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Week 11
Week 11
Olympic Day
Olympic Day
sea of multicoloured t-shirts hub of excitement hyped procession chanting and cheering rotation of various activities
rounders 3-legged soccer frisbee handball an array of colours
3-legged soccer
cooperation coordination simultaneously players sprawled on the ground with difficulty tricky to maneuver
crashes and collisions
WEEK 8/9
WEEK 8/9
Tommy Kapai Wilson
Tommy Kapai Wilson
Here is our brainstorm after listening to author Tommy Kapai Wilson at assembly on Friday.
In groups of 3 make a google presentation about him and his visit. Plan what your categories are and who will do what. You need to write your pages individually but proof read them together before publishing.
Tommy Kapai Wilson
War and violence is dumb
Dad's Rule: Make 10 people smile a day never been in a fight in whole life
Everyone has a gift
Dad- went to war. Promised would never be alone. Would never have violence in his home
books- Publishers rejected- no conflict 11 siblings hardcase humour author Kapai Kiwi books humourous
respectful when younger 1st job dishwasher- Chateau overseas butler servant rich and famous Nicole Kidman George Harrison Beetles John Denver King and Queen of Nepal wealthy people wealth and fame they had everything but nothing Ferrari paraparaboom
South Africa- Nelson Mandela- came to Auckland most important thing- to forgive went to South Africa
Tommy's Dad died same day as Princess Diana
Write a book- Susan meeting Princess Diana Queen Victoria school
China 1st class book 1/2 Maori/1/2 Chinese hero- breathe under water
Daughter- Manu Korero te reo speech competition. Tommy's Mum got punished at same school
Supermarket- make checkout people smile
Week 8 Similes
Week 8 Similes
What makes this simile detract rather than enhance?
With dread she opened the letter. Her face turned grey like an elephant
Olympic Rotation
Olympic Rotation
Rotation - jump jam sing star cyber coach movie watching old videos cookie / shell decorating olympic themes competition obstacle course
challenge houses
duration-
popsicle stick variety of icing colours judged soggy mouthful
saturated pouring with rain freezing blustery
points tallying off points Mr J randomly
kick soccer ball dribble zigzag balance crawl kick for goal struggling chair wasn't stable precariously/precarious
Plan
Hook/Orientation
What
Purpose Senior teachers visit junior school
Ist block
Favourite Activities
How you felt
Action
Show not Tell
Conclusion
WEEK 7 Show Not Tell
WEEK 7 Show Not Tell
I am out at a meeting until 12 today. After assembly can you write a paragraph, showing not telling the man is angry or agitated. Make up a scenario about what he might be agitated about i.e he might be watching a sports game, or he might have seen someone do something he doesn't like. Think about what shows you he is angry, i.e. the tone of his voice, what gestures or arm/hand movements he might be making, what his face looks like.
You only need to do 1-2 paragraphs. Try to be descriptive, and make sure your paragraphs are effective e.g. include different types of sentences, varied beginnings, interesting vocab, varied sentence lengths, complexities.
Vocab
hands clenched veins bulging leapt to his feet bellowed screeched eyebrows knitted together scowled shook his fist
glared stormed over to unable to maintain self-control he fumed like..... steaming about to explode
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Here is an example of how someone has changed their writing from telling to showing.
When Pete returned home from Nigel’s apartment, he entered the living room, looking angry.
“What’s the matter?” Faith asked. “I’ve never seen you like this.”
“I don’t know how to contact my father,” he replied. He took off his cap while still looking angry. He dropped the cap on the davenport before sitting down. “I’ve it up to here,” he said, pointing to his chin.
When Pete returned home from Nigel’s apartment, he slammed the front door behind him.
“What’s the matter?” Faith asked. “I’ve never seen you like this.”
“I don’t know how to contact my father,” he said between his teeth. He grabbed his cap off his head and threw it in the corner of the davenport. “I’ve it up to here,” he said, pointing to his chin and stomping his foot.
http://pattowrite.hubpages.com/hub/Tips-For-Writing-Good-Fiction
If you have finished all of these or there are no more Multimedia left, you can do free writing for your blog,
Or read articles from Kiwi Kids News and write a summary about one for your blog. Don't copy and paste.
"One small step for a man, one giant leap for mankind," proclaimed Neil Armstrong as he stepped out onto the Moon.
Write 2 paragraphs informing people of Neil Armstrong's death yesterday.
1 paragraph about him. 1 paragraph about his greatest achievement
"one small step for a man, one giant leap for mankind".
82 Commander of Apollo 11 1969 Lunar Space Mission reluctant American hero avoided the limelight
Cold War era race with Soviets monumental historic event mourns the loss complications from heart surgery
Edwin "Buzz" Aldrin
Week 6 Cross Country
Week 6 Cross Country
squelching mud splattered treacherous tricky to manoever exhausting straining aching muscles panting gasping for breath determination and perseverance steady jog burst of speed drained of energy dread optimistic lagging behind burst of speed
precarious
Week 4/5 Smoking
Week 4/5 Smoking
Week 5 Tuesday's Task
Write 3 paragraphs making sure that your sentences within each paragraph connect. (These paragraphs at the moment are separate stand alone paragraphs but we will be making them into a whole piece of writing with an introduction and conclusion later)
Par 1: Health Issues
Cancer Higher chance of dying block arteries lungs amputations heart proplems heart attacks
NZ 4500 -5000 people die- smoking related illnesses osteoporosis mouth/throat cancer tar on the lungs unable to circulate the blood 4000 chemicals tar, nicotine, carbon monoxide 1/3 of cancer deaths - smoking pregnant- affect baby prone to sickness hacking cough
Par 2: Cosmetic Consequences
e.g. wrinkly skin, yellowed teeth, stained fingers, disgusting breath
Par 3: Money
$14-15 per packet $105 a week/ a pack a day don't start thinking they'll smoke much.
Par 4
So why do people start?
want to be cool influenced by peers pressured by rebel common in their families think they won't smoke much. addictive
Par 5
Topic: Smoking
Purpose: To persuade others its not a good idea to start smoking
Audience: Other children your own age.
4000 chemicals Tar, nicotine, carbon monoxide lung cancer heart disease throat and mouth cancer amputations
Addictive intense cravings irritable, feel stressed harmful effects release of dopamine sense of pleasure
brief sensation 1/3 of cancer deaths attributed Approximately 4500 deaths NZ three times more likely comparison
1/2 pack $50 week influenced by able to resist will power
Persuasive Vocab
urge you most importantly research shows that detrimental an important considerations (appeal to the emotions)
Connected Sentences in Paragraph
Read the firat 2 paragraphs below. Identify the main ideas and how the sentences are connected.
In paragraph 3 think about what doesn't connect well.
Tobacco abuse harms every organ in the body. It has been conclusively linked to leukemia, cataracts, and pneumonia, and accounts for about one-third of all cancer deaths. The overall rates of death from cancer are twice as high among people who smoke as those who don’t, with people who smoke heavily having rates that are four times greater than those of people who don’t smoke. And, you guessed it—foremost among the cancers caused by tobacco use is lung cancer. In fact, cigarette smoking has been linked to about 90 percent of all lung cancer cases, the number-one cancer killer of both men and women. Tobacco abuse is also associated with cancers of the mouth, pharynx, larynx, esophagus, stomach, pancreas, cervix, kidney, ureter, and bladder.
The problem with the chemical nicotine found in cigarettes is that it is addictive. Smoking cigarettes causes neurons to release excess dopamine, which is responsible for the feelings of pleasure. However, this effect wears off rapidly, causing people who smoke to get the urge to light up again for another dose of the drug. This need for a cigarette causes smokers to get stressed and irritable when unable to satisfy the craving.
Most New Zealanders who smoke tobacco, smoke more than half a pack of cigarettes each day. If they quit smoking, they would save at least $50 a week, or $220 a month. In New Zealand, and internationally, tobacco is the single leading cause of preventable death.
Week 4 Valerie Adams
Week 4 Valerie Adams
valiantly attempted visibly upset disappointment replicate personal best of 21.34
Nadzeya Ostapchuk throw of 21.36m Belarus
20.70m (Valerie's silver medal throw) emotional evening desperate victory at Beijing
proud of her achievements gratitude coach Jean-Pierre Eggar worked tirelessly defending champion
Olympic build-up unable to defend Adams' personal best 21.24m
http://www.3news.co.nz/Silver-for-Valerie-Adams/tabid/1697/articleID/264399/Default.aspx
Week 4
What is her message?
What does she use island feet as a metaphor or symbol for?
What literary techniques does she use? Give examples.
Week 3 Basketball
Week 3 Basketball
(File this into your writing folder as I will be reading them this morning as you write)
MAKE A PLAN FIRST!
Possible subtopics - (You may have more than 1 paragraph for a subtopic) Remember these are just ideas if you have other ideas go for it.
The game of basketball Skills and Drills The passing game Your skills A particular incident
VOCAB
dribbling ball handling skills challenging coordination dodging and swerving high lob aim of the game strategies
excited chatter a quick intercept high leap confined area shooting position
MAKE SURE YOUR PARAGRAPHS ARE EFFECTIVE!!!
Copy and paste this into your document and fill it out when you have finished.
Your task over 2 sessions is to write 2 separate paragraphs. In the first session you will be writing a paragraph that has the purpose to describe. In the second you will you will be writing a paragraph that has the purpose to inform.
Remember your paragraphs will need to have your first sentence as a topic sentence followed by 2-3 sentences that add more detail to support your topic sentence.
To begin with..
First with a partner see if you can come up with 4-5 different topic sentences that describe what is happening in the first picture. Once you have done that choose which topic sentence you like the best. Add 2-3 other sentences that support your topic sentence. Remember to try and make the whole paragraph effective so think about sentence beginnings/using the vocab below/having a variety of sentences etc.
SESSION 1.
Describe
mind focussed
preparing mentally
veins bulging
muscles rippling
muscles taut
weight of the bar
balanced
preparing
exhale
arms trembling
sudden jerk
enormous strain
SESSION 2
Inform
Precious McKenzie - famous NZ weightlifter
small stature 1.45m tall
Birthplace - Durban South Africa 1936
Discriminated against
immigrated
represented Britain/NZ
Joshua Iosefo - Brown Brother
Joshua Iosefo - Brown Brother
From Campbell Live Website.
Joshua Iosefo delivers his speech, 'Brown Brother'
Joshua Iosefo is 17, a Samoan, Niuean New Zealander, and he's a prefect at Auckland’s Mt Roskill Grammar.
The prefects all make speeches to assembly, and Joshua’s speech, Brown Brother, ended up on YouTube.
It's pretty special, and so Campbell Live asked Joshua to re-do it for us, and for you.
Click here to watch the remake by Campbell Live
Original Clip
Things to think about
Who is his audience?
What is his message? What are the important things he is trying to say?
What are his key points?
Spoken Word Poetry
Here is a transcript I made from the two clips. They differ slightly.
Vocab
stereotypes motivational thought-provoking don't underestimate yourself inspiring limitations aspire
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