August entries

All instances of 2024 should be removed, and the credit should be Associated Press (kill the extras like staff/stringer).

Headline is a nice treament. The all-caps isn't too "in your face" since the weight of the headline was minimized. 

The dateline could have taken the drop cap. Since this is for practice, the dateline also could have been removed to avoid having it hang out on its own line. 

Similar feedback on the cutlines. If this were a shared content page, they'd request the cutlines be cleaned up to reflect AP style. 

This is the purrfect subject to have fun with the headlines, so the star shapes are great. It also helps to break up the standard boxes we see on photo pages. 

The extra-large breakers on the photo help to emphasize the cats are, in fact, the stars. 

Make sure you clean up the cutlines. All instances of 2024 should be removed, the credit should be Associated Press (kill the extras like staff/stringer) and FILE should be dropped from the beginning of some of those cutlines. 

It would help the balance of the page if the two museum photos were on the left. The bottom right corner is photo heavy at the moment. It would also help to break up the copy.

Another thing to think about is how a full page like this will look for a reader. Would it be easier for them to read the London portion if it were 2 columns instead of 1 wide block of copy? Remember, this is going to print on a wide page so that copy is now spanning have a print page.  

Same feedback on the cutlines. Make sure to clean them up to remove unnecessary or repetitive information. 

The breakers are a nice touch. When working with this many photos is helps direct readers to exactly which art is paired with the section they're reading. 

For the headline, with CATS being so large, the LIGHTS, CAMERA could have been bumped up to span the width of the second deck.

Love the use of the Olympic rings in this overall package. They play in nicely to the bottom group of photos. 

Nice work indicating directional cues for cutlines with the bottom group of photos and nice job wrapping them in a way that they are still easy to read and don't look like an afterthought. 

This spread might have benefitted from a shorter image kicker, possibly a large headline and something toward the top of the page so it doesn't get so lost in the middle. 

While this is a sort-of photo package there is some nice use of dead space and color to fit in the text to form a cohesive overall package.

Wishing there was a way to zoom in on the cat of the main photo but that is likely why it's the largest on the page. Good choice here. 

Nice crops on the secondary artwork though we likely could have gotten another cat in with the London text since the two photos are so similar. 

The dotted line adds to this composition by making it clear which block of text goes with what art. Nice job.

Nice job cleaning up the cutouts for readers!

Some of the cutlines could benefit from some glyph arrows pointing to the photo, especially cutlines near two photos. In the theme of focus, the copy might be hard for readers to follow. Perhaps colored rule lines to box in the copy block with the matching photo?  

Overall, the page has nice flow. A reader is immediately drawn to the top even without a "main" image. 

The modular look is nice. Since the topic of the photos is serious, you want to keep that in mind. Alley's layout showcases the topic nicely.

The 1col photo under the copy might not be necessary. The copy block could have been adjusted to take up space, or even bump up the copy size since there's so little of it (would also have made it more feature-y). Then the photos on the right could have gone wider to help fill that space. 

With the white space, don't be afraid to let more of that come through. The bottom two photos could have been pulled in from the sides more to create the empty margins underneath the main art.