always says “stop it” with such a cute voice and she says it’s not cute but I think it’s cute.
What inspired me to write this story was that it was the only story I can remember that I can use sensory details. And I have to be open about myself so i guess that’s a step towards that.
The text structure is Sequence. It talks about my day where it starts off going outside and then calling someone. It ends off with me complimenting my favorite person's cute voice.
It looks like I didn’t use any literary devices.
The words that give off a happy vibe and joy are “cute”, “pretty”, and “When I tease her…”. It shows just how happy I am and that I like to talk about her and I don’t usually use words like so yea. And just the general day I was happy because I was going to go meet up with her.
The text structure is Sequence. It talks about my day where it starts off going outside and then calling someone. It ends off with me complimenting my favorite person's cute voice.
It looks like I didn’t use any literary devices.
The words that give off a happy vibe and joy are “cute”, “pretty”, and “When I tease her…”. It shows just how happy I am and that I like to talk about her and I don’t usually use words like so yea. And just the general day I was happy because I was going to go meet up with her.
In the story “A Good Day To Go Out”, Diego Avelar talks about his day and about meeting his favorite person. The focus of this story is his favorite person and what makes him happy. He talks about her in a way that seems to be in a relationship that can’t be broken. Like, “We called before we saw each other because we both love hearing each other's voices.” He also teases her and it seems like he does it on purpose.
It starts off by the author telling the readers that he “went outside”. The text is organized by sequence which makes sense because a story is supposed to have a first, which is the author going outside and then his next, him calling her as she’s going back home. Then his description of what it was like outside which was sunny and windy. And then the last part which is him saying what it’s like when they talk.
Some important words and phrases in this story are “cute”, “shy”, “ we both love hearing each other's voices.” and “When i tease her…”. I find these words and phrases important because it shows where his mind is at when he says those words and phrases. This story didn’t use any literary devices which could've but didn’t. These words and phrases make the tone happy. He uses words that make the story seem optimistic and it seems like he enjoys talking about her but i wouldn’t know of course. ;)
Diego wrote this piece not because he wanted to but because that was the only thing he remembered that he can use for sensory detail. The story isn’t even finished but so far the story's main message was about his day and him being happy. I guess his audience would be couples with good relationships.