Wow! I love your story! I think the descriptions are really vivid, and I'm really interested in knowing what happens! From, Nishka
Myiesha-- Your story gets better and better! I love how the story is developing. There are elements of suspense followed by a slowing down so you can develop the characters and the plot, and then, BAM, more suspense! I can't wait to know the ending. From Ms. Teri
Myiesha--Your last piece--Insecurities, is very powerfully written. But also so sad. You capture the person's self-loathing in such a way that as a reader, I had a visceral reaction. I feel full of empathy for the main character.
Myiesha-- I love your poem Mirror, Mirror on the Wall. I mentioned in class that you have personified the mirror so well we can feel its despair and sadness that it can't help the girl. We learn about the other members of the family through the mirror's gaze and that makes this so interesting. And I love your internal rhyme scheme in places, I underlined the places that are especially effective.
I also watch her mother, her brother too.
I see them smile and grin if only they knew what she was going through.
I try to call out scream and shout tell her to stop as she drops to the floor,
I hear the rain pour over her roars, and I think if only I could help.