It was dark… The sky is like a sapphire. So many stars like I have never seen before. It stares at me with its pricing hollow eyes. A tall tree like a monster. It was 6 feet, its breathing pierced my heart.
It was Saturday afternoon during summer break.
My parents and I always go to our log cabin during the break.
“Hurry up!“ called my mother.
I was so excited to make this trip because last year we were unable to go due to a storm.
It comes closer and I try to run away. I am running, but the tree monster is faster. As I run, I remember that I have a lighter in my pocket. ”It is wood, so I should be able to burn it.” I grab a long thick stick as I run and try lighting it. Not paying attention, I tripped. The monster is closer, and I can light the stick. It finally lights up and the monster steps away. I get up and move closer. I swing the fire stick at it and it backs away. I knew it would work.
As I saw the tree monster burn I heard a “crack.” I turn around to see two little tree monsters.
“Oh no, what have I done?”
In my story I am exploring the idea of how we see others. The main character assumes that the tree creature wants to hurt her. Based on how it looks, she thinks it is a monster and decides to kill it. Then she sees that the “tree monster” was protecting its kids. I focused on using imagery and details. I was inspired to write this story because I have seen many people judge others by the way they look and not by their actions.
"Nice story! I liked your descriptive words and lines, ¨The sky is like a sapphire. So many stars like I have never seen before. It stares at me with its pricing hollow eyes.¨ I can imagine it in my mind. Your lines that describe the sky and stars are very pretty, I can visualize it. I also liked the message behind it, how you ended the story with the moment of realization, the mistake of your actions. It also made me think of that message too, how many people quickly judge others by the way they look, but not their personalities or actions. "
--Lynne Vu