The sky painted so beautifully for
you and me,
An ethereal glow.
Brushed with whisks of blue and
ombre of pinks
the luminous yellow orbit,
sitting between day and night,
sets into
a pool of orange,
hiding behind uniform trees,
signaling the end of daylight
and the beginning of the night.
Looking out the window,
wondering how you never viewed it
in the same way, as I did.
It could have been dawn,
a welcoming beginning,
but what about
a hopeful ending?
In my poem, I am exploring the theme of reminiscence and nostalgia, when looking at the sky during a sunset. I was in the car when I wrote this poem since I was listening to some music ,and it made me think about a bundle of good/bad memories. I describe the sky like a painting and contrast the way I look at it from others who don't view it in the special way that I do. I explore the idea of how the sky is always present in our lives, how simple and yet so beautiful it is. I also explored how the sunset represents hope and peace.
My poem was inspired by reflecting upon my good memories, with the theme of reminiscence and nostalgia in mind. I started with writing in the car and looking at the sunset, but all of the other themes I explored came together whenever I wrote the rest of the poem. I wanted to symbolize the sunset with different meanings, showing appreciation for its beauty, and how there will always be hope.
"This poem was astonishing to say the least. The words, the word placements everything was almost perfectly placed. The poem itself was beautiful, the meaning, and emotions that one feels while reading it is miraculous."
--Victor Rivas
"I like that way you describe the colors it made me picture a sunset. I also liked the spacing that you added it gives the reader time to think about what they just read. I liked how you ended the poem with hope:
It could have been dawn,
a welcoming beginning,
but what about
a hopeful ending?”
--Jennifer Limon
"I really like how your poem is full of details and figurative language. It's fascinating how it's so descriptive yet so short. I like the line "Brushed with whisks of blue and ombre of pinks" I can imagine the colors the way you described the sunset. I also liked the way you structured your poem, very nice."
--Angelica Gamarras
" 'An ethereal glow' is a phrase that I liked in the Sunset poem and my favorite details in this piece were 4 last sentences because they showed me the contrast between the beginning and the end, but both aim for a good result. Additionally, I also noticed that the author of this poem used a rhythm style to create the connection between the sentences. And this piece makes me think of hope and peace."
--Binh Phuong Nguyen
"When I first read this poem what stood out to me was the imagery and the way you wrote all those details especially when you wrote "the luminous yellow orbit, sitting between day and night, sets into a pool of orange." I can just imagine it in my head."
--Meredith Mendoza