Improving Sentences

Ok, so, in this section I'm going to be talking about mainly sentences and making them more powerful, longer, and, even make them a story! *See writing a story section for more information on writing.

Lets start with a very basic sentence. Paul eats ice-cream. This is a simple sentence that we can easily glamify. Lets start with adding some descriptive words. If we add the words delicious and melting, look what happens!  Paul eats a delicious, melting ice-cream. Just by adding two words, we already have a much better sentence! Now, lets think about where Paul is. Lets add the words twisted and lane to add some more meaning. Paul eats a delicious, melting ice-cream in a twisted lane. WOW! Look what happened to our once simple sentence! Now, if we ad the word happy to add a finishing touch, wait till you see our once boring sentence... Paul is happy as he eats a delicious, melting ice-cream in a twisted lane. That is amazing, right? We just turned a terrible sentence into a stupendous one, and we did it in such a short time!

Try This At Home: 

Try glamifying your own sentence at home! Use the sentence Jane is happy and slowly add to it like I did above. Some things to think about are:

• Why is Jane happy?

• What is Jane doing?

• Where is Jane?