Writing Motivation

Week 10 Reflection

Make a copy of your writing sample (picnic or softball)

Write a paragraph analysing what you think you have done well and what you think you could improve on.

Refer to these pointers

STRUCTURE

Have you included a hook?

Have you included an orientation so that your reader knows what is happening (i.e. that it is a school picnic)

Does you hook connect well into your orientation.

Is your writing organised into paragraphs about 1 main idea?

Do your paragraphs connect well from one new idea to the next?

Have you included a conclusion?

LANGUAGE- (Using language to try to write to appeal to an audience

Do you have varied sentences (i.e. speech, exclamations, questions)

Have you tried to have a variety of sentence lengths and complexities for effect?

Have you included lots of interesting vocab? (action verbs, adjectives, feelings)

Have you tried to include figurative language like similes, metaphors, personification.

Have you included a variety of sentence beginnings? (adverbial clauses etc)

GRAMMAR

Have you kept the same tense throughout your writing

Have you used the correct endings?

Have you used conjunctions correctly?

What Makes a Good Video

What factors do you need to take into consideration in making an effective movie.

We have been making videos showing different ways of being cybersmart.

So how can we judge what makes an effective movie?

We will come up with criteria for this which we will be able rate our own movies against, to see what we have done well and the areas we will need to improve on.

Here are some clips which either demonstrate some of the good movie making techniques or explain what good movie making techniques are.

Topic: Considerations in making a great video

Purpose: To Inform

Audience: Blog/Everyone interested in topic

Vocab

numerous techniques helpful pointed intended audience purpose effective lighting sound clarity

variation of shots diverse angles conveys the message effectively entertaining and engaging

retains the audience's attention humour creative imaginative innovative originality crucial element

an important consideration basic technical skills a tripod is essential

Good camera shots/variety of angles- close up, far shot, head, panning over the shoulder shot, wide shot high shot and low shots

Appropriate setting Good lighting Voiceover- clear, quality and message, expression Green screen- good background think about colours

Good acting Good editing Message is clear.

Plan

Hook- what is a phrase you would hear when making movies?

Intro Link your hook into your purpose of writing- How you can improve the quality of your movie/what makes a good movie

Points FIlming techniques

Lighting

Sound

Acting

Settings/Costumes etc

MESSAGE

Conclusion-Re-emphasise the point you are trying to make.

Week 8 The Amazing Race

Write a recount about The Amazing Race. Remember to try and make your writing effective by varying beginnings, types of sentences and by using interesting vocab. Also make sure your paragraphs are about 1 main idea and the sentences connect to build up that idea.

Here is some vocab you could use.

a quest to find challenge puffing and panting sprinting like a ....... cooperate

gather the necessary equipment gusty wind careful aim slingshot pull the rubber taut missile

tend the fire carefully

sizzling hot rushing madly scrunched paper masking tape string searching for the signs

Spot in the distance use your manners fed the horses retrieve equipment

manipulate our bodies into letters teamwork frustrating too light breaking

Plan

Hook

Intro

Par 1

Par 2

Par 3

Conclusion

Week 6

Take notes then rewrite a piece about Ben Carson from your notes

Week 4 Duffy Theatre Characters

One of the actors in the Duffy Theatre was able to portray different characters very realistically. He did this by getting just the right mannerisms for each of his characters. Think about what those different mannerisms (actions, facial expressions, movements, voice tone etc) were for his characters of Duffy's little brother, and his character of the Maori boy Wiremu.

We will be writing 1 particular scene for each of these characters. Your scene needs to effectively convey the character by incorporating descriptions of their mannerisms into the action.

Duffy's Little Brother

Scene: When Duffy's brother is trying to get Duffy to come and play with him.

(Note: You will adding speech into your piece of writing, but the speech needs to be interspersed with descriptions of the actions, and mannerisms of the characters so your reader is able to get a sense of how each character is feeling, and what they are doing.)

moaned stuttered slouched hunched his shoulders

nek minute

pleading begging held up three fingers saying five minutes dancing shuffling beat box

panting and puffing pouted scowled whinged whined hands on hips shrugged in disappointment frustrated scuffed his feet slouched off dawdled blinked quickly trying not to cry fidgeted stamped his foot glanced mischievously back at Duffy disguised his voice sprinted away eagerly. mumbled

Wiremu

scowl swagger slight nod and lift of his eyebrows black beanie pulled down looked down avoiding eye contact staunch

Netball Recount

Topic

Purpose

Audience

Vocab

stifling hot scorching develop skills drills defending effectively pivot powerful chest pass

Netball New Zealand stretch out intercept dodging and swerving leap disappointed encouraging

Plan

Introduction:

Hook- Describe some action/Speech/

Orientation- Include enough information so your readers know what is happen. See if you can be clever about this.

Details

Write a few paragraphs that describe the action. Make sure your paragraphs are connected.

Conclusion

Week 2/3 Cybersmart- Once you post it - you lose it.

Writing Task

Write 2 pieces about this clip with 2 different purposes; 1 to describe, 1 to inform/persuade.

Plan each piece before you begin.

Purpose 1: To describe

Describes this girl's experience. How it felt like for her to realize she had posted something online and now, no longer has control over it. You will need to give enough detail so that someone reading it will understand what has happened, but try to focus on describe the feelings

Brainstorm vocab- imagine how the girl felt when she posted it. How is she feeling when she is trying to remove it. Describe what she does.

flippantly on a whim unbeknownst to her embarrassed ashamed mortified at cringe futile

in vain disturbed by unsettling frustrating

Purpose 2: To inform/persuade

What information do you think this clip is trying to convey. What is it trying to convince you about?

Brainstorm vocab you might need to inform or persuade.

it is important it is essential unfortunately too often these days with little thought for

unwittingly disregarding the dangers the consequences of I urge you to I encourage you to

be vigilent be cautious serious ramifications

Week 1

I Am

Creative Writing

  • Brainstorm at least 10 things about yourself (include somethings that your are good at or what your personality is like, maybe some fears, aspirations, hopes,

  • e.g. I am a

mokopuna 16 years old

brother sister

daughter rock musician

niece rugby star

computer nut kaea

six feet tall

artist storyteller

* Keep it simple

  • List six of the above and expand on each of those ideas.

e.g. mokopuna - child of my Koro

storyteller - mainly jokes

rugby star - captain of the 1st XV

  • Add the I am

e.g.

I am a mokopuna

child of my Koro

I am a storyteller

but mainly of jokes

I am a ‘rugby star’

Captain of the 1xt XV

I am 16 years old

Too young to vote . . .

(From a project monitored by Gardiner and Parate - Ministry of Education)

Here's mine I had a go at.

First I wrote down lots of ideas.

sailor reader artist dancer thinker wife Mum adventurer listener animal-lover

Then I chose some, to think of connecting lines.

sailor - with my Dad….

reader - can't put it down

artist- once was a dream to be one

dancer- at home

an adventurer

aspire to travel the world

mum - proud of my girls

wife laugh at Wyllis' joke

Next I played around with the ideas to come up with 3 lines for each idea (you can choose if you want to do 2 or 3 lines.

I Am

I am a sailor.

Remember exhilarating days

Miss you Dad.

I am a reader.

Till the last page is finished,

Life's on hold

I am an artist.

Once an aspiration.

What happened to that dream?

I am a dancer.

Love to let loose.

But only at home.

I am a wife

Supportive and loving,

Laugh at Wyllis' jokes.

I am a Mum

3 daughters all grown

You make me proud.

I am an adventurer

One day the world I'll see

And feel complete.