Obstacles as Opportunities

This is the most personal piece of writing I have written. This memoir describes the worst day of my life, on reading day sophomore year when I was hit by a car during a bike ride. My sentence structure throughout this memoir is very long and winding, which I think accurately reflects the tumult of all the different things that were running through my mind when it happened. I think this sentence structure, especially with my continued use of anaphora, also derived from my admiration of long, Ciceronian prose. I think I did a good job of “showing, not telling” and really puting the reader in my shoes, but I believe that I could have extended some metaphors a bit to really strengthen my message.

This work was a memoir and followed the elements common to the genre: lots of descriptive accounts, asides or acknowledgements to help an “outside” reader, and a didactic undertone. For a repurposed version of this into a more “fun” genre, scroll down further.

For a comparison of what stronger metaphors could look like, see “Why Even Tri?”

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