Draft 3
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Soumya Karlamangla (2021) reported, "Here’s some good news to start your morning: California has less Covid-19 transmission than any state in the country." Karlamangla has reported on health issues across the state of California for both the Los Angeles Times and the New York Times. She writes..... In an interview with Dr. Kirsten Bibbins-Domingo who is an epidemiologist at the University of California, San Francisco, Dr. Bibbins-Domingo indicated that fear, the lack of availability, community outreach, and social pressure were all factors in the number of vaccinations in the state (Karlamangla, 2021).
Reference List
Karlamangla, S. (2021, September 16). Why California has one of the lowest Covid-19 rates in the nation:
Vaccinations surged as Delta took hold. The New York Times. URL Link
National Center for Health Statistics. (2021, September 11). Provisional
death counts for Coronavirus disease (COVID-19). Center for Disease
Control and Prevention. Retrieved September 16, 2021 from URL Link
Toledo, A., Angst, M., Geha, J, & Mukherjee, S. (2021, June 23). Many Bay
Area residents feel free keeping their masks on: Across the
Bay Area, people are still wearing their masks — and many say
it’s because other people are doing it. The Mercury News. URL Link
Used a good variety of In-text citations..
You introduced your sources well.
In-text citations error - did not use commas - e.g. (Smith 2009 p. 23), One period is used to end sentences AFTER the closing parenthesis, eg. (Garcia, 2020, p. 14)., ERRORS = P., PG., PP., pg., Pg., etc = USE only p. and pp.
You evaluated your sources well., YOu did NOT compare your sources with one another.
Writing error - grammar/punctuation/spelling/capitalization/spacing errors., what is “normal”. = period goes inside quotation mark
YOu introduced a good foil (counterargument) and argued against it well.
There were at least 5 credible sources.
Yes - used at least 10 citations
Good Intro., Good voice. Good tone., Good conclusion.
Addressed the topic well. You argued your point.
Well written
Draft 1 was not complete (less than 80%).
Reference List error - Hanging indent errors, Capitalization Errors in your Reference List, Error - Did not use italics for containers., Titles of articles are NOT italicized. Titles of containers are italicized and capitalized.., Italics Error., Not proper APA format
HUNTER found that more than half (54%) = You MUST explain HUNTER since you quoted it. What is it? Contextualize it into your paper.
My OWN changes
I loved how you approached your essay. Good writing. But you need to work on its execution. You have GREAT ideas! You must learn to write them with precision.
Draft 2
(somewhere in the middle of a body paragraph...)
Soumya Karlamangla (2021) reported, "Here’s some good news to start your morning: California has less Covid-19 transmission than any state in the country." Karlamangla has reported on health issues across the state of California for both the Los Angeles Times and the New York Times. She writes..... In an interview with Dr. Kirsten Bibbins-Domingo who is an epidemiologist at the University of California, San Francisco, Dr. Bibbins-Domingo indicated that fear, the lack of availability, community outreach, and social pressure were all factors in the number of vaccinations in the state (Karlamangla, 2021).
Reference List
Karlamangla, S. (2021, September 16). Why California has one of the lowest Covid-19 rates in the nation: Vaccinations
surged as Delta took hold. The New York Times. URL Link
National Center for Health Statistics. (2021, September 11). Provisional
death counts for Coronavirus disease (COVID-19). Center for Disease
Control and Prevention. Retrieved September 16, 2021 from URL Link
Toledo, A., Angst, M., Geha, J, & Mukherjee, S. (2021, June 23). Many Bay
Area residents feel free keeping their masks on: Across the
Bay Area, people are still wearing their masks — and many say
it’s because other people are doing it. The Mercury News. URL Link
Please use the following considerations when doing your partner's peer response for the Pandemic essay.
Your Name:
Is this paper at least 80% completed (including sources, references, and citations)?
Does the essay have at least 10 in-text citations used in the paper? example: (Paglia, 2001, p. 555)
Were there a variety of in-text citations used in the paper? example: According to Parker ..... (2001, p. 556) etc.
Were authors introduced properly?
Were sources evaluated and compared?
Was there at least 1 print source ?
Did your partner create a discussion between the sources?
Was there a foil/counter-argument in the essay?
Were there at least 5 CREDIBLE sources cited? Were they listed correctly? Did they pass the CRAAP test in your estimation?
Was the introduction interesting? Was it effective? Was the thesis stated well?
Did the essay make sense? Was it logical?
Was the essay written well? Was it interesting to read or was it boring?
What suggestions do you have to "kick it up a notch"?What are the strengths of your partner's arguments? Weaknesses?
Were you convinced by your partner's arguments? Did it make sense?
Were there at least 2 sources written in the current year?
Was the APA (author/date) formatting done well?
Were there the minimum required sources with the current year of publication?
Spelling errors?
Grammatical errors?
Rubric Score (1-6):
Draft 1
(somewhere in the middle of a body paragraph...)
Soumya Karlamangla (2021) reported, "Here’s some good news to start your morning: California has less Covid-19 transmission than any state in the country." Karlamangla has reported on health issues across the state of California for both the Los Angeles Times and the New York Times. She writes..... In an interview with Dr. Kirsten Bibbins-Domingo who is an epidemiologist at the University of California, San Francisco, Dr. Bibbins-Domingo indicated that fear, the lack of availability, community outreach, and social pressure were all factors in the number of vaccinations in the state (Karlamangla, 2021).
Reference List
Karlamangla, S. (2021, September 16). Why California has one of the lowest Covid-19 rates in the nation: Vaccinations
surged as Delta took hold. The New York Times. URL Link
National Center for Health Statistics. (2021, September 11). Provisional
death counts for Coronavirus disease (COVID-19). Center for Disease
Control and Prevention. Retrieved September 16, 2021 from URL Link
Toledo, A., Angst, M., Geha, J, & Mukherjee, S. (2021, June 23). Many Bay
Area residents feel free keeping their masks on: Across the
Bay Area, people are still wearing their masks — and many say
it’s because other people are doing it. The Mercury News. URL Link