Draft 3
The Engagement of Music Conservatories and Universities
Tom Flores
El Segundo High School
(10/17/16)
Music is everywhere! Throughout the world, music remains an influential aspect that continues to define humanity and inspire others to do things. For the typical musician, their question would be just how to get there. It is imperative that music majors who plan to study music understand the importance of conservatories and universities. As Weissbourd confidently states, “intellectual and engagement are highly important”(Weissbourd, 2016, p.1). Weissbourd, who serves as the family psychologist at Harvard University, continues to argue that it is imperative students find a school that balances academics and their well being (2016, p.3). Similarly, it is important music majors understand the differences between conservatories and universities, as it determines a students engagement of their study.
When focusing on engagement, musicians with high instrumental performing abilities should definitely focus on applying to Conservatories. In specific, the Juilliard School of Music. Founded in New York 1905, the Juilliard School is considered the most prestigious conservatory in America. The prestige is shown in their rigor of both the audition and there degree programs. To illustrate, the Juilliard School requires freshman to live at the conservatory for their first semester (Julliard School, 2016). Furthermore, admissions are insanely competitive. According to Bill Zuckerman (2015), an acclaiming composer and journalist, the acceptance rate for the Juilliard School has been between the range of 8% to 5.5%. Zuckerman continues "it’s acceptance rate is often among the lowest in the entire country, along with Stanford, Harvard, Curtis, and Yale" (2015). Although Zuckerman concludes that Conservatories focus on selecting only the best of their applicants to their schools, the prestige of Conservatories additionally should question the musicians measure of skill. If students are applying, they must ultimately understand their abilities, so acceptance wouldn't come to a surprise.
Although conservatories may explain and teach music more efficiently, a massive portion of selection depends on the University/Greek life university experience students want. In other words, academics do not really matter if the students have a preference for a more lenient academic life. When comparing a typical Conservatory, such as the Curtis Institute of Music, with a University, such as the University of Oregon, there are many differences in engagement. While the The Curtis Institute performs with,"the front rank of soloists, composers, and conductors and hold principal chairs in every major American orchestra"(The Curtis Institute, 2016), the University of Oregon, "has a place for everyone"(University of Oregon, 2016). Engagement in Universities is noticeably less challenging, respectively, which can greatly benefit the average music major that prefers less competition and involvement in their field of study. While Conservatories are praised in its engagement with the students, Universities may fulfill students in areas Conservatories may not. In terms of Greek life, Universities with sororities "continue to offer student development opportunity"(Sasso, 2013, p.65). Pietro A. Sasso, the assistant professor of students and college counseling at Monmouth University in New Jersey, expresses, "Within the last 20 years, fraternities and sororities... have continued to be featured in a number of high-profile incidents leading to a negative perception of these groups" (2013, p.66). A student's experience, therefore, stands at the peak of importance, by which one can potentially risk there own life.
In the grand scheme of things, the choice whether a musician chooses to attend a Conservatory or University is ultimately up to their preferences. As Mitchell R. Williams, the associate professor of community college leadership at Old Dominion University, states, "The history of higher education in the United States has been a story of increasing access"(2013, p.28). As it pertains to music, access to a school is everywhere. Sometimes, music performers, such as the teen-idol pop artist Justin Bieber, can be successful without a college education! Depending on the musician, there are many choices to go about there preference. Whether or not students choose to go to college, university, or conservatories, music will continue to play a massive influence on society, culture, and humanity.
Reference List
Curtis Institute of Music. (2016). About Curtis. Retrieved from http://www.curtis.edu/about-curtis/
Juilliard School. (2016). About Julliard School. Retrieved from http://www.juilliard.edu/about
Sasso, P. A. (2013). Fraternities and sororities in the contemporary era. In In J. L. Devitis (Ed.)
Contemporary colleges and universities: A reader, (pp. 65-81). New York, NY: Peter Lang Publishing,
Inc.
University of Oregon. (2016). Values and Culture. Retrieved from http://music.uoregon.edu/about/our-values-and-culture
Weissbourd, R. (2014). Turning the tide: Inspiring concern for others and the common good through
college admissions. Making Caring Common. A Project of the Harvard Graduate School of Education.
Retrieved from http://mcc.gse.harvard.edu/files/gsemcc/files/20160120_mcc_ttt_report_interactive.pdf
Williams R. M. (2013). Still trying to be all things to all people. In J. L. Devitis (Ed.)
Contemporary colleges and universities: A reader, (pp. 28-35). New York, NY: Peter Lang Publishing,
Inc.
Zuckerman, B. (2015). Juilliard School: Acceptance rate, tuition, requirements, and more.
Retrieved from http://musicschoolcentral.com/juilliard-school-acceptance-rate-tuition-requirements/
Draft 2:
The Engagement of Music Conservatories and Universities
Tom Flores
El Segundo High School
Music is everywhere! Throughout the world, music remains an influential aspect that continues to define humanity and inspire others to do things. For the typical musician, their question would be just how to get there. It is imperative that music majors who plan to study music understand the importance of conservatories and universities. As Weissbourd confidently states, “intellectual and engagement are highly important”(Weissbourd, 2016, p.1). Weissbourd, who serves as the family psychologist at Harvard University, continues to argue that it is imperative students find a school that balances academics and their well being (2016, p.3). Similarly, it is important music majors understand the differences between conservatories and universities, as it determines a students engagement of their study.
When focusing on engagement, musicians with high instrumental performing abilities should definitely focus ***on applying to****Conservatories. In specific, the Juilliard School of Music. Founded in New York 1905, the Juilliard School is considered the most prestigious conservatory in America. The prestige is shown through their demand of their students, as freshman are required to live at the conservatory for their first semester of rigor (Julliard School, 2016). Furthermore, admissions are insanely competitive. According to Bill Zuckerman, an acclaiming composer and journalist, the acceptance rate for the Juilliard School has been between the range of 8% to 5.5%"(2015). Zuckerman continues to say "it’s acceptance rate is often among the lowest in the entire country, along with Stanford, Harvard, Curtis, and Yale" (2015). Zuckerman concludes, without a doubt, Conservatories focus on selecting only the best of their applicants to their schools.
Although conservatories may explain and teach music more efficiently, a massive portion of selection depends on the University/Greek life university experience students want. In other words, academics do not really matter if the students have a preference for a more lenient academic life. When comparing a typical Conservatory such as the Curtis Institute of Music, with University of Oregon, there are many differences in engagement. While the The Curtis Institute performs with,"the front rank of soloists, composers, and conductors and hold principal chairs in every major American orchestra"(The Curtis Institute, 2016), the University of Oregon, "has a place for everyone"(University of Oregon, 2016). Engagement in Universities is noticeably less challenging, that is to say, which can greatly benefit the average music major that prefers less competition and involvement in their field of study. Although this may be so, Universities can have its down side if students are not careful. In terms of Greek life, Universities with sororities "continue to offer student development opportunity"(Pietro, 2013, p.65). Pietro A. Sasso, the assistant professor of students and college counseling at Monmouth University in New Jersey, expresses, "Within the last 20 years, fraternities and sororities... have continued to be featured in a number of high-profile incidents leading to a negative perception of these groups"(Sasso, 2013, p.66). A student's experience, therefore, stands at the peak of importance, by which one can potentially risk there own life.
In the grand scheme of things, the choice whether a musician chooses to attend a Conservatory or University is ultimately up to their specific major. As Mitchell R. Williams, the associate professor of community college leadership at Old Dominion University, astutely begins on page 28, "The history of higher education in the United States has been a story of increasing access"(Williams, 2013). In pertains to music, access to music education is everywhere. Sometimes, music performers, such as the teen-idol pop artist Justin Bieber, can be successful without a college education! Depending on the musician, there are many options to go about there major. Whether or not students choose to go to college, university, conservatories, or no where, music will continue to play a massive influence on society, culture, and humanity.
Reference List
Curtis Institute of Music. (2016). About Curtis. Retrieved from http://www.curtis.edu/about-curtis/
Juilliard School. (2016). About Julliard School. Retrieved from http://www.juilliard.edu/about
Sasso, P. A. (2013). Fraternities and sororities in the contemporary era. In In J. L. Devitis (Ed.)
Contemporary colleges and universities: A reader, (pp. 65-81). New York, NY: Peter Lang Publishing,
Inc.
University of Oregon. (2016). Values and Culture. Retrieved from http://music.uoregon.edu/about/our-values-and-culture
Weissbourd, R. (2014). Turning the tide: Inspiring concern for others and the common good through
college admissions. Making Caring Common. A Project of the Harvard Graduate School of Education.
Retrieved from http://mcc.gse.harvard.edu/files/gsemcc/files/20160120_mcc_ttt_report_interactive.pdf
Williams R. M. (2013). Still trying to be all things to all people. In J. L. Devitis (Ed.)
Contemporary colleges and universities: A reader, (pp. 28-35). New York, NY: Peter Lang Publishing,
Inc.
Zuckerman, B. (2015, March 3). Juilliard School: Acceptance rate, tuition, requirements, and more.
Retrieved from http://musicschoolcentral.com/juilliard-school-acceptance-rate-tuition-requirements/
Peer Partner: Gracelyn Lincoln
Were at least 10 citations used in the paper? Were they done in correct APA? Yes, but only on reference list.
Were 2-3 chapters from the book, 2-3 college web sites, and/or the O'Connell and/or Burnsed articles cited in the Reference List? Were they listed correctly? alphabetically? 1 college website was used and 1 report was used.
How many varieties of in-text citations were there? Any missing? 2 varieties of in-text citations were used and there are 2 more that need to be used
Was the introduction interesting? Was it effective? Was the thesis stated well? The introduction was interesting, but it wasn't much of a thesis. I would rewrite it.
Did the essay make sense? Was it logical? The essay made sense for the most part, but it needs to be more focused on multiple colleges and made more personal.
Was the essay written well? Was it interesting to read or was it boring? The essay was intriguing at first, but then got wordy and fluffy.
What suggestions do you have to "kick it up a notch"? I would rewrite some paragraphs, research and talk more about other colleges, and use more citations.
Did your partner describe why he or she favored these universities? Did you understand why these factors would affect college choice and/or major? No, this topic needs to be more touched upon.
How many sources were used? 6
Was the essay written interestingly or without passion? I think Tom is passionate about what he wrote about, but I don't think it fit well with the prompt.
Spelling errors? Some misspellings
Grammatical errors? Some sentences are wordy
Draft 1
In a society of reinvention, many students aim for rigorous fields such as mathematics and science. Although these aims have no disadvantages, the arts seem to commonly be ignored. Music is perhaps one of the most important as fields as it is constantly repeated throughout our culture. When selecting a school to further understanding, one must consider the essence and the differences of what universities are in contrast to conservatories(confusing...kind of wordy).As Weissbourd astutely mentions, “intellectual and engagement are highly important”(Weissbourd, 2016, p.1). Weissbourd, who serves as the family psychologist at Harvard University, continues to argue that it is imperative students find a school that balances academics and their well being (2016, p.3). Similarly, it is important music majors understand the differences between conservatories and universities, as it determines a students engagement of their study.
If (say "when" or "while" not "if") looking for a school with high performing abilities, conservatories (please explain what a conservatory is) would definetly be of most interest. Conservatories have the most demand for music majors, as undergrad Freshamn are required to live at the conservatoire for their first semester (Julliard School, 2016). Founded in 1905, The Julliard School is considered the most prestigious conservatory in America. Even so, the application rate to get to such a competitive school is 11%, only choosing the best of the best. Auditions are rigorous and demand massive focus to undergraduates. In addition, students at conservatories choose to actively involve themselves in their study of music. (make more personal)When comparing a typical Conservatory such as the Curtis Institute of Music, with University of Oregon, there are many differences in engagement. While the The Curtis Institute performs with,"the front rank of soloists, composers, and conductors and hold principal chairs in every major American orchestra"(The Curtis Institute, 2016), the University of Oregon, "has a place for everyone"(University of Oregon, 2016). Engagement in Universities is noticeably less challenging, that is to say, which can greatly benefit the average music major that prefers less competition and involvement in their field of study. Although this may be so, Universities can have its down side if students are not careful. In terms of Greek life, Universities with sororities "continue to offer student development opportunity"(Pietro, 2013, p.65). Pietro A. Sasso, the assistant professor of students and college counseling at Monmouth University in New Jersey, expresses, "Within the last 20 years, fraternities and sororities... have continued to be featured in a number of high-profile incidents leading to a negative perception of these groups"(Sasso, 2013, p.66). A student's experience, therefore, stands at the peak of importance, by which one can potentially risk there own life.
Although conservatories may explain and teach music more efficiently, a massive portion of selection depends on the University/Greek life university experience students want. In other words, acedemics do not really matter if the students have a preference for a more lenient academic life. (talk about other colleges)
Sometimes, music actually does not need education. Depending on the student that is, musicians have many options to go abou there major. Music itself is a broad field. It encompasses perfomrance, composition, technology, musicology, and many others, but it may not be needed. For example, many pop artists are considered to be musicians without having an actual education in music. Whether or not students choose to go to college, university, conservatory, or nothing, music is relatively based on what the individual chooses to learn. As music a broad field, education...
Reference List
Julliard School. (2016). About Julliard School. Retrieved from http://www.juilliard.edu/about
Sasso, P. A. (2013). Fraternities and sororities in the contemporary era. In In J. L. Devitis (Ed.)
Contemporary colleges and universities: A reader, (pp. 65-81). New York, NY: Peter Lang Publishing,
Inc.
University of Oregon. (2016). Values and Culture. Retrieved from http://music.uoregon.edu/about/our-values-and-culture
Weissbourd, R. (2014). Turning the tide: Inspiring concern for others and the common good through
college admissions. Making Caring Common. A Project of the Harvard Graduate School of Education.
Retrieved from http://mcc.gse.harvard.edu/files/gsemcc/files/20160120_mcc_ttt_report_interactive.pdf
Williams R. M. (2013). Still trying to be all things to all people. In J. L. Devitis (Ed.)
Contemporary colleges and universities: A reader, (pp. 28-35). New York, NY: Peter Lang Publishing,
Inc.
Zuckerman, B. (2015, March 3). Juilliard School: Acceptance rate, tuition, requirements, and more.
Retrieved from http://musicschoolcentral.com/juilliard-school-acceptance-rate-tuition-requirements/