Writing

Do you remember what you wrote yesterday? Go get it, please! Here was my example from yesterday:

Miss Scrofani's Example from Wednesday

Topic Sentence: When I hear the word hero, I immediately think of brave, hard-working firefighters.

Detail #1: Firefighters are brave because they run into burning buildings to save lives.

Detail #2: Firefighters put fires out and save buildings and land from burning.

Detail #3: Firefighters teach us how to stay safe around fire.

Concluding Sentence: As you can see, firefighters are very heroic.

Today, you are going to add some extra information about your details. For example, look at my Detail #3. I can add some more information there! How do firefighters teach us how to stay safe? I can add in that firefighters visit schools and teach kids about fire safety! Try to add 2 or 3 more sentences to your details today! Don't worry if the new sentences don't fit into your ice cream cone organizer. This is our "rough draft" or "sloppy copy" so it might look a little messy. Here is my NEW example (I put my new sentences in italics.)

Miss Scrofani's NEW AND IMPROVED Example

Topic Sentence: When I hear the word hero, I immediately think of brave, hard-working firefighters.

Detail #1: Firefighters are brave because they run into burning buildings to save lives. They even save pets!

Detail #2: Firefighters put fires out and save buildings and land from burning. I am thankful for this, because it would be hard to rebuild a house or store.

Detail #3: Firefighters also teach us how to stay safe around fire. They visit schools and teach kids what to do in case of a fire. At my school, they put on their full uniforms so kids know not to be scared of them.

Concluding Sentence: As you can see, firefighters are very courageous and heroic.

***Tomorrow, you will be putting these sentences into paragraph form for your final copy, in case you wanted to get a head start on that! :)