Which one?
“Campuses that are making changes are [improving] things” (Smith, 2018, p.5).
Reference List
Smith, T. (2018, July 20). Trump administration defends campus sexual assault rules. NPR. Retrieved from
https://www.npr.org/2018/07/20/630742928/trump-administration-defends-campus-sexual-assault-rules
Smith, T. (2018, September 18). Advocates brace as de Vos preps policies on campus sexual misconduct. NPR. Retrieved
from https://www.npr.org/2018/09/18/649060350/advocates-brace-as-devos-preps-policies-on-campus-sexual-misconduct
THIS IS HOW
“Campuses that are making changes are [improving] things” (Smith, 2018b, p.5).
Reference List
Smith, T. (2018a, September 18). Advocates brace as de Vos preps policies on campus sexual misconduct. NPR. Retrieved
from https://www.npr.org/2018/09/18/649060350/advocates-brace-as-devos-preps-policies-on-campus-sexual-misconduct
Smith, T. (2018b, July 20). Trump administration defends campus sexual assault rules. NPR. Retrieved from
https://www.npr.org/2018/07/20/630742928/trump-administration-defends-campus-sexual-assault-rules
You MUST match your "signal words" exactly.
Error = (Long Beach State, 2017) or (Cal State Long Beach, 2017) or (CSULB, 2017)
Correct = (California State University, Long Beach, 2017)
for you Reference List which has:
California State University, Long Beach. (2017). Enrollment service. California State University
Long Beach. Retrieved from http://www.csulb.edu/enrollment-services
No Dates (nd)
Dateless web sites are not credible sources in my classes; authorless web sites are also verbotten.
Take yourself out of the essay. DO not use phrases like "I agree/disagree/believe" = Just write what you were going to say. EXAMPLE:
"I agree with Boeckenstedt's conclusion that ...." Write: "Boeckenstedt's conclusion is correct when taken in light of.... and when compared with William's assertion, the deduction is ...."
Evaluation
AVOID phrases like "Boeckenstadt is correct" or "Weissbourd is right"
Try more clever ways to declare your agreement. Something like "Weissbourd builds a convincing argument by..." or
"Evidence supports Boeckenstadt's contention that..."
- of course phrases like "I agree with..." are pretty unsophisticated.
Source/Author Evaluations
It is not enough to merely introduce authors. You must also evaluate what they have to say. Compare it to others. Create a "discussion" between your authors and come to conclusions regarding the positions they offer. Good EXAMPLE:
Whereas it is extremely important to have this law, it can create confusion as well as be extremely unnecessary in some cases. Occasionally, people may assume that a facial reaction may be a form of consent. However, Lisa Barrett (2018), a psychologist and neuroscientist and the author of How Emotions are Made: The Secret Life of the Brain, would disagree and say that “because your brain is always guessing, facial movements are terrible indicators of consent.” Jaclyn Friedman (2015), an expert in sexual health and sexual violence prevention, also explained this concept perfectly; “the idea is simple: In matters of sex, silence or indifference aren’t consent… [and] if [one] can’t tell, [they] have to ask.” Therefore, people must be aware that the consent must be verbal. Even if the person's facial expressions look as if they want sexual contact one should still make sure that they are one-hundred percent sure with their decision to avoid any misinterpretations. While this law has great aspects it can also be unnecessary because it attempts “to micromanage the sex lives of young adults to an absurdly intrusive degree” (Young, 2014). This shows that adults in and out of relationships are being restricted and are having to follow absurd laws and rules. This can become annoying to some couples because they could potentially be accused of rape by just hugging and kissing the other without asking.
Good discussion and evaluation:
Throughout the years, laws have been passed to try to prevent sexual assaults, but the basic premise of the laws has been “no means no”. Unfortunately, this has not prevented the continuation of a large number of sexual assault cases occurring on a college campus. Studies have shown that one in four female students have experienced unwanted sexual advances. According to State Senator Hannah-Beth Jackson and Senate President pro Tempore Kevin de Leon, “While no means no has become a well-known slogan, it places the burden on victims, making it their responsibility to show resistance” (2015). This means that the victim must prove that they said no and put up a resistance to the advances. This is very difficult to do as it becomes an argument of he said she said, and both parties’ arguments do not receive equal credibility, given we live in a culture of male dominance. Because we live in a culture of male entitlement, some people feel that sexual assaults are not a result of a misunderstanding, but of dominance. For example, Susan Jacoby, an American author who New York Times bestseller The Age of American Unreason, “Most date rapes do not happen because a man honestly mistakes a woman’s ‘no’ for a ‘yes’ or a ‘maybe’. They occur because a minority of men — an ugly minority, to be sure — can’t stand to take ‘no’ for an answer” (2001, p. 545). With the passage of California SB #967, the law is now “yes means yes”, which means the proof of consent falls on the responsibility of the aggressor, not the victim and a person who is incapacitated by drugs or alcohol cannot give consent. Since the passing of this bill, many people argue that the law has gone too far. In addition, Bill Chappel, a writer and a producer for the Newsdesk address that there are many different opinions on this law and, “. . . while [some] victims' rights advocates have welcomed the new standard, the law also has its critics, who say its requirements place too much burden on the accused” (2014). Additionally, with the burden on the aggressor, there is no accountability for a woman leading on a male with suggestive feminine actions. As stated by Susan Jacoby, “Feminism, in this view, is both naive and anti-sexual because it ignores the power of women to incite uncontrollable male passions” (2001, p. 545). However, with the affirmative consent law, girls on a college campus now live in an environment where they are able to feel safe and a new culture of respect is being born.