P1 Q4 Feedback

Unfortunately, there isn't a magic button that will mark your work for you! This is the step where you'll have to ask your teacher for help.

See below for a rough guide to how this question is marked. We've tried to make the language used by the exam board a bit easier to understand. We've also tried to give you an idea of how the marks link up to your progress with the question. Red = Below target mark, Amber = Below but on track, Green = On target, and Blue = Above target. We've also included student examples for each mark (for a different question 4).

You may find it useful to self-assess yourself using the guidelines below before your teacher gives you feedback.

Red: 1-5 Marks

General/vague opinions about the language used
General/vague use of quotes
General/vague response to the student's statement given in question. May not use an "I agree" statement

Alice carries on digging because she wants to find out what the object is. The story is mysterious because we don’t know what she’s looking for. It says ‘she can’t make out what the object is’, and we don’t know what is going to happen when she finds it.

Amber: 6-10 Marks

Tries to give some opinions about the effect of the writer's language on the reader
Picks out some quotes that back up points made
Tries to respond directly to the student's statement given in question using an "I agree" statement

I agree that this part of the story is mysterious because we don’t really know what she’s found and nor does she: ‘she can’t make out what the object is, even how big it is’. The word "shiny" suggests it might be valuable.

Green: 11-15 Marks

Clearly shares some opinions about the effect of the writer's language on the reader and how it links to the question!
Picks out a range quotes that back up and strengthen the points made.
Responds directly to the student's statement clearly with relevant points.

I agree that this part of the story is mysterious because we're missing context for what it is that Alice has discovered: ‘she can’t make out what the object is, even how big it is’. The adjective "shiny" suggests it may be some kind of metal (or even a precious metal) which is not something you'd usually find in the dirt and this raises even more questions and makes the situation even more mysterious.

Blue: 16-20 Marks

In depth opinions shared, analysing the effect of the writer's language on the reader.
Uses a range of well selected quotes to provide opportunities for in depth analysis.
Develops a persuasive and analytical response to the student's statement.

I agree, the writer creates a sense of mystery by using time as a structural feature. Earlier, she’d noticed something and now, ‘can’t make out what the object is, even how big it is’, so we share Alice’s vagueness, but later, when the writer switches to future tense, saying ‘In the days and weeks to come, Alice will look back to this moment’, the reader becomes an outsider. The writer lets us know that in the future, Alice will know something that neither she nor the reader knows now. The object is so significant that she will never forget the life-changing moment she made the decision to continue digging.

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