Science - CSE
Draft 3
The Human Body on a Diet
To the majority, dieting is not their cup of tea. Even so, infamous diets, such as the Vegan, Vegetarian, or the Paleo diet, have continued to universally promote their enormous benefits on the human body. Many can name them, yet the safety behind diets seem to go unnoticed. Unfortunately, among the many over popularized diets lie myths, and potential dangers to the human body.1 Harriet Brown, author and teacher at the S.I. Newhouse School of Public Communications, discovers from her research the shocking lack of vital nutrients in diets. "Doctors... know dieting is linked to heart disease, insulin resistance, higher blood pressure, inflammation, and, ironically, long-term weight gain" she writes.1 She continues, declaring 97% of people gain all the weight back.1 The question is not whether they are good or bad for the human body, but whether they should be incorporated in a healthy lifestyle.
The reality is, diets have many consequences. Natalie Parletta, accredited Dietitian/Nutritionist and Senior Research Fellow at the University of South Australia, believes what we eat is everything.1,2 She writes, "Our brain is an organ, just like our heart, liver, kidneys and lungs. And the brain is also affected by poor health… Nutrients are the building blocks of the brain and without them it would not develop or work at all".2 The nutrient she particularly speaks about, is the importance of zinc, "Zinc is an essential nutrient that is needed for hundreds of biochemical reactions that take place in the body, including synthesis of neurotransmitters that help our brain work."2 On the contrary, science has proven that innumerable diets focusing on weight loss, can potentially be zinc deficient.3 Diets, such as the Vegan and Vegetarian diet, limit the person to consume meats high in zinc, which can have negative impact if unaware. Nevertheless, the Paleo diet, a diet which focuses on how humans were genetically designed to eat, demonstrates the benefits, as it allows for foods high in zinc.3 Unfortunately, diets have been proven to negatively affect the metabolism of the human body. Holly Klamer, college professor and registered dietician with an MS degree in nutrition, writes how dieting is similar to a yo-yo, and how all the weight lost, returns.4 In addition, she writes how reduced calories significantly lower metabolism, unfortunately depressing the body's health.4
Regardless of how diets work, nutrition and exercise is what should matter. To avoid diets and serious consequences, nutrition is everything. In comparison to diets, nutrition provides the proper health to maintaining the human body. The Harvard Health Letter writes how fiber is imperative to maintaining a good digestive system.5 Soluble fiber in particular, says to intake the proper amounts"The Recommended Dietary Allowance of fiber is 30 grams per day for men 51 or older, and 21 grams per day for women 51 or older."5 Correspondingly, Klamer suggests an average of 1,000-1,200 calories to consumed per day. On the other hand, exercise also matters. In regards to staying physically and mentally healthy, Klamer suggests to exercise more than the calories consumed. Moreover, the body is in constant need of physical exercise. To pursue weight loss, exercise must be part of human's daily weight loss.
Reference List
1. Brown H. The weight of the evidence. Slate. 2015 [accessed 2016 November 16]
http://www.slate.com/articles/health_and_science/medical_examiner/2015/03/diets_do_not_work_the_thin_evidence_that_losing_weight_makes_you_healthier.html
2. Parletta N. Can diet and nutrition affect our learning, behavior and mental health? Nutridate. 2016.
[accessed November 15 2016];27(4):10-16. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=hxh&AN=117818852&site=ehost-live
3. Sports Medicine. Pros and cons of the paleo diet. University of Pittsburgh Medical Center HealthBeat. 2016. [accessed 2016 November 16] http://share.upmc.com/2016/04/pros-cons-paleo-diet/
4. Klamer, H. How to fix your metabolism after yo-yo dieting. Calorie Secrets. 2016. [accessed 2016 November 16] https://www.caloriesecrets.net/how-to-fix-your-metabolism-after-yo-yo-dieting/
5. Harvard Health Letter. Easy ways to stay regular. Health Source -Consumer Edition. 2015. [accessed November 18 2016];41(1): http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=hxh&AN=110453349&site=ehost-live
Draft 2
The Human Body on a Diet
To the majority of people, dieting is not their cup of tea. Even so, infamous diets, such as the Vegan, Vegetarian, or the Paleo diet, have continued to universally promote their enormous benefits on the human body. Many can name them, yet the safety behind diets seem to go unnoticed. Unfortunately, among the many over popularized diets lie myths, and potential dangers to the human body.1 Harriet Brown, author and teacher at the S.I. Newhouse School of Public Communications, discovers from her research the shocking lack of vital nutrients in diets. "Doctors... know dieting is linked to heart disease, insulin resistance, higher blood pressure, inflammation, and, ironically, long-term weight gain" she writes.1 She continues, declaring 97% of people gain all the weight back.1 The question is not whether they are good or bad for the human body, but whether they should be incorporated in a healthy lifestyle.
The reality is, diets have many consequences. Natalie Parletta, accredited Dietitian/Nutritionist and Senior Research Fellow at the University of South Australia, believes what we eat is everything.1,2 She writes, "Our brain is an organ, just like our heart, liver, kidneys and lungs. And the brain is also affected by poor health… Nutrients are the building blocks of the brain and without them it would not develop or work at all".2 The nutrient she particularly speaks about, is the importance of zinc, "Zinc is an essential nutrient that is needed for hundreds of biochemical reactions that take place in the body, including synthesis of neurotransmitters that help our brain work."2 On the contrary, science has proven that innumerable diets focusing on weight loss, can potentially be zinc deficient.3 Diets, such as the Vegan and Vegetarian diet, limit the person to consume meats high in zinc, which can have negative impact if unaware. Nevertheless, the Paleo diet, a diet which focuses on how humans were genetically designed to eat, demonstrates the benefits, as it allows for foods high in zinc.3 Unfortunately, diets have been proven to negatively affect the metabolism of the human body. Holly Klamer, college professor and registered dietician with an MS degree in nutrition, writes how dieting is similar to a yo-yo, and how all the weight lost, returns.4 In addition, she writes how reduced calories significantly lower metabolism, unfortunately depressing the body's health.4
Regardless of how diets work, nutrition and exercise is what should matter. To avoid diets and serious consequences, nutrition is everything. In comparison to diets, nutrition provides the proper health to maintaining the human body. The Harvard Health Letter writes how fiber is imperative to maintaining a good digestive system.5 Soluble fiber in particular, says to intake the proper amounts"The Recommended Dietary Allowance of fiber is 30 grams per day for men 51 or older, and 21 grams per day for women 51 or older."5 Correspondingly, Klamer suggests an average of 1,000-1,200 calories to consumed per day. On the other hand, exercise also matters. In regards to staying physically and mentally healthy, Klamer suggests to exercise more than the calories consumed. Moreover, the body is in constant need of physical exercise. To pursue weight loss, exercise must be part of human's daily weight loss.
Cited References
1. Brown H. The weight of the evidence. Slate. 2015 [accessed 2016 November 16]
http://www.slate.com/articles/health_and_science/medical_examiner/2015/03/diets_do_not_work_the_thin_evidence_that_losing_weight_makes_you_healthier.html
2. Parletta N. Can diet and nutrition affect our learning, behavior and mental health? Nutridate. 2016.
[accessed November 15 2016];27(4):10-16. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=hxh&AN=117818852&site=ehost-live
3. Sports Medicine. Pros and cons of the paleo diet. University of Pittsburgh Medical Center HealthBeat. 2016. [accessed 2016 November 16] http://share.upmc.com/2016/04/pros-cons-paleo-diet/
4. Klamer, H. How to fix your metabolism after yo-yo dieting. Calorie Secrets. 2016. [accessed 2016 November 16] https://www.caloriesecrets.net/how-to-fix-your-metabolism-after-yo-yo-dieting/
5. Harvard Health Letter. Easy ways to stay regular. Health Source -Consumer Edition. 2015. [accessed November 18 2016];41(1): 6. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=hxh&AN=110453349&site=ehost-live
Peer Partner: Jakub Kozial
Does the essay have at least 10 superscript notations in the text of the paper? No.
Do these superscripts correspond to the Reference List that appears after the text of the essay? Yes.
Is the numbering of the superscripts sequential (1,2,3,4,5, etc) in the Reference List? Yes.
Is the numbering of the superscripts properly sequential and repeated in text? Yes
The sequence of superscript numbers are based on 1. alphabetical order (or) 2. order of appearance in paper. Yes.
How many different superscript numbers are there? How many citations are there in the paper? Only 3.
Were at least 1 or 2 science journals used? Were there at least 5 CREDIBLE sources cited? Were they listed correctly? No.
Were there at least 3 sources published in the current year? No.
Were at least one of the citations refer to multiple sources (at least 2 sources). Example 3, 5 No
Was the introduction interesting? Was it effective? Was the thesis stated well? It was interesting but it needs more work
Did the essay make sense? Was it logical? Yes. The essay was logical.
Was the essay written well? Was it interesting to read or was it boring? It seemed to be incomplete.
What suggestions do you have to further explain the scientific concept? Complete it better.
Did your partner describe the scientific concept well enough for you to understand it? Yes he did.
Was the essay written with an academic voice? Yes
Was the CSE formatting done well? Yes/No
Spelling errors? No
Grammatical errors? Yes
Draft 1
THE DIET: Dieting Weight-Loss and the effects on the Human Body
You are what you eat. Among that statement consists the famous diets; Vegetarians. Vegans. Paleo. Many can name them, yet the safety behind diets seem to go unnoticed. Unfortunately, among the many over popularized diets lie myths, and potential dangers to the human body.1 Harriet Brown, author and teacher at the S.I. Newhouse School of Public Communications, discovers from her research the shocking lack of vital nutrients in diets. "Doctors... know dieting is linked to heart disease, insulin resistance, higher blood pressure, inflammation, and, ironically, long-term weight gain" she writes.1 She continues, declaring 97% of people gain all the weight back.1 The question is not whether they are good or bad for the human body, but whether they should be incorporated in a healthy lifestyle.
The reality is, diets have many consequences. Natalie Parletta, accredited Dietitian/Nutritionist and Senior Research Fellow at the University of South Australia, believes what we eat is everything.1,2 She writes, "Our brain is an organ, just like our heart, liver, kidneys and lungs. And the brain is also affected by poor health… Nutrients are the building blocks of the brain and without them it would not develop or work at all".2 The nutrient she particularly speaks about, is the importance of zinc, "Zinc is an essential nutrient that is needed for hundreds of biochemical reactions that take place in the body, including synthesis of neurotransmitters that help our brain work." On the contrary, science has proven that innumerable diets focusing on weight loss, can potentially be zinc deficient.3 Diets, such as the Vegan and Vegetarian diet, limit the person to consume meats high in zinc, which can have negative impact if unaware. Nevertheless, the Paleo diet, a diet which focuses on how humans were genetically designed to eat, demonstrates the benefits, as it allows for foods high in zinc.3 Unfortunately, diets have been proven to negatively affect the metabolism of the human body. Holly Klamer, college professor and registered dietician with an MS degree in nutrition, writes how dieting is similar to a yo-yo, and how all the weight lost, returns.4 In addition, she writes how reduced calories significantly lower metabolism, unfortunately depressing the body's health.4
Cited References
Brown H. The weight of the evidence. Slate. 2016. [accessed November 17 2016]; Notes. http://www.slate.com/authors.harriet_brown.html
Pros and cons of the pales diet. April 2nd 2016. UPMC Health Beat. http://share.upmc.com/2016/04/pros-cons-paleo-diet/
Parletta N. 2016 Aug. Can diet and nutrition affect our learning, behavior and mental health. Nutridate. [accessed November 18 2016] http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=hxh&AN=117818852&site=ehost-live
Harvard Health Letter. November 15. [accessed November 18 2016]Easy ways to stay regular. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=hxh&AN=110453349&site=ehost-live