EVERY lesson has a reflection in the last 5 minutes. WHAT - SO WHAT - NOW WHAT?
Your thesis statement is the essential 'answer' your essay gives to its respective essay question or stimulus. Many students struggle with the momentous task that is writing the perfect thesis statement to earn maximum marks, particularly in the HSC subjects that require extended essay responses: English, History, Art, Music, Drama, Business Studies, Society & Culture. It seems the essay is inescapable.
Give me an example! I hear you all internally cry. Well, do you know why you do that? It's because a human inherently has a short attention span, and we demand to Know The Meaning Of This when we are presented with new information. It's the reason news articles get to the point extremely quickly, and make the author's position known. Before the age of the Tweet and the 140-character attention span, epic-verse writers knew they had to 'signpost' or 'telegraph' their meaning early and often, and when matters of seriousness such as magistrate's law judgments, a doctor's prognosis, or political matters of diplomacy tended to get into long winded information, a thesis statement became useful to summarise the information quickly for those who only have time to glance at a long document.
In ancient times, the concept of a thesis was put forth by Aristotle, in his Topics, Book I:
"Problems, then, and propositions are to be defined as aforesaid. A thesis is a paradoxical belief of some eminent philosopher- e.g. the view that contradiction is impossible, as Antisthenes said- or the view of Heraclitus that all things are in motion- or that what exists is one, as Melissus says- for to take notice when any ordinary person expresses views contrary to men's usual opinions would be silly. Or it may be a view contrary to men's usual opinions about which we have an argument, e.g. the view maintained by the sophists that what is need not in every case either have come to be or be eternal- for a musician who is a grammarian is so without ever having come to be so, or being so eternally. For even if some do not accept this view, a man might do so on the ground that it has an argument in its favour. "
Sounds confusing? Well, he was talking about an early form of Thesis, Antithesis, Synthesis, a triad of philosophy sometimes referred to as Hegelian Dialectics after a 19th Century German philosopher called Hegel continued this discursive manner of establishing truth. Plato structured many of his discussions as a back and forth dialogue between a teacher and students, and this influenced the development of a thesis for many generations afterward. A little too advanced even for English Advanced, so don't worry. That's ok, we can update and go to Google's definition now, and you can stop panicking:
We deal with the first definition when writing English essays for the HSC in any of the subjects mentioned above , and our thesis needs to have evidence to back it up in the form of arguments and quotes in our body paragraphs of our essay.
Crafting a thesis, however, is not something that can be done without careful planning. Here are a few tips to make sure you are crafting the best possible response for your assessments and exams:
By attempting to 'start' the writing process by coming up with a thesis, we can sometimes limit ourselves, forcing our writing with a rigid definition that we want to adhere to in order to make our argument stronger.
But does it really? Consider the planning process of writing an essay. You know you need evidence and examples from the text to make your argument up, so you read the text and perhaps annotate good quotes that you think could support an argument.
By setting yourself up with a series of quotes, techniques, and their effects on meaning, you can often develop a thesis statement from the ways in which your arguments connect.
For instance, if your essay question was about the role of ambition in Macbeth, and you identified:
the symbolism of the dagger and blood,
the 'out, out, damned spot!' soliloquy, and
the hamartia of Macbeth leading to the unravelling of his ambition,
the resultant catastrophe at the end of the play;
You would indeed be presented with many resonances between the larger themes and ideas of these arguments, and writing your thesis at that point of the drafting process makes so much more sense than attempting to generate one before.
This is not to say that you can't start with a pure idea or vision for your essay and pick your quotes and techniques judiciously in order to reinforce that vision; it just might not be the most efficient method every time.
Some students do tend to have a GIANT idea that can't ideally be squashed into the 30 or so words of a thesis statement. So they tend to up the sophistication level of certain words in order to convey complex ideas, and the end results can be... less than ideal, to say the least.
If your thesis is too complicated, you may find it both difficult to argue with evidence, and it may be too much information for your poor marker / reader / teacher. The human brain LIKES to read complex ideas, however it can get bogged down when presented with too much flowery language. Make your point as simple as possible in your thesis statement, and attempt the more complex definitions with your body paragraphs.
The NESA rubrics contain the types of vocabulary students can expect to encounter while engaging with the ideas from the unit. Historically the rubric statement has been the place where teachers and students of English derived most of the language, that they would use to discuss concepts in their essays, from.
For instance, the Texts and Human Experiences rubric makes specific use of vocabulary such as 'individual' and 'collective' human experiences, the Module A Textual Conversations unit in Advanced speaks of 'resonances' and 'dissonances' within the texts compared, and the glossary contains definitions of assessment verbs such as 'describe', 'explain', 'analyse', and 'evaluate'.
While overdoing it and simply regurgitating the rubric statement is not the recommended method of applying these words, judiciously selecting words and key phrases can increase the clarity of your thesis statement considerably.
A thesis is a focused area within a broader topic. For example:
Broad Topic Narrowed Topic Focused Topic
Hamlet Insanity in Hamlet Hamlet uses insanity to his advantage
Vegetarianism Health Questions re Vegetarianism Veg’s are healthier than meat eaters
Gun Control NRA Provisions for Gun Control NRA uses sportsmen's rights as a political ploy
Consider how focused you want your thesis and overall essay to be and choose a topic to suit. Too broad and you end up lacking evidence of your depth of understanding, too focused and you risk omitting valuable and relevant information that would support your argument or match the assessment criteria more thoroughly.
Since honest and responsible self-evaluation is necessary to good writing, here are a few tips and helpful questions you might ask yourself regarding thesis and writing in general. Since a thesis will often grow in the process of its own development, a certain amount of revision and adjustment is necessary to the success of your final product. Don’t feel irrevocably tied to the first version of your thesis. While your general purpose might still be the same, the way to this purpose needs to be fine-tuned after your first draft is in your hand.
After your draft is in the revision stage, underline what you consider to be your thesis statement.
Is it focused or is it still too broad?
Does it “fit” with what the rest of your essay says, or might it (or your body) need an adjustment?
Is your statement efficiently introduced or does it just explode onto the scene with no prior discussion or reader-related preparation?
Read each of your work’s paragraphs as if they stood alone.
Paraphrase each paragraph.(Define each paragraph’s main idea in one sentence)
Consider how each distinct paraphrase relates to the thesis you intend to support.
Consider each paragraph as a link in a chain of meaning.
Are there any weak links?
How can you strengthen them?
Look for smooth transitions between paragraphs.
How does the last sentence of one paragraph “link” with the leading sentence of the following paragraph?
Does a following paragraph relate to the previous paragraph, have its say, and anticipate the next paragraph?
Re-read introduction and conclusion (skip the body). Do they “talk” about the same thing or have you discovered that you have gone off-line in the process of developing your body?
Is there any chance that you might consider your conclusion as a better introduction because it states what your paper says more clearly than your original intro?
Here are few words that will allow you to maintain your focus and smooth out paragraph transitions. Try to apply these transitional tools whenever you need to make connections between thoughts or use them as progressive links to join ideas.
Although Therefore Hence On the other hand In this sense . . .
Similarly Conversely Thus According to . . . Because
Example thesis statements for ARGUMENTATIVE/PERSUASIVE essays taken from https://www.servicescape.com/blog/25-thesis-statement-examples-that-will-make-writing-a-breeze . Note the language employed and pick and choose good words to include in your own theses.
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